"The unknown yet truly longed for..."
 

"This is the unknown yet truly longed for...this is...."

Doe Bagz

fuckin heartbreak, hearts pace, watch as ya gurl deliberates
will she say "yes", maybe so, but if she dont u a shit face
ya palms sweat, u start to shake, cuz slowly seconds movin pass
she said "NO", OH SHIT!, i guess u wanna beat her ass
u stand up, fists balled, u pissed off to capacity
she turned u down, then she left, leavin u wit da dinner fee
she had swiftly ran, now u cryin, and everybodies starin
u feel embarassed, i bet u would, what if u invited parents?
u call yo nigga, what he gone do?, take u to tha titty bars
but u still sad, steamin mad, so u hardly even gettin hard
u start drinkin sumtimes thinkin dat i was jus all yo fault
she left ya ass, was it tha ring?, maybe 1-karrot threw her off
"u cheap fucka", dats what u say, puttin in a porno tape
u jackin off wonderin why her titties aint now in ya face
u bust ya nut, while cryin, thinkin life was jus movin fast
u used to be a pimp, so i guess heatbreak came and bit ya ass

"This is the unknown yet truly longed for...this is...."

Mixtape

never been wishin for it but i guess id admitt it
yes i sorta kinda like.love, wantin you more
id adore u like a true dream never want to wake
when i open my eyes, its all not real just fake
cant really explain im sorta upsessed with this 1
people says its never fanna happen like my last
shell break up with me, thats just my old n past
ill studder,murmer slight tone a voice
I cant even say it enough over n over
its not even a choice, could i? could I?? be in
true love with this special girl, wishin n be desirin
her one n only feelings, cant explain wht i....
i even repeat over n over again her name
im speachless when she walks by nothin to say
but when seeing her she just made my day
u could never her a single word from me
see me n a corner thats why im heart broken

"This is the unknown yet truly longed for...this is...."

LFS The Great

You'd think it'd be common knowledge that hated love is love not known,
Never havin feelings flow fluid like water and affection that's shown,
It's when being in the other's presense fulfills your needs and desires,
And makin her smile is better than any earthly possesion you can buy her,
Struggling wonderin why she's with you cuz you know she deserves more,
Until you stare in each others eyes, you look inside like open doors,
To see the heart and soul that pumps purity and is entwined with yours,
Leavin you sore from thinkin of ways to please her,somehow she reassures,
Diamonds are forever but the connection between lovers lasts eternally,
Buildin bridges that bring together external sex and makin love internally,
She turns to me when in need and I oblige to be her shoulder to lean on,
With a look of longing and wanting craving for the man she wishes to lay upon,
Just how I look to her, she's reliant on me, makin her happy is my responsibilty,
She's my reason for being, and I'm foreseeing the freeing of mutual intimacy,
Words can't explain the engangement between, the living of a lifelong dreams,
But now I have a purpose in life that fits smoothly likes coffee and cream,
For me it was common knowledge that hated love is love that's not known,
Until she came and stole my heart and left we together stepped into the unknown...

shit man

aight this was a nice drop..............

"This is the unknown yet truly longed for...this is...."

i didnt understand the reason behind puttin that in ya drop but anyway

the vocabs was nice from all i think that Mixtape had the best verse though.

it all flowed well too, structure was nice the way all lines were the same length around about but LFS ya fuckin lines were stretched like fuck....mite wanna fix that!!!!!

overall 7/10

lol thx...i was just goin wit it lol...didnt edit this one like i usually do cuz i wrote it for sumone lol...oh ea heres my feed link....

my feed

lmfao nice crop doe verse was hilarious mixtapes verse had good emotion n wordplay n lfs had all around creativeness awesome drop fams



8/10

holla

damn good structure, vocab
flow and multi's damn tight shit

thanks for the feed.. uppin!

One word... Sploogetastic... lol i liked it though... only thing i didn't like about it was WHERE ARE THE FUCKIN MULTIS?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?! WHHHHEEERRRREEEEEE?!?!?!?!?! lol it was good though... i liked it... and forgot to give you my verse for it.. lol

lol multi...what is this multi???? lol

lol^^ uppin for some more comments.

yeah man...uppin dis shit

-DB

uppin...uppin....

Come on now. this has deep feelings into this shit. very deep uppin

well damn...uppin

-DB

iight..once more...

-DB

yppin this shit...the OFFICIAL last OM of Emerica's Finest lol

Dis shit was pretty dope cuzzin'z good structures good flows good rhymes and good drops from all......i give it a 8/10......~1~

RTF Please heres da link..........
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=189128

aiight i'ma hop on that now...holla uppin fo mo

thanks.. uppin for some more feed...

word, i thought mixtapes was more of a poem, and kinda threw of flow.....but not bad, doe bags, a little more anger in his, but mixed up the tone a bit, which was good....i thought LFS had the best imagery/emotion, but your lines were a little long, but you used nice vocab, which is good.......overall, this was decent, each brought a different view/aspect which was refreshing.....3 different writing styles, brought together to make a decent open mic, keep up all

lol i thought mine was some topical kinda shit lol...oh yeah the girl i wrote it too...said yes...i'm goin to prom boys lol....

Creativity and flow was nice...good job on this, I enjoyed reading it. Vocab was pretty nice too.

heh.. hope u have a good one...uppin!

uppin for the sensitive cats out there lol

^ lol... yea uppin....

Word. This shit was pretty cool. All of ya excelled in different areas.

Doe: lmao.. Nice verse.

Mixtape: Not that great vocab, but good emotion.

LFS: Nice vocab and emotion. I was feelin it.

Only thing is the topic wasnt reall original or anything... But you all pulled it off nicely...

thx OMB that means a lot from you lol..upin this for morr feed

come on now.. uppin for some more.....

LoL yeah u right it lacks multis... Got the POINT across but lack multis

hot shit overall tho keep doin what u do fam... holla

sumones angry!!...damn homie, why u lyin like dat...u know u luv dis OM...dont trip...lmao

hold up...u mad at me?...cuz all i said was ya structure was wack...dont flip out on me fam...u dont need dat in ya life right now

oh, iight den...LFS, where u at dawg...u got company...*DB leaves tha room*

he's mad cuz I made a joke...ooh what is a multi...i laughed at the end fuckin herb...check my freestyle...its full of multis...dumbass....and accept my battle so i can sweep u 5-0...bitch...and DB...i know u dont think he's better than me lol..cuz if u do...I'm disappointed

Doe Bagz......

Your Shit Was Well Written Kid.......Real Nice Verse........Flowed On Point & I Got Da Picture

Mixtape......

Coulda Had Longer Lines But Ya Verse Was Still Nice.....Good Shit

LFS.......

Ya Shit Was Da Best Outta Everyones....Really Feelin Ya Flow....You Had Nice Vocab....You Was Spittin Dat Real Shit, Much Respect To All

...1

yo I SET UP A BATTLE! just accept and beat me if you can...if I lose I WILL HUT UP and anounce in an OM, Audio and Graphic that you are better than me...but I cant IF OU DONT SHOW UP!!! just accept and drop...hell prewrite if you want I DONT CARE JUST DROP SOMETHING AND DONT DUCK LIKE TE BITCH YOU ARE!

hey...lets play tha "no beef game" K?

and i would like to upp dis track...plz