BLACK~MAGIK vs Daubs
 

Battle Rules:

6-8 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

All Votes Must Be Explained!!!

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 04-22-05 at 09:49 PM

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BLACK~MAGIK has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-22-05 09:20 PM.

Daubs has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-22-05 09:22 PM.

Yo...

I'ma crush this kid, gangsta? Please, you're nothing bitch!
I'm "so hot like stove tops" you "couldn't touch me with oven mits"
I'm grippin' the iron, the trey'll speak, make this faker cease
Then watch this hater "sink" like a "kitchen appliance"
This man's game's hollow, and it can't stop me dawg
But I will "pop your top" like a "champagne bottle!"
You a lame emcee, know better than to play with me
Because ya rhymes "don't make cents" like "broken change machines"


Meh...key'd...8 lines...G'luck man

Quick spit..

Called me out in my own thread,but only if "im not scared"??..*
Bitch you gonna get it now,cuz like the SAS,im always prepared!!

Ima "shatter" your record, like a brick through glass..**
Called me out like a gansta, but still show no class!!

My punches hit you full in the face, yours barely connect..***
Takes more than battlin 5 newbies......to gain my respect!!

Your magik like a magician so u make me see things..****
That jus fake shit, kinda like the skill you bring!!

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* said accept unless im scared
** break his unbeaten record
*** 5 wins against newbies
**** played off MAJIK

Nice personals...Uppin to get some votes on this motherfucka!!!!

NICE DROP, GOOD LUCK

no hate ye. .

weerd...no hate man...G'l.........................

Uppin for some fuckin votes.......................

Voted For: BLACK~MAGIK

I was feelin black magik on this one I liked his punches better.
They were more creative and hit harder. Daubs u need to elevate a little bit man. Magik won this for his flow and punches and wordplay, but Daubs got him in personals. However, my vote goes to BM

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Ok...thanx for the vote...Uppin for more!!!!!!!!!!

Voted For: Daubs

okaaay...
black? ya opener was of any irrevlivence????...i dont ever see Daubs sayin' he ''gangsta''...
an the oven mits may have been ILL AS FUCK in ah freestyle, but it was more of ah self glory thing from you...so the opener conerning personals an disses, was not the strongest Black..

after the topener, i failed ta see the lines connecting???
there was no real flow, an half the time yo' shit didnt even rhyme....you stayed on how HE CANT BEAT YOU, An uppin yourself...concentrate more on personals, an making him look stupid, not biggin yourself...ya feel black?

Daubs:
first things first homeboy....dont seperate ya bars like that, shit looks uggglllyyy...
buit Daubs, ya had more creativity ta offer, punches could be improved, an the wordplay some what also...like the closer, ya builded it up real nice with the magaician line, then ya had like 5 words ta finish it off...just try using your ideas for punches an personals more effectively...

but still....ya stayed on topic, ya stayed with consistantly dissing black, you used personals (even if the opener seemed a little forced) you still had the better verse on the whole...creativity, personals....an actually stayin dissing your oppenent an not biggin yourself

vote/ Daubs

Voted For: Daubs

I'ma crush this kid, gangsta? Please, you're nothing bitch!
I'm "so hot like stove tops" you "couldn't touch me with oven mits"
6...gud opener, but u gotta be more creative with them "HOT" lines cuz they are getting played!!
I'm grippin' the iron, the trey'll speak, make this faker cease
Then watch this hater "sink" like a "kitchen appliance"
0...ok. NO! this didnt even rhyme!!
This man's game's hollow, and it can't stop me dawg
But I will "pop your top" like a "champagne bottle!"
0...NO!NO!NO! didn't rhyme again...if anyone votes for you they are pure dickriders!!
You a lame emcee, know better than to play with me
Because ya rhymes "don't make cents" like "broken change machines"
6...been done before but still gud!!

OVERALL: 12/40


Called me out in my own thread,but only if "im not scared"??..*
Bitch you gonna get it now,cuz like the SAS,im always prepared!!
7...yea bitch!! SAS!! i'm english so i get that line!!
Ima "shatter" your record, like a brick through glass..**
Called me out like a gansta, but still show no class!!
5...not feelin it, i already done that brick thru glass line to...shits gotta be done right!!
My punches hit you full in the face, yours barely connect..***
Takes more than battlin 5 newbies......to gain my respect!!
6...aight personal!!
Your magik like a magician so u make me see things..****
That jus fake shit, kinda like the skill you bring!!
5...weak closer!!! magic shit is played!!

OVERALL: 23/40

aight check it...........daubs gets this cuz he had a couple of decent punches...a couple were weak but black magik was wack.....two of his bars didnt even fuckin rhyme so daubs gets this for a far better verse.

V/ - Daubs

return the fave..........links are in my siggy!!!!

Voted For: Daubs

ight close battle... daubs thisa is decent for your first battle good job man imma break it down...

