MaRVJay1009 vs Nephew J
 

Battle Rules:

5-8 Barz
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

do ya thing nigga


Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 03-25-05 at 07:47 PM

Must drop verse in 31 minutes after check in.

check in fam.......u had enuff 2 write then set it up but its nothin

Nephew J has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-25-05 07:35 PM.

MaRVJay1009 has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-25-05 07:46 PM.

I'ma do it like this niggy...

Dig it-nig,I eat ya like a fig ya think ya big, but I'ma split ya wig/
Ya a frail twig match up to my MiG, crunkjuice take a swig//1
Ya deam a team, think ya mean cause from tha NY Queens/
No rhyme scheme on a fat hoe an' ya avoid tha scene//2
MaRV, check this, ya starvin J for some real hit ill shit/
Carve ya tombstone, remember tha crunkjuice dont spill it//3
You write at a five year old level, garb a shovel- elevate/
Right now ya demostrate weakness that's very concentrate//4
Lemme call ya 'fukkin moms', I'ma stab my dick up in her/
2nd thoughs not, she incestly gave you AIDS, I'll find cleaner//5
Is it 1009 faggots you passed them AIDS to? It's true/
Gay societies clue not to fuck wit you, think it through//6
Crunkjuic is what ya need cause ya shit's wack an' weak/
We already knew ya shit was white an' black an' bleek//7
MaRV, really, ya not ill on tha real, that's tha deal bitch/
Come a queen early, fo' real, wit stiches ya left in tha ditch//8

quit rappin fam when its cum da text-u-gay,& i aint gon kill u newphew j
shit ima just wait till ya 'sista gift birth 2 her son' then kill ya "newphew j"
eva way even her daughter could die..its real ez im torchin dis guy
dis fag j known da take "L'S" look at his rec. his losses r "HiGH"
show me a bar datz sick,u post...fam betta keep dat pis-tol close
1nce i pull dat clipp u ghost..dis aint even fair i should let his crew vote
beside's a "mouse" he aint gota "click"...look ur weak im hotta bitch
u hold guns? a "piece of blunt he saved" da only time he gota "clip"
u should of know dont go at jay he's a vet,i'll merk u with my weakest text...
i'll heat-ya-flesh if i squeeze-a-tech ya breathin left...homie u meetin-death
close casket...no face no arms only thing there is ya knee's n chest
ya bar's is like "air ballz" fam they shouldn't even "reach da NET"
i aint gota write 4 u quer,u need bar's maybe i should write 4 u quer
your sad 4 real how 4-11 and been on dis site 4 2 years??


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okay uppin 4 some votes now...u wrote dat shit pretty quick

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

marvjay took this joint. basically, his punches made more sense even though i had trouble readin this drop a lil. there sumthin as a lil too much slang nah mean. but neway, i was feelin marv's flow more and his verse was wittier.

quit rappin fam when its cum da text-u-gay,& i aint gon kill u newphew j
shit ima just wait till ya 'sista gift birth 2 her son' then kill ya "newphew j"
^ok personal coulda been set up better

eva way even her daughter could die..its real ez im torchin dis guy
dis fag j known da take "L'S" look at his rec. his losses r "HiGH"
^solid bar
show me a bar datz sick,u post...fam betta keep dat pis-tol close
1nce i pull dat clipp u ghost..dis aint even fair i should let his crew vote
^good bar, nice diss

beside's a "mouse" he aint gota "click"...look ur weak im hotta bitch
u hold guns? a "piece of blunt he saved" da only time he gota "clip"
^not feelin this as a diss(that rhymed, im just sick like that) but neway, i didnt think this one hit that hard

u should of know dont go at jay he's a vet,i'll merk u with my weakest text...
i'll heat-ya-flesh if i squeeze-a-tech ya breathin left...homie u meetin-death
^ight bar nothin special, good use of multies tho

close casket...no face no arms only thing there is ya knee's n chest
ya bar's is like "air ballz" fam they shouldn't even "reach da NET"
^good punch, nice flow

aint gota write 4 u quer,u need bar's maybe i should write 4 u quer
your sad 4 real how 4-11 and been on dis site 4 2 years??
^wasnt feelin this very much, ok closer tho

nephew j
Dig it-nig,I eat ya like a fig ya think ya big, but I'ma split ya wig/
Ya a frail twig match up to my MiG, crunkjuice take a swig
um, didnt make much sense really

Ya deam a team, think ya mean cause from tha NY Queens/
No rhyme scheme on a fat hoe an' ya avoid tha scene
^still not making much sense but nice multies

MaRV, check this, ya starvin J for some real hit ill shit/
Carve ya tombstone, remember tha crunkjuice dont spill i
^why do u keep talking about crunk juice?

You write at a five year old level, garb a shovel- elevate/
Right now ya demostrate weakness that's very concentrate
^ok bar nothin special

Lemme call ya 'fukkin moms', I'ma stab my dick up in her/
2nd thoughs not, she incestly gave you AIDS, I'll find cleaner
^wack, started rambling here

Is it 1009 faggots you passed them AIDS to? It's true/
Gay societies clue not to fuck wit you, think it throug
^umm no u not really coherent here dog

Crunkjuic is what ya need cause ya shit's wack an' weak/
We already knew ya shit was white an' black an' bleek
^u really like some crunk juice dont u?

