CriTiC vs mizz fyre
 

Battle Rules Of This Topical Battle:

10 Linez Min - 24 Linez Max
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

*(Tears Behind The Mask)*


Good Luck

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Minimum posts to vote: 200

Check in by: 04-28-05 at 08:51 AM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.


Closed - Expired / old battle win

CriTiC has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-25-05 08:52 AM.

mizz fyre has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-25-05 03:20 PM.

stained by pain, mind consumed with emotion
rage incontrollable, staring down at the deep, blue ocean
my hands trembling, tired, as weather conditions worsen
hidden for to long, finally confronting my inner person

happiness overrated "a new me" easily created
mentally disturbed thats how the docters state it
shocking memories of before, now friends i ain't got
behind the mask i was liked, inevitably, now i'm not

feel the rain lashing my face, my child i embrace
tell her don't cry, y'know where goin to a better place
hear the sirens a reminder someone out there cares
too late, i'm unable to see clear, my visions impaired

my daughters life spared, she can't be taken
lay her behind me, ashamed, my fault she's shaken
step forward the water exudes my painful reflection
no more walking in shadows, i'm choosing my own direction

no more striving for perfection, no longer in denial
before i fall leave my baby with a lasting smile..........

Nice drop Mizz sorry bout the delay had writersblock all weekend,..

Stay up ma

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Voted For: CriTiC

Critic-

Nice verse man, good flow. Imaginary was decent in your piece, putted alot of details in your verse. Emotion was Good also, i could feel what the character in your verse was feeling. Vocab is decent, nice using the right words. Wordplays was decent also. The angle you came was nice.



Mizz fyre- Hmm not a bad nice, but nor also great. You had imaginary, but to me it was poorly weak, more basic too. The emotion though was good. Vocab needs to be upp a little. The flow was good. You came in a different angle that which was weak also.


Overall- This is a nice battle, critic you had imaginary and emotion drawn in your verse, they were decent, have nice flow. Mizz fyre nice verse, but not so great, you had imaginary drawn in your verse also but to me it was poor, you need to create better images than that. I felt the emotion, it was nice. My vote goes to critic, for having good images, and good emotion in his verse. Mizz fyre, you had poor imagination, and that what lost you in this battle. Vote critic for having better imaginary plus good flow with good emotion.


Critic RTF in a battle "Valor vs Line"

Honest vote. Pz

Thanx for the vote up~ing,...

Stay up

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can we get some votes in here please?.............

OMG uping for some pissing votes!!!

:)

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Uping,............................................ ................................................

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This was feedback posted for mizz fyre
 

hmmmm.... ain't gon say nothing cuz i don't want kats to think i'm tryna sway votes..i'd never do that... but anyways...good shyt by both.... winner seems obvious to me, though.... one verse was put together better than the other; worded eloquently, flowed damn near lawlessly... won't say which.... should be a good battle....out

This was feedback posted for mizz fyre
 

checkin polls....
i think, mizz fyre..........

u should take tips from established topical heads...like critic for example, an the way he structures his verse.....it makes it seem more complex, maybe u should try that too....but this is a close one ta call, good luck ta both

nice battle hella fire in there deep details and all that danm nice one but i would have to go with mizz i thought she was more creative with it

very close its like 8.2 critic 8.5 mizz word tight battle

Shit come on now uping,...

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Dammme Votes are still like gone dust on this site shit,.....

Uping,.......

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