CarsonJet vs Lil C
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 03-06-05 at 01:41 AM

Must drop verse in 45 minutes after check in.

CarsonJet has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-06-05 01:12 AM.

Lil C has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-06-05 01:12 AM.

Look
career statistics is nothin, have this kid re-tire quicka than tha Michelin man (1)
lines fo simpled minded,you couldn't spit a line of fire if u was stationed over in Afganistan (2)
i ain't talkin about basketball but this kid stay takin rim~shots(3)
willin to bet you handle more joysticks than gamecubes and Xbox(4)
rewind the lines in my verse~spit my verse and you cursed(5)
so you winnin this battle is all make-up like we dissected a purse(6)
end up actin a jerk, i leave you listenin to birds that chirp(7)
wit a mic i'll leave you dead in tha studio like ROC's Dirt McGirta(8)
picture this picture i pitcha, make sho you holdin ya flash(9)
after i win i'll show you were you messed up like the ghost of Christmas past(10)
actin like you actually could win~a stick to tha script(11)
Since itz close to christmas i got spirit so i'll wrap this battle up quick(12)
Ayo i get to penetratin ya loss column like grandmas panties(13)
I'll leave u fucked up like Elmer Fudd did bambi's family(14)
Letz recount tha odds of you beaten Truth~there A.R'n't M.A.N.I(15)
Be fo real, with cha album sales you couldn't break change fo pennies(16)
dislexic reader than i letchu interpret i commit REDRUM on trax(17)
read that back and kidz a start ta realize that tha truth is back(18)

Shits like cingular, It's clear as day wit 5 bars....
I'll have C flashin death quicker than Her avatar....
Text record 2-3, an u wanna fuk wit me? Please.......
Aint gotta tilt my head to see, ur ugly at any degree
You shoulda known, You shouldna stepped, An now ya Owned,
I win...5-0..To sum unknown....Ghetto'Oompa Loompa Clone
Call me a wigga...go figure u say nigger but your white,
Which is what? And What is right?......
Shit All I know...Is your a wannabee C'
Dumb Bitch....19....
An the poll's 'll show....They all agree.

Uppin
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Voted For: CarsonJet

lol, damn
Lil C, you cool n all, but sorry, Carson beat u hands down here, much more consistancy an flow ta his verse, Carson, nice personals an puns here, structure was right on point, sick stuff Carson

Lil C, no hate obviously, but ya bars were stretched, an the structure was everywhere, sorry but his personals beat u, ya need'a remove any uneccessary words from ya verse, ta make it flow better an so its not as stretched, ya had some good ideas, creativity was there, but u just worded ya stuff wrong, no hate babygirl

Nice stuff Carson

Could y'all return the favor in any of my battles ya see floating around on Frontlines or elevated frontlines?
thanks

Peace out

Uppin.
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Voted For: Lil C

i was feelin the punches, wordplay, and vocab in this verse, clever shit here. lines were stretched which fucked up the flow a little bit, but overall i thought lil c's verse hit harder, couple of multi's thrown in there, but you can elevate on that...

carson that was a good verse you dropped there, decent punches... you can elevate on the wordplay though, and try to keep your lines the same length, that'll help your flow

overall this was a decent battle and i was feelin both verses, but i think that the creativity in c's verse makes me give it to him

vote: lil c

LMAO!.....

This is pretty funny shit.
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WOW.

Voted For: CarsonJet

You shoulda known, You shouldna stepped, An now ya Owned,
I win...5-0..To sum unknown....Ghetto'Oompa Loompa Clone

^^one of the reasons you won

that was by far one of the funniest lines i have ever read in a battle hahaha.. but yea carson your structure is wack as shit but u still took it with better wordplay and vocab. it was a lil basic but not bad

lil c--- eh you had your metas and all that shit but it was weak as hell. read the tutorials and shit they helped me alot..you had potential but u didnt have alot of good personals or punches and things seemed played

both of ya work on your structures...

Vote//Carson Jet

return the favor.... honest votes only..

o yea link is in the sig..........^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

LMAO!.....

This is pretty funny shit.
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WOW.

This was feedback posted for CarsonJet
 

carson that was fucking wack you suck no wonder you keep ducking me..........................