MaRV, really, ya not ill on tha real, that's tha deal bitch/
Come a queen early, fo' real, wit stiches ya left in tha ditch//8
^nahh weak closer, good multies tho

overall marvjay got this one punches better and verse flowed and nice multies. all nephew j had were multies but most didnt make sense. keep workin on ya flow.
hit me back. links int he sig

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

quit rappin fam when its cum da text-u-gay,& i aint gon kill u newphew j
shit ima just wait till ya 'sista gift birth 2 her son' then kill ya "newphew j"
nice play on the name but cud be betta
eva way even her daughter could die..its real ez im torchin dis guy
dis fag j known da take "L'S" look at his rec. his losses r "HiGH"
nah, not feelin this one
show me a bar datz sick,u post...fam betta keep dat pis-tol close
1nce i pull dat clipp u ghost..dis aint even fair i should let his crew vote
ok, pretty gud
beside's a "mouse" he aint gota "click"...look ur weak im hotta bitch
u hold guns? a "piece of blunt he saved" da only time he gota "clip"
decent, getting better
u should of know dont go at jay he's a vet,i'll merk u with my weakest text...
i'll heat-ya-flesh if i squeeze-a-tech ya breathin left...homie u meetin-death
HOT! best bar of the verse
close casket...no face no arms only thing there is ya knee's n chest
ya bar's is like "air ballz" fam they shouldn't even "reach da NET"
more hotness
i aint gota write 4 u quer,u need bar's maybe i should write 4 u quer
your sad 4 real how 4-11 and been on dis site 4 2 years??
nice closer


Dig it-nig,I eat ya like a fig ya think ya big, but I'ma split ya wig/
Ya a frail twig match up to my MiG, crunkjuice take a swig//1
nah, not feelin it
Ya deam a team, think ya mean cause from tha NY Queens/
No rhyme scheme on a fat hoe an' ya avoid tha scene//2
once again...NO!
MaRV, check this, ya starvin J for some real hit ill shit/
Carve ya tombstone, remember tha crunkjuice dont spill it//3
wtf!!! NO!!!
You write at a five year old level, garb a shovel- elevate/
Right now ya demostrate weakness that's very concentrate//4
blah!!! gettin worse bar by bar!!!
Lemme call ya 'fukkin moms', I'ma stab my dick up in her/
2nd thoughs not, she incestly gave you AIDS, I'll find cleaner//5
nice attempt but not feelin it
Is it 1009 faggots you passed them AIDS to? It's true/
Gay societies clue not to fuck wit you, think it through//6
gay shit played!!!
Crunkjuic is what ya need cause ya shit's wack an' weak/
We already knew ya shit was white an' black an' bleek//7
ok, i guess
MaRV, really, ya not ill on tha real, that's tha deal bitch/
Come a queen early, fo' real, wit stiches ya left in tha ditch//8
weak closer!


Shudn't even have to explain anything in this battle, Marv owned this guy. Marv started off pretty weak but came up at the end with some hot shit. Nephew was just weak all the way through and either needs some serious elevation, needs to leave the site, or just stick to battlin herbz, cuz droppin verses like this one, that is the only way he gonna get any wins!!! no hate or anything but this verse was mos definitely one of the weakest i've seen in a while!!!!

^^forgot to add this shit again yo
return the fave, honest votes yo!!!!!!!!!!!

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

V/marvjay1009.....this was an ight battle but he gets my vote cause he came wit creative punchs an good structure wit good personals....nep u came wit sum ight lines but u were to basic u need to work on ur punchs an personals...No hate...RETURN THE FAVOR
opner=m
closer=m
structure=m
punchs=m
personals=m
vocab=m
overall=marvjay1009

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This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
 

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Nephew- 1st off it's not neccasary to number your bars. Anyway your structure was decent and flow was pretty good. Saying you'll fuck his mum is played to the max. No really clever or original concepts. Lol whats with mentioning crunk juice so often. Anyway you need to elivate your punches.

MarvJay- I enjoyed reading your verse basicaly every line was dope.
nice multi's on this one
u should of know dont go at jay he's a vet,i'll merk u with my weakest text...
i'll heat-ya-flesh if i squeeze-a-tech ya breathin left...homie u meetin-death

Overall Marv had this easy simply because his punches and word play was better Nephew up ya game and you'll be dope. return the favor plz !!!!!

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Iight Yo Marv What Happend Cus Thiss Wasn't Like Tha Rest Of Ya Battles You Gave Him Some Slacc But You Still Took Thiss..........

Openor=Marv,He Had Wordplay And A Ok Punch
Punches=Tie,Both Had Some Ok Punches
Vocab-None
Personals-Marv,Had 1 Or 2 Personals
Structure-None
Wordplay-Marv,Had A Couple Lines
Closer-Marv,Had A Nice Punch And Good Personal

Overall Marv Took Thiss He Had Better Personals Good Wordplay And A Few Nice Punches..Marv Next Time Yo Don't Give Nobody Some Slacc................

/V Marvjay1009.......................