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hard times
CHORUS-thirteen years old i was up in jail.....
my moms couldnt pay tha price of my bail... a young kid tryin to make it in that place.... but i looked to god,and never lost faith..... VERSE 1- it started as a youth trying to do sumthing new..... but if i only knew tha path was bout to pursue.... in and out of trouble faster than a premature load.... people tried to reach me,its like there words were morse code.... so i kept doin drugs and killing my family life..... i fucked up there life,cut there hearts like a knife.... i could feel tha tension at home,gettin thicker by tha hour..... but they could only stand and watch,as if on an observation tower.. but every single day,as i watched my life fade away...... i was causing a massacer,like that one valintines day.... CHORUS-thirteen years old i was up in jail..... my moms couldnt pay tha price of my bail... a young kid tryin to make it in that place.... but i looked to god,and never lost faith..... VERSE 2- with tha drugs come jail,i was in tha pen like ink..... that shit aint very classy,when yo toilets your sink.... id scrap my tooth brush on tha floor so i would feel secure.... knowing i could be shanked at night,i was never to sure.... eighteen months in tha box,only outside an hour a day.... id get beat,theyd put moves on me like it was a basket ball play.... but like i said at tha first yall,never loose faith in wut u believe.... cuz if ya dont give a shit youll be inna box on christmas eve... now i got sum shit straight i only smoke cronic and drink.... but im still not all here,i sizzled sum wires on that binge i think..... CHORUS-thirteen years old i was up in jail..... my moms couldnt pay tha price of my bail... a young kid tryin to make it in that place.... but i looked to god,and never lost faith..... peace yall |
that was some good shit...you could use some multis or something but other than that nice in content it flowed very nicely as well
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whas alot softer then what u usually drop but it was pretty tight god use of wordplay n vocab skills. creative drop fam pretty nice. throw some multies in it
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thanx yall .........armada its a true ryme softer its real how is me being in jail at thirteen soft
lol anyway way i wanted to sumthing other than diss sumone im sikk of that shit this is real sumone bustin my head open with there internet glock is not just sumthing diff fer yall |
this was aiight... i wouldve loved to see more creativity. the topic was sorta bland. being that its been used a thousand times over. a different approach or different wording woulda made this dope. but u can tell a story pretty decent. work on your metas was well. overall a aiight drop.... feed on sum of my work when u get a chance
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i like the drop the picture that was painted was clear and came across cool. tight but could been a lil better with some wordplay. Don't get me wrong the verse can concept was tight but just on the lil straight forward side....keep drop dog......
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dont disrespectin ya verse so dont jump out at me, it was a song i could compare to tupac changes- it was softer then he usually sang look at hit em up then changes ight now calm down dont get all hostile fam.
I siad nice verse leave it at that |
lol i wasnt gettin mad just didnt know what ya ment by softer
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yea casper.. u really doin ur shit
i like the diversity of the topic as opposed to your other drops .. just dont get too soft on us lol 7.5/10 good job.. keep it up |
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Hmm...this was a'ight...vocab was decent...flow was a lil off, you need some work on your structure...decent story...keep at it...
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this was a decent drop...structure was off in one or two places and tha hook couldda been better but nobody's perfect....ya verses really stayed on topic and created a good image of wut u was goin thru. stay up & rtf.1.
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Yo nice shit homie........yo i have a OM called da same thing Hard Times by Me ft.Buck.Shot and LyricalFlowz....heres da link leave some feed back homie....
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=181030 ~1~ |
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yo pretty good better than some of ur other ones a lil basic but otherwise really good 7/10 keep it up
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pretty ill stuff Casper, nice creative lines with dope wordplay, not much i can fault on the peice ta be real wit'cha homeboy..
only flaw is the hook, sorry...wasnt feeling it, seemed a little...corny? lol, no offence, the verses was right on point...an the hook dosent matter anyway, i enjoyed it 7.5/10 look forward ta our collab man.. |
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This was a decent drop.. could have been alot better.. if
you would have used some creativity.. "Hard times".. A very commen topic, but you didnt express in good wording , how hard those times were , and what happen to you in those times You did say why it was hard times , but i just felt you could have elaborated more Structure was off, it wasnt hepling the reader at all.. Vocab and worplay usuage was decent, but could have been alot better. ..keep it up |
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^ya i felt ya shit there...nice wordplay and good structure...overall i think it would sound dope in audio format....~1~ |
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hey yo dog that joint is hot keep up the good work and go at these niggas hard this is ur boy babyfacegangstar holla back 1 love
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