Nostradamus vs Hells Fire
 

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Check in by: 02-11-05 at 12:12 AM

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Hells Fire has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-10-05 12:30 AM.

checkin in yo im gonna have a good story in here soon

Nostradamus has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-10-05 12:11 PM.

good luck i know he wont need it to nostradamus...phobia well here we go


Intro
Woke up alarm rang, 830, looked over, somethin shitty
tomorrow fast came, hate anxiety, rolled over, insullin shity
i hate needles takin thy blood, i hate vials fillin wit my blood
i hate doctors orderin blood, i hate the rubberband around arm

Phobia
milkin me for blood but i only 140, lookin away i still feelin hazy
pumpin my blood vampire crazy, i fear needles n go womb baby
ever since i was little id see n flip, took a pint,a sucker all i get
my vein would tense n id faint,kids at schoo laugh when think
id get a cookie but blood i aint,red cells mine no blood to bank
no red to cross cant donate,if die from loss blood let thy fate
acupuncture not my rate, i shake on first needle 5min n faint
bussed outta school early, if i got disease diabetis i die surely
girls look damn embarass me, mom get home see n greet me
id cry myself to sleep at my flaw,look at the sky n wish dawn
diabolic diabetis took my friend, diabolic prick look my end
angelic no gene got da fiend, i wake up battlin worryin dream
blood is life why take, im spinin in the office givin da take
juice is here doc take, my eyes spinin like a clownin fake
this my phobia this my fear, now i showya no cheer
rather bow ya for tryin queer, next time havin beer
because i rather scuff thy knee, then them prick off me
like cyclopes island in the odysee, fear is fuckin blindin me


.........i dont like blood takin needles not as much imagery but emotion is there hate um man hate um yo can ya edit my shit so its italics n bold titles n centered because it dont have the tools in this verse box

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This was feedback posted for Hells Fire
 

Nice shit y'all

Dont really know much about topicals, so i aint gonna vote, i'll leave it too the professionals so ta speak, but Nostras topic seemed deeper an the better vocab, but they were both enjoyable, good luck ta y'all

Peace

Thanks man.
Wish we could get some votes though sometime soon.. -_-

Uppin for votes..

I cant believe this shit is still at 0-0.. :cussing:

Voted For: Nostradamus

Nos- Your verse was so good...you stayed on topic, also had good creativity...vocab was nice n so was your structure, easy to read n everything...you get my vote because your topic verse was just better, so was your vocab....8.7/10.....

Hells Fire- Your verse was good too but not good enough...you stayed on topic...your structure ehhh decent could be fixin up a little...but overall you did well, but just not good enough......6.1/10.......

Also sorry for posting again.......But since i voted in yall battle think you can drop an honest vote in my battle against Intensify Effect........because thats gettin slept on......thanks.......1

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Voted For: Nostradamus

nos=not your best but it was intriging non the less....
nice take on the topic, pretty original concept...ya vocab n
imagery was very different from what im used to readin but
it was a good difference...lol...nice work...8.5/10
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hells fire=i wasnt feeling the intro, but i liked alot of individual lines you had n thought ya concept was aight.....not the impacting closer i was expecting...ya flow fell off in some areas n i found some parts highly repetitive n without meaning..but overall it was aight..7/10

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Voted For: Nostradamus

Dope ass battle fellas.

Nos- flow was realllllllly nice with this, flow does matter for topicals. Staying on topic was ok, not as dope as i hoped it would be in that area. But the owrding was right on point so i really liked that. Emotion was noticed it got me to focus on what you was saying, dope shit. 9/10
Hells fire- rhyme scheme was fuckin with me on this. Emotion was dope and that was it as far as being dope. flow was OK but coulda been better in a lot of places. As for staying on topic, it was pretty good, but i didnt think you exactly got to the point? :( 7/10

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This was feedback posted for Nostradamus
 

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Voted For: Nostradamus

Nos-i really thought you took this this is by far my favorite topical you have ever dropped in your entire rv career was deep you painted that picture in my head an you couldnt have done better vocab was good imaginary was very good structure was nice made for easy read this was one of your better peices stay up bro =1=

Hells Fire-your's was alright structure was kinda screwed at times you didnt paint a picture of your story in my head an thats what topicals or any rhyme is about an i wasnt feelin it from you thats why i thought you lost this keep droppin...

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Voted For: Nostradamus

A'ight...in all honesty this battle was pretty one sided...Hells Fire...you need to work on your shit. Your flow was off in places, most of your lines did not rhyme that well...your imagery was decent, your structure was a'ight, you just need to work on some shit...you kept to the topic pretty good, just keep workin at it. Nostradamus...came dope as usual at topicals, nice imagery, dope view on the topic...structure off in places, nice vocabulary...you got this battle with ease. No hate, return the favor...links in my sig.