MaRVJay1009 vs solo
 

Battle Rules:

12 lines..
3 votes=ko
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

only explained votes...no fukkin hatin

Minimum posts to vote: 600

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SoLo has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-26-05 11:40 PM.

MaRVJay1009 has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-26-05 11:41 PM.

in a few i should c alot of deals,u pre write i dont n im hotta still.
solo broke his pockets like da "white house" he aint gota "bill".
u da vet on dis month way da go,yea probly da best in da UK.
but hold up listen fruit cake,im 1009 times nicer than yOU,K!
wastin ya time u cant rap why go buy a couple new beats.
solo's wack like da "first 7 days in april" yea dis "fools-weak".
ur 2 sweet! fag "sit down" cuzz i really cant "stand" homo's.
not da "star wars cat" i'll cut off ya limbs n beat u wit ya "hands-solo".*
u all text only time u were in da "booth" u "confessin da preist".
i'll put ya "heart in da air" since u got trouble "catchin da beat".
fam u neva was KiNG neva see u stand on da throne.
y's ya name SOLO u need crews u like "babi's","cant stand on ya own".

Voted For: SoLo

MaRVJay1009:

in a few i should c alot of deals,u pre write i dont n im hotta still.
solo broke his pockets like da "white house" he aint gota "bill".
^^decent meta 5/10
u da vet on dis month way da go,yea probly da best in da UK.
but hold up listen fruit cake,im 1009 times nicer than yOU,K!
^^decent bar.. self glorification though 5/10
wastin ya time u cant rap why go buy a couple new beats.
solo's wack like da "first 7 days in april" yea dis "fools-weak".
^^good meta decent punch 6/10
ur 2 sweet! fag "sit down" cuzz i really cant "stand" homo's.
not da "star wars cat" i'll cut off ya limbs n beat u wit ya "hands-solo".*
^^lol nice 8/10
u all text only time u were in da "booth" u "confessin da preist".
i'll put ya "heart in da air" since u got trouble "catchin da beat".
^^ehh 4/10
fam u neva was KiNG neva see u stand on da throne.
y's ya name SOLO u need crews u like "babi's","cant stand on ya own".
^^decent closer 6/10

Overall: 34/60 (57%)

SoLo:

RV Givin Birth To Major Herbz..Now Y’all Know What Marv’s Been Fuckin…
I Set This Battle Twice..Marv Must Be A Quack The Way He’s Been Duckin…
^^good meta decent punch 6/10
Yo Bitch I’m Cookin..You’ll Get Burnt Like Ya Sittin On The Gateway To Hell…
Desperate To Get KO’ed Aren’t Ya “Jay”………”K”………You Can Have The “L”…
^^ok 5/10
I Hear Ya Yell..“I Run RV!” “I Run RV!” Man It’s Like Ya Mouth’s Set On Repeat…
Marv The Only Way You’d Be Runnin Shit Is If Ya Crap Came Out With Feet…
^^lol 8/10
Ya Gettin Beat..Wanna Name Me Ali…Cuz I Am The Greatest In The Ring…
Marv Agrees!! Now I’m Solo But Its Clear He Still Thinks Of Me As The King…
^^decent personal 5/10
This Bitch Can’t Spit A Thing..He Just Throws Hands Like He’s A Mime Rappin…
Spits Like A Box Of “………” Streets..Cuz “Quality” Is What Ya Rhymes Lackin… *
^^good meta 7/10
Wack Lines Ya Packin..Smoked 1009 Jay’s Now Marv Thinks His Skillz Are High…
Fuck Bein A Nightmare Ya Lyrics Are Suicidal..Make Me Wanna Pop Pillz ‘n’ Die…
^^ehh 4/10

Overall: 35/60 (58%)

Close battle but SoLo gets this one

And this is my 4000th Post :thumbup:

Plus the 100th battle i've voted on this weak... Im a beast

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This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
 

nice battle by both, i think marv edged it out a little though
should be close, props to both................

