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Look Mom! (Life's Good)
This some shit, about my past, an growin up in Sacramento, an a little about my parents too, God bless my momma :D
Hook: Look Mom!...I'm top of the world, Best of the best! LIFE'S GOOD... King Hust-ler, Out the PROJECTS... One man, One pen, one pad... See momma, Life aint all that bad.... .................................................. ............ Verse 1: We used'ta live out West, back in Sac-Town... Just a lil kid trynna lay his Mack-Down... From the look in my eyes you would see i never Back-down.. In elementary i was always known as the Class-Clown.. But if you pushed the right buttons i would always leave you Ass-Down.. Listnin Too N.W.A, Biz Markie An KRS-ONE, Thinkin i can brake those Boundries.. While my momma sat an told me ''Why you listnin ta this nonsense? Turn down the sound-please!'' I was one of those Lil'-G'z, Poppin Cap-Guns... Mom wanted the best out of life for me, takin me too see Attractions.. But i had other Distractions, An i bet she did Too.. Cause daddy was a dope fiend an she didnt know what ta Do... He said he'd beat her if we was ta ever leave-him... An he was constantly drunk, we didnt even know if he was Breathin... I didnt think i was Really his seed, Or i just didnt wanna Believe... All i could ever think about was a a masterplan ta make us Leave...! Hook: Look Mom!...I'm top of the world, Best of the best! LIFE'S GOOD... King Hust-ler, Out the PROJECTS... One man, One pen, one pad... See momma, Life aint all that bad.... .................................................. ............. Verse:2 Yupp, we got away from the Devil.. Moved out south, now we at another Level... 13 Years gone by we sat an watched him Trippin... Then the day he struck-you, was the day he was Slippin... He's a Dead-Beat a Fuckin Base-Head... I cant even remember a day he wasnt Wasted... Then you got the Promotion an Life is Good.. We got away from everythin, like i said we Could... The hood made me a better man, It improved my Posture.. But you always said you wanted me in college no matter what it Cost-ya.. Just 15 thinkin i could make it on an NBA Roster... But my school was full of Caucasians an felt like an Imposter... We took time too Settle into a New Area... An i never meant ta Slice that kid, Sorry for Scarin-Ya... The police had me Shook, You resorted to the Good-Book... Prayin ya boy dont get a few years in Jail... But after he dropped the charges, i was quick ta Hail... An i'm just a young black male, with a Rough Past... Momma never thought we Last... But she stayed Loyal an showed me Lovin'..... Never liked me rhymin cause she thought it was all Thuggin.. Thought i was gonna Join a gang, An start Bussin... But ever since Orlando, she stopped Fussin... She realized I evolved an the streets made me Wise.. There was no more fights, no more Cussin, no more Lies.. An she could see it in my eyes, i was a real Go-Getter... Just like i said, it was all gone be alright, an Life Couldnt Be Better! Peace drop a link with-in 24 hours or this will be closed... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=165166 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=170910 |
Uppin y'all...
Feed will be returned if ya drop a link Peace |
the studcture was kinda weak but for the most part the flow was good tell some lines it would fall off the vocab was great here i have to say, the creavity was good this peice was just a lil comin different then what these newbies have been dropin on RV to much wack shit but yo i felt this this was nice man
return feed on my OM with Prolifik links in da sig homie peace -I.J |
Feed is grately appreciate, i'ma hit your shit up right now man
Uppin y'all.. |
it was ight...tha structure was kinda wack, cause yo lines were stretched, but overall, it was aight to me. i just thought it couldve been a lil better, u lacked good/creative wordplay, and yo rhymes were kinda simple, but u can really elevate, and i think if that was an audio, it wouldve been even better. i should put that on a track,and keep eleVATEin...
