Daubs vs ...E...
 

Battle Rules:

6 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 04-29-05 at 01:24 PM

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...E... has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-29-05 12:58 PM.

Daubs has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-29-05 01:00 PM.

obviousely keyed...2-3 mins verse..

You had "one shot" to accept this, but at first ya chose to reject it..
Saw ya user title and avater....aint it time you got off ems dick!!

I personally dont think i should scare you, but obviousely my rhymes do.. ..E.. sounds kinda like a hallucination pill, so i got reasons to pop you!!

Eventually accepted.......but begged for only 6 lines..
Crooked like a pirate.........so i bet he spits blind!!

avatar and title both relate to em,click links and E pills, asked for only 6 lines.

came weak as fuck, but should be enough to beat him...

yo...yo...yo....listen this daubs...

this Daubs 15 years old kid without life clue,
ur crew living legendz keep u gether like white glue...
thats mens sperm u suck mens dick like ur wifes do...
iv seen urs and mads verse and thats bad,u have that,
rhymes like my ass lack,talk to smash crap,i slash back...
Like u piss me whach ur metaphores,
diss me ye watewa whore.....

got 7 lines cauze i could get that last fit in....and if u give me more time and lines i can drop more....

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Voted For: Daubs

You had "one shot" to accept this, but at first ya chose to reject it..
Saw ya user title and avater....aint it time you got off ems dick!!
5...not a real gud opener, but not too bad!!
I personally dont think i should scare you, but obviousely my rhymes do.. ..E.. sounds kinda like a hallucination pill, so i got reasons to pop you!!
6...decent, gud meta and ya got links!!
Eventually accepted.......but begged for only 6 lines..
Crooked like a pirate.........so i bet he spits blind!!
5...weak closer!!

OVERALL: 16/30

this Daubs 15 years old kid without life clue,
ur crew living legendz keep u gether like white glue...
2...wtf!!! is this considered a punch!!
thats mens sperm u suck mens dick like ur wifes do...
iv seen urs and mads verse and thats bad,u have that,
1...wack, makes no sense!!
rhymes like my ass lack,talk to smash crap,i slash back...
Like u piss me whach ur metaphores,
diss me ye watewa whore.....
1...just plain wack!!

OVERALL: 4/30

weak battle........E came wack as fuck and structure was gay and lines weren't even punches. daubs came weak to had one decent bar but overall killed this fool with ease!! both need to elevate on punches and shit, get creative, put in mutlies, better wordplay n shit!!!!

V/ - Daubs

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Voted For: Daubs

...E...
this Daubs 15 years old kid without life clue,
ur crew living legendz keep u gether like white glue...

^^^^that was your best line^^^^
besides that everything else was bad.... sorry



Daubs
1st line- good wordplay...good personal
2nd line- funny as hell...good personal...good hit
3rd line- hahaha...hard hit good closer

Vote: Daubs


**just honest opinion**





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sorry let me explain in more detail...

-Daubs-
You had "one shot" to accept this, but at first ya chose to reject it..
Saw ya user title and avater....aint it time you got off ems dick!!
^^^^ 9/10 hot opener... good personal

I personally dont think i should scare you, but obviousely my rhymes do.. ..E.. sounds
kinda like a hallucination pill, so i got reasons to pop you!!
^^^^ 8/10 kind of self glory... but funny as hell, good hit

Eventually accepted.......but begged for only 6 lines..
Crooked like a pirate.........so i bet he spits blind!!
^^^^ 8/19 haha...funny as hell, goot hit, good closer

25/30 = %83


-...E...-
yo...yo...yo....listen this daubs...

this Daubs 15 years old kid without life clue,
ur crew living legendz keep u gether like white glue...
^^^^ 5/10 your best line but could of been better

thats mens sperm u suck mens dick like ur wifes do...
iv seen urs and mads verse and thats bad,u have that,
^^^^ 4/10 not feeling this at all... sorry

rhymes like my ass lack,talk to smash crap,i slash back...
Like u piss me whach ur metaphores,
diss me ye watewa whore.....
^^^^ 3/10 doesnt make sense... and is that a 7th line in a 6 line battle?

Vote: Daubs



**just honest opinion**



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Voted For: Daubs

I think that Daubs got this battle because i feel that Daubs came stronger in the following categories...Punches i felt Daubs got it was effective and was on point ...E... you should of been a bit more creative on this occasion personals i felt went to Daubs good lookin wordplay and creativity goes to Daubs and flow and structure i'll give to Daubs.

V/Daubs RTF In My Sig 3 days or vote removed

Voted For: Daubs

LMAO at dis wack xcuse 4 a battle..Dabus shat all over dis bre..gd holdin it down bre

E = 1) u hav aname dat was created 2 b ripped, u need 2 change it homie, some doper cats cud own u wid jus wordplay of that...ur drop was generic, weak-hittin, impersonal, uncreative lines..only things that were nice were ur structure, syllable count n flow...Work on wittier, more creative lines that are personal about ur oppponent

Dabus: fix ur structure, n flow, decent personals, medium hiting bars, enuff 2 merk dis kid...work on better flow write 2 a beat if it helps yo...

RTF - link in sig ma battle wid MAd Dog (2-2)...or my battle wid EC in audio battles forum (3-0)

Voted For: Daubs

...E...'s verse

this Daubs 15 years old kid without life clue,
ur crew living legendz keep u gether like white glue...
Wack opener, wack line, wack all of the above. Just Wack!

thats mens sperm u suck mens dick like ur wifes do...
iv seen urs and mads verse and thats bad,u have that,
rhymes like my ass lack,talk to smash crap,i slash back...
Like u piss me whach ur metaphores,
diss me ye watewa whore.....
Shit, I don't know where the bar breakdown is, so this was also wack. Wait, that would make your whole verse wack? :LAUGH: Damn kid, you need to elevate alot

Yo dawg, I think you need to work on alot. At least try to rhyme. You verse was mad simple B. You should also work alot on your structure. This verse lacked in every category.
opener
structure
flow
punches
mettas
personals
rhyming
etc.
I didn't see a damn thing in yo verse that even made me think about giving you my vote.


daubs verse

You had "one shot" to accept this, but at first ya chose to reject it..
Saw ya user title and avater....aint it time you got off ems dick!!
This was an ight opener, but advice: 'We can't see his avatar'. The flow was wayy off. Just re-read that line to yourself and see if it sounds right.

I personally dont think i should scare you, but obviousely my rhymes do.. ..E.. sounds kinda like a hallucination pill, so i got reasons to pop you!!
This rhymed good, but not a punch, and not a good personal. Also, your structure was off. Go vote on dope battlers and see how there structure is...They break there lines down.


Eventually accepted.......but begged for only 6 lines..
Crooked like a pirate.........so i bet he spits blind!!
Not a good closer either. At least your structure elevated here!

This was not a good verse, yet alone a good battle, but I give daubs the win, because I felt he has more expierence and potential. I felt E had a verse where he didn't do good in any category and needs to elevate in alot, whereas daubs had good structure, and hust needs to be more creative with punches and personals and mettas and shit. Daubs gets my vote because of better structure


And please RTF on battle link in sig....Thank You!

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