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compose vs tony green
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10-30 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting NO CREW VOTES AT ALL! 4-0 KO 300 TO VOTE TOPIC: YOU MUST LOVE ME The Council vs Livin' Legendz Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 04-30-05 at 10:30 AM Must drop verse in 4620 minutes after check in. |
Tony Green has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-29-05 08:01 PM.
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Compose has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-29-05 09:02 PM.
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What I'm about to spit is true stories that happened in the hood.
In the hood I stay feeling like 1million bucks. The kids run to my pickup like its the ice cream truck. So I get out and I shake a few hands, tell'em not to be bad. And for your moms try to be a big man. I sit and talk to some of my old hustlers off the block. They like Lil Steve got shot, and Markus got million dollar yhatts. I visit Lil Steve mom give her a check for his funeral. Tell her like get you a nice dress and a nice black limo.(I Must Love Her) . . . . . . I remember a shorty my mama was working 9-5. It was me on the grind influencing my little brothers mind. I never went to one school dance cause I was helping mama. Rent money late Land Lord coming with the drama. She had been arguing with her ex-boyfriend Kevin. Land Lord brought more drama, 3 shots it was a 187. Mama was gone for 6 years then she made parole. I'm out their standing in the pole hustling in the rain or snow. When she I got out I save a thousand bucks. Put it in a hallmark card told her get your hair done. And before she drove off to have her night of fun. I'll never forget she looked back and said I love you son.(She Must Love Me) R.I.P Mama 1970-1997 |
You must love me Naive Love is entrusted with a remarkable strike to one another connected with trust and honorable without studder but when its introduced in the wrong hands like crazy bitches catastrophe is bound to proceed, the effect more then stitches the women i speak about...the ones who bother continuously cuz she's in love...for a person in the midst of her dreams she hasnt a grasp inside to carry out her wishes so a plan she devises to kidnap the man she misses tools and screws used to compile the weapons she takes not to use on her mark...but all else who stand in her way Affirmative Action Followed the man through the day...to the bank and workplace observed his repeated actions...what he did where he stayed till the day she commenced her plan to take this man hostage he was a pet toy hence her rolling him in stockings she was a freaky case of wacko...ballistic jacko jackson like michael but cut off the mans dick without hassle talk about experiences...this is one most cant read with ease of a senseless bitch taking coke, dust, and speed what kinda influence provoked this, none? nada? to where she exploded a face...but it wasnt a piñata Love This couldnt be a story someone thought was movin... its not love...its the definition of someone whos inhumane one whos mind is tapped into believing that love is anger but anger leads to hurt...then the hurt becomes a danger |
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This was feedback posted for Compose
You won this easily man. Uppin this for ya........
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This was feedback posted for Tony Green
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This was feedback posted for Compose
Is Dis pose ta be a battle? Cuz if it is why yall not getin at each utha?
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This was feedback posted for Compose
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Voted For: Compose
compose- you had a consistent solid verse, the emotion was potent throughout your piece. i felt your imagery could have been improved upon though. your structure was on-point making it easy to follow. the vocabulary was tight, it wasn't so complicated that it affected your flow so it was cool. my favourite bar out the whole drop had to be.. the women i speak about...the ones who bother continuously cuz she's in love...for a person in the midst of her dreams so, i'd give you 80% :thumbup:. tony green- your drop wasn't as consistent as composes, but you had a nice story. it was worded well but because some lines were uneven it fucked up your flow. your vocabulary was decent, quite basic but you pulled it off. emotion wasn't strong, and i felt neither was the imagery. just elevate on emotion and imagery and you'll do fine as a topical head. overall this was a decent piece. my favourite bar.. I sit and talk to some of my old hustlers off the block. They like Lil Steve got shot, and Markus got million dollar yhatts. i give you 50% :). so... v/compose. he just came harder in all areas. no hate tony. rtf in my sig. |
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This was feedback posted for Tony Green
This was really good TG.....Loved the imagery....lost 4 words
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okay so can i copy these and frame them both in my living room to make them words to live by thanx!
