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the kid 523 vs Elementality
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10 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Hate No D/R Good Luck. Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 04-02-05 at 04:11 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
the kid 523 has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-30-05 06:32 PM.
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Elementality has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-30-05 07:18 PM.
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"Hi Guys! I'm kid 523, I really enjoy wear'n fubu, and act' O.G. I rhyme monosylabically with shit like knee, tree, and C.D." -This little tykes the real deal. hes so crazy he's on a crew. Too bad you're so square you think be'in sick is havin the flu. His flows a figment of his imagination, like his friend fredrick. Even If this kid had some vision, he'd still need a walking stick. I'm willing to bet that this kids a twelve-year old spoilt little brat. Once hes done posting his shitt, he'll move over to his play mat. Your versus' are cracked, like readin a crackers Auto-Biography. Heres some advice kid: quit rymin and stick to Child-pornography. |
common man drop your shit already....whats taking you all day?
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Elementality, for your own benefit homie just quit
Give yourself three days to drop and your verse is still shit Its absurd, how easily I can kill you with words, leave you full with pressure If i bit your fucking style, id only make it fresher Ill leave you hurt, psycially and emotionally scared drop you from a plane thats the only way u hittin hard My words will open a hole in your throat, make you choke haha, you battlein me? this some early april fools joke? When readin my verse, ill have you scared to read the next line, keep tryin You should battle me when you look out the window and pigs are flyin |
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This was feedback posted for the kid 523
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Voted For: Elementality
Lemme break this down... Opener - Element, Kids wasnt evem a punch... Closer - Element, Kids hit himself harder... Punches - Element, Kid was hitting himself... Personals - Neither, didnt see any... Metas - Element, Kid didnt have any... Multies - Element, Kid didnt have any... Vocab - Element, Kids was elementary Structure - Element, Kids was sloppy as hell... Comedy - Element, wtf is Kid doing... As you can see from above it is obvious that Elementality took this one and I know that the polls will show this. The Kid: Learn how to do this shit properly dawg, no hate. Elevate your vocab and make your punches hit your opponent rather than yourself. Self-glorification is wack, dont use it. Also, structure your verse neater so it looks better. And try using personals and multies, they help your verses overall effectivness. Elementality: Your verse was sick. Only areas for improvment I would have to say are first of all use bigger words when using multies and try using personals aka punches that could only be thrown at your opponent rather than anyone. Youve got the structuring, vocab and comedy down...lookin dope. Keep it up and hope to see more of your verses in the future... V/Elementality............ |
Voted For: Elementality
to be honest i thought this was quite close.first off elementality had better structure, the kid ya bars were uneven, work on that, also the kid..that "make it fresher" line.. i dnt know if its intentional but thats a line from an eminem track.vocab goes to elementality,punnches pretty even, you both cud hve bin more creative.overall fairly tight but element tried to get sum personals in, not much in it but a slightly better drop from elementality gives him this on. please return an honest vote thanks http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=183740 |
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Voted For: Elementality
Elementality, for your own benefit homie just quit Give yourself three days to drop and your verse is still shit ^^^didnt cut it man, 2/10 Its absurd, how easily I can kill you with words, leave you full with pressure If i bit your fucking style, id only make it fresher ^^^didnt hit either 2/10 Ill leave you hurt, psycially and emotionally scared drop you from a plane thats the only way u hittin hard ^^creative but played 4/10 My words will open a hole in your throat, make you choke haha, you battlein me? this some early april fools joke? ^^nope man 1/10 When readin my verse, ill have you scared to read the next line, keep tryin You should battle me when you look out the window and pigs are flyin decent 5/10 "Hi Guys! I'm kid 523, I really enjoy wear'n fubu, and act' O.G. I rhyme monosylabically with shit like knee, tree, and C.D." ^^nope 3/10 -This little tykes the real deal. hes so crazy he's on a crew. Too bad you're so square you think be'in sick is havin the flu. played right there 3/10 His flows a figment of his imagination, like his friend fredrick. Even If this kid had some vision, he'd still need a walking stick. ^^different but played 6/10 I'm willing to bet that this kids a twelve-year old spoilt little brat. Once hes done posting his shitt, he'll move over to his play mat. personal i hope 4/10 Your versus' are cracked, like readin a crackers Auto-Biography. Heres some advice kid: quit rymin and stick to Child-pornography. 1/10 Elementality you won this shit by far, had the better verse but eleavtion is needed but get at my battle and drop an honest vote http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=184150 |
