intensify effect vs Durban
 

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Topical- eternal damnation
20-25 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
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Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 02-17-05 at 02:48 AM

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Durban has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-17-05 12:25 AM.

intensify effect has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-17-05 12:39 AM.

eternal damnation


will we continue to break the seals of seven
will he once and for all close the gates of heaven?
he will dispose of all good,ending every creation
This is my story,of eternal damnation............

eternal damnation

Pain inflicted through emotions given...
Soul is positioned to scream though my throat is missin *wah*...
Envision a mind vs a talent.. in a voice box entrenched in a vine...
Then u will find a dilemma just as simple as mine...
insight like a blind monk, word patterns wanderin' the mountainsides...
cuz with all my reason and truth, even i lose my footing at times..
I suffer cuz I favor verbs and fatal words...
But vocally my cords are stressed more than laid off laborers...
wont stop till im niled-to-da-curv, feels like hitler soul grabb'in-me...
rapedly making ya dicks drop to the floor like u was being SUCKED by gravity...
u would think guns, knifes and accidents causes casualties...
but these forces beyond what we all have been practicing...
witch craft, voo-doo, with bones gift-raped... what a tragedy...
pop'ed opticals for trash reading of ya topicals..slugs u had to see..
BITCH!,
claps when i strut through the door gashes bust through my pores...
The Face of Durban Slapped to the Cutting room Floor...
coward is taimed, but my enternal feelings are killing me...
skin peeling from the sins in me frightning lighning reeling on agility...
on the heels of achilles as my pride bested my think modes...
i can conquer all of rap N still wont think smooth...
till aint no-one left to be next to lose, i feel there still complication...
and this my 1st topical drop, imagen what i have instored befor my enternal damnation......... BITCH...






N i can bet u been had ya verse pre-wrote.......
peep....
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=176415
^^ that was on 2-10-05.... its 2-17-05 mmmm what a shame...

good luck with ya pre-written bull-shit...
mines took me 1 hr tops...

whatever upp'in for ya pre witten....

upp'in............................................ ......

your drop isnt even on topic.
bitch???? your speaking like you dropped dope...its wak.

^^^^ bitch u acting like u just wrote that when u been had it prepaired N pre-written already bitch.....

and i told u and everyone in my tread i dont do topicals....

this is my first topical battle and yes it is about the topic: enternal danmnation,
why u said it aint a topical?
just cuz i aint have to do it about god and evil and whatever else u pre-wrote....??

its ova coming a flow or ego or mastering something anything or taking ova something all that is part of enternal danmnation bitch so hop off my nuts.......

if u read my verse again then maybe u will get it other then that hop off my nuts with ya bull-shit u probley bit awhile back bitch.......

upp'in............................................ .............................

thanks for writing that whole paragraph for me

but I failed to read it seen as you cant spell


upping

Voted For: Durban

durban- ur verse was good...u stayed on topic the
whole way thru, also had good creativity..vocab
& structure was on point..u get my vote cuz i
feel ur topic verse was betta & overall was to
9.0/10

intensify effect- ur verse was good also but not good
enough..u stayed on topic..ur structure
was off it needs 2 b fixed up..but overall
u did good but not good enough 6.5/10

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

sorry 2 freepost in ur battle but make sure 2 return the favor

This was feedback posted for Durban
 

Chekcing the polls..................................

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^^ Nigga Trying To Be Like Me


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ummm they are dots.

*pulls the dot key out of his keyboard*

happy?

Voted For: intensify effect

[i][color=blue]
punches-I.E
multi's-none
wordplay-I.E
creativity-I.E
structure-I.E

overall I.E gets my vote simply because he just came hard in this battle, his punches were nice, wordplay was there, etc..Durban's verse wasn't bad but i thought it could have been better, he had some aight shit but nothin that really caught my eye......

V/Intensify Effect

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This was feedback posted for Durban
 

Checkin the polls an uppin this shit famlay

Decent drop....

Good luck Both y'all

stop deleting votes prick like it aint bad enough we bearly get votes......

upp'in........................................

^^^ and that is my shit........

upping..... both votes were unexplaind bitch! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

This was feedback posted for Durban
 

checking polls......................................

This was feedback posted for intensify effect
 

ayyo I.E. ya verse was tighter than Durbans Pussy!! haha you took this one playa.. peaCe

upp'in this joint.........................................

This was feedback posted for intensify effect
 

This was feedback posted for Durban
 

checkin da pollz...........................................

upping........
lmao@thasickones comment....his verse tighter than a virgins pussy...........
you assholes as loose as blah from ryding his dick fag bwoy!!

This was feedback posted for Durban
 

checkin polls.....i'd prolly beat you both in a topical......but good verse and approach for the both of you tho.......:thumbup:

man why do ya fucking check polls.....

imma ask strobe to bannd check'in polls and only vote if u wanna see whos up.....

