medicine vs ULTIMATE SPY
 

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6 lines
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No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 02-27-05 at 11:07 PM

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ULTIMATE SPY has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-27-05 10:22 PM.

ULTIMATE SPY has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-27-05 10:25 PM.

medicine has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-27-05 10:25 PM.

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try and drop pretty soon i made this to long let get this shit runn'n

o yea 6 lines ... u a alias or some shit?.................

My rhyme,s performed so nicely , you should just sit and listen ,I'm so percise with this device ,that you have no chance of winnin. So you just stand there grinnin, while I'm crushin your text verse, this is only in writing , with percussion it gets worse. I'm touchin my opponents right through the computer, while your discussin with your husband which hat looks cuter.

this kid in denial . like a fat kid try'n to lose his flab
dosent realize can't lose it with "...eight... minute abs"

ain't no play'n "Doctor". keep your hands to .."your-self"
i'm out of your grasp. like the "Medicine "on the "top shelf"

i'll bust ya lyrical "hymen" .. be4 u can say "But the lord says!"
like a game of ["Simon" says]. you lose.jus luckly you aint dead....


who knew rap coudl be so much fun! ha

but yea playing doctor .. a term for kids touch'n em selves
hymen is the...popp'n the cherry

ick i didnt like my verse now that i jus read it ha ... o well ummm upp'n i return all honest votes...with honest votes

thanx 4 the battle. it was enjoyed but i dont think u had it that time

Voted For: ULTIMATE SPY

yo, goin here for better structure cuz it was in bars... even though spaces between lines is wack. fix that. but here also was attempts at wordplay. awful attempts and this battle was all around bad. but go ahead and elevate

Voted For: ULTIMATE SPY

wow, this is kinda a bunk battle, but spy gets it, heres what i think

medicine
>My rhyme,s performed so nicely , you should just sit and listen ,I'm so percise with this device ,that you have no chance of winnin.
-not really a punch.....3/10
>So you just stand there grinnin, while I'm crushin your text verse, this is only in writing , with percussion it gets worse.
-uh, no punch at all, went no where, 2/10
>I'm touchin my opponents right through the computer, while your discussin with your husband which hat looks cuter
-uh, okay play at personal, but very weak wordplay 4/10

overall: 9/30....wel, not a bad start man, but you gotta up alot of things. first, work out some sort of basic structure that you can build a verse off, dont just write it out like your writing a story, make it easier for the voters....next, even out your lines and develop a continuous flow throughout your verse, or else your punches and personals will lose alot of their effect.....next, punches, you have to aim them directly at your opponent, dont softly word them, or hold back anything, you want to make your punch stand out and leave your voters with a sense that you've made an impact, also, be straight.....personals, you had the right idea, just need to up/elevate wordplay and complexity, and you should be fine....

ultimate spy....i dont really need to go through your verse, but yours wasnt that great either, flow was off a little, kinda came weak, opener coulda been worded better, same with closer, had some good ideas and your punches hit harder, so thats why you get my vote...

v/'spy

This was feedback posted for medicine
 

Voted For: medicine

i gots to say i vote for medicine....
ultimate spy:
your verse was basic and your punches were weak
you both need to work on vocab and more complexity to your verse.
medicin:you have to work on your structure...instead of writing in paragraph form write like this
...........................................beam
...........................................team
like that then your verse will be a lot better....but the reason you got my verse was u had a lil more complexity to ur verse and ur punches were more creative and hit harder.....1

upp'n ...............drop a link and i will return a honest vote

Voted For: ULTIMATE SPY

not too great of a battle here...

medicine....
first off...fix your structure...read some verses around here and adapt to everyones structure..that will lose you a lot of battles if y ou keep on using that structure...your punches werent hitting very well...you had no wordplay...and no multis that i seen....

SPy.....
you had some ok punches...1st bar was decent....2nd bar...liked the play off of his name...pretty nice...3rd bar...i wasnt feelin as much....but you got this because of your punches and structure...


overall....spy gets this because he had way better structure...punches...and wordplay...whereas medicine had none of that.....

thanks i'ma work'n on this rap thing ... but yea upp'n this shit i would love to get it closed

Voted For: ULTIMATE SPY

ultimate spy took this one...punches were harder
had a better structure, plus the flow here was good

med...you should make your drop like that, and make
those punches harder, i practically wasnt feelin your
verse though, elevate more here

Voted For: ULTIMATE SPY

whoa very one sided battle

ULTIMATE SPY
the punches hit hard your stucture is better your flow is great the creatvty was dope you just had a way better verse theres nothing i could say you lost you got this easy yo..

Medicine
whoa liek i cant tell you need help your punches well you didnt have any period you just had an all weak battle nothing was good try using some stucture or somin to actually look good so someone will actaully read it all, i was like whoa when i read the first 3 lines yo, but keep workin it out no hate pz