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"RV House Party" Were You Invited!!!!
Yea check this shit...........It's the RV House Party............ THE RV HOUSE PARTY!!! Open Mic by Solo. Bump That Music Bitches It’s the Party Of The Year… Get Down With These Hoez Place To Be Is Right Here… Doors Open, Music Bumpin!! Got Them Bitchez ‘n’ Hoez On The Scene… Yea Them RV Ladies Here To..Mizz Fyre, Lady Fiyah & Drama Queen… Judicial Rolls Up In The Party Bus..Bouncin Around On Them Hydraulics… Unload The Passengers..Rushin For The Liquor Like Some RV Alcoholics… Shit’s Only Just Started When The Doors Get Rushed By Hordes Of Herbz… Durrr!! Kool Col-B Rolls Up In His Wheelchair And Everybody’s Like…”WERD!”… Me And R-Rated Toss Them Herbz Out..Now They Out Front Actin Hard… The Councilment Rolls Up And There’s Some Newb Bashin In The Yard… CALI Out There Shoutin “I’ll Own You Bitches” Whilst He Smackin Heads… It’s Like Pay-Per-View…Charge Hoez To Watch Foolz Get Ripped To Shreds… The Beats Stop..Chaos Drunk As Fuck Just Hit The DJ Round The Face… People Booin And Bout To Leave..Red Bull Starts Mixin In The DJ’s Place… Doors Fly Open And In Steps Mista Authentiq With A Burger In His Mouth… Screamin “Ngga Who Wnt Bff Wit Me..Stp Up Nd Git Knckd Tha Fck Out”… Tephlon Rolls Thru And Steals Mista’s Burger..Takes Off Across The Room… Then Kesse Pulls Out The 12-Gauge And Pops Off A Blast Like *BOOM*… “O’G’z In Tha House!” Mista Falls In Blood Before He Can Get The Burger… Red Bull Mixes On Some Ja Rule And The Speakers Bump Out “Murder”… Bump That Music Bitches It’s the Party Of The Year… Get Down With These Hoez Place To Be Is Right Here… Into The Night We Had Mista Tossed..Parties Moved On Up Them Stairs… Marv Took 10 Hoez With Him..Bout To Give Em Some Of Amerikaz Nightmare… Lights Are Bumpin..Action Going On!! People Up There Livin Their Dream… Then Daz Comes Down With A Grin On His Face And Not Lookin So Clean… Sex In The Kitchen, Bathrooms And Bedrooms..It’s Like One Great Orgy… Then Troop Rolls Up To A Hoe Like “Hey” And She Like “U Can’t Afford Me”… Da Vinci Rolls Up Sportin Them Billions..All Geared Out With That Bling… Solo Comes Out The Kitchen With Hoez Like “Yea Baby I’m Still The King”… SPuL And L.I. Them Bad Boyz..Head Upstairs With Hoez Wearin Leather… Into That Bondage Shit!! It Ain’t Ridin ‘n’ Dyin That They Only Do Together… J DOT Be Smokin Them Cigars..Tony Green Be Tryin To Hit Up Mizz Fyre… And Villagepimp Takes The Stage..Advertisin Them Village Hoez For Hire… Mad Dog, Acuity & Premanition Be Showin Girls Some Of That UK Lovin… And Flow Intelligent Be Usin All That Talent On Each Hoe He’s Fuckin… Sdizzle The Party Bear..Cuddlin Up Hoez Got His Head On They Boobs… CALI Comes Back In And He’s Like “Who Wants To Beat On Some Newbs?”… Rollout The Place And In The Cars..We All Lookin For Some Newbs To Beat… The End Of This RV House Party Bitches We Takin This Shit To The Street… ......Coming Soon...... THE RV ROAD TRIP!!! |
lol why i gotta be dead in ya rhymes?
thats fucked good shit tho... had me laughin |
look again!!!! :thumbup:
miraculously ya not dead now!!!!! yea i forgot to drop a link at the bottom of my drop so here is one............ http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=188404 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=188745 |
hahaha thanks!!!! :D
i thought it was a little gay u killed me off, i mean damn! i'm the life of every party :evilgrin: |
haha, i laughed at this.......good stuff.....no one fucks with OGs....haha, j/m, this was pretty cool....lines seemed a bit long, but it was still pretty kickin'......haha, keep up......waiting for the tour
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Yo dis shit was pretty dope cuzzin i liked dis she fam had me rolling da whole way through da verse.......good structure good flow and some pretty good wordplay......i give it a 8.5/10.......~1~
RTF Please heres da link......... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=188404 |
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he has a point yo... you could return the favor :D see the O.M ''Good Vs Evil''...by me an tony? yeah........... i dont want feed letf on that, the favor returned would be telling me that dudes alias :thumbup:... |
Wut dudes alias???????????????????????????????????
