lil jj_1 vs immortality
 

Battle Rules:

8 - 12 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 03-04-05 at 07:09 PM

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immortality has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-04-05 06:40 PM.

lil jj_1 has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-04-05 06:48 PM.

lil jj is terrible, your raps is unbearable, so just stop
your carreer exploding, ha, that'd only happen if your cherry *popped*
cuz your a *pussy*, and couldnt push me, if i was weed
trying to diss me on the mic, but bitch you cant even reed (1)
please, immortality, had this won from the get go
pissing into a camp fire, is the only time you own, flaming flows
a zero on the scale is wut you get, everytime, your J.ust J.udged
closest youve been to *robbery*, is your morning coffee *mugs*
couldnt notice hot *shit*, if it fell into your *pants*
shouldve quit this site when you had the god given chance

1. a mic is considered an instrument and it uses thwe "wind" from your mouth, and alot of "woodwind" instruments use reeds..even though mics arent considered woodwinds, its still nice werdplay

freestyle battle...WOMP, Womp, womp!!!!!!!

ey yo u no i aint scared and if i was, i wouldnt denie it/
cause im the one round here,and i supply it/
and wat im doin u caint do nuttin about it and u caint stop it/
so da best thing u can do is sit back and watch it/
spread through erbody like a virus in they veins/
yea u got some skill boy but the only thing missin is ya brains/
dis is a freestyle boy,so u no i post it quickly/
yo ass gon so fast, u da one sayin u miss me/
bitch please, u aint gon nuttin on dis verse/
u juss hatin cause god bless me wit dis beautiful curse/

Voted For: immortality

this was very simple......even though neither of u had good structer....immortily had better flow and rhyme scheme and punches and mulies really just one sided hear.....lil jj u got up your skill dued u need to elevate go check out some vet battles and learn how to make a good punch cause u really had nothing here fam....no hate tho....~1~


v/immortaly

^ko0, ko0......uppin, uppin, this this, bizatch, bizatch, nice job homei, just keep elevating and youll get there.....1

uppin//////////////////////////////////////////////

This was feedback posted for immortality
 

checkin the pollz, this shit lookz one sided the whole way, but i dont feel like voting, lol, im a lazy ass, but werd, I.M. shood get this in a KO.....not a good battle in my eyes, but elevate jj, and eventually your freee skillz will get there

uppin fo votes on dis bizatch....werd..............

uppin.............................................

uppin bitches.....................................

Voted For: immortality

i red the first two lines of immortality and i had to vote him that shit had me rowllin plus his mults sick workd play sick struster deffently sick


the other cat naw elvate you tryed to many punches that where barly punches no mults struster was iight no word play that shit was not that good u need to evlat

for immortalyed keep rappin like that and im have to step to u

..................lmao............
uppin.........

Voted For: immortality

Lil JJ- Flow was ok i guess, barely any punches, and the one u did have was weak

Immortality- Verse hit harder than Lil JJ's did, stronger punches, ok flow

Punches- Immortality
Flow- Tie
Multis- Niether
Wordplay- Immortality
Structure- Lil JJ
Personals- Niether

Final Vote-------Immortality--------

Voted For: immortality

What da hell??? Lil JJ that was the wackest thing ever. Vote = whoeva the otha guy is. Oh ya Immortality. His lines that were ok were
lil jj is terrible, your raps is unbearable, so just stop
your carreer exploding, ha, that'd only happen if your cherry *popped*
cuz your a *pussy*, and couldnt push me, if i was weed
trying to diss me on the mic, but bitch you cant even reed (1)
I got that because i used 2 be in da band. Eazy

Voted For: immortality

ey yo u no i aint scared and if i was, i wouldnt denie it/
cause im the one round here,and i supply it/
^^weak
and wat im doin u caint do nuttin about it and u caint stop it/
so da best thing u can do is sit back and watch it/
^^diss the other guy already
spread through erbody like a virus in they veins/
yea u got some skill boy but the only thing missin is ya brains/
^^decent
dis is a freestyle boy,so u no i post it quickly/
yo ass gon so fast, u da one sayin u miss me/
^weak,flowed good though
bitch please, u aint gon nuttin on dis verse/
u juss hatin cause god bless me wit dis beautiful curse/
^^wat the hell u talkin bout?

Conclusion-Ur punches sucked.Most of them didn't seemed to insult.Ur flow was a lil above average.Just work on ur punchlines cause that verse was weak.

lil jj is terrible, your raps is unbearable, so just stop
your carreer exploding, ha, that'd only happen if your cherry *popped*
^^sucks,didn't flow so good
cuz your a *pussy*, and couldnt push me, if i was weed
trying to diss me on the mic, but bitch you cant even reed (1)
^^decent
please, immortality, had this won from the get go
pissing into a camp fire, is the only time you own, flaming flows
^^nice
a zero on the scale is wut you get, everytime, your J.ust J.udged
closest youve been to *robbery*, is your morning coffee *mugs*
^^good
couldnt notice hot *shit*, if it fell into your *pants*
shouldve quit this site when you had the god given chance
^^1st. line here is played out.

Vote-Ur wordplay was really nice.BUT WAT i NEED TO SEE IS MORE PERSONALS.That is really sumtin that is missin.That whole verse could have been prewritten.Personals Personals Personals.

Vote-immortality(vote in my battle)
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=189907