Daubs

Called me out in my own thread,but only if "im not scared"??..*
Bitch you gonna get it now,cuz like the SAS,im always prepared!!
alryyt opener.. no punch really
Ima "shatter" your record, like a brick through glass..**
Called me out like a gansta, but still show no class!!
alryyt couldav been worded better
My punches hit you full in the face, yours barely connect..***
Takes more than battlin 5 newbies......to gain my respect!!
nicee personal decent punch here aswel
Your magik like a magician so u make me see things..****
That jus fake shit, kinda like the skill you bring!!
another nice line pklayed of his name decent closure

ight daubs overall i thought you had some decent shit in ther and some played shit i felt you had no piunches becuz u were more interested in finding the rhye... no biggi though good verse 15/20

Magik

I'ma crush this kid, gangsta? Please, you're nothing bitch!
I'm "so hot like stove tops" you "couldn't touch me with oven mits"
^^ not a very good opener self gloryfication
I'm grippin' the iron, the trey'll speak, make this faker cease
Then watch this hater "sink" like a "kitchen appliance"
^^ nice wordplay but it doesnt rhyme
This man's game's hollow, and it can't stop me dawg
But I will "pop your top" like a "champagne bottle!"
^^ alryyt couldav been wordfed better
You a lame emcee, know better than to play with me
Because ya rhymes "don't make cents" like "broken change machines"
^^ nicee decent closure and a decent punch

ight man u have potential keep doing your thing n u will get somwhere but some of your lines didnt rhyme n u had a self glorification in there which isnt good in a battle... you had a couple of decent punches in there

v/ daubs becuz he had punches and more personals magik only had punches and half his shit didnt rhyme rlly...

rtf on my battle wit U.T.A link is in the sig pz....

Lmao...how can you say the shit doesnt rhyme?

I'm -GRIPPIN THE IRON- the trey'll speak, make this faker cease
Then watch this hater "sink" like a "-KITCHEN APPLIANCE-"

kitchen appliance and grippin the iron rhyme...

This -MANS GAMES HOLLOW- and it cant stop me dawg
but I will 'pop your top' like a -CHAMPAGNE BOTTLE-

Look at the shit that is capitalized...y'all were just reading it wrong...Uppin for some fuckin votes

well sorry but rhymin the start of one bar and the end of the next dont work for me, i think it is stupid.............its shud be the end of the bars that rhyme

and even still ya punches were not that hard at all..............Daubs still won!!!

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Wow...Why would I pre-write for an 8 line battle? lmao...all key'd...Uppin...

uppin this shizzle................................

^^ What he said...To the motherfuckin roof bitches!!!

Voted For: BLACK~MAGIK

hey black i peeped yo lass battl 2 an diz wuz much bettr yuh had dem killer linez dat made daubs look reel stupid where az daubz had linez dat dint hit hard an yoi personalz seemed ta go wit da flow an daubz had a few forced linez such az dat show no class line, daubs u jst wanted sumthing 2 rhyme wit glass u should tink linez thru befo u used dem in yo battlz

^your a fool, he had no personals,
you even voted agenst cali vs casper wen it wer obvious.

Voted For: BLACK~MAGIK

BLACK~MAGIK ripped it. Way betta punches, multis, and overall way betta flo. Daubs you need to step it up man. that shit was whack.

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Weerd...thanx for the vote...Uppin for someone to close this shit...1

Uppin for votes...

^what he said . .

Voted For: Daubs

V/ Daubs, because Majik had played and weak punches and metas.. especially the oven mitt line, and Daubs personals were alot better and hit, but they werent great, only decent..this was really 1 sided but really weak also.. alright 1.

Voted For: Daubs

BLACK~MAGIK

I'ma crush this kid, gangsta? Please, you're nothing bitch!
I'm "so hot like stove tops" you "couldn't touch me with oven mits"
^bit of self-glorification but aight opener

I'm grippin' the iron, the trey'll speak, make this faker cease
Then watch this hater "sink" like a "kitchen appliance"
rhyming doesn't work so well in my opinion, no real punch

This man's game's hollow, and it can't stop me dawg
But I will "pop your top" like a "champagne bottle!"
dawg-bottle?nah..no punch again..

You a lame emcee, know better than to play with me
Because ya rhymes "don't make cents" like "broken change machines
^okay closer

Aight, you need to work on some stuff in fact because you didn't really have any hardhitting punches or personals. Got nice wordplay though and your vocab was good as well but some of those rhyming words just didn't work. Structure was good and flow was decent, just fix those rhymes and up your punches, no hate man...


Daubs


Called me out in my own thread,but only if "im not scared"??..*
Bitch you gonna get it now,cuz like the SAS,im always prepared!!
^hehe, nice opener

Ima "shatter" your record, like a brick through glass..**
Called me out like a gansta, but still show no class!!
^good, no real punch though

My punches hit you full in the face, yours barely connect..***
Takes more than battlin 5 newbies......to gain my respect!!
^okay , bit self-glorification but its cool

Your magik like a magician so u make me see things..****
That jus fake shit, kinda like the skill you bring!!
^funny closer

Good verse right here, had some nice punches, few good personals and the vocab was aight. Structure was cool too and had your flow on lock. Now get some more creativity in there and you're set but this was good verse, enjoyable to read and it beat the other cat for sure because you had better and more hardhitting punches!

Please RTF, link's in my sig...