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real shit (a must read!)
Im married to my pen and pad i use em to depcit streets views...
How the goverment is dectiful and how i want the world to be peacfull... If i have a nine i get locked up,but in texas shot guns are leagll... And in idaho fireing squads are the officail way off death... Bush usein money for a pointless war fore he pays the debt... What the fuck is wrong with the country... We got homeless in the street they hungrey... Begin on freeway corners for a buck to eat... What happened to this man that he suffered defeat... This is insanity solidas is in iraq thatll never again see there family... What a clamity but maybe this is the way the world had to be... So we can speak are views with out bein scared... Im more then well aware we livin in despair... Ive been through so much shit that in time i well exspress... Not to impress but to lay all the haters to rest... My constant unstability is the begging of my credibillity... I feel that i well never see any tranquailty... In my life time but with the right rhyme i can see a better life... Sell out to the main stream style id much ratther die... I well alwasy rap about hood politics and hollow tips... Teen mothers havein alcholic fits fuck all that shit... They cant feed there child to young to provide... We cant subside or divide we need to unite... And become one cause in some way we all under the gun... No more arguein between eachother we all under the sun... |
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yo homie.. this shit dope.. u got good flow, nice wordplay, and i like ya structure and vocab.. this was a real nice piece.... 8.5/ 10...
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cool man thanks for ya feedback
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nice drop. like I said on msn, you should work on making ya lines less simplistic. other than that...dope. 6/10
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not a bad drop, but try to up ya vocab
n get a little more complex when tacklin important issues such as this....sometimes it helps to the research the topic your writing about to gain other perspectives and to obtain new ways to approach a subject......decent....6/10 |
ey yo dis shit was dope.....good vocab,structa
flow,erthing was pretty tight on dis 9/10 |
wow!!, everything good except structure 9/10 good shit
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Very nice shit keep it up mayne
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thanks for the love yall leave a link and ill check out ya shit
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Nice shit.....you could tackle this subject a lot better.....i mean a subject like this there's a lot to get down....i like the feeling that was there tho....this was some TIGHT SHIT....really man.....flow was decent structure was good.....an ok vocab....pretty good shit i give it a 7.5/10
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wassup mu fucka,nice shit,i already told you so
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yo im uppin for my homie excell....
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its militant mutha fucka lol....uppin peoples and this is just the beggin of my dope shit
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uppin ill return the favor just drop a link or somethin like that
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yeah enough uppin not enough feed...c'mon keep the feed flowin as good as this piece yo...
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yeah i upped alot but yall gota read this shit and if u dont like it fuck u
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