John Holmes vs Lay-Text
 

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John Holmes has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-01-05 04:03 AM.

Lay-Text has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-01-05 10:29 AM.

Dude is all mouth got k.oed by the last dude he called out
Left r.v for the fall?...of course all birds get called south!!
No flow little homo only audio win is a no show
Ya punches is so so still undevolped like cell phone photos!!
No respect only beat 4 vets i checked ya stats(1)
Nobody likes you!!...you getno replies on ya audio tracks!!
Your only chance to 'Elevate' is when you move in a month(2)
Yeah we know you 'Restricked'.....from throwing a dope punch!!(3)
Good name lame cuz yous a groupie 'laytext' wrap over a penis
He got a gallon of wackness.......annd only a 'Drop of Genius'!(4) :nono:


Explanations-
Every line is a personal follow the links below is anything a link may not be known for if you dont wanna understand the personals dont vote on the battle its that easy..................
1-he only beat 4 vets Hoops,Native,Vango,L.I he beat babylon,motif and aniexty is text when we all know thier topical heads and he beat solo in topical when we all know hes a text head............
2.hes moving to 'MOUNT' Washington next month wordplay there on elevate
3.his old names restricked
4.under his name it says a 'drop of genius'

*No Comments On Verses Man....Just Let The Votes Come In*

Good Drop.

~R~

Voted For: Lay-Text

ok this was actualy a preety decent battle and CALI dont have this vote dqed becuase you asked me on AIM to vote on this..

CALI, i liked your shit the personals hit but i was tired of clicking links and shit, and if you have to explain your punches then you shouldnt use them, so basically that is where you feel off at, you should have had some ebtter metaphores also, personals and punches where coo but you also need to be creative, all in all i was feeling this but you lacked in some spaces and you where not too creative

lay text, i liked your shit, you could have used a lil more personals but your metaphores where pretty decent and you has a lil more creatitie then CALI, your closer was some what original something thaT I have never saw before which i liked alot, considering ive been here a long time but for your creaitivitie you get my vote

vote= laytext

^on aim?i dont even talk to you on aim you basically just said i lost cuz you was too lazy to hit the links=your gay and shouldnt vote if your too lazy to do it all the way and you cant vote idiot do you know what a metaphore is?he only had one the cant see me like bats looking at red signs and it was self glory like crazy you should retire from voting if you dont wanna do it right anyways uppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp;)

Voted For: John Holmes

Aiight look neither came with amazing heat in this.. Wasnt bad-- Just not as good as what I'd of hoped for.. But heres my breakdown..

Dude is all mouth got k.oed by the last dude he called out
Left r.v for the fall?...of course all birds get called south!!
^Only problem with this bar is it dont connect, otherwise it was a good line

No flow little homo only audio win is a no show
Ya punches is so so still undevolped like cell phone photos!!
^Not as good as the first one.. Second line is pretty generic and weak..

No respect only beat 4 vets i checked ya stats(1)
Nobody likes you!!...you getno replies on ya audio tracks!!
^Personals are ok.. Very weak punchline though, its just stating facts..

Your only chance to 'Elevate' is when you move in a month(2)
Yeah we know you 'Restricked'.....from throwing a dope punch!!(3)
^I aint read many of ®'s battles so I dunno if he gets that line a lot but it was a pretty well carried out line..

Good name lame cuz yous a groupie 'laytext' wrap over a penis
He got a gallon of wackness.......annd only a 'Drop of Genius'!(4)
^Name wordplay was aiight, but should of been worded better.. And the title reference was aiight too..

Overall-- Not an overly bad verse, but I've seen a lot better..

Your Wack Kid....You Can't Handle The Shit That I'm Spittin..
Man..Your Reign Of RV Wasn't Short..Dude It Was Non-Existent..
^First line was mostly comprised of filler.. Second line was ok..

Whats Funny Is..In Audio I've Heard Your Skill Compared To L.I..
A Top Vet?..Nah..Even DeadlyVision Said Your A Disgrace To A.I..
^First line was weak because cali doesent sound like LI, its not really an effective diss.. Second line was like the one cali did, it was just stating facts, no real concept for a punchline..

Look Faggot You Can't See Me..Like Bats Looking At Red Signs..
And By Battling You...Rated Will Be Sure To Meet Dead Lines..
^This whole bar does nothing for you.. Its a little bit of self glorification and no actual diss in the second line..

