Verbal vs Shard
 

Battle Rules:

10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting


Good Luck....





Holla.

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 04-29-05 at 07:22 PM

Must drop verse in 30 minutes after check in.

Verbal has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-29-05 06:27 PM.

This fag's foraging for rhymes.......but keeps tripping over trees..
Keeps falling over stumps........ like bungee jumping amputees*
He can't ever claim victory, his punches don't do any kind of damage..
At game time, he's choking like Mama Cass on a ham sandwich..
Kid claims that he's straight, but we all know he's a damn liar..
He's got bite marks on his pillow........but he ain't a vampire..
He's just a loose pussy getting fucked by this tightness...
And I'm amputating the hand he holds the fucking mic with...
Shard can't free for shit............every verse is the same
Closest he gets to thinking........is when he's givin brain

(*don't get it, don't vote)

Good luck S.

Shard has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-29-05 06:48 PM.

I couldn't disrespect this dude more... whatta crone pest
So I'll say fuck a Verbal..just like overzealous phone sex
drone slept on...He ain't got the goods to hold attentions
Usin [b] code if he want to take his life in a bold direction
at most you pestilence..chea.. a veritable plague of wack
freein' alley cats from cellophane cuz you stray from rap
Shard easily end ya duration.... here what this herb facin
I'll make a verse of my past victims......with Verb laced in
strafe him...... he obviously gay cuz this fag hen has his
hands in dudes pockets more than sewers of mens' fashion...




eh... w/e g/l

I couldn't disrespect this dude more... whatta crone pest
So I'll say fuck a Verbal..just like overzealous phone sex
drone slept on...He ain't got the goods to hold attentions
Usin [b] code if he want to take his life in a bold direction
at most you pestilence..chea.. a veritable plague of wack
freein' alley cats from cellophane cuz you stray from rap
Shard easily end ya duration.... here what this herb facin
I'll make a verse of my past victims......with Verb laced in
strafe him...... he obviously gay cuz this fag hen has his
hands in dudes pockets more than sewers of mens' fashion...

^ so yea... I pmed a mod...hopefully this'll b fixed... g/l dog

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Upping............................................ ...............

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what he said.........................................

Eh, I'll vote my ass off on other battles but people don't seem to want to do the same.....................

Up................................................ .........................

Voted For: Verbal

Verbal:
A nice verse,good punches but make ya lines da same lengh.......................
=6/10

Shard:
Ducked........

v/Verbal cuz he showed..........

Invalid vote due to Shard posting in wrong spot

wrong^


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ey Verbal you know a mod that can fix this ish? I pmed onna them, but he ain't get back at us...



Holla

Voted For: Verbal

verbal cuz he came wit it ..and shards is a no show..or hes tryin ta peep verbals shit so he can go back an write sum shit!!
anyways verbal got it ...he shouldnt of checked in..cheatin is 4 cheaters(lol)

Invalid vote due to Shard posting in wrong spot

Voted For: Verbal

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ummm idk what kinda battle this was...but i guess Verbal wins bcuz he actually had a verse lol. Verbal u had some decent punches in there, work on ya flow a lil more so ya verse sounds better. Also, get some multies in ya verse to make it more versatile, nah mean
*shards best bar=
Fucked up the form.... eh w/e
^nothing really here
*verbal's best bar*=
This fag's foraging for rhymes.......but keeps tripping over trees..
Keeps falling over stumps........ like bungee jumping amputees*
^^pretty good bar, nice opener

overall- verbal gets this because he had a verse and shard didnt'lol

Invalid vote due to Shard posting in wrong spot

I didn't have the minimum post count to vote on that shit, but now that I do, it won't let me vote.....if I could get my feed scratched I could vote on that....

But thanks for explained votes, upping...

heh there we go... now lets get some fuckin' real votes on this!.... 1

Vooooooooooottttttttttttttttttttttteeeeeeeeeeeeeee eee

Voted For: Shard


This fag's foraging for rhymes.......but keeps tripping over trees..
Keeps falling over stumps........ like bungee jumping amputees*
nah...........not feelin this one
He can't ever claim victory, his punches don't do any kind of damage..
At game time, he's choking like Mama Cass on a ham sandwich..
decent punch here
Kid claims that he's straight, but we all know he's a damn liar..
He's got bite marks on his pillow........but he ain't a vampire..
weak punch, wats a pillow gotta do wit a vampire?
He's just a loose pussy getting fucked by this tightness...
And I'm amputating the hand he holds the fucking mic with...
aight, this 1 was coo
Shard can't free for shit............every verse is the same
Closest he gets to thinking........is when he's givin brain
nope



