generic disease vs PreZidict
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
12 lines max.

goodluck

Minimum posts to vote: 50

Check in by: 04-18-05 at 08:25 PM

Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in.

generic disease has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-18-05 07:28 PM.

PreZidict has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-18-05 07:32 PM.

thorn a killa?? please, been here "longer" than me & still "fallin off" like glueless weave
u got "gerber" lines.........even when "babies" read ya shit dey dont give u "feed"*
u should be ashamed of ya raps, son jus "hide yaself" like "disgraceful bats"
any1 who reads ya writtens jus laugh, cuz dis "puss not focused" like "distracted cats"
"disease a crotch"..........u create da "illness" inside "nook"**
funny, u gettin more "zeros put in ya frame" than a name "portrait of murda mOOk
PreZ got him shook, u "nervous" let go ya "pen" before u "scare da book!"
u baked nigga but far from cooked, my lyrics indicate a vet...urs signal a rook!
"mammal rings"..............u gon get "married 2 animals"
y u put "meat" on da screen?? my verse "ate" urs like a digital "cannibal!"

nigga u slay me, i prey-thee...keep ya "ass seated" like ya "crack is lazy"
move packs..fiends pay me, while dis "rabbit's generic disease" consists of "rabies"***


*babies eat gerber so its obvious dat gerber is a baby food (DUH)
**nook (nookie)......also known as pussy, etc.
***his names "thorn" and "generic disease" is his alias

yo check it

im battlin this bitch for the hell of it, im gunna swat this prick
he doesnt even got respect for himself
.................................he named himself "PREZ-A-DICK!"
ill give it to you straight, homie you just flat out suck
his chances of lossin is like a thunder storms hitten..
...then hes gunna get struck!
your bein ripped, you and your rhymes are as soft as silk
niggaz family has to eat cereal wit forks...
........just to conserve milk!
just like ya sig, when he sees me he "always be movin"
cuz even if a vet was workin on ya....
............."ya still couldnt be improvin"
he cant catch up wit my lyrics, nah son your "too slow"
the only win in his record is when he paid the guy to "no show"
relatin to stats nigga, you always gonna be "below"
cuz son you couldnt find luck...
....even if you found a pot of gold on a rainbow

12 lines..if you dont get personals dont vote.

aight son..........good verse...........everybody use dat line about my sig tho..........niggas start votin

Voted For: generic disease

Ok This iS what i feel

GD
Ya Structure was slopp but ya verse made some sense althoough your opener was pretty weak id excuse You for that ........you should work on controlling your Structure bcuz all those marks makes it hard to read so ..... try to work oin that in the future

PD

Your structure was very sloppy to but .....your verse also lost me at some pionts which messed you up big time if you was trying to get some votes ....which is rally on of the main goals of the verse ..... I dont know what to tell you Except for try to elevate a little and youll get better

RTF .....IN Any of the battles in my sig HONESTLY DONT HATE VOTE PREZIDICT

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true @ about da structure...da shit was terrible i admit it...but chea i'll vote n no it wont be a hate vote lol

0-1

Good battle Prez, upppin..........................................

Voted For: generic disease

im battlin this bitch for the hell of it, im gunna swat this prick
he doesnt even got respect for himself
.................................he named himself "PREZ-A-DICK!"
^^^AVERAGE OPENER
ill give it to you straight, homie you just flat out suck
his chances of lossin is like a thunder storms hitten..
...then hes gunna get struck!
^^^IIGHT LINE
your bein ripped, you and your rhymes are as soft as silk
niggaz family has to eat cereal wit forks...
........just to conserve milk!
^^^^WAAAAAAAAAAACCCCCCCCCKKKKKKKK N PLAYED
just like ya sig, when he sees me he "always be movin"
cuz even if a vet was workin on ya....
............."ya still couldnt be improvin"
^^^PRETTY GOOD LINE
he cant catch up wit my lyrics, nah son your "too slow"
the only win in his record is when he paid the guy to "no show"
^^^NICE LINE AS WELL
relatin to stats nigga, you always gonna be "below"
cuz son you couldnt find luck...
....even if you found a pot of gold on a rainbow
^^^DECENT CLOSURE

Generic Disease- MOS OF UR SHIT WUZ IIGHT.SUM PUNCHES CAME REAL WEAK BUT MANY LANDED. I LIKEED UR USE OF WORDPLAY AND PERSONALS TO TRY N MURK UR OPPONENT. ELEVATION IZ NEEDED NO DOUBT. SOM SHIT WUZ BASIC BUT FOR DA MOS PART UR VERSE WUZ PRETTTY AVERAGE.
7/10


