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RetroBution vs DAZZLE
Battle Rules:
10 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 50 Check in by: 03-29-05 at 01:05 PM Must drop verse in 15 minutes after check in. |
RetroBution has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-29-05 12:10 PM.
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goin against ya peers..this battles gonna turn to tears
listening to obie trice..is the only time u heard "cheers" ya names dazzle?..ya rhymes hardly set thing to shine you couldnt "blow up" in this game..if u were a land mine. ya gon be dissapointed..youll never elevate to be a vet you cudnt throw up sick lyrics..if u threw up the alphabet ive seen your battles..and not one punch of note to hit.. verses like the wrong jigsaw piece..they simply a "misfit" fuck it i dnt need a fith bar..your already in the slammer i think ya spits r usefull,lol,right..as much as a glasshammer |
DAZZLE has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-29-05 12:31 PM.
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Did this realllll quick.
Steppin up to me, yea you just breached this peace,
Ya lines r more played....than a "figure of speech! Ima deliver your "RetroBution", this is my way to "pay back" Your style is "Retro"..........so its "a thing of the past"! 150 RV dollars on hand,a large amount?Well i demand a recount, How he gonna carry that shit, when he Dont own a bank account! You got no love do you, so jus gimme this win, nobody likes you... How do i know? Look at your Introduction thread....It only got one view!! retrobution can mean pay back, retro is an old thing (from the past), he doesnt own a bank account and his first thred only has one view. |
fort it were sposed to be 6-10 lines...... .
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Voted For: RetroBution
iight battle yall heres my feedback retrobution IP: goin against ya peers..this battles gonna turn to tears listening to obie trice..is the only time u heard "cheers" ya names dazzle?..ya rhymes hardly set thing to shine you couldnt "blow up" in this game..if u were a land mine. ya gon be dissapointed..youll never elevate to be a vet you cudnt throw up sick lyrics..if u threw up the alphabet ive seen your battles..and not one punch of note to hit.. verses like the wrong jigsaw piece..they simply a "misfit" fuck it i dnt need a fith bar..your already in the slammer i think ya spits r usefull,lol,right..as much as a glasshammer lotz of punches at opponent like ur word choice and personals good structure elevate sum more 7/10 dazzle Steppin up to me, yea you just breached this peace, Ya lines r more played....than a "figure of speech! Ima deliver your "RetroBution", this is my way to "pay back" Your style is "Retro"..........so its "a thing of the past"! 150 RV dollars on hand,a large amount?Well i demand a recount, How he gonna carry that shit, when he Dont own a bank account! You got no love do you, so jus gimme this win, nobody likes you... How do i know? Look at your Introduction thread....It only got one view!! not 2 many punches or personals work on structure a lil bit so itz easier 2 read elevate sum more and youll b iight ur gettn better dazzle much betta 4rm wut u posted in our battle 6.5/10 my v/retrobution 4 more punches and personals at opponent Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: DAZZLE
meh.... retro...shit, only good line was your closer....everything else is played and done before man....gotta come up with some creative shit, plus everything was just a little too basic, didn't really have any personals in there either, so work on that....but positively, your flow was good, structure good...no multies......just need to work on gettin some good punches/creative ones, get personals, and elevate the vocab and wordplay a little....and you should be fine dazzle....not bad man, good personals....thats what really separated you, and you had some good shit in there, first line coulda been better because it was an aight punch, but overall, i think you took this one, for a harder punch, and better personals......you tied probly in every other category....this was a basic battle, but still not that bad v/dazzle |
and seriously ^^ lyricalmastermind, i dont think you know what a personal was, because dazzle's verse was almost all personals.....haha
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i agree wit kesse.......
personals win battles.. n u had some i didnt..so yeh u prob took this |
aight thanks for the vote. .
