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Dopeman vs Drama Queen
Battle Rules:
20 - 30 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Topic: The Mirror Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 02-16-05 at 04:37 PM Must drop verse in 2880 minutes after check in. |
Drama Queen has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-14-05 04:38 PM.
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Buck.Shot has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-15-05 10:38 AM.
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The Mirror
. . . ...A broken mirror means seven years of being unhappy... I smashed it into a thousand pieces the day you left me Because what could be worse than not havin you by my side Losing you, on who I relied, even took away my pride Calling you all day and night,was begging you on my knees But you avoided me like I got a contagious disease Lost the ability to think, my back against the wall No matter how hard I'll fall,I remain your naive thrall Would've given up everything for some of your affection I just wasn't ready to accept your bitter cold rejection . . . Months have passed but the feeling of failure has last Becoming a loner,building up a tremendous contrast The will to fight is gone for I cannot change my fate The growing hate towards myself for the mess I create Now I lay here in this puddle of blood,filled with pain Take a bit and push it against my skin,cutting my vein Why try to look if there's a reflection I can't stand? Only have myself to blame that things didn't go as planned When I'll confront the mirror,will I be able to see the once so comforting image of the girl I used to be? If you don't understand...don't vote please...the element of the mirror is present throughout the whole thing but if you don't see it, ask me first! DQ |
Blah, here goes nothin'....
*Reflections (The Mirror)* All of a sudden, woke up 7:30, Sweat drippin I can just remember a black hole, an me Slippin So i went too the bathroom, an looked in the mirror All i could see was the reflection of a cold blooded killer I stood in shock, an DisBelief Rubbbed my eyes an then came the Relief It was me all along, just my eyes playin tricks This aint the first time my reflection looked like Convicts I dont know what my minds thinkin, or is it just a Dream? So the next night, i had an Imaginative Scheme.. I would stay up, an try not too Sleep My eyes got so tired i began too Sweep Couldnt keep them open, So i let them Rest Made that Fatal mistake, now i'm Possesed Twitchin in my sleep as i see my Reflection My arms n legs began too Flexion I looked in the mirror, an i saw my Dad He died 10 years ago, so i was Glad i never wanted ta wake up, just stand there n stare Who would of ever thought in 2 days the mirror would be a dream an a nightmare Blah, Topicals aint my strong point, so i just went with the flow..... An mirrors was a hard topic lol Good look DQ, Get 'Em Girl..... Peace! |
Oops, thats suppose ta say Weep, not sweep, my bad, errrr, fuck lol :(
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Now let's get those votes coming... ;)
G'luck to you 2 fam...:love: DQ |
Come on, don't sleep people! Honest votes will be returned for sure...I wanna get some appropriate feedback and fully explained votes on this shit!
DQ |
...Uppity up...uppity up...
DQ |
Uppity up up....
DQ |
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^and up it goes!
DQ |
Voted For: Drama Queen
This actually was a pretty good topical Drama...u had nice imager...perfect emotion...good detail in the subject...it could have been more thourough and stood out more...but i still could understand wha u were sayin...some topicals do not stay on point and on subject but yours did..Hands down u took this one Dopeman...u had a good drop here...i dont even like u but i must say u almost came away with this one but i had 2 read the verses over twice so i made sure that i was givin a fair vote...u had nice imagery good lil story line..ya vocab could have been better the only thing u were missing was emotion..if u had the emotion down pact then u would of got this one... work on your emotions...jus dont use big words in order 2 fill up a line.,..use words thats decribes on exactly how u are feeling *Nuff Said* |
^Thanks for the fully explained vote, and upping for some more!
DQ |
Come on people! Upping for some votes!
DQ |
Upping this, once again...come on people, vote!
DQ |
i forgot about this topical lol @ me topial battling, hmmmmmm
that dont sound right Buck topical battling, future refrence, never do this again Who is jimmy pocketz? an why dont he like me? i am offended now....... |
^That's Troop :)
Why not? You did pretty good in this topical battle man... DQ |
lol Troop?
