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MarvJay1009 vs Orion.
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6 - UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting 30 min check 30 min drop Minimum posts to vote: 200 Check in by: 03-22-05 at 02:09 PM Must drop verse in 30 minutes after check in. |
lol timeout u have 34 post...and u made da minimum post:200???....check in tho im dropppin 10 lines datz it
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Orion. has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-22-05 01:51 PM.
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sooooooo whats wrong with that???.................
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MaRVJay1009 has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-22-05 01:59 PM.
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look....
ya'll think dis kids a crook? naw..cant keystyle gotta get ya book awww ya lines is "candy" ppl dont reply cuzz u suck they dont "MiSS Da GOOD BaR" i hope u gota crew fam go get wun of ya boys da come try me i dont mean da "leaf" if orion live i'll go 2 da hospital & "poison" his "iV" i aint with games young im grown..ya moms i dont luvin da bone so now when i call her its "4-HEaD" like da "front of ya dome" ya bars they weaka..trust me i got thugs dat a pome they heata's clap at ya legs & leave ya "CaVS" in ya "lebron james sneaker's" ur a net mc...u'll be on here by da time im earnin millions... ya cd hott? no u couldn't "PUT OUT FiRE" runnin up in a "burnin buildin" i rushed it... |
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Opener: You have no presence... but you're in awe of my charisma… I'll dispose of every Key you have and treat you like a prisoner… This shit's a synch I don't flinch, specially in front of this fagget-ass-bitch… Eh Put ya Money where ya Mouth is, so me-n-my bat can 'Strike Rich'… Coming up in NYC? Looking For Rep? might as well call me ur idol… 'Fag', 'Slut', 'Bitch', 'Cunt'.... u have the RIGHT to all Those Titles... tha loser’s circle’s the tool shed, so im putting this hoe in his place… no skills to embrace, this fag’s a disgrace to the established race…* I strike like a Nazi blitzkrieg, bark rhymes in German while dissectin' this feeble Jew But I refuse to make fun of his spelling - cuz evinn disslecksikxs arr teople poo *Establishment is his crew Dont vote based on Him being here and known to everybody, vote based on the lyrics... |
okay....upppin 4 some fukkin votes
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uppin.......................................cmon dont sleep on this...
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Voted For: MaRVJay1009
mj- Verse was nice...so was your punches....Had some nice sick azz personals also....Structure was decent...easy to read n all...but overall your won this with a better overall verse and punches...8.6/10........ o - your verse was nice a little, but your punches really didnt seem to connect hard enough...your structure was layed out nice...but you went weak on punches thats all...5.9/10....... V/ mj make sure 2 return the favor http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=183063 http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=182879 Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
nah fuck you...you say the same fuckin shit in everybattle you vote in....same numbers and fuckin everything...im lettin strobe know...
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so................................................ .................................................. ............eat shit thats the way i vote
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This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
Both verses were hot. BUt it is obvious who won this battle. I mean Marv had sum really clever shit. He won the punches, personals, metas, and wordplay in this battle. ALSO THE ENJOYMENT. I Was LMAO when I read this shit. so I'm givin' mah vote to MarvJay1009. Stay up fam. ~Ghost~
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Voted For: Orion.
Marv- yea u did rush it...i was feelin it in tha beginning then u lost me...ur best lines was ya first 4 then everything went down a notch, but an overall nice verse, koo punches and tha Good Bar line was sick O- opener was klean, and ya lines that came after didnt fall off neither, nice hittin punches, lovin the seconed bar and ya explained line was koo too. ELEVATION IS THA KEY!! overall- Orion has my vote kause his shit connected tha most, Marv u can come harder than that, hes new no hate Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
aiight thanks for the HONEST VOTE!!!!..............
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Voted For: MaRVJay1009
very impresed ofr someone ive never heard of before, i think your an alias, but you still didnt get this one mang orion.-good:loved the closer, liked the multies too, also had a lot of good punches and werdplay also....but you DO have hard comp. bad:didnt like the opener, i also fetl like towards the beginning, every OTHER line had a good punch but the foloowing line was just there to rhyme and wasnt really useful...you also had a FEW strecthed lines marvjay-good:you fail to let me down man, i believe your one of the best on rv, loved teh opening second line, nice opner, good closer too, GODDAMN< this kid is crazy wit the punches and werdplay, that lebron james line and the iv one were astounding, you definitly took it in this category even though your opponent had good ones too... bad-only thing i think you coodve improved was multies and vocab, but thats bout it openr-M closer-O punches-M werdplay-M structure-M flow-Tie vocab-O multies-O my vote goes to marv rtf...link in sig v/marvjay1009 |
This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
checkin polls....marv won by the way....werd
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Voted For: Orion.
