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Perfection
...Representing Degree... Necessity is possesin me as i press to see why you leave Instead of blessin me, God's testin me with absolutely no relief Darkness as my hearts stressed, I'm pressed to progress But this mess is kept, never left, even after I slept On my mind all the time, I climb to levels of hope and despair Am I blind? Missing signs? I'm trying to grow and repair The pen quivers and shivers releasing these bitter thoughts I'd never hit her, accusations as i sit here are truly false Tears race down my face like Nascar, the quick pace is too fast In this state I beg you, pull a Ma$e, and just come back Incoming call's never from you, what did I do to my boo Feeling blue, lets start over new, our hours left are few Sybolically your locked in me, chained and never let go If only that were true, now your sockin me, and sayin no Senses get tense as I'm fenced in court about to be sentenced Your prescence isnt meant too help, not even a sign of pentance Wrecked and sent off behind bars, you said I had an obsession I'm sorry but your beautiful and it just had to be mentioned In a second it'll be ruined but i will never lose my affection Every section in my posession, u were made in perfection |
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meh, i think you strained the vocab a little too much, lol, especially when trying to multie it up.....but overall, i think it was a cool piece, had its own uniqueness to it....the start was fire though man, like i said, i think you used too much vocab at the end of it, which kinda took away from your piece.....emotion and shit....but....
Necessity is possesin me as i press to see why you leave Instead of blessin me, God's testin me with absolutely no relief Darkness as my hearts stressed, I'm pressed to progress But this mess is kept, never left, even after I slept On my mind all the time, I climb to levels of hope and despair Am I blind? Missing signs? I'm trying to grow and repair ^ wow, that was f'in hot man, so much emotion/imagery, loving it....definately keep up yo....good drop |
Yeah I was keystyling it at the begining and it flowed well. I didnt know where I was goin with this piece the whole time. But I felt I had to lay something down tonight. If you got a link to an OM feel free to drop it. Returning good feedback is always a pleasure.
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well theres one somewhere floating around i posted somewhere....lol.......i'll go up it
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Upping, leave a link and I will hit yours up.
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Upping .
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Upping Again .
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^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^Upping again god damnit
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I think u might have tried a little too hard but shit was fuckin ill. Best shit I seen in a while. Sounded like u really felt it too.
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LMFAO... Mad multis in here.
Not a bad drop overall. I think your focus on multis took away from the story a lil bit... But not much. I liked it overall. Good job. Now hit up my OM's. They're dope. |
Word I'll hit it up tommorow. Peace
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Upping .
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i liked this drop, not cuz of the story but cuz
it flowed well n had pretty consistent vocab and it showed how ya keystyle n thas koo assonasance was good, similar to my madman drop....good stuff, stay up |
Word......uping
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upping you fucking homo's
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This was a good drop.. nice i was really feeling it
you had lots of nice multies.. really had a rhythem.. Nice rhyme scheme... Structure was decent.. You had nice usuage of vocab , and wordplay were great.. Nice deep words you were using which created alot of imagery ,nice emotions and good feeling going into this drop a very nice drop.. keep it up |
Well Its DEF A Nice drop
Dont Know Bout The color though it hurt my eyes .LOL> Yeah But you came really Nice man Keep It Up You doin swell Can You Hit up The oM in my Sig ..........Vote it OM of the MOnth PLEASE |
This isnt a pillow case so quit sleeping. Up
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This was magnificent....true piece of art....wordplay was great....vocab was nice...topik was good...overall i give u a 9/10 fa this piece
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Word. upping............this is slept on
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This Was Tight Homie.deep Stuff..good Vocab And Multies,and
Structa,i Like Dat Font To...all Dis Is Good Man 10/10 |
Whoah Whoah Liked The VOCAB!Shyt Was hot!Title -Perfection- Made me wanna read it.The Beginnin Was Awesome As i Was Readin It I Felt a Good Rhythm n I Was Really Into it!Best piece I Seen in A Min!Multis Were Done Good,Vocab Was Perfect,Structure Was great!Overall,9/10
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I was feelin this drop...pretty nice...tried to use a lil too many multi's some places, but a lot of tha multi's u did use were hot, so I was definitely feelin tha vocab...Good Drop
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