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Emericas Finest?.....blah
JUS A LIL SOMTHIN... LYRICAL MASTAMIND Lyrically blessed jus ask around RV Cuz all da niggaz n ya cru wudnt last if dey batttled me personals galore, disses n punches hit hard i leave u niggaz scared shook and eternally scardd 'Speats' dont wanna step cuz he'll face defeat u dont wanna battle me so jus stick tah makin 'beats' 'LFS The Great' iz destined to meet a level of .:Fate:. Murk niggaz badly n put em in 'Hells Fire' cuz dey fucked wit the great(me) Make u bitches dissapear off RV like i did 'Black Magic' Fuck it if u wanna use mah old rhymes take em u can have it Im a 'Big City' nigga known 4 rippin deese lames all u niggaz iz wack as hell jus give up da rap game I make da res of u niggaz dissapear like a black hole in space...u 'Untrace' Yall will alwayz b 'onestepbehind' im leavin u shook like and1 .MIXTAPE. TONY GREEN TAKES OVER Tony Green like Baghdad E.F. niggaz I straight bomb'em Had to stop fucking with E.F. cause I was OneStepBeyond'em These niggaz rhymes is full of shit lets throw'em in the toilet stool. I'll blow the Big City up so now its small as molecule. I smoke Emerican niggaz like they was Jamican Blounts. LFS got Ko'ed by Ma$tamind and he's only been here for one month. Tony Green a straight G i spit with no desire. You know your crew is garbage when they say Armada Da 187 lines is fire. My dick is for women only so E.F. niggaz can stay off. I'm something like Shaq and the Lakers cause when I left they aint even make the playoffs. I'm the boss of these niggaz so I'm making some Layoff's. E.F.'s .:Fate:. is to fail so I'm causing some chaos. Mixtape stay in the Free Agent forum tryin to recruit niggaz. The whole RV knows yall sweeter than the lips on Jigga. Tony Green is that nigga and I aint replaceable. I murder the E.F. and the evidence is Untraceable. (WHAT) TSTORM CLOSES THIS SHIT OUT Squad up bitches,scene set..livin legends must be unfaceable Coz ya leader led by example..n y`all turned out "Untraceable" Ya text skillz are none, Topical?..i own u so much i bought ya Named himself "hells fire", cause reading his topicals is torture The rest of ya crew remane nameless,...just like ya rv careers Gon read ya battles to get personal..but they bored me to tears |
Hmmmmmm nice disses, personals and punches were flying everywhere.
Lyrical mastermind Nice flow, don't stretch your lines too much. And make your verse more complex. Punches and personals was good in your vere. Tony green You need to word your sentence correctly, cause your punches was a little confusing but i still go them. T-storm- Nice lil vere there, you had good flow. Nice personals with a diss Str8 good diss yo 8/10 RTF in my om in "Bad dream awake" |
i thought it was too common...yall basically use tha same personals every diss track, why keep makin dem...dis is no different from tha rest so points are deducted...squash tha beef and do what yall used to do...6/10 for dis...done
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Ummm...
DOnt See any Lines That Were the same as the other one? What Are you Talkin Bout? Doe Bags? Oh Yeah uppin for my Fam here Nice shit its better than the one we did |
im not sayin dat tha lines are exactly tha same...im talkin bout how yall disses are...tha way yall piece together personals are basically tha same...dats all im sayin
-DB |
^^ Just Face It Kid, You Got Shitted.......................................
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i can fuckin predict your fucking insults against me now faggots
Boablablabla speats blablablabla rather stick to beat blablablala wack beats,nice try bozo |
word......first two verses had mad stretched lines which took alot away from the flow and enjoyment......so if you took a little more time to work on the structure, coulda been a solid diss......but still, you guys used alotta played concepts, nothing really special here...first verse had too much self glorifying and not enough dissing.....second verse, tony had some okay stuff, first line played.....but overal it was decent.......tstorm, solid verse, best outta the three, keep up......word
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^^^Thanxx Kesse for the props I appreciate it uppin and Doe Bagz as long as we aint mention your name don't worry bout it you to speats!
