"Verbal Suicide" By: R-Rated
 

nice lil intro liek the painos and guitar sample sound familar...beats good...multis r good, flow is kinda stiff word on making your flow smoother (try using alliterations) could use better and more punch lines and metas and similies..delivery seems slightly forced not natural delivery needs work production is ok could come up

Beat at the intro is horrible but becomes pretty good after it finally gets going. Lyrics are on, flow is solid. Needs some cadence. Sounds liek you recorded this 2 bars at a time. The line you say "shhhh...just open your mind" some echo on "mind" woulda added some much needed ambience to this track. This flow reminds me of Dre's flow when Korrupt was ghosting for him. The portion of the rhyme where you mention something about grinding fine bones is VERY much like "Tephlon" who is nice as hell. If you can get a hold of some of his tracks (usually works with MOP) listen to him and see how he uses his vocal range.

Second verse is much like the first as far as lyrics. Has a pseudo-morbid concept to it which worked out okay. I think more cadence woulda killed it. Kinda reminds me of a calm Jus Allah.

Oh, BTW - if you can get any "Holocaust" tracks like " Silkworm" (I have it saved if you need it. Hit me) - man, listen to it repeatedly. Dude is a monster and you remind me of him a bit - just less cadence and aggression.

beat is weird..... i unno i like the string and piano....... but theres a really bad break and abrupt change in it in the intro, w/e...... decent quality, u got nice multis and flow... decent track, might wanna fix up the beat alil, but its aight, ur flow is good and nice multies, but i dont get the message that well i guess..... its decent, maybe i juss didnt catch it...

u can leave feed in the sig

Yea Dooms..I Wish I Knew How To Do All That Stuff You Said, I'm Not Well At Producing. I Do The Basics and Shit Like That.

But Yea, I Wouldn't Mind Listening To Those Tracks, If They Have Similar Styles...A Lot Of Peeps From The Site I'm On Said I Remind Them Of The Rapper From Gorillaz.

For Fux I Dunno If You Finished Listening but Even If You Did...The Whole Thing Was Explaining A Demon Who Is Describing To You What He Does, and The Last Verse Switches Up With Me Telling The Person...

Last Bar:
"Close Your Eyes and Sing Along, As I Eat Your Internals..
I'ma Evil Demon..and I Can Make You Eternal.."

So I Entitled It "Verbal Sucide" Because If The Listener Sings Along I Take Over Their Soul and They Become An Eternal Demon.

Thanks For The Feedback From All of You. I Hope You Enjoyed This Track.

~R~

yea i dont really like this ...i mean its not my cup of tea and here's why...i dont really like your voice its not really appealing...your flow is str8 nahmean clarity in some of your words could be better ..sounds like your slurring alot wit your words..lyrics from what i can understand are onpoint feeling some of your multis wordplay isnt bad... umm overall this was solid ..work on your clarity thats my only complaint emotion is str8 delivery is str8 lyrics are good just the clarity..props

ps u can hear the queing in your flow...where u stopped and started again work on that and that eternalllll sounded really homo lol(no hate)

aight flow was ok...lyrics were coo...yea you do have a problem getting some of your words out so yea clarity does need some work...delivery is ok...ithink it could be upped tho....overall this track was ok...peace

u definately came up since before but the flow needs a bit off work you need to slice threw the beat not step around it roll that shit off ya tounge man all in all you definately came up holla at my nitrogen diss keep it up :thumbup:

wow.....R -Rated....

Im happily suprised....
What were u drinkin while u been away? I want some....8/10.

An Im the guy that knocks everyone.

Yo nice join man, Flow was good, some of the words kinda felt Forced, quality was Aight.. It was good thought, lyrics were tight.. good shit..

8.5/10

Thanks For The Feedback From All..I Appreciate It All.

I Will Return The Favors Tomorrow When I Have Time.

Hit Me Up For Collaborations or Nething In That Sort.

~R~

yea, pretty nice, but i hope you dont want to go big with your R-Rated Name
because theres already an R-Rated in the hip hop Scene

Yea His Name Is Actually "Rated-R"

But R-Rated Is Just A Name for The Net...If I Ever Got The Chance To Go Big I Would Definitly Change My Name..

Thanks For The Feedback Though Pimpin..Stay Up.

~R~

feed...
 

i havent even started doing audios yet...but u left feed to mad people soooo....

u sound mad white..very emienemish...flows was really good beat was off the meters...a lot of words sounded repeated...your pronocuation of words was weird...an i wasnt feeling ya voice but it was a solid drop with good flow an delievery.

Aiight, sounds like a real underground style. I like your rhyme scheme and your delivery pulls it off well. I think your vocals could be improved but you used some fairly nice techniques.

The track itself was no classic, I think you need to work on having a more definitive style which is the same problem for a lot of underground artists these days. You seem to have your rhyme schemes and delivery down, so nows prime time to start working on your actual style and motivation as a rap artist. You need to think about what your actually trying to achieve or give listeners with your music and plan how your going to hit the industry.

Also think about the beats your using, this beat from ghost face is good, but like most Wutang beats its more or less just loops. Which makes your stuff sound amature or freestyled. Remember your making music and not just throwing words over an instrumental.

I didnt mind this track though; so keep at it man. Goodluck with your rapping.

Also hit up my new track "One Day" in this forum and drop some good feed for me. :)
Peace.

i love that beat...


voice is nice here...u have more control than the last time I heard you


not bad

vocals could be upped a notch...or the beat lowered


pretty good shit


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Thanks For The Feed...Yea If You D/L The Track and Listen To It In Your Mp3 Player/CD Player....Shit Is Perfectly Leveled Between Vocals and Beat. Soundclick Just Fucks Wit Shit.

Uppin

~R~

This isnt a bad track. Beat is nice the pianos sound crisp. Work on your flow and delivery...and the key message your trying to send, cause like fux i didnt get it niether. I think those 3 improvments will have you doing nice work. Stay up and keep droping, one

Keyz...coming soon..to an audio near you....

i actually liked the beat, kinda weird tho, the lyrics coulda been better and the flow was decent........seemed like you had a hard time with some of the lines, quality better than my last audio, lol....delivery was ok but spit like you mean it a little bit more
btw, ima get at you for that collab in a bit, i just gotta finish like 2 or 3 more audios first

Aight Fasho Hit Me Up Sumtime..

Appreciate All Feedback.

I'ma Try and Get A New Track Up Here Soon...

~R~

Returnin the Favor

beat is really dope!
voice is coo..sounds kinda loud but its all good
flow and delivery is pretty nice, mic presence is on point
lyrics were hott also!
overall this is a good track man!

smooth sick beat..........you remind me of these cats called knife in ya kneck. i think there sight is knifeinyakneck.com, you got that same sick type of style...... "imma kamikaze soldier wit the power of god"................The beat might of needed to change a little. your vocals are on point though. damn, yeh that bitch yelling and shit, you remind me of them, and that rapper Eden. You need to check out both of those artist if you havent already. I kno knife in ya kneck personally so tell them determind said to hit them up, you would do a dope collab. I don't kno Eden, but you sound like him a lil. I give this track a B+

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=179543
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aight, i'm really feeling this beat.. ya flow is aight.. it's better than i had heard before.. ya lyrics are pretty good, i like how u tried to ride the beat.. you held good mic presence, i was feeling this tracks and the special effects, the guy screamin at the end.. lol nice shit.. stay up
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