AutoMatik vs Verbal
 

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Check in by: 05-03-05 at 02:46 PM

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Verbal has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-02-05 02:46 PM.

AutoMatik has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-02-05 02:49 PM.

I feel like I'm roughing up a retard, sparring with you...
Kid, you couldn't spit heat at a Mongolian barbeque...
Trust me, your frees are ugly and your rhymes can't bust me..
Cuz the verses you spit are full of shit, like Huggies..
I doubt you own a gun, but I'm sure that you've 'packed shit'
So I'll cut out this fag's tongue and give him a new accent..
You're clumsy with weaponry, so don't talk about automatics..
Because I'll shoot up your crib like baby heroin addicts...
I'll stay silent and still merk you...and let the weapons talk for me...
Stick an 'L' in your bloody corpse and leave you with a sense of 'gLory'*

*gory + L

Im Smashin This Ass, Torchin Your Names Bashin You Fast......
Nd I'll Take Your 'Shots' With 'Vodka' As If I Was 'Brakin The Glass......
Aint Stop When I Blast, Ready To Die Soldier Theif This Win Like Someone Stole Her.....
Nd He Wouldnt Be Able To 'Katch Up' Even If I Put You On My Burger.....
Step In The Ring IM Like Werd Herb, Then Destroy Your Spinal Cowrd.....
Nd Leave Your Chest With A Wider Hole, Then I'll 'Pop Shells, Like Sick Kids With 'Tylonal......
You Aint 'Standin A Chance' To Win Geek, Like 'I Cut Of Your Legs......
Nd Your Rhymes Weak, Beat Me? Nah, Cus Hes Bragin Over A '3 Battle Win Streak?......

uppin for more votes................................

Voted For: AutoMatik

Verbal

I feel like I'm roughing up a retard, sparring with you...
Kid, you couldn't spit heat at a Mongolian barbeque...
^good opener

Trust me, your frees are ugly and your rhymes can't bust me..
Cuz the verses you spit are full of shit, like Huggies..
^bit played but decent

I doubt you own a gun, but I'm sure that you've 'packed shit'
So I'll cut out this fag's tongue and give him a new accent..
^hehe good one

You're clumsy with weaponry, so don't talk about automatics..
Because I'll shoot up your crib like baby heroin addicts...
^coo coo

I'll stay silent and still merk you...and let the weapons talk for me...
Stick an 'L' in your bloody corpse and leave you with a sense of 'gLory'*
^nice closer

Good verse right here, nice potential in here with funny wordplay, some hardhitting punches, one personal too. Some self-glorification here and there though and you could have been more creative but I have seen far worse, you got some mad potential. Had your flow, vocab and structure on lock. Keep it up!


AutoMatik

Im Smashin This Ass, Torchin Your Names Bashin You Fast......
Nd I'll Take Your 'Shots' With 'Vodka' As If I Was 'Brakin The Glass......
^nice wordplay right here, good opener

Aint Stop When I Blast, Ready To Die Soldier Theif This Win Like Someone Stole Her.....
Nd He Wouldnt Be Able To 'Katch Up' Even If I Put You On My Burger.....
^hehe, cool punch with dope wordplay again

Step In The Ring IM Like Werd Herb, Then Destroy Your Spinal Cowrd.....
Nd Leave Your Chest With A Wider Hole, Then I'll 'Pop Shells, Like Sick Kids With 'Tylonal......
^hehe, funny bar

You Aint 'Standin A Chance' To Win Geek, Like 'I Cut Of Your Legs......
Nd Your Rhymes Weak, Beat Me? Nah, Cus Hes Bragin Over A '3 Battle Win Streak?......
^nice closer

Nice verse, got a dope flow in this one due to the good ass multis you using. Strongest aspect in my opinion was your wordplay which you used to build up and work out some funny hardhitting punches, no real personals though but you made up for that. Structure and vocab was good as well.

My vote goes to AutoMatik because I am really feeling his wordplay and the way he turned it into nice punches, no hate whatsoever to Verbal because you got more potential than half of these new kids man, keep it up for real!

Voted For: AutoMatik

This is the deal

Auomatik
Im Smashin This Ass, Torchin Your Names Bashin You Fast......
Nd I'll Take Your 'Shots' With 'Vodka' As If I Was 'Brakin The Glass
That Was Aii ....I Think The wordplay was used wrong in the bar
Aint Stop When I Blast, Ready To Die Soldier Theif This Win Like Someone Stole Her.....
Nd He Wouldnt Be Able To 'Katch Up' Even If I Put You On My Burger.....
Sort of Played Meta But Still Nice
Step In The Ring IM Like Werd Herb, Then Destroy Your Spinal Cowrd.....
Nd Leave Your Chest With A Wider Hole, Then I'll 'Pop Shells, Like Sick Kids With 'Tylonal......
That Was Good

You Aint 'Standin A Chance' To Win Geek, Like 'I Cut Of Your Legs......
Nd Your Rhymes Weak, Beat Me? Nah, Cus Hes Bragin Over A '3 Battle Win Streak?......
:roll: Three battle win streak?......damn