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Hmm.. This Was An Iight drop..
If felt it could have been alot better, You Had Some Nice decent punchlines... Personals were on tact , they were really hitten ... Some were just fillers, but that can be worked on.. Structure was off , try to match up your bars , and not have it like a heart beat... overall keep it up, you did a nice OM' Just Elevate on your Structure , and Harder Punchlines And work on your wordplay , Ps: Drop a link or this will be closed |
Thanxx uppin to the top!
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this was ok. nothin really stood out to me that much. yall need to work on ya flows, they are mad f'd up. most verse were pretty basic. , seemed like yall tried to use too many personals so the shit was cluttered or somethin.
lyrical mastermind= this was ya only good bar I make da res of u niggaz dissapear like a black hole in space...u 'Untrace' Yall will alwayz b 'onestepbehind' im leavin u shook like and1 .MIXTAPE. tony green= ya flow is all over the place, need to make ya punches more creative ya only good bar was My dick is for women only so E.F. niggaz can stay off. I'm something like Shaq and the Lakers cause when I left they aint even make the playoffs. tstorm= u got the best flow out of all three especially on the last one u did but u aint really do much in ths joint, but ur bars were decent cuz they had some creativity so u had the best verse out of the 3 |
i agree with kesse stretched lines and the disses at me had little to no punches...it was alright by the vote i give ya 7.5 outta 10 be ready for something to come back at you...........lot of self slorification tho
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Ta Ta Ta Tony Green... We're battling homie... set it up
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thanx 4 da feed uppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
o and heres da link da feed wuz left on http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=188004 |
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ehhhh.... a lot of ya disses were pretty much set up the same way throughout the first 2 verses... last verse was most solid... I agree with dude that said it was kinda basic... if y'all woulda seen each others verses before they were posted ya prolly woulda changed some stuff... me, personally, if i woulda saw my man doing the whole nameplay thing... i woulda just stuck with personals and punches.... got real creative with the facts surrounding the beef... inform the readers what the deal was... like the line that said
I'm something like Shaq and the Lakers cause when I left they aint even make the playoffs. it was a lil stretched but that's what i'd stick to |
ehhhh.... a lot of ya disses were pretty much set up the same way throughout the first 2 verses... last verse was most solid... I agree with dude that said it was kinda basic... if y'all woulda seen each others verses before they were posted ya prolly woulda changed some stuff... me, personally, if i woulda saw my man doing the whole nameplay thing... i woulda just stuck with personals and punches.... got real creative with the facts surrounding the beef... inform the readers what the deal was... like the line that said
I'm something like Shaq and the Lakers cause when I left they aint even make the playoffs. it was a lil stretched but that's what i'd stick to...ok drop.... coulda been better |
Thanxx uppin!!!!!!!!!
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sorry for double post...lol..comp actin funny
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yo this was aiight...it was the usual delivery I hear...nothin special...but it had a good flow..I enjoyed readin...the vocab was ok, could be better...u know...everything was good y'all should do audio...
my favourite line I saw... "Tony Green like Baghdad E.F. niggaz I straight bomb'em Had to stop fucking with E.F. cause I was OneStepBeyond'em" I like that one...keep it up...by the way return the fav yo... my peice is called "MY ABC's" |
thanx 4 da feed
still uppin dis thread yall ........1 |
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upiin 4 mo feed on dis hot ass OM yall
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ok this was not too good of a diss.....you coulda came less played.......ive seen that onestepbeyond line said in the same way just with different approaches.....so thats played.......and the untraceable lines were a lil iffy......kinda plyed but not too much Tstorm came with a wittier personal on me then the other 2 but lyrical's woulda been a lil better if it flowed a lil better...ya structures kinda messed this up for you as well......just be less predictable and try not to have everyone come with some of the same approaches on the personals......but just do ya thing.......and elevate....ya'll just gota go hard or go home cuz ya aint showin much ya skill here.......
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