Untraceable vs Hot Sauce
 

Battle Rules:
SM vs Code Steel
10 - 30 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 300

Check in by: 02-12-05 at 09:45 AM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Hot Sauce has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-09-05 09:50 AM.

deepthroat so much ure BLUE-IN-THE-THROAT, jus for a FEW-OF-URE-VOTES,ure not supposed to 'play wit DeAtH' but ure CREW-IS-A-JOKE/
explode ure LIVER-N-SHIT,BITTER-N-QUIK, droppin garabge like u LITTER-U-PRICK, u could ''SUB-SCRIBE'' ure verse to ''VIRUS'' n still not DELIVER-IT-SICK/
Untraceable ? im SWEARIN-THIS-THUGS-GAY, its SCARY-IN-SOME-WAYS, cuz u lose 'weight around SUBS' jus like JERRY-FROM-SUB-WAY/
ure FEELIN-THE-HOT-SHIT, leave u SQUEELIN-N-COUGHIN,TEARIN-N-SOBBIN, as i 'dign up dirt on death' like im STEALIN-A-COFFIN/

change up
looks like i av sum brutal thoughts to ~MESS~WID~ ill be messin wid u's more than michal jackson ~CARESS~KID~ i dont no wat ya dick ~LESS~DID~/
stickin dildos in pre ~SCHOOL~ASS~ in a sick fantasy that ya a teacher of a ~CRULE~CLASS~ u been smokin too much ~FOOL~GRASS~/
I'm ~REFINED~IN~DECEPTION~ so ~REWIND~THE~AGRRESSION~ otherwise no-show or pray for ~DIVINE~INTERVENTION~/
I'll ~INSCRIBE~YA~WITH~SECTIONS~ from all ~THE~ ~RHYMES~THAT~I~MENTION~, battle me 'head to head'? my ~'MIND'~IS~A~WEAPON/
i use mine to rap u use urs to ~STRIP~YOUTHS~ dont get mad cos im givin u trouser ~ZIP~TRUTHS~ damn im rippin u all u shud stand in ~RIP~BOOTHS~/
it just makes it less hastle ~FOR~ME~ to giv ya a lesson a ~HARDCORE~DEGREE~ dont piss wid this ~RAW~EMCEE~


crew battle sm vs cold steel

Untraceable has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-09-05 08:07 PM.

uppin...lets get some votes................honest and explained :thumbup:

This was feedback posted for Untraceable
 

Just checking the pollz...HS's drop was made ssttrreettcchheedd

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This was feedback posted for Hot Sauce
 

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Voted For: Untraceable

Untraceable - Good drop man. You had a perfect structure there that flowed nicely. Your punches owned Hot Sauce, and you had a good amount of personals that just made him look like shit. Tight drop man...8/10

Hot Sauce - Aight man...structure was way off man...made your verse hard to read. Your flow was eh...could have been better thatn what it was. You had some good punches in there but they didn't land nearly as hard as Untraceable. I don't think you came as hard as Untraceable in any way in this battle. Elevate in making a better structure for your verses man. Allright drop....5/10

Vote: Untraceable

Voted For: Untraceable

Hot Sauce
hmm alright k the stucture was amd ugly putting ~~~ in there just wreaks the stucture and your flow was weak also the vocab was decent but still weak your punches werent hitting i just aint feeling them you gotta do somethign to give them flavour add some more funny clips n it will be funny and dope. no hate

Untraceble:
i liked that ncie stucture the flow was more then great your punches just hit they were nice and funny just thought you had the better hitting punches soem nice vocab at most parts of it the creativty was just soemthing i couldnt even think of nice verse pretty one sided to. pz

Opener: Untraceable
closer: Untraceable
vocab: untraceable
stucture: untraceable
flow: untraceable
punchlines: untraceable
creativty: untraceable

VOTE: Untraceable

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thanks for voting guys......thankfully someone finally did.......votes will be returned honeslty
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Voted For: Hot Sauce

Aight, nice battle here from y'all

Untrace, verse was nice, structure an flow was on point, lacked in the punchline department, but besides ya punches, everythin was pretty decent i guess...

Hot:
verse was SICK
Structure was fuckin everywhere tho! haha
but ya definately came the stronger, IMPROVE THAT AWFUL STRUCTURE, An your dope as fuck!
nice personals, nice punches, creativity an wordplay was off its chain 4sho dirty

both came strong, hot took advantage of the 30 lines
Untrace had the better structure
but hots wordplay n puns killed it, not hatin untrace an RTF In my battle vs Black Queen, its on EFL Right now, thanks