You Were Born?! What Happen?...Dennis The Mennis Fuck Shamoo?
You Claim To Be God..and God Loves Ugly..So Then Out Came You..
^This line was boring too.. Some link that didnt work for me.. And a punchline on the second line that didnt make sense.. He claims to be god, and since god loves ugly, out comes him? I know your trying to say hes ugly, but you really needed to word that better..

Listen To Everyone..Your Wack..Man Let That Shit Get Through..
Since You Like Arrows...Lets Put It This Way...I'm > Than U..
^I get the picture your struggling for concepts badly in this battle..

Overall-- Not as impressive as I would of liked to see from you man..

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I think that its pretty obvious cali came out better in this.. Like I said, wasnt the hottest battle out, but there is a clear line of who came better in this...

v/ cali.

Voted For: Lay-Text

Your Wack Kid....You Can't Handle The Shit That I'm Spittin..
Man..Your Reign Of RV Wasn't Short..Dude It Was Non-Existent..
-Glory on the fist line, the 2nd line had a decent punch nice


Whats Funny Is..In Audio I've Heard Your Skill Compared To L.I..
A Top Vet?..Nah..Even DeadlyVision Said Your A Disgrace To A.I..
-Nice personal w/ a punch


Look Faggot You Can't See Me..Like Bats Looking At Red Signs..
And By Battling You...Rated Will Be Sure To Meet Dead Lines..
-Decent punch


You Were Born?! What Happen?...Dennis The Mennis Fuck Shamoo?
You Claim To Be God..and God Loves Ugly..So Then Out Came You..
-The 1st line had my rolling, and the 2nd line wat a bit played


Listen To Everyone..Your Wack..Man Let That Shit Get Through..
Since You Like Arrows...Lets Put It This Way...I'm > Than U..
-Decent closer w/ a personal and a punch


overall=This was a good verse, you had decent punches w/ personals. Flowed pretty well. Wordplays was good also. The God dont like ugly was a bit played, but you worded to make it a effective punch.




Dude is all mouth got k.oed by the last dude he called out
Left r.v for the fall?...of course all birds get called south!!
-Decent punch with a personal


No flow little homo only audio win is a no show
Ya punches is so so still undevolped like cell phone photos!!
-Nice wordplay with a personal, decent punch.


No respect only beat 4 vets i checked ya stats(1)
Nobody likes you!!...you getno replies on ya audio tracks!!
-Meh it was played out, tired of hearing that "you get no feedback on blah blah blah" Played


Your only chance to 'Elevate' is when you move in a month(2)
Yeah we know you 'Restricked'.....from throwing a dope punch!!(3)
-Ok punch, could've word a bit different.

Good name lame cuz yous a groupie 'laytext' wrap over a penis
He got a gallon of wackness.......annd only a 'Drop of Genius'!(4)
-Nice wordplay, the punch was good.


Overall=Nice verse man, had some ok wordplays and good punches. Flowed pretty well. The "explaining your punches" thing its getting played like a mu-fuckah.


Conclusion- Alright this battle was nice, Cali, your punches was decent had some good personals with OK wordplays. I started to re-read your verse, the "elevate month" thing was a bit played to me. The cellphone was creative nice. The part when you dissed his audio about not getting any feedback, you could've word it differently but it was a bit played to me. Lay-Text, nice verse, you had decent punches, with some good wordplays. Everyline was of your verse was creative sentences. There was one, played verse, the part when you said "god dont like ugly" line, man that's played. But i'mma have to vote LAY-TEXT because the man came out less played and harder punches. Cali next time, bring creativiness to the battle with your punches.


Pz

Voted For: John Holmes

alrite john-punches were right on target,flow was dope feelin it,structure was ill,vocab was good too nice drop overall john
everything was on target thats how u win a battle........

lay-text u had ok punches but not all on target,flow was ight..
structure was good,vocab was off not very skilled,and that line'dennis tha menace fukk shammo...wtf was that that killed this verse for me and dont ryme initials it dont look right so
jonh u got this hands down homie

Voted For: Lay-Text

Dude is all mouth got k.oed by the last dude he called out
Left r.v for the fall?...of course all birds get called south!!
^^^
first line is irrelivent ta you battlin him, an the second line reminds of a game line when he said somthin about the birds movin down south

No flow little homo only audio win is a no show
Ya punches is so so still undevolped like cell phone photos!!
^^^
not a good bar, i was expectin alot better an not as basic from the punch in the second line, i'm dissapointed.

