kelsick39 vs BlackDeathDB
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 10 lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 01-31-05 at 10:56 PM

Must drop verse in 30 minutes after check in.

dont bitch out

BlackDeathDB has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-31-05 10:32 PM.

kelsick39 has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-31-05 10:35 PM.

This boys a joke, bad lyrics you know its him
his blimp is broke, like a bad show on Nickelodeon
Matter fact, hes missing his best friend
a bad act, atleast we know where keenan and kel went
Hes from the illstate and his name is kelsick
at this rate, thousands of people are dead cause he sucked their dick
I gotta kill him quick, just one more dead prick
We know i'm putting him to rest, with just one click
Cuz he messed wit the BlackDeath, and his ass got sick

yo, Death aint sure, he's just curious george
but its a furious gorge, about to leave serious warts
i know in ur dreams at night, the kel haunts you
i guess BlackDeath is fitting, since nobody wants u
Wen i punch, all u see is bleedin, a red head
Cuz i'll leave the DB to rest on his Death Bed
a Peasant a farmer, wat ur spittin is pitiful,wageless
its like a life crisis the way ur stuck in the middle ages

Uppin ppl

cmon ppl

this newb battle is masterful!!!!!!!

Voted For: kelsick39

yo kel definatly won this shit the other cat was garbage any kel came semi decent on the punches and multi's and just took this one away he a couple of mice lines but the other guy didnt really have to much going for him

Khaos_daRenegade, yo weak ass. Making general comments. When you actually get some skill then you can vote, i'll battle you right now

This was feedback posted for BlackDeathDB
 

wack battle........... wat have our newbs come too!

Voted For: kelsick39

at first i was gonna vote for bd after reading kel's but then i read bd's and it was terrible...this battle wasnt good at all, but at least it was short, lol.....kel wins because of punches and thats all....both verses had basically nothing worth bragging about, but kel wins because bd kept talking about how heez gonna make you sick...well his verse definitloy did....
v/kelsick39

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/\nightmare/\ , i'm not sure if you know this but his name is kelsick....

Voted For: BlackDeathDB

BLACk-Punches was ok, needs to elevate though......Wordplay i like the "nickelodeon" line very creative fam.......Flowed good...All flow and punches...You need some multi'z and add some personals to your verse....




Kel-Ok punches came weak, not hard hitting. Effective but weak. Flowed good. Disses his name thats a personal but you need to go deeper than that...Add multi'z to your verse....Wordplays too




overall=I think Black got this, cause he threw some effective punches, While kel threw some weak ones, not very hard hitting. Both head'z (kel and black) needs to work on punches and wordplays and using personals. I vote for black cause he threw some effective punches, kel threw weak punches, need elevation though BOTH HEADS DO.

Voted For: BlackDeathDB

kelsick39
structure is good.. flow is on target.. u had some multis.. wordplay was decent.. a few of ur punches connected.. decent personals..

BlackDeathDB
structure is good.. flow is on target.. no multis.. wordplay was pretty sick.. some of ur punches connected.. pretty good personals..

Overall
kelsick39 had more multis.. both had a good structure and flow.. BlackDeathDB had the better wordplay.. more connecting punches.. and better personals.. so basing off of that.. BlackDeathDB gets my vote..

VOTE - BLACKDEATHDB

^^^^ damn yall bitches...... i think ur vote mightve understood my verse, but i think the other guy might not even know wat the blackdeath is cuz almost everyline i did dealt with that.... aka. the bubonic plaque, which happened during the middle ages, blah blah blah, im not gonna explain it, but i think some of u who voted (even the ones who voted for me) might not even know wat the Black Death actually was...... but nice battle right now... Black Death is still the biggest bitch..... if u win this, thisll be the biggest bull ever

Voted For: kelsick39

ok kel you aint have no good vocab or good punches here they were lacking badly personals were wack as shit and used a million times aganist the other 1000000000000 dudes with names like blackdeathblack plague blah blah blah your struture is decent much better then most noobs but very weak punches hurt you 4/10
blackdeath ok no punches at all made your very bad very bad and not in a good way your struture is bad also shit looks like
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wtf is that anyways no good disses either vocab wasnt good either 2/10
ok neither came hard but while kel had weak punches and played disses black had no punches and disses that sucked harder then prostitutes in hunts point kel got this

uppi n

Voted For: kelsick39

I was feelin both verses but it broke down like this:

BlackDeathDB: Your opener was ok. It needed to be stronger and on more of a personal level. Not too sure bout his blimp being broke..?
Closer was ok buit again lacked the finishing touch. His ass getting sick isnt really dissing him very hard. But i see where you were going.
Your punches were ok, not really personal enough, some ok attempts at metaphors but with no real wordplay or anything complicated but still quite good to read.

Kelsick: Nice opener, good multis and nice punch. Be proud of that one bro.
Closer was good aswel, i defo saw wat you were doing wiv the middle ages, peasant theme in that bar. -good work.
Some nice punches aswel as DB, once again, not very complicated but only time can improve that (and practice) get some more metaphors and wordplay going on. But overall your opener and closer gave you the edge in this battle

Voted For: kelsick39

this was a wack battle. i think kel took it tho. he came harder with punches and wordplay. i think u need to elevate tho, cause it wasnt that hard. i felt u shouldve came harder. i voted for u cause i think ur structure was better. u didnt have any stretched lines, and thats what made ur structure look better
black-ur verse was hella wack. elevate. i wasnt feelin tha wordplay and shit. i think u need to focus a lot on ur rhymin tho. ur punches werent that hard, and they didnt land that good.
overall-i think this was a wack battle, but kel took it..he came harder with punches and wordplay and his structure really sealed it...


plz RTF this shit...too many battles gettin slept on, and i took my time out to vote on this shit..........


elevate....~1~