MaRVJay1009 vs ~Ku$tUm-Im@gE~
 

Battle Rules:
10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 02-19-05 at 02:43 PM

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~Ku$tUm-Im@gE~ has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-16-05 02:48 PM.

MaRVJay1009 has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-16-05 02:59 PM.

MarvJ's not hard, just stand and ''laugh at his actin''.....
this easy, with one line i'll cut ya in ''half like a fraction''....1

Funny with my sh!t,give yall a ''couple laughs'' n then put this ''blood to rest''....
drowned Marv in a ''Bubble bath'' the way ill give him a ''Sud-n death''..... 2[sudden sud-n]

My punches so hard you'll feel the ''hurt out ya screen''...
bring ya whole crew, i'll finish ya set like a ''workout routine''.3

Marv u not hard, uve never let off in a club u a ''pretend shine''...
if yall virgins dont know what a pussy looks like just click MarvJ1009....4 [ten-9]

Im a real G, Marv stupid for ''thinkin he's the same''.....
Im on the streets, ya live just life just revolves around a mouse like ''pinky and the brain''....5

look.....

u betta stop..cuzz lead a pop..truth is u were neva hott...
u down the establishment as kustom image but unda J DOT u repin NOK
true story rv!....u on our dick cuzz ya team neva was dope
ya sig u say u beat hotshh! but da truth is u lose pmin 4 votes
dis nigga really tryin da be 2 ppl at once dis cat is mental.....
why u reppin orlando now but on ya alias it say sacramento..
said dat u was dealin da raw dro,fam i aint feelin ya soft flow
if u would like 2 know "yES" me & ya moms was filmin a "por-NO"
dis kid wastin his time who cares bout da bar's he thinkin bout
dont believe dis guy ya'll "MONEy-FaKE" like "rv bank accounts"

nuff said 10 lines....

1st bar-he has a alias J DOT i know ya'll saw dat name be4 and he's down with NOK..but under kustom image he was own with my crew the establishment

2nd bar-in his sig he said he beat hotshh! 3-5 but da truth is he lose got caught pmin 4 votes

3rd bar-on his his alais J DOT he reppin sacramento but under kustom image he reppin orlando


last bar-when i say "MONEY-FAKE" i mean by him cuzz we call ppl money out in nyc so u'll get it

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This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
 

dope battle.........marv jay got the personals kustum had the metas and punches...its a toss up

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damn why everyone sleepin?........yo marv why did u think i was j dot u and hotshh!.....both did...............

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Wow Marv Killed Thiss Kid...

Openor=Marv Decent Multies And Punch
Punches=Marv,Had Decent Punches In Every Line
Personals=Marv.He Had Most Of Them
Vokab-None
Multies=Tie,Both Had Some Ok Multies
Closer=Marv,Lol Good Closer

Marv Came Harder With His Verse He Had Consistency In His Verse And Had Better Punches..........

/V MarvJay1009 Rtf.................

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This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
 

Is he really J-Dot?

I dont think he is.......

Kustum has much hotter punches than J-Dot, an he repps the jury, not Establishment, an sorry no hate, but besides your personals which hit hard, Kustum took this because of the witty punches

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

u was a bit dodgy in some lines but your personals were more hard hitting than Kustom's and ur first two lines fit perfectly , not as good structure as kustom, not the greatest battle but Marv wins on personals and i didn't like kustom talking bout killin all the time, its outplayed.

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This was feedback posted for ~Ku$tUm-Im@gE~
 

checkin the polls ya'l..

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

close battle, this is how i see it...

Kustom...
>MarvJ's not hard, just stand and ''laugh at his actin''.....
this easy, with one line i'll cut ya in ''half like a fraction''....1
-i dunno, didnt do it for me, weak....4/10
>Funny with my sh!t,give yall a ''couple laughs'' n then put this ''blood to rest''....
drowned Marv in a ''Bubble bath'' the way ill give him a ''Sud-n death''..... 2[sudden sud-n]
-this was your best line, made me laugh....8/10
>My punches so hard you'll feel the ''hurt out ya screen''...
bring ya whole crew, i'll finish ya set like a ''workout routine''.3
-meh, seen it before....4/10
>Marv u not hard, uve never let off in a club u a ''pretend shine''...
if yall virgins dont know what a pussy looks like just click MarvJ1009....4 [ten-9]
-haha, nice personal 7/10
>Im a real G, Marv stupid for ''thinkin he's the same''.....
Im on the streets, ya live just life just revolves around a mouse like ''pinky and the brain''
-weak...for a closer...sry man, 3/10

overall: 26/50....yeah, when i was readin it, kinda hard in some places, flow wasnt consistent and threw it off a little, some places you would come hard but then next line would be weak and that drown alot of your text man, but for the most part, solid battle

marj1009...even if kustom aint jdot, still some good shit in here
>u betta stop..cuzz lead a pop..truth is u were neva hott...
u down the establishment as kustom image but unda J DOT u repin NOK
-nice mults in there....6/10
>true story rv!....u on our dick cuzz ya team neva was dope
ya sig u say u beat hotshh! but da truth is u lose pmin 4 votes
-nice personal here....7/10
>dis nigga really tryin da be 2 ppl at once dis cat is mental.....
why u reppin orlando now but on ya alias it say sacramento..
-meh, okay....5/10
>said dat u was dealin da raw dro,fam i aint feelin ya soft flow
if u would like 2 know "yES" me & ya moms was filmin a "por-NO"
-haha, okay punch here...7/10
>dis kid wastin his time who cares bout da bar's he thinkin bout
dont believe dis guy ya'll "MONEy-FaKE" like "rv bank accounts"
-solid finisher...8/10

overall: 33/50...not bad, structure little off in some places....thought you had better punches...more personals that kustom....shit was a little more complex too, thought out, wordplay was better....flow little off too in some places...but you still get my vote

v/marj

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

this was a great battle 2 view in my opinion:
opener: marvjay1009
strucutre: marvjay
vocab: marvjay
multis: marvjay
closer: marvjay
marvjay punches hit harder in this battle den kustum image; also he had betta wordplay den kustum but overall this battle was close it could have went neway
make sure 2 return the favor

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This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
 

wack battle on da real...no hate to any just stating i know marv can do way betta...unless he has a ghostwriter...

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Voted For: ~Ku$tUm-Im@gE~

Ok battle.

Marv: If you had proof of his alias then I would say good personals, but he says he isnt, and u have no proof so ya that cancels out the personals. punches were ok, but your attempt at wordplay was bad. a porno line? best line was PMin for votes. work on your wordplay.

KI: Ok verse, but your punches weren't that great. you had more then Marv, and a little bit of personals. you need to work on your personals and metaphors. your structure isnt that great either. overall work on personals and structure.

Overall: Both of you need to work on wordplay and provide more proof for personals, or try more. work on punches and metaphors as well.

v- KI

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Voted For: ~Ku$tUm-Im@gE~

kustom got this battle cuz i dont think he's j dot and marvs whole verse was based on that plus kustom had better mettas

return the fav with an honest vote on the battle in my sig

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