phive vs Young Blaze
 

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10-12 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 03-14-05 at 01:27 PM

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phive has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-14-05 12:58 PM.

Young Blaze has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-14-05 01:01 PM.

young blaze, cant rap, and ya too young ta use razor blades,

to shave the peach fuzz off ya ugly face, such a fuckin

discrace, instead of slappin yur ass the doctor sprayed ya

with mace.

My rhymes are born to kill, ill hit ya harder than tyson will,

and sit ya fuckin urn on ma window sill. You be the type of

nigga who be poppin pills, with the shakes and chills, robbin

the tills from good will,(BITCH).

Sayin you be rollin with knives and guns? Your a lyin nut

sucker who was raised by nuns, sittin in ya back alley playin

dice for cinnamon buns. Here I am bitch, better run, cuz now

ya done!!!

phive Bought Heaters To Pratice To Warm THe Bench/
My Slugz Put Holes In His Chest Like A Chain Linked Fence/
Your wack, you might wanna look up to me like an older Brother/
your just not gettin "Props for Ya Work" like Cops UnderCover/
You Only Bringin 'Single bars' What You imitating Nate Dogg Hooks/
My Lines Come With More 'Content' than State Farm Books/(Insurance Company)
Kid you'd have to pay to be Reppin A Crew/
This 'Small-Timer' would need "Padded Insoles" to Step in my Shoes/
You K.O. Me? Not Even If I Had My Hands Tied/
You Might As Well Have Been in the 'Tsunami' cuz this battle is A
LandSlide/
END.....
your always Gettin Fucked wit Text This dudes a Whore /
You Couldnt spit HOT SHIT if u gave BlowJobz too tha Human torch/

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Voted For: Young Blaze

YOung Blaze- you had a good verse . i jus thought u should work on your structure a bit.. i know that it prolly fit when u typed it up but the boxes are screwy like that.. o ver all you had alot of good and creative punches... i liked your vocab.. .. you could work on your punches a little more but over all you had alot of good aspects in your rhymes... o yea i liked ur state farm line.

Phive- you need alot of work... change your structure... don't talk about guns and knifes unless they are used in a metaphor.. some of your stuff was really played and i thought that you could work on your punches and personals alot more. work on your vocab.... go read a page out of a dictionary.. why don't you join the crew "First Floor" their a good elevation crew and they will help you with your spits

Vote//Young Blaze

RTF links in the sig

whateva nigga my disses made mo sense than this fool im just tellin da truth g

Voted For: Young Blaze

this verse was alot better more hard hitting punchlines and alot better structure the other verse fell off a little it was consistant enough to win on punchlines this verse was the better one... I was feeling the other verse because of the structue and boring to read...

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Voted For: Young Blaze

Young Blaze
phive Bought Heaters To Pratice To Warm THe Bench/
My Slugz Put Holes In His Chest Like A Chain Linked Fence/
Your wack, you might wanna look up to me like an older Brother/
your just not gettin "Props for Ya Work" like Cops UnderCover/
You Only Bringin 'Single bars' What You imitating Nate Dogg Hooks/
My Lines Come With More 'Content' than State Farm Books/(Insurance Company)
Kid you'd have to pay to be Reppin A Crew/
This 'Small-Timer' would need "Padded Insoles" to Step in my Shoes/
You K.O. Me? Not Even If I Had My Hands Tied/
You Might As Well Have Been in the 'Tsunami' cuz this battle is A
LandSlide/
END.....
your always Gettin Fucked wit Text This dudes a Whore /
You Couldnt spit HOT SHIT if u gave BlowJobz too tha Human torch/

HA HA HA
lots of hot shit in dat battle
like da punches and lyrics u used
elevation was nice
good structure
in a couple lines u tried 2 jam 2 many lyrics in 1 line, but dats iight
8.5/10

Phive
young blaze, cant rap, and ya too young ta use razor blades,

to shave the peach fuzz off ya ugly face, such a fuckin

discrace, instead of slappin yur ass the doctor sprayed ya

with mace.

My rhymes are born to kill, ill hit ya harder than tyson will,

and sit ya fuckin urn on ma window sill. You be the type of

nigga who be poppin pills, with the shakes and chills, robbin

the tills from good will,(BITCH).

Sayin you be rollin with knives and guns? Your a lyin nut

sucker who was raised by nuns, sittin in ya back alley playin

dice for cinnamon buns. Here I am bitch, better run, cuz now

ya done!!!
Weak rhymes
hard to read structure- work on it
some punches not 2 many
work on elevatin
7/10

my v/Young Blaze

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This was feedback posted for phive
 

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Voted For: Young Blaze

meh...one sided

phive......i dont know why you change up your structure all the time, but its whack man, keep it consistent, there was nothing too your structure at all....plus the flow was horrible.....stretched lines, not really any good vocab or wordplay....you tried multies, they were okay, but you still need alot of work..your punches weren't even good at all either....you still need alot of elevation.....no hate, but elevate

young, your improving, but you still got alot more room for elevation......structure was off in alot of places....flow decently for the most part.....had some nice punches, alot of stuff was played, some lines were bad setups...so, work alot with vocab and wordplay so can effectively throw a real good punch, nah mean?, word, not bad man...its looks like your getting the idea, but you can still improve alot, keep up

Voted For: Young Blaze

phive Bought Heaters To Pratice To Warm THe Bench/
My Slugz Put Holes In His Chest Like A Chain Linked Fence/
Kind of a played ass punch. Not even really hitting that hard either.....especially with the way you worded it
Your wack, you might wanna look up to me like an older Brother/
your just not gettin "Props for Ya Work" like Cops UnderCover/
Boooo........similies are played man. Use some real wordplay
You Only Bringin 'Single bars' What You imitating Nate Dogg Hooks/
My Lines Come With More 'Content' than State Farm Books/(Insurance Company)
Not really sure I see where you were going with this one. Didn't really hit anyway
Kid you'd have to pay to be Reppin A Crew/
This 'Small-Timer' would need "Padded Insoles" to Step in my Shoes/
Once again.....ineffective punch
You K.O. Me? Not Even If I Had My Hands Tied/
You Might As Well Have Been in the 'Tsunami' cuz this battle is A
LandSlide/
Contrary to popular belief, a tsunami is not a landslide
END.....
your always Gettin Fucked wit Text This dudes a Whore /
You Couldnt spit HOT SHIT if u gave BlowJobz too tha Human torch/
Probably your best punch and it still sucked


young blaze, cant rap, and ya too young ta use razor blades,

to shave the peach fuzz off ya ugly face, such a fuckin

discrace, instead of slappin yur ass the doctor sprayed ya

with mace.

My rhymes are born to kill, ill hit ya harder than tyson will,

and sit ya fuckin urn on ma window sill. You be the type of

nigga who be poppin pills, with the shakes and chills, robbin

the tills from good will,(BITCH).

Sayin you be rollin with knives and guns? Your a lyin nut

sucker who was raised by nuns, sittin in ya back alley playin

dice for cinnamon buns. Here I am bitch, better run, cuz now

I don't even know what the hell that was. I gotta go with Young Blaze for actually trying in this one. You both need lots of help though

Vote - Young Blaze