::..:$lobK::..: vs kyleon
 

Battle Rules:

10 lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting


Lyrikal sagionz vs Military Mindz

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Check in by: 03-24-05 at 10:17 PM

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Kyleon has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-23-05 10:39 PM.

::..:$lobK::..: has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-23-05 11:49 PM.

Voted For: ::..:$lobK::..:

This was feedback posted for ::..:$lobK::..:
 

OMG dayum fuckin SLOBK...lol each time i read your shit..it gets better and better

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Checking Polls good shit fam...................~1~

Voted For: ::..:$lobK::..:

aight, this shit wasn't bad, heres what i see

>On da real hommie,ya raps bunch of jokes like warner brother
On stage and pulled off a 'B-Rad',I tryed to warn-the-brother
-nah, 2nd line was bunk....cause its a t-shirt 4/10
>Part of the lyrical saigonz?,no wonder that crew is so wack
Break it down stat by stat,plain N simple 'the verse' is what ya lack
-not bad...decent 6/10
>And when it comes to punches,ya always have 'etchnical' problems
Like mike jones he gives away his # to labels but they never call him
-nah, wasn't feelin it...worded poorly 5/10
>Ya battle stats has a 'virus',since its 'invested' with newbies
So really he aint hard he's more like 'soft meat',he's all 'chewy'
good personal...hit decent 7/10
>The lastbar isnt a thing for skilled rappers,so go get a ghost writer
Cuz slobk verse couldnt 'hangover' mine if he pulled a 'all nighter'....werd
haha...best line here....8/10

-overall: 30/50....not a bad verse man....good flow and structure, decent consistency, thought your last two bars were the best, they hit the hardest, and good personal and good punch....but your opener bars i felt is what killed ya...nothin really too special/stood out....and therefore, i think you just couldn't pull this win out, no hate or anything, decent verse, but slobk's was better

slobk

>Build A Rhyme..Cuz I Could Tell U Aint A Lyric Child..
And Ill "Salute" U Da Loss..And I Don Think Da "Military" "Mindz"..
-not a bad meta/concept here....kinda sucked cause it didnt rhyme 6/10
>Treat Him Like A "Fetus"..U Need Anotha "Hole" To Rest In?..
Had His Shit Pre-Written..Dats Y He Was So Swift To Check In..
-decent, nothing special 6/10
>Him Winnin Is Rare..Like Loyal Preist Thats Strapped..
And B..Im The "Military" "Minded" One..U Should See The Wins "I Rack"(Iraq)..
-best bar here, it was fire, first line coulda been better though 8/10
>U Da Best?..I Highly Dispense From That..
Flowz Said Only "Ill" Heads In His Crew..I Guess He Meant "Mental" Cats..
-another decent bar, good personal 7/10
>We Cant "Hang"..With Newbies..Like "Killin" Children On A "Vine..
I Role With The Full "Click"..But He Just Role With "Mili" On His "Mind"..
haha, good closer 7/10

overall: 34/50.....same thing with you man, great last 3 bars, really picked up....althought you had the worst structure outta the two of you, you made up for it in punches/personals...thought your shit hit harder, specially at the end there.....decent wordplay, creative stuff in there, thats good to see, kept consistent disses, which is good, this was somewhat close, but i think you took this one......better wordplay, harder punches/personals......although, i hate how you use the " " all the time, its really distracting reading your verse....wordizzle.....good battle....no hate

v/slobk

Uppin On This Battle..Vote Up Yall..Crew Battle..Military Bums Vs LS

Voted For: Kyleon

ight this was ezy to vote on, ky had much betta structure and vocab/word ussage. $ was ight, but nothing special
u need to elevate more fam, no offense
but KY took this because of his wordplay mostly.
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Voted For: Kyleon

damn this shit was easy....you obviously had the better verse this was a weak battle but i think you took this you threw better punches, and had an overall better verse

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Voted For: Kyleon

umm both of yall were ok... seen better but ya ok....