PReZidict

thorn a killa?? please, been here "longer" than me & still "fallin off" like glueless weave
u got "gerber" lines.........even when "babies" read ya shit dey dont give u "feed"*
^^^IIIGHT OPENER
u should be ashamed of ya raps, son jus "hide yaself" like "disgraceful bats"
any1 who reads ya writtens jus laugh, cuz dis "puss not focused" like "distracted cats"
^^^O.K
"disease a crotch"..........u create da "illness" inside "nook"**
funny, u gettin more "zeros put in ya frame" than a name "portrait of murda mOOk
^^^HA HA GOOD LINE
PreZ got him shook, u "nervous" let go ya "pen" before u "scare da book!"
u baked nigga but far from cooked, my lyrics indicate a vet...urs signal a rook!
^^^NAHH NOT REALLY DAT GUD
"mammal rings"..............u gon get "married 2 animals"
y u put "meat" on da screen?? my verse "ate" urs like a digital "cannibal!"
HA HA HAD ME LAUGHIN

nigga u slay me, i prey-thee...keep ya "ass seated" like ya "crack is lazy"
move packs..fiends pay me, while dis "rabbit's generic disease" consists of "rabies"***
^^^AVERAGE CLOSURE


PREZIDICT- MOS OF UR LINES RAN WAY TO LONG. UR STRUCTURE WUZ FUCKED.IT WUZ HARD 2 READ B/C OF TRYIN 2 CRAM 2 MANY LYRICS IN 1 LINE. I LIKED UR PERSONALS AND PUNCHES DOE. U NEED TO ELEVATE AS WELL. FOR A NEWB U R IIGHT. KEEP ELEVATIN N U B IIGHT.

MY V/ GENERIC DISEASE

CUD U CHECK OUT MAH BATTLE VS. LFS PLEASE VOTES AND FEED R NEEDED 4 BOF OF US
THANX

aight thank u 4 votin son......i'ma peep ya shit namean....0-2 i really needa work on da structure dat shit is killin me!

This was feedback posted for generic disease
 

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Voted For: PreZidict

v/prezidict
becuz...he had more complex harder hitting punches wit nice vocab added in there...he had original creative punches that hit pretty hard in dis battle..da baby food shit was dope.lol made me laugh a lil....da only negative bout ur verse was da structure...it was a lil off it was still easy to read but u could have closed da gaps and and make ya lines even up a lil more......
generic-your verse wasnt bad it just wasnt good enuff this time...u had some good things here and there u just wasnt consistent enough with it all..

^^good lookin on da vote dunny........1-2..........uppin 4 more votes

Voted For: PreZidict

i gave it tClosedo u man cuz u r hot is hell every thing was nice

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chea thank u for votin mandela & marvelis.........uppin for more votes......2-2

uppin.........................my structure in dis one is.............SMH...........vote up

Voted For: PreZidict

im battlin this bitch for the hell of it, im gunna swat this prick
he doesnt even got respect for himself
.................................he named himself "PREZ-A-DICK!"
Don't use same word twice....
ill give it to you straight, homie you just flat out suck
his chances of lossin is like a thunder storms hitten..
...then hes gunna get struck!
terrible wording....
your bein ripped, you and your rhymes are as soft as silk
niggaz family has to eat cereal wit forks...
........just to conserve milk!
Ha....
just like ya sig, when he sees me he "always be movin"
cuz even if a vet was workin on ya....
............."ya still couldnt be improvin"
No........
he cant catch up wit my lyrics, nah son your "too slow"
the only win in his record is when he paid the guy to "no show"
Eh...played....
relatin to stats nigga, you always gonna be "below"
cuz son you couldnt find luck...
....even if you found a pot of gold on a rainbow
Weak closer..

thorn a killa?? please, been here "longer" than me & still "fallin off" like glueless weave
u got "gerber" lines.........even when "babies" read ya shit dey dont give u "feed"*
Nice opener..
u should be ashamed of ya raps, son jus "hide yaself" like "disgraceful bats"
any1 who reads ya writtens jus laugh, cuz dis "puss not focused" like "distracted cats"
Strained but still good...
"disease a crotch"..........u create da "illness" inside "nook"**
funny, u gettin more "zeros put in ya frame" than a name "portrait of murda mOOk
Eh....
PreZ got him shook, u "nervous" let go ya "pen" before u "scare da book!"
u baked nigga but far from cooked, my lyrics indicate a vet...urs signal a rook!
Lead-in was weak, but nice punch...
"mammal rings"..............u gon get "married 2 animals"
y u put "meat" on da screen?? my verse "ate" urs like a digital "cannibal!"
Nah.......
nigga u slay me, i prey-thee...keep ya "ass seated" like ya "crack is lazy"
move packs..fiends pay me, while dis "rabbit's generic disease" consists of "rabies"***
Eh.....ok closer...


