Pyronix vs MaRVJay1009
 

Battle Rules:

8 lines..
No Crew Votes..
No Recycling..
No Biting..

Minimum posts to vote: 100

Check in by: 04-13-05 at 02:31 PM

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Pyronix has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-13-05 02:03 PM.

MaRVJay1009 has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-13-05 02:22 PM.

another alias homo.....

dis fag made an alias da BaTTLE NOOBS cuzz he sound real gay on a beat.
its like u "talk 2 god with ya knee's on a calender" cuzz u "pray on da week".
if i aint nice y u hate 4 chump?,dont get ya ass wiped and face all lump'd.
give up y have a rap career when u "wont go far" like a "baseball bunt".
pyronix u really boin marv,get off my dick do somthin go call a broad.
u gon win dis battle? lol nope only "MJ u'll eva RIP" is a "jordan card".*
matter go call ya squad..cuzz punches weak u like rocky in his first fight.
u'll neva have $ ya "road da riches" gon be "shaky like ali on a dirt bike.

*my initals r MJ..u'll get da rest

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

marv got this cuz of his punches...nice closer...nice werdplay...good structure...couldve used some multies or improved vocab though

pyronix, i wasnt impressed by this verse if u are an alias but the opener wasnt great and the closer was okay...good strucutre, but thats bout it for real...multies vocab flow and punches all cooodve been worked on in my opinion

both cood work on multies and vocab

v/marvjay1009

rtf..
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...19&page=1&pp=15

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why???....when u only got 30 post.....fam dat alias shit is gay 4real

that vote wasnt really explained, but w/e.............upping

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come on with da votin shit...just accept it fam..........

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

marv took dis he had betta punches his verse was more creative sum sikk ass wordplay

openor-marv had a betta openor
punches-marv had betta punches
personals-dey both was aight but marvs was a lil betta
wordplay-marv had wordplay
creative-marv was more creative

marv took dis whole thing hiz verse shitted on pyronix he came harder wit punches nad put more effort n 2 hiz verse

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yo u a fukkin bitch fam...word up runnin da strobe like a lil girl

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

pyronix...
Your rec's huge though, so I advise Marv to stop n lay low.
Marv's gettin the wind knocked out of him, better yet a tornado!
should have worded this way better...good concept i guess

I mean, over 30 wins? I guess, your text is getting kinda dull.
And yeah, I am hitting rock bottom, punching the base of your skull.
again:fat concept but its not worded wright...damn

Don't questio nthe illest style, cuz I'm the best of sonning, while..
Your just a paedo, who attempted to molest his inner child.
well at least it rhymes...

I told you your lacking fizz, ya get the voters gasps, sucker.
But it's deff not in awe.....It's from RV's asthma sufferers.
really didnt like this man
think about people reading it rather than u spitting it

marvjay1009
dis fag made an alias da BaTTLE NOOBS cuzz he sound real gay on a beat.
its like u "talk 2 god with ya knee's on a calender" cuzz u "pray on da week".
hot personel fat word play...
if i aint nice y u hate 4 chump?,dont get ya ass wiped and face all lump'd.
give up y have a rap career when u "wont go far" like a "baseball bunt".
wasnt really feelin it...but ok
pyronix u really boin marv,get off my dick do somthin go call a broad.
u gon win dis battle? lol nope only "MJ u'll eva RIP" is a "jordan card".*
good word play but didnt feel da bar as a whole

matter go call ya squad..cuzz punches weak u like rocky in his first fight.
u'll neva have $ ya "road da riches" gon be "shaky like ali on a dirt bike.
this was hot...funny too

pyronix
u got a ways to come young man
work on it u got good ideas i wish i thought of dat base of ur skull shit

marvjay1009
good verse man ...funny...good thoughts and really creative

v/marvjay1009

ps...marv dont get gassed!

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009


Marv:

Punches: 9/10
Personals: 7/10
Wordplay: 10/10
Structure:10/10
Flow:10/10
Overall: 46/50=92%

This verse was dope man...Nothing less than what I could expect from someone with your level of skill...Everything was hot as hell, but you could've added a few more personals in there...Good shit

Pyronix:

Punches: 5/10
Personals: 4/10
Wordplay: 5/10
Structure: 8/10
Flow: 8/10
Overall: 30/50=60%

To be honest, this shit wasnt that great...Punches lacked creativity, and they failed to hit very hard...The structure and flow are fine, but everything else needs work...Just my honest opinion...

RTF with the links in my sig...

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Vote=Marv

Explanation: Marv was way more complex and actually came with some cool concepts while pyro's was just too basic .. pyro also wasnt personal at all neither was marv on this one so that kinda dissapointed me .. but yea marv gets this .. please return the vote and vote on my battle wit big city both of you

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

meh, marv gets this easily

pyronix, nothing special man, everything was basic, no personals, which kinda hurt...just nothing stood out, cept the last line was pretty tight, just too late, keep up man....flow and all that was good

marv, shit, not bad man, tite opener, haha, had me laughing, no personals though, but you killed him with the punches...uh, yeah, so you easily got this, shit was more creative and complex, came harder, so you get my vote

v/marvjay.......rtf in my sig plz, thanks, no hate

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

v/ Marvjay

dis fag made an alias da BaTTLE NOOBS cuzz he sound real gay on a beat.
its like u "talk 2 god with ya knee's on a calender" cuzz u "pray on da week".
10 tight ass opener...crazy
if i aint nice y u hate 4 chump?,dont get ya ass wiped and face all lump'd.
give up y have a rap career when u "wont go far" like a "baseball bunt".
8 anotha tight line...its an aight personal
pyronix u really boin marv,get off my dick do somthin go call a broad.
u gon win dis battle? lol nope only "MJ u'll eva RIP" is a "jordan card".*
8 aha dat shit was serious
matter go call ya squad..cuzz punches weak u like rocky in his first fight.
u'll neva have $ ya "road da riches" gon be "shaky like ali on a dirt bike.
8 wow...can u say "merked"??

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Your rec's huge though, so I advise Marv to stop n lay low.
Marv's gettin the wind knocked out of him, better yet a tornado!
7 kinda weak but it was aight...
I mean, over 30 wins? I guess, your text is getting kinda dull.
And yeah, I am hitting rock bottom, punching the base of your skull
4 weak....
Don't questio nthe illest style, cuz I'm the best of sonning, while..
Your just a paedo, who attempted to molest his inner child.
8 basic but it was da aight tho
I told you your lacking fizz, ya get the voters gasps, sucker.
But it's deff not in awe.....It's from RV's asthma sufferers.
6 wtf is a "sufferer"...think u made dat up...if not my fault lol

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marv took it hands down......wordplay, creativity, punches, metas.......pyronix came real weak he really only had 1 tight line........return da favor in any 1 of my battles........1