easy. Orion took this one wit harder punches and personals, and better wordplay. this one was onesided to me. I felt like marv didnt even make an attempt to come hard in this one. I think you underrated him. but orion came off wit this one. marv-i wasnt feelin yo drop homie. no hate, i felt like yo verse lacked good flow and structure to it. I felt like tha punches were all spread too far apart, and that made tha personals sound mediocre. no hate, just elevate urself still orion. yo drop was nice. i was feelin it more. but i think you lacked structure too, a lil bit of stretched lines, and i wasnt feelin no creativness in this one. but other than that, i felt you took this one. overall-i gave this one to orion. harder punches,personals.and wordplay/vocab v/orion RTF link in sig |
Voted For: Orion.
O-Even though you had a little bit of stretched lines, I still think you took this one. You came harder, and more prepared in this one to me. I was feeling you mettaphores esp. in this one. That's where I felt you won this battle at. But you did have a few good personals in there, and a punch or 2. Marv-Your verse was a lil un-organized to me. I felt like it was done too quick. I was feeling it tho. You came harder wit some decent punches, but your structure took that all off for you. Mettas werent really that good, and I really didnt see too many good personals, but your rhyming were nice. Not too unpredictable. Overall-I think I'm going to give this one to Orion. I think he came a lil bit harder. His mettaphores did it in this one. Marv, work on the flow of your verse, and you wouldve got my vote, but this one was a close one. |
Voted For: Orion.
orion... based off your humorous remarks......you have my vote. a few of your lines had me rollin' homie (lol). your structure was cool and you used some decent vocab as well. your punches were nice....and your personal worked. i'd like to see what you could do with unlimited line space. lmao at the tool shed line......haha. continue to hold it down. your funniest lines: "coming up in nyc? looking for a rep? might as well call me your idol fag, slut, bitch, cunt......you have the right to all those titles" and... "i strike like nazi blitzkrieg, bark rhymes in german while dissectin' this feeble jew but i refuse to make fun of his spelling- cuz even disslecksikxs arr teople poo" marv... just because i voted for rion doesnt mean that i didnt enjoy your verse too. you had some pretty funny lines in there, word. your structure was on point, as well as your punches. i didnt notice any personals in there off-hand, plus your flow was a little off in some parts. keep an eye on those next time homie. overall you did a good job.......but i dont think you got this one. i've seen better from you......so i know that you can come harder next time. keep up the good work pimpin'. your best lines: "i hope you got a crew fam, go get wun of your boys to come try me i dont mean the leaf, if orion live i'll go to the hospital and poison his i-v" and... "ur a net mc...u'll be on here by the time im earnin millions ya cd hot? no you couldnt "put out fire" runnin up in a burnin buildin" keep on keeping on gentlemen. oner... ...the super... |
lmaooo wow oh u wun of dos runnin da strobe niggaz...well half ur votes were unexplained..so they will be taken away
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uppin...................................somebody close this...
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Voted For: Orion.
that was a good verse I'm glad i stumbled upon it im used to readin shit on this sites cuz thats all a lot of people spit now a days but htis was nice good multies flow structure was off metas was nice pretty funny to marv you came strong with the goodbar line but after that it just dropped off still a decent verse v/orion Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
checkin pollz...hot battle........................