Kyleon used some played consepts like the ghost writer line but had some ok punches other than that... some ok personals and good vocab... flowd well and structure was good.. overall 6/10

Slobk- wasnt feelin it as much... shit was ok at best... liked some of the punches but wasnt feelin the personals as much... he had an overall better verse than u did so... flow was ok .... so imma give this a 4/10

no hate to either but Kyleon took this hands down.... good luck


VOTE- Kyleon

Voted For: Kyleon

vote-Kyleon

Kyleon-good opener fa real fam...hot ish...punches hit hard here....flow was dope also...structure was tite as usual...persnoals were good....closer was aight coulda done better....

On da real hommie,ya raps bunch of jokes like warner brother
On stage and pulled off a 'B-Rad',I tryed to warn-the-brother
ok punch..nothin shocking...
Part of the lyrical saigonz?,no wonder that crew is so wack
Break it down stat by stat,plain N simple 'the verse' is what ya lack
not bad....
And when it comes to punches,ya always have 'etchnical' problems
Like mike jones he gives away his # to labels but they never call him
alright...not really feelin it
Ya battle stats has a 'virus',since its 'invested' with newbies
So really he aint hard he's more like 'soft meat',he's all 'chewy'
nope...
The lastbar isnt a thing for skilled rappers,so go get a ghost writer
Cuz slobk verse couldnt 'hangover' mine if he pulled a 'all nighter'
good closer..it was dope

$lobk- opener was ok...punches hit pretty good..and flow was on point..personals was aight...structure was aight not feelin that...multies was ok...closer was not that good

Build A Rhyme..Cuz I Could Tell U Aint A Lyric Child..
And Ill "Salute" U Da Loss..And I Don Think Da "Military" "Mindz"..
didnt really ryhmes that well
Treat Him Like A "Fetus"..U Need Anotha "Hole" To Rest In?..
Had His Shit Pre-Written..Dats Y He Was So Swift To Check In..
ok...not bad at all
Him Winnin Is Rare..Like Loyal Preist Thats Strapped..
And B..Im The "Military" "Minded" One..U Should See The Wins "I Rack"(Iraq)..
decent....
U Da Best?..I Highly Dispense From That..
Flowz Said Only "Ill" Heads In His Crew..I Guess He Meant "Mental" Cats..
nope....
We Cant "Hang"..With Newbies..Like "Killin" Children On A "Vine..
I Role With The Full "Click"..But He Just Role With "Mili" On His "Mind"..
ok..coulda re phrased it better

overall this was a pretty good battle...but i felt kyleon came stronger at the end of this match....good battle ya both...

v/Kyleon...

uppin for votes.....bitch got 2 of mine dq.... sometimes its ok to lose hommie...werd

Yea I Can Take A Loss As U Can See.. But
When Its Clearly Dick Riding Votes..
No Respect Is Given..So Fuck Off Me..
Uppin For Votes..

its clearly not a dick ride vote if you dont talk to the person or know the person...so what are ya talkin about....and no you cant take a lose if you have to go run to strobe cryin because you were losing...werd...truth has been spoken..uppin for votes......

LMAO..Man U Lucky I Didnt Know U Were Grafh...
U Are So Fuckin Lucky..U Woulda Been KO'd
Long Time Ago..FUCK..Anyway Uppin For Votes..

Voted For: ::..:$lobK::..:

keloen
uh nice stucture, some good flow nice syllable count, the creativty coulda been upped a bit, but it wasnt that half bad decent punchlines, i was feeling them but i knwo you can do lot better, but keep doin ya thing, it was a good verse just not as hard, some decent personals as well. pz

Slob
stucutre wasnt as good, but the flow was good the syllable count was ight decent at most. but you had some nice punchlines in there and some really nice creativty some alright decent at most personals, but the creativty was really high up yo. keep doin ay thing pz

RTF in my battle vs Hammer

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Voted For: ::..:$lobK::..:

hmmm PRetty Decent battle here.