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

aight marv took dis eazy he came wit harder punches mroe personals sum good nameplay sikk ass metas he had sum aight multies

openor-marv betta punch
punches-marv,betta punches
multies-tie
stucture-solo
nameplay-tie both had sum
vocab-none
closer-marv hiz punch was harder

marv took dis came harder n put more effort n 2 it so marv gets mah vote

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see i told u solo i knew u was gon get dat vote taken well ur's got taken 2

Voted For: SoLo

MarvJays Verse

in a few i should c alot of deals,u pre write i dont n im hotta still.
solo broke his pockets like da "white house" he aint gota "bill".
^ 2nd line aight but 1st line a lil self-g

u da vet on dis month way da go,yea probly da best in da UK.
but hold up listen fruit cake,im 1009 times nicer than yOU,K!
^ blah self glory

wastin ya time u cant rap why go buy a couple new beats.
solo's wack like da "first 7 days in april" yea dis "fools-weak".
^ lol this was good i liked it

ur 2 sweet! fag "sit down" cuzz i really cant "stand" homo's.
not da "star wars cat" i'll cut off ya limbs n beat u wit ya "hands-solo".*
^ nice name flip but a lil played on the gay thing though...but good

u all text only time u were in da "booth" u "confessin da preist".
i'll put ya "heart in da air" since u got trouble "catchin da beat".
^ nice punch good rhyme

fam u neva was KiNG neva see u stand on da throne.
y's ya name SOLO u need crews u like "babi's","cant stand on ya own".
^ good closer again name flip all in all good

Overall
i was impressed this was good overall 2 things though you should work on. 1 lose the self-glory...audio perhaps you can get away wit it but i've learned in text, self-glory harms verses and it took 3 bars for you to kick in. 2 the layout of your verse is like how a newb would type, it's horribe u & you neva & never exactly the same why do it?...but other than that cool verse was good


SoLo's verse

RV Givin Birth To Major Herbz..Now Y’all Know What Marv’s Been Fuckin…
I Set This Battle Twice..Marv Must Be A Quack The Way He’s Been Duckin…
^ good opener nice rhyme good flow

Yo Bitch I’m Cookin..You’ll Get Burnt Like Ya Sittin On The Gateway To Hell…
Desperate To Get KO’ed Aren’t Ya “Jay”………”K”………You Can Have The “L”…
^ lol good bar i liked

I Hear Ya Yell..“I Run RV!” “I Run RV!” Man It’s Like Ya Mouth’s Set On Repeat…
Marv The Only Way You’d Be Runnin Shit Is If Ya Crap Came Out With Feet…
^ LOL nice bar good punch...real steady diss

Ya Gettin Beat..Wanna Name Me Ali…Cuz I Am The Greatest In The Ring…
Marv Agrees!! Now I’m Solo But Its Clear He Still Thinks Of Me As The King…
^ nice link...self-g a lil on the 1st line...2nd debatable i'll explain in my overall

This Bitch Can’t Spit A Thing..He Just Throws Hands Like He’s A Mime Rappin…
Spits Like A Box Of “………” Streets..Cuz “Quality” Is What Ya Rhymes Lackin… *
^ nice for americans who DON'T know quality streets really are assorted box of chocs...nice bar

Wack Lines Ya Packin..Smoked 1009 Jay’s Now Marv Thinks His Skillz Are High…
Fuck Bein A Nightmare Ya Lyrics Are Suicidal..Make Me Wanna Pop Pillz ‘n’ Die…
^ good closer

Overall
More consistant verse i think now to explain the king/ring bar, that could seem like self-g but overview and also using a link is good which turned this bar from a self-g to a personal not much wrong with this really but this was in my eyes a decent battle...so i'm jus going on consistency in lines and my vote is for...

SoLo

NewKid's votes always get removed..............stop cryin like a little bitch Marv!!!!