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word, haha, cracks me up cause that guy votes against me saying i have no personals, but like half my verse is composed of em........shit, retro, yeh, but you got some skill though, keep up......word, i shall up this for you again, haha
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This was feedback posted for DAZZLE
i think your structure is coo, but needs a lil bit more practice and elevation in it. but that was the least of ur problems.try to think of some harder personals. when you face someone whose been here longer it will be easier to think of harder personals. try to think of more creative punches ans shit. disses and shit to make ur oponent look bad. this wasnt a bad verse, but it wasnt winning material for this win. ur oponent is garbage, but he had harder punches in this one, and better metaphores to take the win. also try to think of some more creative metaphores. comparing you oponents to something bad to create a good diss. your rhyming is ok, but try to throw in a few multiples in your verse. but not that many, cause ur whole verse may change into just multiples. just work on that for now, but it was a good verse
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thanks for feed fam.
uppin for some votes...... |
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Voted For: DAZZLE
DAZZLE Steppin up to me, yea you just breached this peace, Ya lines r more played....than a "figure of speech! ^hehe, nice opener Ima deliver your "RetroBution", this is my way to "pay back" Your style is "Retro"..........so its "a thing of the past"! ^good good 150 RV dollars on hand,a large amount?Well i demand a recount, How he gonna carry that shit, when he Dont own a bank account! ^cool bar You got no love do you, so jus gimme this win, nobody likes you... How do i know? Look at your Introduction thread....It only got one view!! ^hahaha, funny closer! Nice verse right here, I feel you had good creativity in your punches, nice personals as well. Structure was just fine, am definitely feeling your flow and you found a good balance in your vocab. Don't really have anything bad to comment on, overall real good! RetroBution goin against ya peers..this battles gonna turn to tears listening to obie trice..is the only time u heard "cheers" ^good good ya names dazzle?..ya rhymes hardly set thing to shine you couldnt "blow up" in this game..if u were a land mine. ^hehe funny ya gon be dissapointed..youll never elevate to be a vet you cudnt throw up sick lyrics..if u threw up the alphabet ^sowwy but this is mad played ive seen your battles..and not one punch of note to hit.. verses like the wrong jigsaw piece..they simply a "misfit" ^nice nice fuck it i dnt need a fith bar..your already in the slammer i think ya spits r usefull,lol,right..as much as a glasshammer ^don't get it... Okay, good verse as well! Had nice punches, some bit played but your personals were quite nice, didn't always stay as consistent as Dazzle though. Structure was cool, had your flow on lock and the vocabulary was just fine as well. Just try to get more creative and hardhitting personals, wordplay was nice though |
Voted For: DAZZLE
punches-dazzle personals-none multis-none wordplays-none creativity-none enjoyment-none vote-dazzle boring battle from both...................... |
Voted For: RetroBution
FLow: Blah Punches: Retro Personals: Dazzle Wordplay: Tie Metas: Retro Multis: Tie Enjoyment: Both Vote: Retro Explanation: retro got this on harder punches .. he packed more in there and was more consistent with them dazzle had some coo lines but wasnt enough .. return the favor with some honest votes plz |
Upppin .
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Voted For: DAZZLE
goin against ya peers..this battles gonna turn to tears listening to obie trice..is the only time u heard "cheers" decent ya names dazzle?..ya rhymes hardly set thing to shine you couldnt "blow up" in this game..if u were a land mine. wack ya gon be dissapointed..youll never elevate to be a vet you cudnt throw up sick lyrics..if u threw up the alphabet kinda wack here ive seen your battles..and not one punch of note to hit.. verses like the wrong jigsaw piece..they simply a "misfit" decent fuck it i dnt need a fith bar..your already in the slammer i think ya spits r usefull,lol,right..as much as a glasshammer weak Steppin up to me, yea you just breached this peace, Ya lines r more played....than a "figure of speech! pretty decent Ima deliver your "RetroBution", this is my way to "pay back" Your style is "Retro"..........so its "a thing of the past"! okay 150 RV dollars on hand,a large amount?Well i demand a recount, How he gonna carry that shit, when he Dont own a bank account! nice, best bar here You got no love do you, so jus gimme this win, nobody likes you... How do i know? Look at your Introduction thread....It only got one view!! wack DAZZLE – you had aight punches, work on them some more though Your flow was good, and the vocab needs some work though, & add Some more personas to make shure u win more battles though, overall You had an aight drop RetroBution – you need to work on your punches, your structure was okay Your vocab needs help, & add some personas in your verses too… |
aight thanks, uppin for one more vote.............
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Voted For: DAZZLE
Punches- DAZZLE Flow- Retro Personals- DAZZLE (the money and intro lines) Creativity- None Multies- Ehhh none good ones Vote- DAZZLE...for punches and personals...retro had some alright punches but nothing hit very hard.. |
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