Voted For: Lil C

Opener - Lil C, Jets didnt compare to hers.
Closer - Lil C, Jet trailed off into words rather than lines at the end.
Punches - Lil C, Jets werent as creative at all.
Personals - Jet, had more.
Metas - Lil C, Jets attemps were weak.
Multies - Lil C, Jet had only like 1 sorta.
Vocab - Lil C, look at Jets...
Structure - Neither, wasnt feeling either.

Areas of Improvement:

Carson - Not to be a jackass, that was garbage yo. As you can prolly tell I wasnt feelin your verse at all and I am 100% positive that Im not the only kat that feels this way. The polls will show. I think you def. need to fix your structure. For starters lose the ........ at the end of ya lines. Next, make them longer. Also try making your punches funnier - metas usually help in the comedy area. And that vocab needs to be fixed, I mean your most tech word was oompa loompa. damn. I think you need to elevate in the right direction....up. Either that or stick to audio kid.

Lil C - Dope verse. But not flawless. I see that you are new so I will give you some pointers for your next battle that I want you to use. So listen...you dont have to number your lines, lose that next time. Also If you are going to have your lines that long in your battles I suggest changing your font size to font size 1. This is so that it all fits into the same line nicely, cause your bars look too crammed up and extended. And iunno, unless your feelin them try using a comma instead of those ~'s. I think if you listened to what I just told you, in your next battle it will make you sound more like a rook instead of a newb when you spit. So remember those things and good job on this win.

V/Lil C.................................................

please RTF...link in siggy.....

Wow.....at 26-4...

u figured u would see....

no personals and played as meti4's wit ancient wordplay....line after line.

Guess not....
Thats why ur text....LMAO. at this joke.....
I shouldnt even have 1 vote against me....

But its Text....so I guess inexperience wins.

Voted For: CarsonJet

CarsonJet
structure is good.. flow is on target.. no multis.. wordplay is decent enough.. some of your punches connected.. some were just gay though.. decent personals..

Lil C
structure isnt very good.. almost all of your lines are stretched.. flow fell off due to the stretchness.. you had a few multis.. attempted wordplay.. but most of it was just garbage.. a few, at best, of your punches connected.. no good personals..

Overall
Lil C had more multis.. CarsonJet had the better structure.. the better flow.. better wordplay.. more connecting punches.. and better personals.. so basing off of that.. CarsonJet swept the floors with this dude..

VOTE - CARSONJET

Please hit up the link in my sig..

ROFLMFAO @ the polls..

And then these dudes wonder why nobody likes to text on this site..

Bunch of dr and lack of knowledge of what a good punch is..

3-2....I cant believe this.

O yeh...I forgot....Im on my audio name.
Maybe if I switch to my old text battlin name I'll get those DR's.....

Seriously this sites stupid....
Same people that say my text suck worship my text alias......

3-2.....LMAO..uppin.

wtf this a fucked up system, I voted for carson wtf???

Lil C, you had a good verse, but your not good enough to battle vets yet, carson, good verse, the any degree line was a great personel, I can tell you didnt put effort, but watch it, cuz you didnt staright kill her, you merely beat her by a bit, Lil C you did good, keep elevating yo, Carson had some better punches, his personels connected mad, you have to work on your meta's though lil' c perfect those and you should be good.

v/ carson

tell strobe to make this count.....

Voted For: CarsonJet

Lil C
whoa man you need work on ya shit the stucture was ripped my eyes off there sockets the punches were played alot some forced rhymes and just not much creaivty i wasnt feeling the whole concept you gave to disssing carson and why would you number each line thats wack, take that off man honestly. work on them punches and personals pz, also you shouldnt have to write so much lines to win a battle that your gonna lose, no hate

Carson
well of coarse you took this one with ease like the kid had no chance Carson now equals my white rapping buddy hes so dope, the punches were flawless liek you nocked him out with a 2 by 4 yo, i was feeling yours alot more, you got my vote for being better all around pz

RTF in my battle with A_M_H peace links in the sig 1

Voted For: CarsonJet

good battle yo, just cheekin tha polezzzzzzzzzzz...