Stanza vs Dumb-D-Dumb
 

Battle Rules:

10 lines
Check tonight
Drop Tonight
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
3-0 KO

BLIND SPIT!!!
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All Favors will Be Returned ......Atleast By Stanza

Minimum posts to vote: 50

Check in by: 03-29-05 at 12:35 AM

Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in.

Dumb-D-Dumb has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-28-05 11:38 PM.

Stanza has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-28-05 11:39 PM.

yo yo...

your name is a poetry term, but man you just a clown/
ya your poetry is deep....burried six feet underground/*
you wanted 10 lines, because your afraid to do more/
I understand you there....cuz I could beat you in four/
ya name is 'stanza'? well it doesnt fit, ya structures wack/
you seperate ya lines...so how is ya poetic verses intact?/**
Luda in ya sig...dawg, is this guy your fuckin idol?/
Wit a role model like that...you lack talent so vital!/
man face it...you cant win this battle, broken hoe/
A loss a kick-in-the balls...this my lyrical Roshambo!/***

* Stanza is a term used in poetry

**stanza mean verses bein structered into poetic form.

**Roshambo means a giant kick in the nuts...watch South park :cool:

My rhymes *pack* punch like supermarket teens on picnics
But ya *flow* is off like automatic learners driving stick-shift

I set the marker for skill, like im in a Tourney~With~Flaws
U couldnt *Pass The Bar* if u were and Attorney~At~Law

Im mentally~advanced, while ur experimentally~in~trance
My rhymes*shock u*like seeing a vampire in a glass

This *dickhead* covers his * face* like a latex~rubber
He claims to be str8 wen he fucks his same~sex~mother

ya rhymes BORIN, like MIMES WIT MIC's & ya rhyme skill less
You Make Dumb Dumbz Look Like the definition of illness

Voted For: Dumb-D-Dumb

lmao good drop good structure good punches ahahaha
he had good lines too but yers cut him up more which is tha point of a battle soo my vote goes to you no hate stanza

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Dick rydaz :spit:

Stay The fuck outta my battle Casper

dikk rider i aint even no tha kid i just battled him faget so shut yo ass up bitch
ill vote in wutever battle i want homo

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Dick rydaz Like i said Stay The fuck outta my battle b4 i merk Yo ass too


Uppin for My votes

Voted For: Dumb-D-Dumb

your name is a poetry term, but man you just a clown/
ya your poetry is deep....burried six feet underground/*
decent
you wanted 10 lines, because your afraid to do more/
I understand you there....cuz I could beat you in four/
booooooo…nada
ya name is 'stanza'? well it doesnt fit, ya structures wack/
you seperate ya lines...so how is ya poetic verses intact?/**
whoa…nice
Luda in ya sig...dawg, is this guy your fuckin idol?/
Wit a role model like that...you lack talent so vital!/
lol…wow
man face it...you cant win this battle, broken hoe/
A loss a kick-in-the balls...this my lyrical Roshambo!/***
decent here


My rhymes *pack* punch like supermarket teens on picnics
But ya *flow* is off like automatic learners driving stick-shift
not feelin this 1
I set the marker for skill, like im in a Tourney~With~Flaws
U couldnt *Pass The Bar* if u were and Attorney~At~Law
okay, decent here
Im mentally~advanced, while ur experimentally~in~trance
My rhymes*shock u*like seeing a vampire in a glass
nada…
This *dickhead* covers his * face* like a latex~rubber
He claims to be str8 wen he fucks his same~sex~mother
okay…kinda good
ya rhymes BORIN, like MIMES WIT MIC's & ya rhyme skill less
You Make Dumb Dumbz Look Like the definition of illness
good

both had okay verses…but dumb dumb, took this one in my opinion tho
both had some wack bars, and some were good, but it seemed to me that
dumb boy, came harder all the way in this battle…no hate tho

Voted For: Stanza

your name is a poetry term, but man you just a clown/
ya your poetry is deep....burried six feet underground/*
you wanted 10 lines, because your afraid to do more/
I understand you there....cuz I could beat you in four/
ya name is 'stanza'? well it doesnt fit, ya structures wack/
you seperate ya lines...so how is ya poetic verses intact?/**
Luda in ya sig...dawg, is this guy your fuckin idol?/
Wit a role model like that...you lack talent so vital!/
man face it...you cant win this battle, broken hoe/
A loss a kick-in-the balls...this my lyrical Roshambo!/***

dumb d dumb yours was a decent verse, a few average punches...i think some of your verse was mostly filler tho.....6/10



My rhymes *pack* punch like supermarket teens on picnics
But ya *flow* is off like automatic learners driving stick-shift

I set the marker for skill, like im in a Tourney~With~Flaws
U couldnt *Pass The Bar* if u were and Attorney~At~Law

Im mentally~advanced, while ur experimentally~in~trance
My rhymes*shock u*like seeing a vampire in a glass

This *dickhead* covers his * face* like a latex~rubber
He claims to be str8 wen he fucks his same~sex~mother

ya rhymes BORIN, like MIMES WIT MIC's & ya rhyme skill less
You Make Dumb Dumbz Look Like the definition of illness

stanza nice meta's used in your verse.....decent punches...i think this was a really close battle...think both could have come harder...but i think stanza just took the win because of the creativity in his punches...........