No respect only beat 4 vets i checked ya stats(1)
Nobody likes you!!...you getno replies on ya audio tracks!!
^^^
thats a little better, nice personal

Your only chance to 'Elevate' is when you move in a month(2)
Yeah we know you 'Restricked'.....from throwing a dope punch!!(3)
^^^
the first line just No lol...second line? it is veru unoriginal an uncreative, cali...wheres the fiyah u usaully droppin??

Good name lame cuz yous a groupie 'laytext' wrap over a penis
He got a gallon of wackness.......annd only a 'Drop of Genius'!(4)
^^^^
good name lame? not feelin that part, but the laytext wrapped over a penis was good had me like ''oooh''...good choice of words...the closer was again uncreative, an very very played, not the way u worded, but where u was trynna hit with the closing line is just played

Lay-Text:
Your Wack Kid....You Can't Handle The Shit That I'm Spittin..
Man..Your Reign Of RV Wasn't Short..Dude It Was Non-Existent..
^^^
blah, first line was self glory, u revived it tho, nice punch in the second line.

Whats Funny Is..In Audio I've Heard Your Skill Compared To L.I..
A Top Vet?..Nah..Even DeadlyVision Said Your A Disgrace To A.I..
^^^
okay, i dont know if L.I Is good or not, but once again....you hit hard with the disgrace ta A.I line.

Look Faggot You Can't See Me..Like Bats Looking At Red Signs..
And By Battling You...Rated Will Be Sure To Meet Dead Lines..
^^^
nope, aint feelin that, thats your weakest bar.

You Were Born?! What Happen?...Dennis The Mennis Fuck Shamoo?
You Claim To Be God..and God Loves Ugly..So Then Out Came You..
^^^
okay, okay, i'm really really feelin that punch, ''god likes ugly then out came u'' that shit had me like ''ooh''

Listen To Everyone..Your Wack..Man Let That Shit Get Through..
Since You Like Arrows...Lets Put It This Way...I'm > Than U..
^^^
aint feelin the closer, i can see what u tried ta do, but naaaah, i aint feelin that.

On the whole, Cali u didnt drop anythin that made me wanna read it again, or even laugh....it was basically awhole bunch of personals u gatherd up which didnt make lay look like a fool, where as the disgrace ta A.I & God made ugly line really hit there mark, so on them 2 lines alone, the personal an punch side of the battle has too goto the more creative laytext

vote: Lay-Text

Please RTF In My Battlle Vs J-Dot

Voted For: John Holmes

I think that ^^..^^ got this battle because i feel that ^^..^^ came stronger in the following categories...Punches i felt ^^..^^ got it was effective and was on point Lay-Text you should of been a bit more creative on this occasion personals i felt went to ^^..^^ good lookin wordplay and creativity goes to ^^..^^ and flow and structure i'll give to Lay-Text.

Basically both used links effectively and no matter what people say i don't think they are played at all infact if used correctly which both did...then they amplify a punch/personal

LT had better flow & structure and ^^..^^'s layout wit the bold wasn't attractive but they still the same words

Punches and personals were hard from both but LT had a few self-g lines like

Your Wack Kid....You Can't Handle The Shit That I'm Spittin..

Look Faggot You Can't See Me..Like Bats Looking At Red Signs..

But that sums it up really good battle though i personally don't agree wit pink slip battles but meh...i gotta vote for someone

V/^^..^^

Voted For: John Holmes

Your Wack Kid....You Can't Handle The Shit That I'm Spittin..
Man..Your Reign Of RV Wasn't Short..Dude It Was Non-Existent..

pretty weak opener, man... for a pink slip battle ya shoulda came out swinging like he spit on ya momz or sum'n...

Whats Funny Is..In Audio I've Heard Your Skill Compared To L.I..
A Top Vet?..Nah..Even DeadlyVision Said Your A Disgrace To A.I..

ok personal but wasn't really felin the rhyme here... LI AI... ehhh not too strong

Look Faggot You Can't See Me..Like Bats Looking At Red Signs..
And By Battling You...Rated Will Be Sure To Meet Dead Lines..

first part was ok... but the "meet deadlines" part was killer.... more lines like this would be an easy win

You Were Born?! What Happen?...Dennis The Mennis Fuck Shamoo?
You Claim To Be God..and God Loves Ugly..So Then Out Came You..

ewwwww... not good... this looks like sum'n from a dude that's getting better at text but ain't quite there yet... i see the effort but the punches are kinda soft

Listen To Everyone..Your Wack..Man Let That Shit Get Through..
Since You Like Arrows...Lets Put It This Way...I'm > Than U..