Shouldda figured by him saying ''Nuff Said'' lol |
This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
Dopeness!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!
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Voted For: Drama Queen
My vote gose to DQ,.. But Dopeman held his ground he's new to topicals so I felt this was a good battle.. Dopeman,.. Shit man u got loads of potential to be a dope topical head,... I felt your verse had very good flow,. alright vocab at times and deep emotion, I did think it was a bit predictable on the other hand I would read your verse and know how you was going to close the next line. But apart from that it was kool I liked what you did with the topic as well... DQ,.. What can I say,... Flowed really nice as well.. dope vocab and the emotions were gripping,... very well written verse, again used the topic well with some nice hidden complexity. Vote DQ,... But look out for dope in the future. 1~ |
Thanks, i appreciate the feed, i knew i lost this battle when i read her verse, but she is the one of the hottest in topicals right now, so i was happy ta just give it a go, i appreciate the feed an if you drop a link i'll RTF, peace out
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^^Thanks for fully explained vote and yes, he did pretty good in this one...kinda underestimated him *oops*
DQ |
Uppity up up!!!.........................
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Uppity up...come on people, vote up :).......
DQ |
Voted For: Drama Queen
DQ Nice Verse Girl I Was Feeling This Vocabulary,I Was Feeling The Emotion In This Verse, You Got Talent You Stuck Right To The Topic And Was Constant On Ya Vocabulary, Structure Was Decent I Liked This Drop Girl,The Emotion Structure And Vocab Is What To Look For In Topikals Like This, And You Had All Three Of Em' Buck.Shot Damn Sone Pretty Decent I Aint Know You Was A Topikal Head? Weerd Man You Had Some Decent Vocabulary Here And Emotion, The Structure I Wasn't Digging Though, You Getting Better On Structure, But Ya TOpikal Nice Man Maybe Switch To Topikal?? Who Knows My Vote Goes To DQ Coz Her Emotion Structure And Vocabulary Was There Three Major Parts, No Hate Buck.Shot You Pretty Good At This |
Yeah thanks you little crack whore
Uppin this anyway |
Thanks for the vote, upping this battle for some more!
DQ |
upppppppppppppin
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Voted For: Drama Queen
Dope-I think you should work on ya structure. ya structure was off in this one, and a couple other battles i seen you in. but, i was kidna feelin yo verse, but not that much. you stuck to tha topic ight, and u had some creativitie in this one. but i dont think yo drop was hard enough for this one. DQ-i was really feelin yo drop. i think u came more prepared in this one. i seen alot of creativitie outta u in this one, and some coo wordplay. yo structure was better, but i think you should work on puttin more feelin into yo topicals. you WHOLE verse wasnt interesting. some lines were uninteresting to me, but overall, i think you took this. v/DQ- better wordplay, and a better drop from me. i was feelin it more. NO HATE, just what i think. nice drop both yall, and keep elevating. plz RTF on battle link in bottom of sig. ~1~ |
^Thanks for explained vote, favor will be returned as soon as possible...upping for one more...
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Uppity up up!!! Come on people, we will honestly return the favor...
DQ |
Voted For: Drama Queen
you win, but only becuase buck shot didnt try as hard as i know he can DQ, your shit wasnt that great, i didnt like how you came about the whole topic, its was diff. and creative which is dope, but you didnt have that much emotion, well atleast that is what i think, just try to eleavte on this shit, nxt time do a more easier topic so that you can stay on topic, but once agian your lucky buck shot didnt really try, i think that you should re battle, actually i will set it up for another topical if you like BS..your shit was good but your structure was oof and your flow was off, you should have took more time becuase you ahd the emtion, and you had the right take on it, although it was a basic approach i liked it, you fell offf alot in some lines, just work on taking your time into things, not everything has to be keystyle so if you want me to set it up just let me know and you and DQ can go at it one more time or even i can get in it, its all good fam, also Elevate your vocab vote=DQ |
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