Parallel vs Dio Deus
 

Battle Rules:

12-20
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
Topic: Reality's Choice

Crew battle: The Establishment vs. NOK Out Kingz

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Parallel has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-18-05 03:33 PM.

i know your gonna duck me so just say so and decline the battle then it will be over like that

like damn newbs

Dio Deus has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-19-05 01:39 AM.

good one! :thumbup:

Reality's choice

reality's choice, what's real? what's reality?
is reality good, or is reality felony, I'll never see,
cause no-one knows, we can say we do, when someone goes,
he will go to heaven, and he will burn in hell,
how do we know that? it's impossible to know, you can't learn it well,
was that tidal wave destined, on purpose? or some excidental shit,
how come the big lord god, can't handle it
is there destiny? is there god? is there reality? is it not?
how come, evryhting goes wrong when you believe in the fate of god
I'ma make my own decicions, there ain't no reality alive
if I wanna be, I can be everything, if my friends stand me by side
Reality doesn't excist, it can't choos for us
cause if he could, it would've been good for us
so ban it out of your spirit, ban it out of your mind
the only thing you have is your friends for life.............................

(now think about that)

uppin' ..................

uppin'...................

whoa you droped guy theres no verse there wtf?

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This was feedback posted for Parallel
 

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Voted For: Parallel

one-sided vote...
parallel u had an aight story, seen betta topics from you...but the story was aight, and the flow to it was okay...vocab was good here too...decent drop 6/10

dio u had an aight drop, fix ur structure here, ur vocab was good, and the flow was aight, but u could've done better wit the story though 4/10

Voted For: Parallel

well...this was a very good battle...very close too
let me tell yall the difference though:

dio deus- you got there, but u discussed some shit about today's world...i don knwo but i think the task was to talk about reality the meaning and in general..flow was aite...rhyme scheme was off at times

parellel- your's to me was on point...you didn't discuss today's problem and i was feeling ur message more than i was doin with dio deus. ur verse really spoke about wat reality really was and not how it is being performed today

vote- parallel

This was feedback posted for Parallel
 

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Voted For: Parallel

Dio-

Imaginary- Your imaginary was ok, but also on the weak effect basis. Needs more like paint a Piture in your mind thing. Flow was ok. Dont stretch your lines that much.

Emotion-Weak emotion in your verse, Although the topic aint no emotional topic, still put some in it.

Vocab-In every topical verse, you need some vocab. Vocab was weak in your verse. Look up some synonms, that'll improve some vocabulary.




Paralel=-

Emotion-Blah, was weak. Didn't even have feelings in it. Felt like you was just talking.....made it boring.


Vocab-Weak also, not special words was in your verse.

Imaginary-Hmmmm, was good. I'd actually pictured your verse in my mind.



Overall=This is one whack ass topical battle i've ever seen. Paralel, you came weak man, no emotion. No vocab. You did had imaginary that's what gave you the upper-hand in this battle. Dio, keep elevating man, you no emotion in your verse. Every topical verse needs emotion. No vocab was in your verse, stretch out lines i may add. Imaginary, paralel got the upper hand in that category, which you dio didn't have any imaginary. So my vote goes to paralel.

Voted For: Parallel

Haha...one sided...

Parallel...you didnt even have to come as hard as this. You could have went a lil less...but dope verse, very nice flow and structure, vocab was a little bit basic, but oh well...nice story to the topic, not really much else to say...you got this for a doper imagery, and a nice flow and structure.

Dio...a'ight I am guessin this is your first topical...not bad I guess, but you need to up everythin...incorporate some imagery into your verses, flow was off, vocab was basic as hell...you have to unleash it though. No hate.

thnx for the tips, uppin' for more votes

Voted For: Parallel

Nice topical battle here......

Really decent vocab an creativity Par, ya stayed right on point throughout, an it looks like the peice came from the heart, vocab was strong, structure was there, an the creativity was top notch, 9/10 Par

Dio, your peice was hella nice too, wasnt AS creative, but you stayed on point, structure wasnt as easy too follow, but still, the vocab an the idea would have given anybody a run for they money, but Pars creativity an imagination gets my vote

RTF Y'all in my battle vs C.A.L.I

Peace