decent closer... but again... no bang... this shoulda been more amped than what it was... i've seen you spit way better than this




Dude is all mouth got k.oed by the last dude he called out
Left r.v for the fall?...of course all birds get called south!!

started off pretty good but the ending took away from it

No flow little homo only audio win is a no show
Ya punches is so so still undevolped like cell phone photos!!

again... started off great and faltered at the end...nice personal in the beginning

No respect only beat 4 vets i checked ya stats(1)
Nobody likes you!!...you getno replies on ya audio tracks!!

ouch!!!!...that one hurt... nice punch/personal

Your only chance to 'Elevate' is when you move in a month(2)
Yeah we know you 'Restricked'.....from throwing a dope punch!!(3)

blahhh... read it yaself... ya should already know... got more filler in there than twinkies...lol

Good name lame cuz yous a groupie 'laytext' wrap over a penis
He got a gallon of wackness.......annd only a 'Drop of Genius'!(4)

ok ending... rewording coulda made it better...seen cali come stronger than this also but he still gets the vote... verse was simply better in my eyes... respect to both..out

Voted For: Lay-Text

SHOULD BE CLOSE....................................

Removed

ooopppss my bad lay and cali, get that removed.....my fault

Voted For: Lay-Text

man this was a close ass battle.. i think Lay gets it. the non-existent line was really nice.. i liked the God line too.. cali u came with nice lines and i really am kinda worried about the Korv battle.. but to be honest i think lay got this just with harder punches.. both of u came really creative... it was really close to call.. the only thing that gives lay this is his punches were just wittier and a little comical.. the flow and structure on all that shit was pretty even like i said punches get this.. alot of personals from both.. but damn.. this is hard to do.. but lay gets it cause of punches.. no hate pz..

Voted For: Lay-Text

im votin fo ley-text. lay-text had sum dope punches. ^^..^^'s wuz aight, but nuthin special. u both had good flow, good structure. no hate tho ^^..^^, i just liked lay-texts shit betta, nom sizlaxin? werd

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Voted For: Lay-Text

meh, personally i enjoyed R's better....but cali had some nice personals at the end....but the rest of his verse i didn't like, mainly because it was a little basic, i thought anyways...i'll break it down...

-Dude is all mouth got k.oed by the last dude he called out
Left r.v for the fall?...of course all birds get called south!!
-didn't connect at all...didn't like the punch either 4/10
-No flow little homo only audio win is a no show
Ya punches is so so still undevolped like cell phone photos!!
-meh, kinda okay, still real basic/dumb 5/10
-No respect only beat 4 vets i checked ya stats(1)
Nobody likes you!!...you getno replies on ya audio tracks!!
-once again, real basic here, but decent 5/10
-Your only chance to 'Elevate' is when you move in a month(2)
Yeah we know you 'Restricked'.....from throwing a dope punch!!(3)
haha, second line was hot, first was okay 7/10
-Good name lame cuz yous a groupie 'laytext' wrap over a penis
He got a gallon of wackness.......annd only a 'Drop of Genius'!(4)
-pretty horrible wording....nice meta on the second 7/10

total: 28/50overall, this wasnt your best drop man, lot of it was too plain, nothing really that creative until you hit your last 2 bars, but i think it was too late to recover

-Your Wack Kid....You Can't Handle The Shit That I'm Spittin..
Man..Your Reign Of RV Wasn't Short..Dude It Was Non-Existent..
-not bad...set up was poor 5/10
-Whats Funny Is..In Audio I've Heard Your Skill Compared To L.I..
A Top Vet?..Nah..Even DeadlyVision Said Your A Disgrace To A.I..
bah... i dunno if first line is true, but fire on the second line 6/10
-Look Faggot You Can't See Me..Like Bats Looking At Red Signs..
And By Battling You...Rated Will Be Sure To Meet Dead Lines..
meh, 5/10
-You Were Born?! What Happen?...Dennis The Mennis Fuck Shamoo?
You Claim To Be God..and God Loves Ugly..So Then Out Came You..
haha, i laughed at this punch, nice personal 7/10
-Listen To Everyone..Your Wack..Man Let That Shit Get Through..
Since You Like Arrows...Lets Put It This Way...I'm > Than U..
nice closer to finish it off 6/10

total: 29/50....not the best from you either....some punches could have been set up alot better, but overall, i laughed at your verse more, it was more consistent with complexity and creativity, so thats why im giving you the vote, close battle though, keep up to both

v/Lay-Text