Dio Deus vs Jay Kal
 

Battle Rules:

8-10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 02-01-05 at 04:03 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Jay Kal has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-29-05 04:03 PM.

Yo, saying you a wack emcee is an understatement/
It's understated, when I say you're face belongs deep in fresh pavement/
Yo you just got baited, you're rhyme I assassinated/
Im gonna make your face bleed like your dick when you masturbatin/
You call yourself Deus, but you're really a bird/
Should call yourself deuce cause your bout to get served/
I could write you out of existence like you never even deserved/
A minute that your jaw wasn't disconnected, your rhymes'll be even more slurred/
Anyway you pretty much sound like Black Eyed Peas backup artist/
So Hey mama, Dio Deus just got retarded/

Dio Deus has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-29-05 04:16 PM.

I make you sick with my "ill" lyrics

You just a raper, a rapper without P's (punches)
You fuck your own rap up, by battling me
I won't even take the time to see what you wrote,
I only need to go to google type: 'Dre lyrics' and read 'fuck you' whole
get the subliminal? you got prewritten shit
fag you suck dick and all, you're not P. diddy bitch
Don't say you rap, cause your name's jay kal
I'll make you scream, but nobody listens to gaycalls

I'm sorry it's bad, but I didn't have much time, sorry

and prewritten needs to be bitten, sorry y'all, but I just wasn't focused

and once again, P's need to be P, just P and nothing more, (I'm not really awake, am I?)

uppin' .................................................. .for votes

uppin'......................

^Ditto what he said, uppin for votes

too few characters and I dont spit periods/
This here is a rappin myriad, of lyrical iliads/
poems drop on your ass like bombs in baghdad/
5 line freein for no reason/
Hope the crowd is what Im appeasin/

Uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This was feedback posted for Dio Deus
 

yo...dio, come harder next time, this was good. i can see u elevating, but just get more creative, and work on ur structure...

thanks................And now people vote!

Uppin! >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Voted For: Jay Kal

i say jay won this one it wasnt that good but he was way better than dio he had a better flow better vocab better multi's and he had a personal in there nice structure decent punches and better creativity dio's verse was kinda blah not really any punches no meta's no personal no word play he just lacked in a lot of area's so thats why jay has my vote return the fav http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=175856

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

I had way more multi's then he! And where did you see the punches? no metas, so what? he didn't have one either! that's really a strange vote! explain, BETTER!

He could have pointed out that only your first 2 lines rhymed, would that have been better?

Voted For: Jay Kal

pretty easy....

Jay Kal takes this.....you came harder, flow and structure needs to be worked on though, had good punches that connected, kept it consistent, and attempted some good personals, felt the jaw line, pretty aight closer, coulda been worded a little better, nice vocab, liked the opener, nice drop, keep elevatin

Dio Deus....dint even look like you tried, punches weak and didnt really target Jay Kal, kinda just bounced around, stupid closer, coulda been better, didnt really attempt to expand vocab, not really any personals, no one had multis....although, your flow was good, but everythin else needs to elevate, weak battle man,

Vote: Jay Kal, harder punches/personals, better vocab/creativity, just plain came harder...wird

How The Fuck?> Can't You See What A Multi Is? If You Vote Against Me It's Not Bad< But It's Bad When You Give A Weird Explanation! No Multi's, C'mon Are You Blind?.................

the other lines rhyme too, you blind?

i can see u elevating dio...keep that shit up, and come mroe creative next time.....

No, you deaf?


wrote / whole - doesn't rhyme

shit / bitch - doesn't rhyme

jay kal / gaycalls - in english at least the a in kal is the sound of a in animal, while calls is an "ah" sound, doesn't rhyme.

Voted For: Jay Kal

ohhhh...1way battle

aint checked FL in longtime wa snice to come back and see sum1 get laaccced up like dis...

Yo, saying you a wack emcee is an understatement/
It's understated, when I say you're face belongs deep in fresh pavement/
sligthly strectched..but ill vocab and punch -8/10
Yo you just got baited, you're rhyme I assassinated/
Im gonna make your face bleed like your dick when you masturbatin/
lol, nice humour, punch and ill multi flow yo...
You call yourself Deus, but you're really a bird/
Should call yourself deuce cause your bout to get served/
ill wordplay...personal..punch - 8.5/10
I could write you out of existence like you never even deserved/
A minute that your jaw wasn't disconnected, your rhymes'll be even more slurred/
filler i suppose weakest line..multi flow tho..so decent-8/10
Anyway you pretty much sound like Black Eyed Peas backup artist/
So Hey mama, Dio Deus just got retarded/
brap brapp brappp lol killer closer...-9/10

Dio
I make you sick with my "ill" lyrics

You just a raper, a rapper without P's (punches)
You fuck your own rap up, by battling me
errrrr NO...no punch, bad concept -5/10
I won't even take the time to see what you wrote,
I only need to go to google type: 'Dre lyrics' and read 'fuck you' whole
nice if its a real personal....-8/10
get the subliminal? you got prewritten shit
fag you suck dick and all, you're not P. diddy bitch
errrrr NO...lame suck sick homo punch..bad concept -6/10
Don't say you rap, cause your name's jay kal
I'll make you scream, but nobody listens to gaycalls
doesnt rhyme...just not a gd creative punch -6/10

^^elevate homeboi...

B]RETURN THA FAVOUR LINKS IN SIG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!![/B]

are you a teacher or something? You can speak it in lots of different ways, example: My band, D-12 Swifty:"see I now how to rap, it's simple 'BUT',
al I did was read a russel simon 'BOOK'" it rhymes, but not in perfectly english, get it?

This was feedback posted for Dio Deus
 

checkin tha pollsss .

Voted For: Dio Deus

this battle was weak, but anyways i gotta give it to dio because he cam harder with his verse. much harder.ya'll need to elevate

uppin' for votes

uppin' ......... ////////

Voted For: Jay Kal

jay kal had better flow and punches and flowand structre was a lil choppy but it worked vocab was nice
best line------- Anyway you pretty much sound like Black Eyed Peas backup artist/
So Hey mama, Dio Deus just got retarded/
7/10

return the favor please.......................................