hold it down for SAC family...this is tha best place ever ~1~ |
oh, and peep tha NOK new OM...called NOK YASELF OUT...its in sig, leave feedback....~1~
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I left feed homie, it was straight an thanx for your feed too
Many people said my flows would be dope in audio, i'ma have ta look into that, but yeah thanks for the feed, uppin y'all |
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chea dogg...i was feelin this alot...i like your hook...your flow was good throughout...you structure was kinda al over da place...your vocab could be uped a lil bit...but other than that man it was str8....7/10....keep it up
The JURY |
Whussup Famlay?
appreciate the feed homie, good lookin out... Uppin y'all |
yo have you still got that beef on me from yesterday lol that was fuckin funny can we finally respect each other or does the hate still remain? your verse was good man I was feeling it.
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this verse was stretched more den ya mums clit.
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LMAOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
Aight, so lemme get this straight here whacko..... First you was feelin my verse an the masterpeice cause its dope as fuck But i hate on yours now the lines are stretched like my ''MUMS'' clit? hahahahah, kid....... Go away No more needs ta be said But thank you for uppin my drop, i appreciate an the feed too, i'll return in sometime in the near future, but for now i have a battle that needs ta be attended too So peace |
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drop a link with-in 24 hours or this will be closed... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=165166 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=170910 |
Links of what?????????
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u need to drop a link with proper feed back....
u must always drop proper feed back on someone else OPEN MIC befor u can open u'r own..... and when u do open ya own u must drop the link where u gave someone else PROPER FEED BACK.... when i get active i try to enforce it.... u aint have no link.... so u must drop one.... drop a link with-in 24 hours or this will be closed... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=165166 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=170910 |
lol, aight, but couldnt you just check out NOK Yaself out, By J-DOT, I droppd proper feed on that, an he returned the favor......
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ey yo dis wast tight you stayed on topic, good flow,
good structa and wordplay.dis was hott keep doin ya thing man 9.5/10 |
Appreciated homie.....
Uppin for some moe feed all |
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I liked the flow to it.. but the structure was kinda off.. overall u had some nice lines in there.. some weak ones.. just work on the structure even though it doesnt really matter toooo much if you think about it...
anyways 7/10 bro.. |
Appreciated....
But JUST YESTERDAY, I think i finally got the hang of the structure thing, but the feed is HIGHLY APPRECIATED, Thank you again... Uppin people... |
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good multis...stayed on topic well...flow could have been better..second verse was better then the first verse,,,the first verse started too simple an the multis sounded forced...but second verse was proper
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this wouldve been better heard audio... but on text this wasnt to great of a read .. flow was on point... stay up
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Appreciated y'all
Drop a link an ill RTF Peace |
Uppin
Leave a link an i'll RTF Peace |
Forgot about this with all the other O.M's i got going on
Uppin folk |
LOL ^^^
Kids a hater too the fullest, he's just mad cause i merked his little scroney ass in a battle, but the feed an honesty is highly appreciated, an one last thing, dont go thinkin i'm on your dick cause of what i said too get you ta post feed............. Peace an thanks |
Huh?
battled? never mentioned that, but i'm going off your open mics, i am 'Shott-a-Boy' from waaaay back in the day, an when you said ''Sucking up''...it sounded like a bitchy comment, i aint trynna hate on you, i just dont want you thinkin i'm trynna ride ya dick, nah mean, but allz good, i aint trynna pick no fights |
lol, aight....
No worries then, i apologize for biting ya head off like that lol Peace |
ayo buck...clear out ya pmz...lol i need to send you one.
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Done ^^^^
Hit me up an make it quick homeboy, i'm bout too be out anytime now |
def feel'n this one i feel the same way about my momma to.. i can def see you love your momma and respect her like mad.. def props on this one.. nice word play ya lines was a lil stretched but over all the flow was nice// keep droppin
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ayo thanks!
i knew u could relate too it, just a shame you wasnt around when i was gonna dropp this, u could have got it on it but ahh well May aswell upp this while i'm here too crunk, crunk y'all.. |
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