Generic's shit was just that, generic, played and overall weak...Prez had better punchlines and complexity..

Voted For: PreZidict

voted for prez...........

disease under estimated prez and didnt come fuul force...


punches...both
personals....disease
metas.........prez
wordplay...prez
structure........both was weak
overall.....prez

prez had a couple lines that just capped his verse off more than disease...both verses were ight nothin special......but in the end disease was missin one hard ass punch to take the win...but he didnt come wit it..prez good shit boi

Voted For: PreZidict

DiSeAsE verse:

im battlin this bitch for the hell of it, im gunna swat this prick
he doesnt even got respect for himself
.................................he named himself "PREZ-A-DICK!"
Not the best opener that I think you couldve came with. That personal was weak, and not hard hitting at all.

ill give it to you straight, homie you just flat out suck
his chances of lossin is like a thunder storms hitten..
...then hes gunna get struck!
Structure messed this line up, which I felt couldve been worded wayy better

your bein ripped, you and your rhymes are as soft as silk
niggaz family has to eat cereal wit forks...
........just to conserve milk!
When I first read this line, I was like, 'wtf', but then it dawned on me 3 seconds later when I began to read the last line, this was dope. Your best so far

just like ya sig, when he sees me he "always be movin"
cuz even if a vet was workin on ya....
............."ya still couldnt be improvin"
I could sense you heating up. This wasnt all that, but it was better than the others, and you showin a lil consistency now

he cant catch up wit my lyrics, nah son your "too slow"
the only win in his record is when he paid the guy to "no show"
Worded kinda off I think, but this was descent. Nothing spectacular, but it hit pretty hard,

relatin to stats nigga, you always gonna be "below"
cuz son you couldnt find luck...
....even if you found a pot of gold on a rainbow
Structured wayy off, and not a good opener

I think you need tow work on your structure, your opener and closer and coming a lil bit more consistent in your battles. Not too many hard hitting punches in this one, but that's the least of your problems, because I can see that you got some skillz.


PreZidict verse:

thorn a killa?? please, been here "longer" than me & still "fallin off" like glueless weave
u got "gerber" lines.........even when "babies" read ya shit dey dont give u "feed"*
Not the best opener here, and this was a long ass punch to read. Nothin big here, just there

u should be ashamed of ya raps, son jus "hide yaself" like "disgraceful bats"
any1 who reads ya writtens jus laugh, cuz dis "puss not focused" like "distracted cats"
Not too hard of a punch, but it was still there

"disease a crotch"..........u create da "illness" inside "nook"**
funny, u gettin more "zeros put in ya frame" than a name "portrait of murda mOOk
Couldve been better

PreZ got him shook, u "nervous" let go ya "pen" before u "scare da book!"
u baked nigga but far from cooked, my lyrics indicate a vet...urs signal a rook!
Pretty descent punch here!

"mammal rings"..............u gon get "married 2 animals"
y u put "meat" on da screen?? my verse "ate" urs like a digital "cannibal!"
stretched, but descent

nigga u slay me, i prey-thee...keep ya "ass seated" like ya "crack is lazy"
move packs..fiends pay me, while dis "rabbit's generic disease" consists of "rabies"***
Nice closer. I was waiting for that personal to come in, it was a lil too predictable though.

This was a nice verse. I would say work on ur structure, but I seen better structure outta you. Some hard hitting punches, well, not that hard, but harder than you oponent which will always give you the win. I just think you should work on some harder personals next time. But this was a good battle

Overall, I guess I'ma hafto give my verse to prezidict, because I felt he came a lil bit stronger in this one, and had the least amount of errors. Both of ya'll started off kinda slow, but then picked it up near the end, but that wont always be a good choice. Prezidict gets my vote, because I was feeling his verse more, and I felt he came a lil bit harder.

RTF...Link in sig against esco ya'll....Thanx. Or murdz, Dont matter which one.

Oh, I forgot to say, both of ya'll got some skillz and potential, and I think that's exactly what my crew Livin' Legendz is looking for, so if ya'll want to be in a active, loyal crew with coo fam, drop by and post some shit in the tryout thread.

~1~, oh and RTF.

chea Dot................uppin for more votes................