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not you lol.........
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stop freepostin.......................*BUMP*........... ..........
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aww i wish i was there lol...nice frop man 9/10...rtf in the sig
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nice shit but um...don't tell my girl bout that UK lovin i was givin
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your my hero............ lmao
nice shit fam........ |
uppin for feedback people.................stop just viewin the shit
drop some feed to for fucks sake.......it aint that hard.................... |
Nice OM. Funny Lines. Creative Idea. Enjoyed it. Flow was good, content was good and humerous. All the shoutouts were nice. I liked the idea alot. Hit up my sig. Ish is ill.
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Nice shit dawg love da verse....................
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yea this was a nice verse.....original i'm thinking and creative, nice structure and nice flow 9/10 keep it up..........
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LoL this shit was hot and "Tony Green tryinn to hit up Mizz Fyre" its true LoL this gets a 9/10
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hahahha... That was a damn Good Read.. Gotta Put that on Audio.. Funny Shit.... Dope Drop...
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Lolz, is this the secretive OM you were talking about? I'm definitely feeling it, got some nice shoot-outs in there, very creative of course. Nice to read stuff like this for a change, vocab is nice as well as structure. Laughed my ass off at some stuff, you're just mad crazy hehe. But why didn't you mention that trampoline??? *sad* Haha...
Good read man :thumbup: |
yea DQ i'm a get that trampoline out on another open mic
The Road Trip is followin this shit!!!! :thumbup: uppin for more feedback!!!!! |
*im neva invited to tha RV parties!*
lmao at tha whole track...wish it was on audio...perfect flow, structure, vocab, and imagery...loved dis shit man...9/10...hurry wit tha road trip (hope my name in it, even if yall kill me cuz imma newb)...lol -DB |
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so i guess you can really say that lines a fill-her.? :thumbup: . overall, it was a decent read, hoped it wouldve been funnier throughout its entirety, but it did have its weak n strong points good shit fam, stay up.... |
still uppin for a little more feed..................
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Shit’s Only Just Started When The Doors Get Rushed By Hordes Of Herbz…
Durrr!! Kool Col-B Rolls Up In His Wheelchair And Everybody’s Like…”WERD!”… “O’G’z In Tha House!” Mista Falls In Blood Before He Can Get The Burger… Red Bull Mixes On Some Ja Rule And The Speakers Bump Out “Murder”… ^^MY FAVS, lol @ daz's grin n not so clean man solo this was a funnyass drop, i could see it all.. nicely packed with imagery n good content lots of names mentioned to, nice concept fam....good drop |
nice piece right here, i was likin how u sort of made a story n included some various members of RV pretty original, some bars were a lil long tho, but you stil got the job done.
i give it an 8.5/10 |
Sex In The Kitchen, Bathrooms And Bedrooms..It’s Like One Great Orgy…
Then Troop Rolls Up To A Hoe Like “Hey” And She Like “U Can’t Afford Me”… ^lmfao...that was funny as hell CALI Comes Back In And He’s Like “Who Wants To Beat On Some Newbs?”… ^he prolly would do something like that...lmao Aye, solo dawg. This shit was cooo. Had me laughin, specially that mista rolled up eating a burger...lmao...This was coo, but on tha rhyming side, it lacked a lil and structure was off, and really no point to it, but pure dopeness because of the comedy. 8/10 oh, JDOT SMOKING A CIGAR...like he all high and mighty and shit... :laugh: |
pretty good man,im not appart of the party:( lol
very creative |
:wtf: I wasnt invited...Thats gay...LOL...Good drop tho, had me laughin
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ey yo man dis shit was nice but like KESSE said
ya lines was pretty long but its all good shit was still tight u no....return da fav. on my new verse its called "ill always love you"...haha shit was tight homie |
still humpin for feedback on this bizatch!!!!
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Hahahaha, this is a dope Open Mic....thanks for mentioning me... I don't know if I would mix any Ja Rule, but it's all good...
Nice drop, good flow, very entertaining, fun to read...keep it up... |
feedback hoez..........before i bitch slap ya biz-ass!!!!
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Ha this was a dope drop...
I Was realyl feelin it ... Nice creativity Some dope punchlines... You had nice structure .. i see you tried a new font Looks pretty cool... Hhaha about newb bashing. you had some nice personals , some bars were just fillers this was a dope drop.. nice creativity... nice imagery , and good wordplay, and vocab usuage overall keep it up |
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