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009


Marv:

Opener: 7/10
Punches: 9/10
Wordplay: 8/10
Personals: 7/10
Structure and flow: 8/10
Closer: 9/10
Overall: 48/60=80%

Overall A hot verse from you man...Opener was a little weak, but everything picked up in a hurry after that...Personals and plays on his name were hot, along with your punches

SoLo:

Opener: 8/10
Punches: 8/10
Wordplay: 7/10
Personals: 7/10
Structure and flow: 8/10
Closer: 6/10
Overall: 44/60=73%

Your verse was good man...Nothing really wrong with it, but I feel you could've came harder with the punches and upped your wordplay a little bit...The "runnin shit" line was kinda played, but you did a good job wording it...Your closer was wack to me...Not a good way to go out...Good battle though...RTF with links in my sig if u haven't done so already...

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Aight Check It..

.::MarvJay1009::.

IP:


in a few i should c alot of deals,u pre write i dont n im hotta still.
solo broke his pockets like da "white house" he aint gota "bill".
Nice Try For Meta, but Has Nothing To Do With King Solo...So It Was A Filler. 3/10
u da vet on dis month way da go,yea probly da best in da UK.
but hold up listen fruit cake,im 1009 times nicer than yOU,K!
This Was Just Horrid To Me...2/10
wastin ya time u cant rap why go buy a couple new beats.
solo's wack like da "first 7 days in april" yea dis "fools-weak".
I Liked This..Pretty Decent..7/10
ur 2 sweet! fag "sit down" cuzz i really cant "stand" homo's.
not da "star wars cat" i'll cut off ya limbs n beat u wit ya "hands-solo".*
Liked This Also..Decent Punch/Meta..7/10
u all text only time u were in da "booth" u "confessin da preist".
i'll put ya "heart in da air" since u got trouble "catchin da beat".
Liked Fasho..6/10
fam u neva was KiNG neva see u stand on da throne.
y's ya name SOLO u need crews u like "babi's","cant stand on ya own".
Blah..Weak Closer 4/10

Marvs Overall Verse: 29/60

.::King Solo::.

IP:


RV Givin Birth To Major Herbz..Now Y’all Know What Marv’s Been Fuckin…
I Set This Battle Twice..Marv Must Be A Quack The Way He’s Been Duckin…
Played...4/10
Yo Bitch I’m Cookin..You’ll Get Burnt Like Ya Sittin On The Gateway To Hell…
Desperate To Get KO’ed Aren’t Ya “Jay”………”K”………You Can Have The “L”…
Nice Attempt..6/10
I Hear Ya Yell..“I Run RV!” “I Run RV!” Man It’s Like Ya Mouth’s Set On Repeat…
Marv The Only Way You’d Be Runnin Shit Is If Ya Crap Came Out With Feet…
Hm...Worded Wrong Man 5/10
Ya Gettin Beat..Wanna Name Me Ali…Cuz I Am The Greatest In The Ring…
Marv Agrees!! Now I’m Solo But Its Clear He Still Thinks Of Me As The King…
Decent Personal..7/10
This Bitch Can’t Spit A Thing..He Just Throws Hands Like He’s A Mime Rappin…
Spits Like A Box Of “………” Streets..Cuz “Quality” Is What Ya Rhymes Lackin… *
Wasn't Feeling This 4/10
Wack Lines Ya Packin..Smoked 1009 Jay’s Now Marv Thinks His Skillz Are High…
Fuck Bein A Nightmare Ya Lyrics Are Suicidal..Make Me Wanna Pop Pillz ‘n’ Die…
Wtf!??! Are You Serious For A Closer? 3/10

Solos Overall Verse: 29/60

My Vote Came To A Tie With Points..So I'ma Have To Just Base This Shit off Who Exactly Impressed Me More.

My Vote Goes For: MarvJay1009...Just His Punches Impressed Me More.