Voted For: the kid 523
Elementality... "Hi Guys! I'm kid 523, I really enjoy wear'n fubu, and act' O.G. I rhyme monosylabically with shit like knee, tree, and C.D." No...You're Elementality, and that punch didn't even flow or rhyme...0/10 -This little tykes the real deal. hes so crazy he's on a crew. Too bad you're so square you think be'in sick is havin the flu. Sick/being sick lines are played out...2/10 His flows a figment of his imagination, like his friend fredrick. Even If this kid had some vision, he'd still need a walking stick. Fake personal/not a good punch...2/10 I'm willing to bet that this kids a twelve-year old spoilt little brat. Once hes done posting his shitt, he'll move over to his play mat. You called him a little kid...wow...2/10 Your versus' are cracked, like readin a crackers Auto-Biography. Heres some advice kid: quit rymin and stick to Child-pornography. Eh...4/10 Verse = 10/50 The Kid... Elementality, for your own benefit homie just quit Give yourself three days to drop and your verse is still shit Wack...it's getting played out...3/10 Its absurd, how easily I can kill you with words, leave you full with pressure If i bit your fucking style, id only make it fresher Bad structure...but funny ass punch...5/10 Ill leave you hurt, psycially and emotionally scared drop you from a plane thats the only way u hittin hard Good punch, nice meta...5/10 My words will open a hole in your throat, make you choke haha, you battlein me? this some early april fools joke? Funny, because it is April Fools...if it wasn't that would be wack...6/10 When readin my verse, ill have you scared to read the next line, keep tryin You should battle me when you look out the window and pigs are flyin No....this was fuckin wack...0/10 Verse = 19/50 Well, this battle was horrible...just because you center your verse and have a good structure... it doesn't make your verse any better. People should vote on punches...not looks. Vote/Kid... |
uppin this shit
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You my BOY BLUE!..... that was some hard judgin dood,I think you should take your beef out on the things that are bothering you....or better yet a pillow........insteada take'n your personal endevours out on rapverse.
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You're my dad Will........ Interested in a battle?
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uppin this shit
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Does somebody wanna please vote on this battle so it can be done with?
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Voted For: Elementality
Flow :Blah Punches: Neither Really Personals: Neither Wordplay: Neitehr Metas: Elementality Multis: Neither Enjoyment: None Vote: Elementality Explanation: both verses werent good .. elementality actually came with some metas and thats why he gets my vote.. stay elevating .. stay up .. 1 |
thanks
man i appreciate the input, but you should really be anteing up yourself before you go and put feedbacks like those...I mean If my battle were against this:
""""" Leave this warrior |Deceased-Swiftly| after he sees my verse hell |Delete-Quickly| .. I |Cease-Pity| Cuz my punches 'Quickly Put An End To WAR' like a |Peace-Treaty!| I |Attack-Wit| |Graphic-Spits| |Packed-Wit| |Acidic-Fists| .. We all know this 'Warriors A Pussy' like Thunder |Kat Kids!| .. Warriors just a |Wack-Bitch| Who |Lacks-Wits| So u can say I 'Killed Warrior' like 'Deleting Lloyd Banks' |Track-List!| Wat this 'Dick Turn Into A Pussy' & no one |Stop-Yer-Sex-Switch| .. Im |OnTop-Of-Text-Lists| So watch as I 'Put An End To ARR' like pirates with |Proper-English!|""""" .............. would things be different? ^Ethnics drop > :nono: |
Rofl .. Look At My Punches & Everything Else .. Structure has nothing to do with anything
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Hahah, i got him rolling on the floor laughing.....funny thing is I dont think he knows exactly what hes laughing about........ cause I didn't say anything about structure......structure is the least of your problems mang.
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Voted For: Elementality
V/Elementality....this was a good battle from both sides but E took this he wit punchs an personals also good vocab an structure....kid u had some good lines in ur verse but e came wit it an u didnt sound consistent wit the punchs u had some basic lines........No Hate....RETURN THE FAVOR opner=e closer=e structure=e punchs=e vocab=e personals=e overall=Elementality |
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