D523 vs stanza
 

Battle Rules:

10 lines
no d.r
no crew votes

Minimum posts to vote: 200

Check in by: 04-16-05 at 12:32 AM

Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in.

D523 has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-15-05 11:33 PM.

Stanza has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-15-05 11:33 PM.

Ayo

Watch Me Spit this heavenly shit so Heavely Sick
you never can never get in my ass with Yo Lyrical SHIT

Im Crushin "The Kid" Like "523" times and countin
D couldnt flow if he came out of a Water Fountain

Do you smell that fire?....,..Watch me extinguish Him fast
so When the ppl come to vote they gone need oxygen mask

This Dude Alligator rappin The way he always bitting
D Saw I was Above his game & reported a UFO siting

feel like U leaning on nail beds tha way im stabbing ya back
The lost is to bad jus leave
.bcuz now "Mase" wouldnt "welcome you back"

I hope that You dont show so i dont have to worry about anothe rbattle getting slpet on

Battling me, Stanza’s going to have an early fate
Thinkin he a “heavy” threat, but he only “light weight”

He thinks he’s legit, talking all the shit he spits
But that’s not the mic that’s my dick get up off it

Thinking that you’re a big shot cause you can use curse words
I’d spit some personals at you, but your not even registered

Your whole flow is wack, matter of fact, everything about you is a shame
Your from West Coast, call me 50 and ill turn my back on u like u Game

Stanza, face the facts kid, you’ve just been outdone
I won before the verse was written, consider this your final run*


* he wrote a topical about his final run

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upppiinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn nnnn

uppin this shit

uppin this shit again

upping this shit.. how about someone votes on it instead of just viewing it :)

This was feedback posted for Stanza
 

u a bitch 4 not checkin in to our battle.......................good drop though

How about someone votes on this fucking shit

uppin this shitttttttttttttt

uppin thi shit for some more votes.. fuckkkkking vote on it

Yuppidy Uppidy Uppin....

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Yuppidy Uppidy Uppin....

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upping this shit.. how about someone votes on it instead of just viewing it

yeah what fucking stanza wrote.. VOTEEE

Yuppidy Uppidy Uppin....

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Yuppidy Uppidy Uppin....

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Voted For: Stanza

V/Stanza......this was a good battle but stanza gets my vote he came wit Original creative mixed wit vocab punchs an personals wit good structure I felt the 2nd bar nice.....Kid u came weak at first but ur verse got better but u didnt stay consistent wit the hard hittin punchs also some ur lines were played ur structure was striaght......Work on those things..........No Hate..........RETURN THE FAVOR........
Opener=S
Closer=Tie
Structure=Tie
Punchs=S
Personals=S
Multi's=Tie(not many)
Vocab=S
Overall=Stanza..

I already RTF ...D523 has to RTF now... we still uppin for this battle

we can all see that im bout to win ......

Nice drop Though 523 Maybe we will & Can battle agian

Uppin.................:roll:
:roll: ................Uppin

We Still Uppin Up In This Bastard ...................

Voted For: Stanza

Watch Me Spit this heavenly shit so Heavely Sick
you never can never get in my ass with Yo Lyrical SHIT
5...NO! not feelin this, weak opener!
Im Crushin "The Kid" Like "523" times and countin
D couldnt flow if he came out of a Water Fountain
6...better line, ok personal!!
Do you smell that fire?....,..Watch me extinguish Him fast
so When the ppl come to vote they gone need oxygen mask
6...nice!! LoL!! where's my mask??
This Dude Alligator rappin The way he always bitting
D Saw I was Above his game & reported a UFO siting
7...LOL!! i like this line it was clever!!
feel like U leaning on nail beds tha way im stabbing ya back
The lost is to bad jus leave
.bcuz now "Mase" wouldnt "welcome you back"
5...BLEH!! you was doin gud and ya finish wit this!!

OVERALL: 29/50


Battling me, Stanza’s going to have an early fate
Thinkin he a “heavy” threat, but he only “light weight”
5...gay opener to!! that weight shit is played!!
He thinks he’s legit, talking all the shit he spits
But that’s not the mic that’s my dick get up off it
5...NO!! more played shit!!
Thinking that you’re a big shot cause you can use curse words
I’d spit some personals at you, but your not even registered
5...not played but still weak!!
Your whole flow is wack, matter of fact, everything about you is a shame
Your from West Coast, call me 50 and ill turn my back on u like u Game
6...finaaly a fairly decent punch!!
Stanza, face the facts kid, you’ve just been outdone
I won before the verse was written, consider this your final run*
7...Nice!! best line of ya verse. nice personal to!!

OVERALL: 28/30

a close battle............
stanza opened weak and closed weak but in between he had some nice clever punches....D523 started off really wack wit sum played shit for like 3 bars then he brought it together but too little too late......stanza takes this just!!

V/ - stanza

RTF!!! links are in my siggy!! hit one, and if ya voted on one already then hit the other!!! :thumbup:

*MISTAKE* i put 28/30 under D523.......shud be 29/50.....LOL!!! :)

DAMN IT!!! Forgive me for these posts but i am fuckin puttin mistakes all over

what it shud say is 28/50..................that is fuckin rite!!!! LMAO!! I'm stupid!!

i'm done now!! gud battle!! :thumbup:

Uppin Up In This Bitch ....................Ima gO ahead And get This Closed Becuase even
523 Know he lost *NO HATE* Jus sayin I Need to battle somebody Else and this battle is being sleppt on so Do you wanna get it closed ?

Uppin Up In This Bitch .................... .................

