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Pen or Poet? (quick piece)
If you were but a poet And I were but your pen Enjoined in weaving tapestries Please tell me, now, what then Could we write our destiny The poet and the pen Embellish all our fantasies Find love time and again Would we sail the seven seas To find the pirates lair Or ride upon the noblest steeds Pluck stars out of the air Could we fathom ocean’s depths Explore the coral reefs Climb Tibetan mountain peaks Hold firm in our beliefs Or simply with the sands of time Would all my ink run dry Would you release me from your hands Put down your head and sigh Would we close our chapter Would all our dreams be lost Would all the pages then go blank As white as winter’s frost Would we simply be no more The poet or the pen Would your muse then lose her voice To never sing again But if we wrote our ending Seems despite the best laid schemes We’d somehow find each other If only in our dreams psst.. I do not wanna get kicked out for inactiveness.. Key'd. Uppin.. some of the dopest shit i ever read on this site,makes my job worthwhile~FLUID |
you sure you wrote this i should goggle it........................;)anyways this is amzingly dope nice imagery dope wordplay usage good vocab just enough this is a really really good piece very imganitive good way to relate your love to a female nice all around i can say nothing at all bad about this poem it should be stickeyed
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yeah, this was coo....really enjoyed the imagery in this one, very imaginitive...all around great piece, nice tone to it, perfect flow....word word, sticky this, this was a great read
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(LoL) funny.. really funny! :thumbup: How does it get stickeyed? Andway.. yeah.. thankx.. everyone drop a link if you want feedback.. upPin.. Sweft |
Calme yo aquÃ- deberé aliviar su tensión. Gocé este poema. imágenes estaban en el punto. vocab trabajó perfectamente. la estructura era agradable también. muy creador. debe obtener representado la semana próxima con el poema que estoy a punto de dejar de caer.
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Gracias. Goce tambien a sus escritores el poema bloqueado. Quiero trabajar en un poema con usted.
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this was a good piece, a very good one....i couldn't ever think of a topic like that....the imagery was there....the emoton....i mean it all went together well....and i also liked your rhyme scheme.....like C.AL.I. said it should be stickied...i will read the other thing later butnow i'm tired so i am goin for a nap lol....and it's nice to see someone religious on this site.....
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i like the imagery and the emotio nyou poured into this.
vocabulary was decent, and the the flow didn't fall off. overall, i'd give this a 7/10. |
word, thanks guys drop links and Ill give feed back..
RV respect heehee Sweft |
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Dman sweft, your poems are dope as fuck!!! Thats why you repping TC bro!
upping for this.. mod sticky it. |
word of Prey, left comment..
Thank You The Council. HaHa what alais are you.. Sweft |
yes, this was very well written, nice imagery...and this seemed to be a free verse also, this was one of the dopest poems i ever read on this site..and the pen will always be there...1
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thank you floodman. uppin this
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o and if anyone wants feed-back drop links
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sweft |
This was a tight drop.... I was really feelin it..
Structure was okay alittle off, ou had nice imgery , really made the reader image what was happening... Wordplay and vocab were pretty simplicit.. But it was a really good drop...I was feeling it .. Keep it up |
Thank YOU!
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