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Voted For: MaRVJay1009
Lmao Marvjay Killed This Foo!He Had Some Decent Punches Every Punch He Had In It Wass Hot As A Matter Of Fact,Marvjay Ya Structure Fell Of At Some Points And You Had Some Mean Ass Wordplay With Multies To Go With It Orion A Alias And You Know That Verse Wasn't Balanced Right.You Had A Couple Decent Punches Not All Them Was Decent Tho That Idol Lien Was Wack As Hell Man Your Verse Was Stretched,You Didn't Have Any Wordplay And Your Verse Didn't Have A Multies And Didn't Make Sence At Some Points Openor-Marvjay,Good Punch Punches,Marjay Had More Personals-Orion,Had More Personals Wordplay-Marv Multies-Marv Closer-None Marv,Would Of Took It But It Wasn't Worded Right Overall Marv Took This Rtf |
You have no presence... but you're in awe of my charisma…
I'll dispose of every Key you have and treat you like a prisoner… This shit's a synch I don't flinch, specially in front of this fagget-ass-bitch… Eh Put ya Money where ya Mouth is, so me-n-my bat can 'Strike Rich'… Coming up in NYC? Looking For Rep? might as well call me ur idol… 'Fag', 'Slut', 'Bitch', 'Cunt'.... u have the RIGHT to all Those Titles... tha loser’s circle’s the tool shed, so im putting this hoe in his place… no skills to embrace, this fag’s a disgrace to the established race…* I strike like a Nazi blitzkrieg, bark rhymes in German while dissectin' this feeble Jew But I refuse to make fun of his spelling - cuz evinn disslecksikxs arr teople poo ya'll think dis kids a crook? naw..cant keystyle gotta get ya book awww ya lines is "candy" ppl dont reply cuzz u suck they dont "MiSS Da GOOD BaR" i hope u gota crew fam go get wun of ya boys da come try me i dont mean da "leaf" if orion live i'll go 2 da hospital & "poison" his "iV" i aint with games young im grown..ya moms i dont luvin da bone so now when i call her its "4-HEaD" like da "front of ya dome" ya bars they weaka..trust me i got thugs dat a pome they heata's clap at ya legs & leave ya "CaVS" in ya "lebron james sneaker's" ur a net mc...u'll be on here by da time im earnin millions... ya cd hott? no u couldn't "PUT OUT FiRE" runnin up in a "burnin buildin" Marv..you can say goodbye to that vote...i only had 2 stretched lines, and my verse was basically the same line length....2 words...fake vote... uppin.... |
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^^^lmaooooo dis is no where near an explained vote....so u had about 2 dat weren't explained n i told u dis shit would get opened again |
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This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
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This was feedback posted for Orion.
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Voted For: MaRVJay1009
marvjay1009 ya'll think dis kids a crook? naw..cant keystyle gotta get ya book awww ya lines is "candy" ppl dont reply cuzz u suck they dont "MiSS Da GOOD BaR" ^^^ NICE OPENER i hope u gota crew fam go get wun of ya boys da come try me i dont mean da "leaf" if orion live i'll go 2 da hospital & "poison" his "iV" ^^^ IIGHT PUNCH i aint with games young im grown..ya moms i dont luvin da bone so now when i call her its "4-HEaD" like da "front of ya dome" ^^^MEH ya bars they weaka..trust me i got thugs dat a pome they heata's clap at ya legs & leave ya "CaVS" in ya "lebron james sneaker's" ^^HA PRETTY THOUGHTFUL ur a net mc...u'll be on here by da time im earnin millions... ya cd hott? no u couldn't "PUT OUT FiRE" runnin up in a "burnin buildin" ^^IIGHT CLOSUE-PRETTY AVERAGE THOUGH i liked sum of ur punches pretty decent verse structure was nice elevate sum more though 8/10 ORION You have no presence... but you're in awe of my charisma… I'll dispose of every Key you have and treat you like a prisoner… ^^ ALRIGHT OPENER This shit's a synch I don't flinch, specially in front of this fagget-ass-bitch… Eh Put ya Money where ya Mouth is, so me-n-my bat can 'Strike Rich'… ^^ATTEMPTED PUNCH Coming up in NYC? Looking For Rep? might as well call me ur idol… 'Fag', 'Slut', 'Bitch', 'Cunt'.... u have the RIGHT to all Those Titles... ^^^PLAYED LINE tha loser’s circle’s the tool shed, so im putting this hoe in his place… no skills to embrace, this fag’s a disgrace to the established race…* ^^NICE LINE I strike like a Nazi blitzkrieg, bark rhymes in German while dissectin' this feeble Jew But I refuse to make fun of his spelling - cuz evinn disslecksikxs arr teople poo ^^LIKE DA CLOSURE PRETTY THOUGHFUL AND CLEVER nice punches sum of dem didnt land though nice structure clever word usage work on elevatin a little more 7/10 no hate my v/marvjay1009 check out my battle vs.thekid523 yall no 1 iz votin please holla back wit good feedback and a vote 4 who u think won |
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Voted For: MaRVJay1009
dope battle..... seems like marv the street nigga with the street flow vs orions interlectual spits... Orion had better vocab, flow wasnt AS good, but iut still cant be faulted i guess, not as strong punchlines as marv had, somewhat witty, the jew line was prety damn sick, that was the highlight of your verse Orion, but for overral consistancy within the verse it had ta be Marv, he came with humour an hard consistant punches, the style n aspect of his whole verse is more suited to my style, so that kinda swayed my vote also....not much i can fault from either, marv had the more consistancy an fluency about his verse, so he gets my vote could yall RTF? Peace. |
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