This was feedback posted for Stanza
 

Battling me, Stanza’s going to have an early fate
Thinkin he a “heavy” threat, but he only “light weight”
No, played..
He thinks he’s legit, talking all the shit he spits
But that’s not the mic that’s my dick get up off it
No.....................no..............no......... .
Thinking that you’re a big shot cause you can use curse words
I’d spit some personals at you, but your not even registered
Eh
Your whole flow is wack, matter of fact, everything about you is a shame
Your from West Coast, call me 50 and ill turn my back on u like u Game
Terrible............
Stanza, face the facts kid, you’ve just been outdone
I won before the verse was written, consider this your final run
Eh...

Watch Me Spit this heavenly shit so Heavely Sick
you never can never get in my ass with Yo Lyrical SHIT
Alright...
Im Crushin "The Kid" Like "523" times and countin
D couldnt flow if he came out of a Water Fountain
OK punch..
Do you smell that fire?....,..Watch me extinguish Him fast
so When the ppl come to vote they gone need oxygen mask
Flow was better than the punch..
This Dude Alligator rappin The way he always bitting
D Saw I was Above his game & reported a UFO siting
Good...
feel like U leaning on nail beds tha way im stabbing ya back
The lost is to bad jus leave
.bcuz now "Mase" wouldnt "welcome you back"
Eh closer...

532, wasn't feeling the spit, too simplistic, plus I really don't dig mainstream rap references, plus your lines could have really used some beefing up because they were too flimsy to be effective

Stanza, good spits, all punches, 2 were a little weak, but the rest were solid....try incoprorating some more personals, but if that ain't your game, just stick with the punches...

This was feedback posted for Stanza
 

Flow - I wasnt really feeling either flow, the lines seemed too short

Punches - Nothing spectacular but stanza's last two bars were alright

Personals - D had more personals but none of them really hit hard.

Multies - tied because they both had a bar with words rhyming with "shit"

Vocab - both werent very good, elevate

Originality - a lot of both of your verses were played but d came more original...just not hard hitting. Water/flow is hella played and so are "heavy/lightweight" lines

but overall Stanza won this because he had a couple decent punches at the end and i didnt feel D had anything to compete with them

Voted For: Stanza

Battling me, Stanza’s going to have an early fate
Thinkin he a “heavy” threat, but he only “light weight”
^^ok opener...........
He thinks he’s legit, talking all the shit he spits
But that’s not the mic that’s my dick get up off it
^^nah, weak, no punch
Thinking that you’re a big shot cause you can use curse words
I’d spit some personals at you, but your not even registered
^^??....doesnt make sense........
Your whole flow is wack, matter of fact, everything about you is a shame
Your from West Coast, call me 50 and ill turn my back on u like u Game
^^weak punch............
Stanza, face the facts kid, you’ve just been outdone
I won before the verse was written, consider this your final run*

^^ok but not a good closer
overall your drop was simple, work on using some wordplay n gettin more complex, also try n use some nameplays for personals.........
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Watch Me Spit this heavenly shit so Heavely Sick
you never can never get in my ass with Yo Lyrical SHIT
^^nah, bad opener
Im Crushin "The Kid" Like "523" times and countin
D couldnt flow if he came out of a Water Fountain
^^good use of his name, the punch was good
Do you smell that fire?....,..Watch me extinguish Him fast
so When the ppl come to vote they gone need oxygen mask
^^decent concept, ok punch
This Dude Alligator rappin The way he always bitting
D Saw I was Above his game & reported a UFO siting
^^boarderline glorification
feel like U leaning on nail beds tha way im stabbing ya back
The lost is to bad jus leave
.bcuz now "Mase" wouldnt "welcome you back"
^^nah, weak closer
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overall im gonna go with stanza, he had one punch that connected but both of you hafta up your verses content
try using wordplay n more metas n personal.........
a rather weak battle

Thanx Mayne ................I Wish I Could RTF But You Have a Battle With Someone in my crew so I Cant vote in that But Thanx for the vote

Voted For: Stanza

Watch Me Spit this heavenly shit so Heavely Sick
you never can never get in my ass with Yo Lyrical SHIT
6/10..nice opener
Im Crushin "The Kid" Like "523" times and countin
D couldnt flow if he came out of a Water Fountain
6/10, kinda played bu you made it iight
Do you smell that fire?....,..Watch me extinguish Him fast
so When the ppl come to vote they gone need oxygen mask
5/10...wasnt feelin it
This Dude Alligator rappin The way he always bitting
D Saw I was Above his game & reported a UFO siting
7/10...nice punches
feel like U leaning on nail beds tha way im stabbing ya back
The lost is to bad jus leave
.bcuz now "Mase" wouldnt "welcome you back"
6/10 decent closer


Battling me, Stanza’s going to have an early fate
Thinkin he a “heavy” threat, but he only “light weight”
5/10...attempted but you didnt get this werdplay quite right
He thinks he’s legit, talking all the shit he spits
But that’s not the mic that’s my dick get up off it
5/10...wack
Thinking that you’re a big shot cause you can use curse words
I’d spit some personals at you, but your not even registered
6/10...decent
Your whole flow is wack, matter of fact, everything about you is a shame
Your from West Coast, call me 50 and ill turn my back on u like u Game
5/10..shoodve approached it differently
Stanza, face the facts kid, you’ve just been outdone
I won before the verse was written, consider this your final run*
6/10...decent closer

sry d523 for voting against you again lol.but ne ways, stanza won this because he had better punches...d523 elevate a lil bit and think about your verses more before you post them and i guarantee youll have more win ;)

v/stanza

rtf