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Voted For: Tony Green
great rhymes great flow, good goin wit the topic I liked this shit alot and am hopin to see more of this nigga you really got me feelin it so my vote is for Tony Green Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Compose
ight man u got this easy... no offence tonygreen i just felt that compose was deeper.. compose: ight i liked your verse alot fam... u got a good understanding of the topic and u showed emotion, the flow was good and the vocab was real good, i liked the fact that you split it up into 3 different sections that was dope, i think u went deep into it which is a really good thing coz it made me interested in what u had to write and all i can say really is that it was dope... here is one bar i think stood out from the rest: This couldnt be a story someone thought was movin... its not love...its the definition of someone whos inhumane ^^ right there like a deffinition... was dope you did a good job in this man keep droppin em... tony green: i can see you took a different approach to the subject, it was deep but the vocab wasnt good, it got alot better as it got to the end.. the last line is the deeped line which showed alot of emotion man... i liked that you took a different angle to it, usually it works but this time i'm afraid it didnt compose just had a better verse... try to get better understanding of your topics so u can go deeper express your mind and use some good vocab here is your best line: And before she drove off to have her night of fun. I'll never forget she looked back and said I love you son ^^ they the last words? that was real deep man... overall i liked your verse but it wasnt as deep as composes sorry fam... rtf! link in the sig pick any of em... pz n no hate keep droppin em |
Voted For: Tony Green
I think this was a close ass battle. But I gota go wit Tony Green on this one. I think Tony Green's was more heart hitting and when I read tha topic, that's what i thought about. Compose's drop was more intelligent, but I dont think it was interesting. Yo creativitie was coo, and you hit tha topic like any other expiernced topic battler would have, but I think I;ma hafto go wit Tony because his wasnt predictable. He got my vote basically because he stayed creative and made the topic seem wayy more interesting. Tony gets my vote. But good drop from both. |
Nah, I felt Tony's was more deep...but, whatever...uppin this again.
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Voted For: Tony Green
Wow I have to go with Tony Green on this Really feeling his story much more than Compose's verse. Better vocab, imagery, and more emotion was put into it. I also feel that it went with the topic better. Compose, your verse was weak IMO man, I wasnt feelin it too much. It would've been closer and a better verse from you if it wasnt for your ending. It seems like you just ended it in the middle of the story, and that is a huge no-no V/ Tony Green |
Voted For: Tony Green
neva voted on a topical before but........ both drops were real good....creativity was displayed real Well, nothin bored me at all....tony got tha edge because his was actually a true story....nothin fake which means he experienced it in real life....wordplay was better in compose's drop but overall imma give it to Tony Green good shit tho @ both niggas...loved this shit, i might start readin topicals lol return this favor in my battle wit Retro or Souljah good look.... |
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Voted For: Tony Green
this man is deep.... it was like i was there... had me cryin on the inside.... aww man... im all teary and compose didnt have good descriptions Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Compose
Topical battles usually get mad boring to me, but this actually interested.. Here's what I got out of it.. Tony Green I didn't necessarily like the way you went about the topic, but you made it work. You used decent imagery, but good emotion to keep the reader interested. It may have been more interesting with some more inner rhyming or something like that, that just keeps your eyes glued, but regardless, it was still fairly easy to follow what you were saying. I also thought that your rhyme scheme could have been better. You forced a few rhymes throughout your peice which took away from the imagery that you were trying to display because it was almost like I was focusing more on the lack of rhyme then where you were trying to take my thoughts. But, regardless, you still kept good emotion, but the imagery and rhyme scheme probably should have been improved. Compose What I liked about your style is that you didn't try to force inner rhyming in. You still had some, but I found it more interesting that you were using wordplay throughout your peice. That kept my interested in reading by itself. I thought the way you went about the topic was pretty creative, but you executed it nicely. Your imagery was consistently good throughout the peice, as was the emotion. The part I liked most was the end, though. The way you tied everything together was dope. Overall, just a good job. Overall I like creativity.. which is why I liked the way Compose went about going through his topic more. However, both of them were executed pretty nicely. Compose also had better imagery throughout the peice, but the emotional aspect was pretty close to even. This came down to who's I was more interested in and the combination of wordplay, inner rhyming, imagery, emotion, and creativity bought it for me. My vote goes to Compose. Vote - Compose Hit up the link in my sig please. |
Oh, and Tony, I know that we "beefed" back in the day, but seriously.. that had nothing to do with my vote. I dropped that shit a while back and even if you haven't, I don't bring shit like that to Front Lines.
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Voted For: Compose
meh, i was definately feeling compose's more tony: you had a touching story man...but complexity and enjoyment just weren't there....i feel if you came at this with greater vocab, to create more imagery and enhanced emotion...you could have ended with a real good story, and possibly the win....but i feel you lacked a whole bunch, except for the fact that this was a true story...you managed to express it well....but just because it was true, doesn't mean its an automatic win; theres more to it than that....keep up, elevate compose: uh, it was different, lol....but you told a vivid story, vocab really brought out the imagery/storyline....decent emotion, i think if you completed thoughts a little more, it woulda been better....sentences seemed a little short.........i think what sealed this for you, were your last 4 lines; serioulsy, they were awesome, nice flow, well thoughtout, solid message: overall, great way to end a nice piece i think you were the better competitor in this one, props to ya both, keep up v/compose...rtf. |
Voted For: Compose
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