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PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ vs heat
Battle Rules: 10- Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Topic- "blood in my eyes" G-luck :thumbup: Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 03-14-05 at 06:32 PM Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in. |
befor i check-in is it ok if i go 16 to 18?>??
10 aint enough to me i thought it was but is it good if i drop like 16 to 18? |
^^ No.......................10 lines................
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heat has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-14-05 06:24 PM.
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PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-14-05 06:24 PM.
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TOPIC. blood in my eyes:
with blood in my eyes im still a... hustle at vision speed.. to deal with my deficiency Time is money so I operate efficiently my vision starting blurr, N still moving for-ward getting blind like stevey, yet still on the block with more-work Decisions need.. to be made without hesitation I got names, numbers and kids with stomach-aching there blood in my eyes yet no gang-wars outside cant let my family starve, i rather let them feed of my pride the stakes are high like being an 8 ft baller - da[/b] heat[b] u'll never-miss with a better twist..im a sure shot with my clever wrist aint coppin the steel…im not a thief, thug or the jakes and it’ll take you 5 minutes before that all correlates..... GET IT?? im not a thief. aint gang-bang'in, nor the jakes *cops* . . . . im refering to my RAPS... BLOOD IN MY EYES good luck |
I was angry at this women, for thou she betrayed my heart Even though it was an 16 years of being married, she didn’t took my love Saw here on the bed, moving up and down, o it torn me apart My caring feelings turned to hatred, I went overboard putting this women soul to above . . The more she screamed, the more I got mad, she was hopeless trapped in my dark shell After I got done with her, I took a good look at the man, O thou I went into rage it was my son I lynched over to the other-side of the bed, in my drawer, pulled out the “end of this hell” My son, o no, He’s no son to me, for thou I didn’t lead him to be a devils prophet. Die you bum . .POP, POP……BODY DROPS . Sitting in the bloody scene I hear the cops coming, and while that, my tears are leaking I see too many red colors splattered across the room, Tsk Tsk Tsk, should’ve never cheat |
Voted For: PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ
nice drops to both.. poetic.. i see you use a differ style and thats good.. cuz its different from others and actually explains alot better and shows good imagery.. nice job.. the only thing u should work on is your vocah..thats about it.. heat.. your verse lacked imagery.. your vocab was on point but couldn't imagine wut u wrote. but nice metaphor refering to your rap... also.. work on ur flow man..its like the lines are strecthed.. vote.. poetic |
u shorten ya front to strech ya lines * not a bad idea*
but anyways good luck |
and Dabatos learn what u speak befor u talk cuz my lines aint strech
if i would of shorten my front i could of strech lines like poetic 2 but its cool cuz u aint notices hes strech lines but say i had them?? its cool, cuz if i would of went like 16 to 18 it would of been a way better read fuck is 10 lines doing for me? and i hope u aint bite since he said u change ya style mmm? tisk tisk tisk kids these days cant come up with they own shit. |
wow! at calling me a biter......stop bitching and go with the flow......it's the internet mane stop being a nerd.
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And this IS an alias.......lmao.....................
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gooooood,
con-grats on having an alias. now for the fatc: u will not and cant drop another verse like that again in no 60 min. u cant say u aint bite if others on this site said u change ya style. *hint* and u probley vote for ya-self if u have alias u probely havent been cought yet. this site is mad lame so far. |
This was feedback posted for heat
I see you liking my alias herb!
LMAO@ CALLING ME A BITER AND PLUS.......THINKING I VOTED FOR MYSEFL......WOW OK......ANYTHING ELSE? |
If ya check my battle with bablon (link in sig) I been using that style mane, just changed it a little.......
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O AND YES I CAN DROP ^^ LIKE THAT IN 60 MINUTES INCASE YOU WANT TO GET MERKED ON MY ALIAS NOW....... :thumbup: |
dude...just face it you loss.. just write a better verse next time..
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battle me regular style no topic and see why R.V cant fuck with no other sites my record on the other site is 27-4 -10 ko's u aint ready topic aint me but i do them, regular battles wow u aint ready for me so leave it at that
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^^ Am i like to be scared of that?......Show me if you dope ENUFF to battle me again, battle some Decent VET's topical head'z then get at me..........Shit 2-4 Like a give a fuck.
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*27-4.......................sowwy.................
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dude.. ur ego is big as hell..battle me then.. look at my rec.. 0-37.. i guess i suck huh.. topical then.. i ain't good at text.. so topical.. Topic w/e u pick or hit me up in aim: six Five Oe
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Anyway......................uppin................. .............
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Meh, Uppin for votes holla!.........................
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Voted For: PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ
Poetic- i thought that you took this one with ease.you had better vocab all around and your structure was more organized. i thought that you had alot of good aspects like there was good imagery and alot of good emotion in this.... Heat.- you had an alright drop.. i jus thought you lacked in the honesty and emotion part... you could have done alot more with your drop. your vocab was good.. your structutre wasn't as appealing as P's but overall you had a nice drop Vote//PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ--i voted for PV for having a better drop all around .. better vocab better structure better message RTF link is in the sig |
Voted For: PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ
good shit from both...both had tha ill shit verses...but i was feeling PV...alittle more..ya story was sick and you stayed on topic..good shit from both..my vote goes to PV.....good luck to both Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
upp'in this battle and why i gotta have like 50 letters to reply?
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Voted For: PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ
Heat: wasn't feeling your approach on the topic, it'z like u didn't understand what u were writing about, it'z like u couldn't find a good balance between basic and complex vocab. Emotion wasn't shown, needs serious elevation... Flow was decent (might be improved with multis), you stayed consistent throughout the whole thing, just left me guessing...betta luck next time! Poetic~Visions: very strong topical,loved your twist on the topic.Had your flow and vocab on lock,good multis here and there...had sum good imagery with the "down to earth"-attitude which I was definetely feeling. Absolutely loved your ending, had inspiring vibe over it and the emotion was raw. Solid drop! My vote goes to PoEtIc~V (no hate Heat ) 'cause I was feeling his drop a little more,especially the sense of reality and raw emotion to it. Wasn't close at all and his topical stood out more 2 me return the favor |
Voted For: PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ
heat~hmm,this reminded me more of an open mic type drop,it wasnt bad at all, but it seemed to be different, not really my style of drop,but nice twist on the end, even tho it seemed you were talking gang hype, still not bad drop,but not my thing,no hate., i think you could have done better with this topic..1 poetic visionz~nice story line, your vocabulary was good, some spelling errors but they were minor, still,i liked the direction you took the topic in, nice structure and setup, good job..1..vote:poetic visionz |
Voted For: PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ
PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ- Verse was nice...so was your punches....Had some nice sick azz personals also....Structure was decent...easy to read n all...but overall your won this with a better overall verse and punches...8.6/10........ heat- your verse was nice a little, but your punches really didnt seem to connect hard enough...your structure was layed out nice...but you went weak on punches thats all...5.9/10....... V/pv make sure 2 return the favor Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
This was feedback posted for PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ
Dude u gotta learn how to use the words ya usin. Ur misspellin words, usin them in the wrong tense, and usin them outta context...u really need to work on ya vocab bruh
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^^ W/E BRUH, uppin for some votes........................
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This was feedback posted for heat
checkin polls...
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Voted For: PoEtIc~ViZiOnZ
one sided really, no hate to heat coz hes ok, but PV's shit was deeper and flowed better. rtf links in sig. |
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