I couldn't disrespect this dude more... whatta crone pest
So I'll say fuck a Verbal..just like overzealous phone sex
decent closer
drone slept on...He ain't got the goods to hold attentions
Usin code if he want to take his life in a bold direction
[b]coo
at most you pestilence..chea.. a veritable plague of wack
freein' alley cats from cellophane cuz you stray from rap
eh, this one was aight
Shard easily end ya duration.... here what this herb facin
I'll make a verse of my past victims......with Verb laced in
nope, weak punch
strafe him...... he obviously gay cuz this fag hen has his
hands in dudes pockets more than sewers of mens' fashion...
decent closer

overall this battle was one-sided.. Shard came harder in the
punches, even though some of them were weak, but Shard
took this battle.. no hate.. & Verbal u had an aight drop..
work on ur punches though.. both of you

This was feedback posted for Verbal
 

verbal gets the win n this...i didnt like shards rap

Voted For: Verbal

I couldn't disrespect this dude more... whatta crone pest
So I'll say fuck a Verbal..just like overzealous phone sex
^^Too basic
drone slept on...He ain't got the goods to hold attentions
Usin [b] code if he want to take his life in a bold direction
^^Decent
at most you pestilence..chea.. a veritable plague of wack
freein' alley cats from cellophane cuz you stray from rap
^^nah,ain't feelin this one
Shard easily end ya duration.... here what this herb facin
I'll make a verse of my past victims......with Verb laced in
^^this didn't really seem to diss verbal
strafe him...... he obviously gay cuz this fag hen has his
hands in dudes pockets more than sewers of mens' fashion...
^^urt best line,though not that hot

Conclusion-Ur verse seemed to be to basic.Meta's andwordplay is wat ya need.Need more personals too.Look,if ya gonna glorify urself...do it in a setup-not as a bar.

This fag's foraging for rhymes.......but keeps tripping over trees..
Keeps falling over stumps........ like bungee jumping amputees*
^^wak
He can't ever claim victory, his punches don't do any kind of damage..
At game time, he's choking like Mama Cass on a ham sandwich..
^^decent
Kid claims that he's straight, but we all know he's a damn liar..
He's got bite marks on his pillow........but he ain't a vampire..
^^decent
He's just a loose pussy getting fucked by this tightness...
And I'm amputating the hand he holds the fucking mic with...
^^OK
Shard can't free for shit............every verse is the same
Closest he gets to thinking........is when he's givin brain
^^OK

Conclusion-well,besides from that first line,every one of ur lines were decent.So u had a decent verse.Nothing mind-blowing though.And I'm seeing that"don;t get,don't vote" shit a lot.If we can't understand it here on the net ,then how would we understand it in real life.Shut the fuck.If ya verse is wak...don't use that "don't get it,don't vote shit"

Vote-Verbal~1~

Voted For: Shard

overall it wuz a weak battle but shard had better punches n a better flo so i gotta go wit him

Voted For: Shard

shard = ur punches were okay, elevate on them though

verbal = ur punches were not hard hittin, elevate more, both

Voted For: Verbal

Shard

I couldn't disrespect this dude more... whatta crone pest
So I'll say fuck a Verbal..just like overzealous phone sex
6/10....liked it...good wordplay
drone slept on...He ain't got the goods to hold attentions
Usin code if he want to take his life in a bold direction
[B]5/10...nice...another good idea
at most you pestilence..chea.. a veritable plague of wack
freein' alley cats from cellophane cuz you stray from rap
6/10..haha...lol...good shit
Shard easily end ya duration.... here what this herb facin
I'll make a verse of my past victims......with Verb laced in
4/10....not really feelin it...it was bland
strafe him...... he obviously gay cuz this fag hen has his
hands in dudes pockets more than sewers of mens' fashion...
5/10...was decent

26/50


Verbal

This fag's foraging for rhymes.......but keeps tripping over trees..
Keeps falling over stumps........ like bungee jumping amputees
10/10...HAHAHA...nice wordplay
He can't ever claim victory, his punches don't do any kind of damage..
At game time, he's choking like Mama Cass on a ham sandwich..
5/10...was decent
Kid claims that he's straight, but we all know he's a damn liar..
He's got bite marks on his pillow........but he ain't a vampire..
6/10...pretty good
He's just a loose pussy getting fucked by this tightness...
And I'm amputating the hand he holds the fucking mic with...
4/10...alright
Shard can't free for shit............every verse is the same
Closest he gets to thinking........is when he's givin brain
5/10...haha...decent

30/50

nice battle both of you

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Voted For: Verbal

I was understanding yours a little more. you both can have room for elevation..The key to winning battles is punches ( you got land them ) also metaphors an multi's. Ya'll got room for elevation . it was close.

rtf to my battle vs conflict if you would... much appreicated.