Bring da heat
 

See i still bring da heat/
and i naw mastered beats/
my verse touch ya'll in da streets/
like cathlolic priest/
just look at da crowd i got em moving they feet/
cuz i keep it so crunk dat rest losin sleep/
i neva get tired/
i'm wired/
like amplifias/
i bring dat fire/
to ya bones like jeremiah/
i take ya higha/
an burn you out like used tires/
da games new messiah/
cuz i got a grip/
won't slip/
like new pliers/
i'm 2 cold wit' it/
and since i use repitition i'll say it again i'm 2 cold wit it/
i'm bold pimpin/
so when you see me steppin thru/
don't say nuthin unless i'm addressin you/
and pass dat down to ya homies standing next to you/
cuz me and Phantom flexin 2/
in-credi-ble/
like luda we supa sized/
and we beat artist down like da jackson 5/

yo when ya'll down reading this check out dis link for black queen
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=182725

yo it's aight u need ta elevate though..was a lil choppy and punchlines were a lil weak i'm not hatin i'm just sayin work on ur raps a lil more and never give up at it....tell u the truth i was probably the wackest emcee on this site when i first came but i fuckin put everything aside and worked at it and i elevated lots since then and i'm still workin at it...i'm not a pro yet but if u want some help i'll make an attempt ta help u..pm if u do need help till then keep workin at it and i forgot ta mention u need ta work on ur structure a lil bit but u ok for a beginner

yo son
 

yo son i'm not tryin' 2 start shyt wit ya o sumfin' lyke dat, yo the verse dat ya juss wrote, itz not yourz, it one of ma boyz, it's da same exact shyt man, so ya gotz to do sumfin' mayne

ok cus elevate fix structure you got potential

Lol.......Major Elevation......Nah But Ur Structure, Creativity, and more rhymes ...Just elevate...Ya got potential........

yo i aint neva seen or heard a verse like dat. i made dat up on my own.

thanx fo all da feed ya'll........uppin fo some mo tho'.

yo son ma boy already got dat shyt on audio, he got almost tha same wordz az ya b. so i donno nigguh, so .................................................. .......................

Nice flow
Good sense of creativity and originality
strcuture was Sprt of sloppy Make longer lines next time

Good elevation

Overall: You did Good

RTF in the Dissin Link in my sig

niCe beat dawg keep it up

ayo youngkilla...either its a HUGE coincidence, or ya boy bit King, because I was there when he wrote the shit in his notebook long before he posted it on rv, so u need to holla at ya man...because my boy did not bite that verse...holla back

you have entertaining lines and your good at staying on subject. Vocab was basic but the structure needs a bit fixing. you have a lot of talent. l look fowared to seeing your name around on this site maybe someday when i learn more we can battle 4 fun.
Please reture the fav.
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=183663
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=183659

thanx ya'll fo' all da feed. uppin fo some mo tho'

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