Lawless (Hs) vs Unregistered
 

Battle Rules:

10- Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting


Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 03-27-05 at 04:38 AM

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Unregistered has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-24-05 04:39 AM.

Lawless (Hs) has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-24-05 04:47 PM.

I'll go first iight... Good luck in this battle man

to hell-wit-this-trick... L-be-the-shit/
I'm bout to break this bitch like a elderly hip/

no named no fame.... so I might as well remove-his-print/
I got a 9 that will slap this hoe like an abusive pimp/

I grab the switchblade.... jus in case I need to slice em/
I'll shatter ya ribcage.... u know I'm untouchable like a museum items/

after I'm done.. hell spit lawless shit for 3 days/
cause he knows his flow was truly artificially made/

I got the 45 pattin' em on the back like he's un~able to belch/
Rv think you got 'imaginary friends' cause you always 'play wit yaself'/

Repping 50 in ya signature like a muthafuckin disgrace
You’ve been misplaced G-unit dot COM is this way ------>
You dumb shit, I’ll son you worse than your mom did
Your brains more empty than eminems gun clip
I’ll leave you looking small like 50 without the steroids
Ya whole crews like Michael Jackson’s children… scared boys
You’re wack as fuck so read my verse and take notes
The only ways you’ll ever get a win is no shows and hate votes
This battle is too simple plus this guys a queer
When confronted with beef he runs faster than diarrhoea

lol i probly went a bit harsh, good luck man..............

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Voted For: Lawless (Hs)

shit........not that great of a battle

unregistered....had nothing good at all really...played shit to the max, i think your best line was
"You’re wack as fuck so read my verse and take notes
The only ways you’ll ever get a win is no shows and hate votes"
but still, it was stretched on second line, and its kinda played....had some good concepts, but wordplay was poor, nothing special with vocab...you need to elevate alot, nothing stood out here, and queer does not rhyme with diarrhea

lawless, need to work on structure and flow....spaces between lines is unneccessary....im givin you this because you threw some punches, weak or not, you attempted more complex and creative ones, and thats what counts.....none of you had personals, really, cept your closer lawless, it was decent....so, you still have a lot of room to elevate...vocab was good though....seems like you have the hang of things, just elevate......

v/lawless

lmdao you mist be on something you pick out my most played out line and say say its my best. you'd understand how the shit rhymed if I spat the shit on a mic oh well its prolly just a hate vote cause I voted against you one time. God damn Im fucked disreguard thaqt comment.

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Voted For: Unregistered

ima hve to go wit unregistered.
both came weak but he had some punches, other guy din hve no punches..sum nice metas by both,both ya strucs n flow were decent...both need to upp ya punchlines tho..

vote- unregistered

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can I ask you a question.. T Storm

What Is a Punchline mean To You?
I jus wanna know....
No Beef.. jus wanna know.

we need some votes folks.... voice ya opinion...
Or Type It lol.

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uppingg for the gazillionth time vote muafuckas...

let's get some feedback people... come post yo opinions

This was feedback posted for Unregistered
 

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can I get a vote in this mutha fucka i hate yall bitches no muthafuckers muthafucking vote no mo yawll tryna start beef aye is that what it is c'mon then muafuckaz letz battle b4ttLe 4 A MuThAfUcKeN vOtE. uhuhuh Im straight hood 267 characters of complete garbage.

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Upping for the very last time !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

this is so fucking gay you bitches dont return favors !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Voted For: Lawless (Hs)

Flow: Blah
Punches: Lawless (Hs)
Personals: Unregistered
Wordplay: Lawless (Hs)
Metas: Tie
Multis: Tie
Enjoyment: Eh Neither

Vote: Lawless (Hs)

Explanation: Neither really impressed me .. Unregistered came wit some weak concepts .. Lawless i think just edged it barely came more consistent and just seemed a lil better .. dont separate ur lines like that its annyoing and dumb .. but yea no hate just keepin it real .. stay up and keep elevating .. 1

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Voted For: Unregistered

Lawless (Hs)

to hell-wit-this-trick... L-be-the-shit/
I'm bout to break this bitch like a elderly hip/
^second line's good, bleh @ first

no named no fame.... so I might as well remove-his-print/
I got a 9 that will slap this hoe like an abusive pimp/
^okay okay

I grab the switchblade.... jus in case I need to slice em/
I'll shatter ya ribcage.... u know I'm untouchable like a museum items/
^bit self-glorification so nah...


after I'm done.. hell spit lawless shit for 3 days/
cause he knows his flow was truly artificially made/
^nice bar

I got the 45 pattin' em on the back like he's un~able to belch/
Rv think you got 'imaginary friends' cause you always 'play wit yaself'/
^haha, dope closer

Okay verse, the best line in my opinion was your closer, actually laughed when I read that. Had some good punches in there, no real personals though and I don't really like all the talk about guns, bit self-glorifying. Had your flow on lock, found good balance in your vocab and structure was cool. Just try to get some more personals and creativity.


Unregistered

Repping 50 in ya signature like a muthafuckin disgrace
You’ve been misplaced G-unit dot COM is this way ------>
^lolz, nice opener

You dumb shit, I’ll son you worse than your mom did
Your brains more empty than eminems gun clip
^good one

I’ll leave you looking small like 50 without the steroids
Ya whole crews like Michael Jackson’s children… scared boys
^lmao,funny shit

You’re wack as fuck so read my verse and take notes
The only ways you’ll ever get a win is no shows and hate votes
^decent bar

This battle is too simple plus this guys a queer
When confronted with beef he runs faster than diarrhoea
^cool closer

Good verse! Had funny personals in there combined with nice punches, was also feeling your flow. The vocab was just fine as well as the structure but I feel sometimes you had a filler line in there. Try to be consistent throughout the entire verse with the mad personals and you're gonna be top cat in no time. Enjoyed reading your shit :thumbup:

My vote goes to Unregistered, purely based on the personals...no hate...

So far I've only gone over the top of 50% of RV members heads.

1 last up for the month lolololololololollolololol

Voted For: Lawless (Hs)

Repping 50 in ya signature like a muthafuckin disgrace
You’ve been misplaced G-unit dot COM is this way ------>
You dumb shit, I’ll son you worse than your mom did
Your brains more empty than eminems gun clip
I’ll leave you looking small like 50 without the steroids
Ya whole crews like Michael Jackson’s children… scared boys
You’re wack as fuck so read my verse and take notes
The only ways you’ll ever get a win is no shows and hate votes
This battle is too simple plus this guys a queer
When confronted with beef he runs faster than diarrhoea
-----agressive punches,nice flow.....hard verse...
vs
to hell-wit-this-trick... L-be-the-shit/
I'm bout to break this bitch like a elderly hip/

no named no fame.... so I might as well remove-his-print/
I got a 9 that will slap this hoe like an abusive pimp/

I grab the switchblade.... jus in case I need to slice em/
I'll shatter ya ribcage.... u know I'm untouchable like a museum items/

after I'm done.. hell spit lawless shit for 3 days/
cause he knows his flow was truly artificially made/

I got the 45 pattin' em on the back like he's un~able to belch/
Rv think you got 'imaginary friends' cause you always 'play wit yaself'/
-------------good punches,not that hard like un but stll....
flow not as good as un..but good.....stucture good......

VOTE:Unregistered

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what a fuck....i vote wrong...shit how i can chanche this..............no.......doesnt matter......

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