Voted For: Stanza

This battle goes to Stanza. First off, anyone who says something slightly "obscure" such as a reference to a stanza should give people the benefit of the doubt as to their intelligence. We just want to read what you got to say, skip the explanation por favor. But Stanza had much better punchlines whereas Dumb had only one semi witty response which was that roshambo joint. But its all good......everyone keep elevatin. you can always get better

Thanx for all votes .......

Uppin Lets get this battle ova with

Voted For: Stanza

V/Stanza...he came out wit consistent punchs mixed wit good personals an vocab i liked the opener but work on ur structure....
dumb.....u had some good lines an some played ur verse lacked consistent diss's an good personals.....No hate juss elavate....
RETURN THE FAVOR
opner=s
closer=s
structure=tie
punchs=s
vocab=s
personals=s
overall=Stanza

Voted For: Stanza

no hate 2 any of yall heres my feedback

stanza
My rhymes *pack* punch like supermarket teens on picnics
But ya *flow* is off like automatic learners driving stick-shift

I set the marker for skill, like im in a Tourney~With~Flaws
U couldnt *Pass The Bar* if u were and Attorney~At~Law

Im mentally~advanced, while ur experimentally~in~trance
My rhymes*shock u*like seeing a vampire in a glass

This *dickhead* covers his * face* like a latex~rubber
He claims to be str8 wen he fucks his same~sex~mother

ya rhymes BORIN, like MIMES WIT MIC's & ya rhyme skill less
You Make Dumb Dumbz Look Like the definition of illness

nice punches
like ur personals
mother line wuz gay dont use mom shit....gay
good structure
easy 2 read
good elevation
8/10

dumb d dumb
your name is a poetry term, but man you just a clown/
ya your poetry is deep....burried six feet underground/*
you wanted 10 lines, because your afraid to do more/
I understand you there....cuz I could beat you in four/
ya name is 'stanza'? well it doesnt fit, ya structures wack/
you seperate ya lines...so how is ya poetic verses intact?/**
Luda in ya sig...dawg, is this guy your fuckin idol?/
Wit a role model like that...you lack talent so vital!/
man face it...you cant win this battle, broken hoe/
A loss a kick-in-the balls...this my lyrical Roshambo!/***

good personals and punches as welll
sum punches aint land doe
good structure
work on elevatin

iight battle but my vote goes 2........
v/stanza

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Vote 4 Dumb-D-Dumb. All those votes were fusure dick ryds

Uppin

Yall

Nice battle Dumb-D-Dumb


But You Was Dumb to even try me

Voted For: Dumb-D-Dumb

okay......

stanza....man, alot of your shit was whack...like that same sex mother line, i think you just picked things that would rhyme cool, your shit lacked complexity, context, and creativity....nothing special at all....your finisher had potential....but your wording was garbage and the set up line ended up being stretched....so, this isn't that great compared to what ive seen you write, and you didn't really stay consistent
I set the marker for skill, like im in a Tourney~With~Flaws
U couldnt *Pass The Bar* if u were and Attorney~At~Law
^ that = not a diss
after reading this battle...you need to elevate....word

dumbdumb or whatever....thought you came harder....actually throwing punches directed at stanze...good playing off his name there......word, i think you can get a little more complex with your punches though, add some more wordplay and shit....but overall, you took this battle, stanza was just babbling and rhyming cool, you actually dissed him pretty much every bar, so you get my vote

v/dumbndumb

This was feedback posted for Dumb-D-Dumb
 

A'ight...this was a close battle...I ain' gonna vote, 'cause Dumb-D is my dumbass younger brother...but close, props to both. :cool:

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Voted For: Stanza

im givin ratins for tha barz..here we go...

stanza:
My rhymes *pack* punch like supermarket teens on picnics
But ya *flow* is off like automatic learners driving stick-shift
was iight...7/10
I set the marker for skill, like im in a Tourney~With~Flaws
U couldnt *Pass The Bar* if u were and Attorney~At~Law
didnt get tha first part but still iight...5/10
Im mentally~advanced, while ur experimentally~in~trance
My rhymes*shock u*like seeing a vampire in a glass
lost tha structure and flow a bit...5/10
This *dickhead* covers his * face* like a latex~rubber
He claims to be str8 wen he fucks his same~sex~mother
bad punch man...3/10
ya rhymes BORIN, like MIMES WIT MIC's & ya rhyme skill less
You Make Dumb Dumbz Look Like the definition of illness
no no no...but iight a lil...5/10

ddd:
your name is a poetry term, but man you just a clown/
ya your poetry is deep....burried six feet underground/*
shitty opener...4/10
you wanted 10 lines, because your afraid to do more/
I understand you there....cuz I could beat you in four/
didnt hit...5/10
ya name is 'stanza'? well it doesnt fit, ya structures wack/
you seperate ya lines...so how is ya poetic verses intact?/**
iight right there...7/10
Luda in ya sig...dawg, is this guy your fuckin idol?/
Wit a role model like that...you lack talent so vital!/
no...not doin shit...bad punch...3/10
man face it...you cant win this battle, broken hoe/
A loss a kick-in-the balls...this my lyrical Roshambo!/***
oh hell no...dont jus pull a cartoon term outta nowhere...1/10

its like dis...ddd, ya verse was no landin no hits...might have been betta if u wrote it first...stanza, ya shit wasnt all dat either but at least u got sum good shit goin...

v=stanza

-DB