TiLT vs BkBrawla
 

Battle Rules:

10-Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting


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Check in by: 04-16-05 at 04:52 PM

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TiLT has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-16-05 04:23 PM.

Do you care?............................................. ...........

BkBrawla has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-16-05 04:28 PM.

*Hes doing audio, that what he said.

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This was feedback posted for TiLT
 

checkin tha mu fuckin polls niggas...tilt, get down wit Livin Legends bro.......

Voted For: TiLT

TiLT took this one to me. Better wordplay, which was a key factor. The closer was kind of off, but other than that, I give you the vote. Your punches didn't really connect that good though.
BKBrawla you had a nice verse, but far too simple for me. I think you should work on presenting yourself, and coming more creative. I don't think your punches made as much since as you wanted em to. I think if this was a audio battle you wouldve had it, but seeing how it's not, my vote goes to TiLt.

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This was feedback posted for TiLT
 

your jawnt was pretty hot...better than brawlas...

Yo uppin for votes.....................................

Voted For: BkBrawla

LoL Weak Battle!But Brawla Came Alright With His Verse:
Vote:Brawla
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Brawla Actually MAde Sense With His Punchlinez!Tilt You Would have One This Battle If It All Made Sense!The Only Line I Was Feelin On Ya Verse Tilt Was Ya Last One!
Brawla Have Some Weak Punches n Da Wordplay Was Weak But The Rhymin Scheme Was good!
Punches>Brawla
Metas>(umm)Brawla
Personalz>Brawla
Wordplay>Both Weak But:Tilt
So My Vote GOes To Brawla!
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Honest Vote!RTF on Ghost vs XquizitLyricist!Holla

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

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This was feedback posted for BkBrawla
 

This aint yo bed time but u bout to go to sleep
i'll stick my foot so far in yo mouth my shoe strings will floss yo teeth,
I'll put u in a bastard's grave,
and have u and yo homies working in fields like master slaves,
i float in mid air while u still on da ground
going against me u wouldn't last 2 rounds
yo girls ugly as fuck but mines are pretty
and I'll put 9 shots in yo ass like 50.

Voted For: TiLT

Its cold in the earth but you'll receive-this-shit-hot
You athiest? i'll still send you to hell believe-it-or-not
Barz is prune juiced, you got no hard-shit
I'll bury U w/ your picture now u're an underground artist
Dogg, your way Out-Of-Range, its Strange to see No-Reel-Change
Brawla u cant beat me wit "Punches-More-Played" than Monopoly-Games

Tite Verse Dawg, Da Punchez Wuz Flawless, Flow Wuz Rite On Point, Good Vocab An Use Ov Personalz 2, Aint Nuthin I Can Be MadAt Bout Yo Verse

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leave u blood like color of text, Grapple Ya "Wind-Pipe" to Hold-Yer-Breath
Like a "Dead-Man-Walkin-In-His-Game" Imma Leave This Kids Key-Bored-To-Death
DatCloser Wuz Hot Lyke Fahrenheit Dawg! U Got Da Win...



leave u blood like color of text, Grapple Ya "Wind-Pipe" to Hold-Yer-Breath
Like a "Dead-Man-Walkin-In-His-Game" Imma Leave This Kids Key-Bored-To-Death

Yo Ya' Verse Wuz Iight, Good Creativity In Da Linez, Good Flow 2, Punchez Wuzza Lil Off In Sum Partz, An Hiz Closer Wuz Much Mo Witty Than Ur'z, Still Nuthin Bad In Yo Verse, Juz Didnt Have DaWordplay & Punz Dat Tilt Had

Plz Return Da Vote In Mah Signature Yall

Yo Ya Big Dummy !¬¬¬

U Wuznt Krew Wen I Polled Diz, But Have It Removed Now Cu We Are Krew

Voted For: TiLT

Ok ok ok....

Burger King:
Overall, your shit was fuckin wack...you need to elevate like fat midgets with out any legs...go bite off another website or something coz you suck...seriously...but work on everything yo and you will get better eventually.

TiLT:
OMFG that verse was straight fire!!!! i never seen anything so hot in my whole life...More played than monopoly games...hahaha man you got the creativity of the comic genius's of family guy...seriously...but as for what you need to work on...work on everything your shit was mad fucked up...did you see that structure?...even a land rover wouldnt dare go across that terrain...anyways...you just had the better punch

Overall: TiLT won because he threw a punch, and a decent one at that...BK work on your shiz fam..pz..

Vote: TiLT

Voted For: TiLT

ok both competitors did good tilt although outshined his opponents in everythin to personals, punches, delivery, flo, and structure was more to brawla but both did good just tilt got the v/ cuz his verse was way betta in ever aspect so my v/ goes to tilt

Uppin da battle 4 family--------------------------

Voted For: TiLT

Its cold in the earth but you'll receive-this-shit-hot
You athiest? i'll still send you to hell believe-it-or-not
^^flow nicely...but was not a good punch 7/10
Barz is prune juiced, you got no hard-shit
I'll bury U w/ your picture now u're an underground artist
^^really feelin this line 9/10
Dogg, your way Out-Of-Range, its Strange to see No-Reel-Change
Brawla u cant beat me wit "Punches-More-Played" than Monopoly-Games
^^played out
This kid aint no brawla, Like Alfalfa hes a Lova not a Fighta
Open ya eyes a lil Wida to see Im more letha than a Spida
^^I dun get this one,seemed to glorify
leave u blood like color of text, Grapple Ya "Wind-Pipe" to Hold-Yer-Breath
Like a "Dead-Man-Walkin-In-His-Game" Imma Leave This Kids Key-Bored-To-Death
^^Nice

Conclusion-This was a nice verse.Ur best line was the one bout underground.Ur worst was that monopoly one.
Some more personals would be nice.

Kid you make your lips numb by spitting them stink rhymes
He could put gold paint on his tongue, but still his profits won't shine
^^hot,feelin this line
I can guess what's your next audio track is going to be "kneel to the cheif"
Your punches are like your balls, without legs they still won't touch thee (ground)
^^wtf/didn't rhyme,punchline was good but it didn't rhyme.
This kid think he's an bully, he went to beauty school "to tease hair"
Kid use gay pick up lines instead of punches like "can i push in your stool lair?"
^^whack
Tilt plays with "pooh" all day, no wonder his punches stink like hell
When this bitch came out, his mom put him next piece of crap "twins" she yelled
^^decent
Kid your punches are amuse like an cigarettes mix with hot water "soggy butts"
He though being a volcano, was to eat so many beans and like the crap erupt
^^decent

Conclusion-Well the biggest problem was that u had a line that didn't rhyme.U got some good punchline concepts there...but the way u put it toghether didn't work.

Vote-Tilt(return tha favor or i'm dq this vote)

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=193881
^^return tha favor