Ima make a pros and Cons list like always :)

Slobk

Pros:
Your metas were pretty good.
wordplay was great.I rack line would catch ooo's offline
simlies were good.Like the Ill minds line was dope.
Flow was good also aint have to read it different or nothin.
Just read it smoothly throughout the whole thing.

Cons:
Nothin at alll really
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Kyleon

Pros:
wordplay
structure (except font)
closer
some of the punches

cons:flow was lil bit streched
the opener warn a brother is a slogan somewhere.
and I think its been used as a joke also.
So it ruined the originality of it.

So In my oppinion Slobk takes this one.

no need to return anything.Good battle,enjoyed it alot.

Uppin For More Votes Yo..Come On Yall..Stop Sleepin..

Uppin For More Votes..Stop Sleepin On This..
O And Grafh..Nice Way Of DQ'N Votes Man..

Uppin For More Votes..Wanna Get This Shit Over With..

This was feedback posted for ::..:$lobK::..:
 

checkin the polls..................................

you DQ'd 2 of my votes...so really its not even fair so stop bitchin...

This was feedback posted for Kyleon
 

Aite Uppin This..It's Been Way To Long
Yo..This Should Be Done Already..

Voted For: ::..:$lobK::..:

Build A Rhyme..Cuz I Could Tell U Aint A Lyric Child..
And Ill "Salute" U Da Loss..And I Don Think Da "Military" "Mindz"..
-Nice opener with a personal punch


Treat Him Like A "Fetus"..U Need Anotha "Hole" To Rest In?..
Had His Shit Pre-Written..Dats Y He Was So Swift To Check In..
-Personal with a punch


Him Winnin Is Rare..Like Loyal Preist Thats Strapped..
And B..Im The "Military" "Minded" One..U Should See The Wins "I Rack"(Iraq)..
-nice wordplay with a punch


U Da Best?..I Highly Dispense From That..
Flowz Said Only "Ill" Heads In His Crew..I Guess He Meant "Mental" Cats..
-hahah good decent personal punch


We Cant "Hang"..With Newbies..Like "Killin" Children On A "Vine..
I Role With The Full "Click"..But He Just Role With "Mili" On His "Mind"..
-Decent closer nice punch


Ok Nice verse here mane, punches and personals were connecting good. The flow was ok, put some multi'z next time. The punches and personals is what stood out in your verse, decent with the wordplay too.





On da real hommie,ya raps bunch of jokes like warner brother
On stage and pulled off a 'B-Rad',I tryed to warn-the-brother
-Using the same rhyme at the end of the sentence kinda whack, but its a punch


Part of the lyrical saigonz?,no wonder that crew is so wack
Break it down stat by stat,plain N simple 'the verse' is what ya lack
-Ok a punch, but kinda weak effect in my eyes


And when it comes to punches,ya always have 'etchnical' problems
Like mike jones he gives away his # to labels but they never call him
-hahah good decent punch lol


Ya battle stats has a 'virus',since its 'invested' with newbies
So really he aint hard he's more like 'soft meat',he's all 'chewy'
-good personal wiht a punch


The lastbar isnt a thing for skilled rappers,so go get a ghost writer
Cuz slobk verse couldnt 'hangover' mine if he pulled a 'all nighter'....werd
-NICE CLOSER


Nice verse kyleon, started weak at first, but then you pulled yourself up...........Punches was hard hitting, flow was ok add some multi'z also.

Overall=This battle was close both head's spitting some hard punches. Flow need some improvement from both of you. Ok slobk you had personals with punches which made your punches actually decent and much effective. Kyleon your punches was good hard hitting and effective. But i'mma have to go with Slobk, cause his punches came harder in my opinion, with some decent personals. Kyleon your punches was hard hitting but it werent no match for slobk's punches with personals. and wordplay

pz

Voted For: ::..:$lobK::..:

i think slobk got this 1 with way better punches and way better flow and personals he kilt that cat kyelon need better wordplay and personals punches we're there but not that effective if they we're more effective you whold've got it but nah i gotta give this 1 to that $lobk dude na sayin iiight peace out peeps iight ~.1.~