~R~

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Voted For: SoLo

RV Givin Birth To Major Herbz..Now Y’all Know What Marv’s Been Fuckin…
I Set This Battle Twice..Marv Must Be A Quack The Way He’s Been Duckin…
—pretty decent punch
Yo Bitch I’m Cookin..You’ll Get Burnt Like Ya Sittin On The Gateway To Hell…
Desperate To Get KO’ed Aren’t Ya “Jay”………”K”………You Can Have The “L”…
—uhh, this 1 I didn’t like
I Hear Ya Yell..“I Run RV!” “I Run RV!” Man It’s Like Ya Mouth’s Set On Repeat…
Marv The Only Way You’d Be Runnin Shit Is If Ya Crap Came Out With Feet…
—good use of multies there & the punch was okay
Ya Gettin Beat..Wanna Name Me Ali…Cuz I Am The Greatest In The Ring…
Marv Agrees!! Now I’m Solo But Its Clear He Still Thinks Of Me As The King…
—punch was basic here, nuttin much
This Bitch Can’t Spit A Thing..He Just Throws Hands Like He’s A Mime Rappin…
Spits Like A Box Of “………” Streets..Cuz “Quality” Is What Ya Rhymes Lackin… *
—punch was kinda weak here to me though
Wack Lines Ya Packin..Smoked 1009 Jay’s Now Marv Thinks His Skillz Are High…
Fuck Bein A Nightmare Ya Lyrics Are Suicidal..Make Me Wanna Pop Pillz ‘n’ Die…
—decent closer


in a few i should c alot of deals,u pre write i dont n im hotta still.
solo broke his pockets like da "white house" he aint gota "bill".
—nope, not feelin this punch from you
u da vet on dis month way da go,yea probly da best in da UK.
but hold up listen fruit cake,im 1009 times nicer than yOU,K!
—nope
wastin ya time u cant rap why go buy a couple new beats.
solo's wack like da "first 7 days in april" yea dis "fools-weak".
—decent punch here
ur 2 sweet! fag "sit down" cuzz i really cant "stand" homo's.
not da "star wars cat" i'll cut off ya limbs n beat u wit ya "hands-solo".*
—ur best punch so far
u all text only time u were in da "booth" u "confessin da preist".
i'll put ya "heart in da air" since u got trouble "catchin da beat".
—kinda played here, seems like I seen it somewhere, but whateva
fam u neva was KiNG neva see u stand on da throne.
y's ya name SOLO u need crews u like "babi's","cant stand on ya own".
—decent

…overall Solo took this one here
had the multies throughout the whole verse
punches were pretty decent, the flow
that stayed on point, & some personas
MARV…half of ur verse I didn’t like…
but anyway, my vote goes to Solo

v/ Solo

*RTF Solo

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lol yo dis nigga skriptz has me on his blacklist but he votes in my battles..datz crazee

This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
 

april fools line was funny so was the heart in the air catchin a beat 1 nice just checkin the polls

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Voted For: SoLo

VOTE-SOLO

i voted for solo because i thought his punches and personals were wittier .... also i'dhave to say the flow was alot better and more stable. at first i wasn't really feeling it but ya got me with this line "Ya Gettin Beat..Wanna Name Me Ali…Cuz I Am The Greatest In The Ring…
Marv Agrees!! Now I’m Solo But Its Clear He Still Thinks Of Me As The King…" lol you didn't even need the link in there... but yea overall i thought you had a better quality to yours ,,,your whole verse was strong in my opinion

i didn't vote for marv because i thought his verse wasn't as creative and that his punches and personals lacked in alot of areas. it wasn't a bad verse i just thought you could have been more creative with your approach... things like this "u da vet on dis month way da go,yea probly da best in da UK.
but hold up listen fruit cake,im 1009 times nicer than yOU,K!" don't really help ya out in close battles but otherwise an all right verse.

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wish i could vote

Would of given it to Solo...
Punches and personals were better.

This was feedback posted for SoLo
 

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This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
 

Hot Ass Verse..Ion Got Enuff Post..But I Think U Took This One..Sup Solo..Good Shit Solo..Nice Battle

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