Peace out n stay up y'all two

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Voted For: Untraceable

yeah, here's what i see

hot sauce, not a bad drop, had the multies in there, which is good, but you didnt have to use them all the way through, cause some shit was weak and seemed like fillers....and, yeah, alot of your mutlies come off as weak, because you use them so much, that some aren't as good as others, so i suggest, not using them everywhere, plus, your structure wasn't all that great, in parts i had a tough time following it....but not a bad drop, didnt think you really had that many personals, most were punches that were either played or weak, so, you need to work on that....but you had nice vocab and wordplay, especially in the second verse, but i just dont think you came that hard

untraceable.....flow and structure, nothing wrong at all with those....vocab, nothing special, wordplay, decent.....had good creativity playin off his name, complexity, nothing special....what separated you two, i think, was your consistency dissin your opponent, not all your punches/personals were hard, but you had them coming every line, which is good, and you had a few nice ones in there, like the "everyone run" line, haha, i laughed...so overall, i thought you came harder, had effective punches....personals owned him, (made a big difference), and thats why your getting my vote

v/untraceable....wordizzle

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Voted For: Untraceable

Hot Sauce

deepthroat so much ure BLUE-IN-THE-THROAT, jus for a FEW-OF-URE-VOTES,ure not supposed to 'play wit DeAtH' but ure CREW-IS-A-JOKE/
^good opener

explode ure LIVER-N-SHIT,BITTER-N-QUIK, droppin garabge like u LITTER-U-PRICK, u could ''SUB-SCRIBE'' ure verse to ''VIRUS'' n still not DELIVER-IT-SICK/
^virus-line is sorta played

Untraceable ? im SWEARIN-THIS-THUGS-GAY, its SCARY-IN-SOME-WAYS, cuz u lose 'weight around SUBS' jus like JERRY-FROM-SUB-WAY/
^decent decent

ure FEELIN-THE-HOT-SHIT, leave u SQUEELIN-N-COUGHIN,TEARIN-N-SOBBIN, as i 'dign up dirt on death' like im STEALIN-A-COFFIN/
^bleh,not feeling it


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looks like i av sum brutal thoughts to ~MESS~WID~ ill be messin wid u's more than michal jackson ~CARESS~KID~ i dont no wat ya dick ~LESS~DID~/
^okay okay, good one

stickin dildos in pre ~SCHOOL~ASS~ in a sick fantasy that ya a teacher of a ~CRULE~CLASS~ u been smokin too much ~FOOL~GRASS~/
^hehe, nice

I'm ~REFINED~IN~DECEPTION~ so ~REWIND~THE~AGRRESSION~ otherwise no-show or pray for ~DIVINE~INTERVENTION~/
^bit self-glorification so bleh...

I'll ~INSCRIBE~YA~WITH~SECTIONS~ from all ~THE~ ~RHYMES~THAT~I~MENTION~, battle me 'head to head'? my ~'MIND'~IS~A~WEAPON/
^again self-glorifying so nope

i use mine to rap u use urs to ~STRIP~YOUTHS~ dont get mad cos im givin u trouser ~ZIP~TRUTHS~ damn im rippin u all u shud stand in ~RIP~BOOTHS~/
^funny

it just makes it less hastle ~FOR~ME~ to giv ya a lesson a ~HARDCORE~DEGREE~ dont piss wid this ~RAW~EMCEE~
^okay closer

First of all, your structure makes your verse unpleasant to read but I understand that is just your writing style so I'll just focus on the content of it then. I was definately feeling your flow, had that on lock for sure and the vocab was good as well. Like how your rhyme scheme works and you had some good punches in there, not too much personals though. Too ba ya kinda fell in the middle because you had some self-glorifying lines in there which I didn't like. But overall, this was a good drop, enjoyed reading it. Maybe some more hardhitting punches or mad personals next time...
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Untraceable

this kid says he is so hot you cant drink him*
musta been in a dif mind state or jus not thinkin
^okay opener

cuz the only way he will be a myth or a legend*
is by adding a loss to his record within seconds
^nice one

thats a lesson learned cuz ill leave sauce burned
which will turn COLD STEEL into ashes inside an urn
^hehe, funny...

concern the leader with another loss on his side
so get back to the kitchen where ya bitch ass resides*
^lolz, good thinking

everone run for ya lives because hot sauce is now here
but when thats said not a single person dissappeared
^aight aight, nothing bad so far

cuz aint no one feared of a sauce thats really not hot
the only thing hot on this bitch is the pussy spot
^lmao...liking this one

damn hot sauce did i just reveal ya SECRET identity
better be expecting it to have been revealed eventually
^okay, sort of a filler but it's cool

and the only way you are gona be as cold as steel*
is when ya freeze up dropin, like lyrics are a big deal
^good closer

Good structure and you found a nice balance with your vocab, had your flow on lock as well. The strongest aspect of your verse were the personals, you really kept on dropping them: line after line. Liking that, some could've been worded little better maybe but overall they were nice to read. Not too much played stuff, tried some creativity here and there but as I already said, some lines had potential but didn't land too hard because of the way they were worded.
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In the end my vote goes Untraceable for the better personals and such but Hot Sauce had a nice verse as well so no hate...