Voted For: intensify effect


I.E.
Nice Verse Man, This Was Your First Pretty Good Imagery, Nice Vocabulary Up In Here, Structure Could Use Work Man Weerd But Opener Was Nice, So Was The Closer, Overall If This Really Was Your First Then You'll Be Dope In No Time, Just Try And Fix Your Structure, And Shit Man Nice

Durban
Good Verse Man, You Had ALot Of Imagery In Here, Structure Was Good That's Pretty Good Man, Vocabulary Eh! No Man Try And Fix That Shit Up Man Nicely Done Yo, All You Didn't Have here Was Vocabulary You Lacked Alot Man So My Advice Is up On That

Vote-I.E.
Return The Favor In My Sig Preferebly Me Vs .K.onfliktz

Voted For: intensify effect

D

this verse was good, vocab was nice good choise of words vision was there, felt what u was saying u had a few celever lines and got the point across nicely good tight verse


Seven angels burning as they fall,simply unspoken
Thier harps silent and unused,simply just broken
Heavens ingulfed in flames,holy churches tumbling down
As The Throne of god Is usurped by death's crown
No such thing as judgment day,its now been denied
All unworthy of the dark shall perish,its impossible to hide
Desolate eyes ascend In hate,all evil starts to show
the white light is now black,and the red starts to glow
Humans falling into the depths below,no reason to fight
Shadowed by dark clouds,no rememberance of light
As people start to bask and glorify the heat of hell
We turn into weeping mortals that will forever dwell
Our souls shall never rest,but be forever serving the devil
endliss torment awaits,death seems paused never to prevail
as demons rip into your flesh,to expose your inner self
you relise you should of praised god,and he would of delivered your wealth

shit was tight 8/10

intensify effect
ya verse was good, i thought u had more celever lines
ya vocab was good, vision was there the emtion of fire was there i thought this was a hot verse man ya 2 was went at this good then i notice intensify say D pre-write this which is lame and if it tookhim 1 hour thats tight

eternal damnation

Pain inflicted through emotions given...
Soul is positioned to scream though my throat is missin *wah*...
Envision a mind vs a talent.. in a voice box entrenched in a vine...
Then u will find a dilemma just as simple as mine...
insight like a blind monk, word patterns wanderin' the mountainsides...
cuz with all my reason and truth, even i lose my footing at times..
I suffer cuz I favor verbs and fatal words...
But vocally my cords are stressed more than laid off laborers...
wont stop till im niled-to-da-curv, feels like hitler soul grabb'in-me...
rapedly making ya dicks drop to the floor like u was being SUCKED by gravity...
u would think guns, knifes and accidents causes casualties...
but these forces beyond what we all have been practicing...
witch craft, voo-doo, with bones gift-raped... what a tragedy...
pop'ed opticals for trash reading of ya topicals..slugs u had to see..
BITCH!,
claps when i strut through the door gashes bust through my pores...
The Face of Durban Slapped to the Cutting room Floor...
coward is taimed, but my enternal feelings are killing me...
skin peeling from the sins in me frightning lighning reeling on agility...
on the heels of achilles as my pride bested my think modes...
i can conquer all of rap N still wont think smooth...
till aint no-one left to be next to lose, i feel there still complication...
and this my 1st topical drop, imagen what i have instored befor my enternal damnation......... BITCH...

i was feeling the ending shit was all around tight

9/10

Voted For: intensify effect


IE- Verse was nice...so was your punches....Had some nice sick azz personals also....Structure was decent...easy to read n all...but overall your won this with a better overall verse and punches...8.6/10........

Durban - your verse was nice a little, but your punches really didnt seem to connect hard enough...your structure was layed out nice...but you went weak on punches thats all...5.9/10.......

V/ IE
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^^^
what the fuck??

punches???in a topical??? are you completly stupid????


PUNCHES ARE NOT SHIT IN TOPICALS!!!!!!

Voted For: Durban

intensify effect: let me start by stating the aspects I found best in your verse which were vocabulary and flow. You had real good vocabulary, nice level of complexity and yet easy to understand and follow. You had your flow on lock, I was definitely feeling it. Downsides were the structure, it was kinda all over the place in my opinion and the emotion was lacking here and there (no hate). I do like your approach of the topic, it was quite original and I like that in a topical. The imagery wasn't all that but your word choice makes up for it. Just work on the emotion and imagery a bit more next time but I guess it was kinda difficult due to your approach of the topic. Still enjoyed reading your piece though, it was interesting and bet it would sound dope in audio.


Durban: not the most original approach probably but I still like it though. What I enjoyed most about your piece was the excellent imagery, you managed to portray the image inside my mind throughout the way you worded everything. The emotion was good as well, am feeling your flow and the vocabulary was impeccable. The structure was nice and I just don't see anything wrong about your verse, you wrote a nice topical. Good job! Maybe next time seek for a more creative approach of the topic, just a thought ;)

Voted For: Durban

this ones goin to durban

dam.. felt both sides of this shit

mad good from both of u

Voted For: Durban

This was an okay battle..

effect: your verse basiclly was weak.. very little emotion, and okay imagery.. I thought you were better then this.. your vocab aswell was very off and not good at all.. Im guessing that you haven't battled in a while, but you need to re-elevate on everything..

5/10

Durban: YOur verse was amazing man, I could seriously feel emotion, and see way more imagery.. your vocab as well was on point.. you basicllky took it with imagery and very nice intro...
9/10

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i was gonna vote on this but honestly...
i dont think its right see'in that link just
is'nt fair durban...this should be closed..
nice verse n all but thats borderline cheating..
.
pz

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...im just checking the polls gentlemen...
^^^UPPIN'!!!^^^


...the super.....c.s.

^^^that cat yung wun is really hot sauce. he's been riding i.e.'s dick for ages. clearly its a d/r vote homie.

lets keep this on the up and up fellas.


...the super............big bad crhyme sin...

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Voted For: Durban

intensify effect
dat shit was hot great multis nice flow.
i liked da variation on da topical

durban
u set da sceen up perfectly in da beggining and further on.
but u really shined from da 5th bar down

this shit was great but ima give it to durban becuase even tho
intencify came sick wit it, i thought he should have got deeper
on da subject