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Premanition vs Shard
Battle Rules:
10 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting 2 days check... half hour to drop as per ya request... G'luck. Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 05-02-05 at 03:19 PM Must drop verse in 30 minutes after check in. |
Shard has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-01-05 01:19 PM.
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you lackin' ammunition Preman you on some Pre man shit
man if you take away this kid's facade..it'll just deman him derailin' this cat so far...his bitch ass will never see mention he has a train of thought... n' that shit has a steam engine! your streak endin' cuz.. the only streak that i'm rueing for is the bloody stains on my carpet when I'm through wit ya who this chump? Seriously just confess you a loser bitch kids askin "who Preman?"..are fuckin' questionin' evolution! ya cred is loosened... if he considered the matter he'd fall cred short like high schoolers applyin for masters degree jobs |
was runnin short on time sorry no explas.... errything is self evident neways...
G'l holla. |
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see this man........ you runnin outta time...........
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Premanition has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-02-05 10:57 AM.
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Your verse more effective wen ‘mirror image’ reflected
Only shock you’d bring be if a punch of yours connected Bitch them lines getting rejected like a faulty bar code And you ain’t be’coming a custom’ like a dodgy car load Sold ur soul to the devel but he turned down the exchange Shard my ‘sole’ on ur level in a place where gravity reigns Just ‘cavity’ chains cos them threats are ‘hollow’ n plain Tie u down to my ‘lines’, only time ur ass on the ‘train’ Aka the ‘mirror’, ‘image’ broken as I watch your ass fall Then ask you politely….’who is the greatest of them all?’ . . . Info for the death and dumb:- - ‘mirror mirror on the wall who is the greatest of them all’ – quote for the film snow white but damn y’all know that surely…lol . . alright uppin the votes |
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bring me higher..................... like bosses offerin jobs with blunts as benefits...
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Voted For: Premanition
vote gotz ta got to prem...consistant lines dat actually made since... shard: IP: you lackin' ammunition Preman you on some Pre man shit man if you take away this kid's facade..it'll just deman him derailin' this cat so far...his bitch ass will never see mention he has a train of thought... n' that shit has a steam engine! ^^i read dat and was like "damn!!!"...but afta this it was straight ass man...no hate but it wasnt doin much prem: Bitch them lines getting rejected like a faulty bar code And you ain’t be’coming a custom’ like a dodgy car load Sold ur soul to the devel but he turned down the exchange Shard my ‘sole’ on ur level in a place where gravity reigns ^^now dats hotness right there...prem shit stayed still as far as delievery...simple basically, shard, u gotta elevate tha same way i gotz too...ya verse against me was betta than dis...6/10 overall for u prem...man dat was iight...i dont think dats ya best battle shit tho...sum shit could have been harder...still hot...8/10 struc-tie vocab-prem flow-prem punches-prem creativity-prem overall: 7.5/10...iight battle v-prem RETURN THA FAVA...LINK IN SIG!!! |
Voted For: Premanition
Vote: Premanition Shard: ur opener was weak, there is better personals than tryin to create disses off his name that really didnt come off..ur 2nd bar didnt really diss him at all, cos i can c whta u were tryin 2 do but a steam engine is quick anyways, so in a way u givin him props..and the rest of your drop was weak, with no hard-hittin punches.. Premanition:your lines were original, creative and hard hittin, u played off his name wid dopeness, some nice personals, decent concepts n dat mirror on da wall shit was humourous...welcome back to text battlin punk, lol :thumbup: RTF on ma battle wid Mad dog link in sig |
hm... well In case you didn't notice I AM new here... I don't have indepth personals for dude so I had to resort to nameplays... And you misunderstood the train line... not speed... steam engines are outdated, thats the angle I was goin for that he have played/outdated concepts... but thanks for the vote neways...
2-0 Prem uppppppppp |
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Voted For: Premanition
you lackin' ammunition Preman you on some Pre man shit man if you take away this kid's facade..it'll just deman him OK.......... derailin' this cat so far...his bitch ass will never see mention he has a train of thought... n' that shit has a steam engine! NO........... your streak endin' cuz.. the only streak that i'm rueing for is the bloody stains on my carpet when I'm through wit ya who this chump? Seriously just confess you a loser bitch kids askin "who Preman?"..are fuckin' questionin' evolution! ya cred is loosened... if he considered the matter he'd fall cred short like high schoolers applyin for masters degree jobs WTF DAT SHIT DONT RHYME N WHERE DOES IT STOP????? =5/10 U NEED TO ELEVATE ALOT........... VS Your verse more effective wen ‘mirror image’ reflected Only shock you’d bring be if a punch of yours connected GOOD........ Bitch them lines getting rejected like a faulty bar code And you ain’t be’coming a custom’ like a dodgy car load NICE Sold ur soul to the devel but he turned down the exchange Shard my ‘sole’ on ur level in a place where gravity reigns LOL Just ‘cavity’ chains cos them threats are ‘hollow’ n plain Tie u down to my ‘lines’, only time ur ass on the ‘train’ AIGHT Aka the ‘mirror’, ‘image’ broken as I watch your ass fall Then ask you politely….’who is the greatest of them all?’ TITE =9/10 A GOOD VERSE DAWG............ V/Premanition FOR COMIN ALOT HARDER............ |
Voted For: Premanition
-Shard- you lackin' ammunition Preman you on some Pre man shit man if you take away this kid's facade..it'll just deman him ^^^^ 7/10 decent opener... could use some work derailin' this cat so far...his bitch ass will never see mention he has a train of thought... n' that shit has a steam engine! ^^^^ 6/10 nah not feeling it... sorry your streak endin' cuz.. the only streak that i'm rueing for is the bloody stains on my carpet when I'm through wit ya ^^^^ 8/10 pretty good hit who this chump? Seriously just confess you a loser bitch kids askin "who Preman?"..are fuckin' questionin' evolution! ^^^^ 7/10 decent hit ya cred is loosened... if he considered the matter he'd fall cred short like high schoolers applyin for masters degree jobs ^^^^ 6/10 nah not feeling the closer... sorry 34/50 = %68 -Premanition- Your verse more effective wen ‘mirror image’ reflected Only shock you’d bring be if a punch of yours connected ^^^^ 7/10 decent opener... second line kinda played out Bitch them lines getting rejected like a faulty bar code And you ain’t be’coming a custom’ like a dodgy car load ^^^^ 7/10 i like the wordplay on the first line... decent second line Sold ur soul to the devel but he turned down the exchange Shard my ‘sole’ on ur level in a place where gravity reigns ^^^^ 8/10 good hit... i like the wordplay, hit and personal Just ‘cavity’ chains cos them threats are ‘hollow’ n plain Tie u down to my ‘lines’, only time ur ass on the ‘train’ ^^^^ 7/10 pretty good wordplay and hit Aka the ‘mirror’, ‘image’ broken as I watch your ass fall Then ask you politely….’who is the greatest of them all?’ ^^^^ 8/10 hahaha... good closer... first line could of used work 37/50 = %74 Vote: Premanition **no hate to either of you, just honest opinion** http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=189109 ^^^^^^need some honest votes^^^^^^ |
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Voted For: Premanition
meh, both weren't that great but ima go with prem, he seemed to have come harder, had more creative punches.....no personals from both of you, uh, prem had a few multies in there....but overall, it was kinda a lacking battle......prem had harder/creative punches, so he gets my vote v/premanition |
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