Overall
Man You did aii Overall but then at the end you hit em up with the last bar and it made me laugh big time and it was a really good personal

verbal
I feel like I'm roughing up a retard, sparring with you...
Kid, you couldn't spit heat at a Mongolian barbeque...
Umm ....... Aii
Trust me, your frees are ugly and your rhymes can't bust me..
Cuz the verses you spit are full of shit, like Huggies..
Aii The second bar was hot But The 1st line? Your frees? wats that
I doubt you own a gun, but I'm sure that you've 'packed shit'
So I'll cut out this fag's tongue and give him a new accent..
Um... AIii
You're clumsy with weaponry, so don't talk about automatics..
Because I'll shoot up your crib like baby heroin addicts...
LOL :roll:
I'll stay silent and still merk you...and let the weapons talk for me...
Stick an 'L' in your bloody corpse and leave you with a sense of 'gLory'*
Nice

Overall

Aii overall This battle was a really good battle you guys are evenly matched Really Good Battle this is a hard decision But ima have to go with Automatik

[u]Can You RTF in The link IN My Battle Please

RTF gIn The link In My SIg Please ....................Both Of you

uppin for more votes..............................

Voted For: Verbal

yo verbal got this one better structure Automatik i dont like ur structure its lookin real bad so brush up on that Verbal u had a nice flow & tight personals so i gotta give it to u Autmatik ur flow was weak2 go along with alrgith personals but i gotta give this basicly to verbal doin ya thang ~1~ RTF

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Voted For: Verbal

I felt verbal took it by a hair...heres tha break down!
structure-verbal(I doubt you own a gun, but I'm sure that you've 'packed shit'
So I'll cut out this fag's tongue and give him a new accent..)
wordplay-Automatic(Im Smashin This Ass, Torchin Your Names Bashin You Fast......
Nd I'll Take Your 'Shots' With 'Vodka' As If I Was 'Brakin The Glass......)
punchlines-verbal(You're clumsy with weaponry, so don't talk about automatics..
Because I'll shoot up your crib like baby heroin addicts...)
personals-Automatic(Nd Your Rhymes Weak, Beat Me? Nah, Cus Hes Bragin Over A '3 Battle Win Streak?......)
but overall:...Verbal..he got more punches to connect..
Auto..You had some good multi's but lacked in good punches..thats it.

Really this battle was nice..keep elevatin!!

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Thanks for explaining your votes......uppin.........

Voted For: AutoMatik

AUTOMATIK

Im Smashin This Ass, Torchin Your Names Bashin You Fast......
Nd I'll Take Your 'Shots' With 'Vodka' As If I Was 'Brakin The Glass......
^^^DECENT OPENER
Aint Stop When I Blast, Ready To Die Soldier Theif This Win Like Someone Stole Her.....
Nd He Wouldnt Be Able To 'Katch Up' Even If I Put You On My Burger.....
^^^LOL MADE ME LAUGH GOOD 1
Step In The Ring IM Like Werd Herb, Then Destroy Your Spinal Cord.....
Nd Leave Your Chest With A Wider Hole, Then I'll 'Pop Shells, Like Sick Kids With 'Tylonal......
^^^NICE LINE
You Aint 'Standin A Chance' To Win Geek, Like 'I Cut Of Your Legs......
Nd Your Rhymes Weak, Beat Me? Nah, Cus Hes Bragin Over A '3 Battle Win Streak?......
^^^IIGHT CLOSURE

OVERALL I LIKED UR VERSE. THERE WUZ LOTZ OF NICE PUNCHES AND PERSONALS IN DERE. UR STRUCTURE WUZ GOOD N U R ELEVATIN GREAT. KEEP UP DA GOOD WORK HOMIE
GREAT VERSE 4 A NEWB
FAV LINE: "Aint Stop When I Blast, Ready To Die Soldier Theif This Win Like Someone Stole Her.....
Nd He Wouldnt Be Able To 'Katch Up' Even If I Put You On My Burger..... "
8/10

VERBAL

I feel like I'm roughing up a retard, sparring with you...
Kid, you couldn't spit heat at a Mongolian barbeque...
^^^GREAT OPENER
Trust me, your frees are ugly and your rhymes can't bust me..
Cuz the verses you spit are full of shit, like Huggies..
^^^SHIT LINES.....PLAYED
I doubt you own a gun, but I'm sure that you've 'packed shit'
So I'll cut out this fag's tongue and give him a new accent..
^^^NICE LINE
You're clumsy with weaponry, so don't talk about automatics..
Because I'll shoot up your crib like baby heroin addicts...
^^^HA HA GOOD LINE MADE ME LAUGH
I'll stay silent and still merk you...and let the weapons talk for me...
Stick an 'L' in your bloody corpse and leave you with a sense of 'gLory'*
^^^MEH IIGHT CLOSURE

THIS WUZ A CLOSE ASS BATTLE TO CALL

VERBAL- I LIKED UR VERSE ALOT TOO.THERE WERE LOTZ OF PUNCHES AND PERSONALS HIT HARD. U HAD A NICE STRUCTURE AS WELL. U R GETTIN MUCH BETTA HOMIE.I LIKE UR WORK. KEEP ELEVATIN U R DOIN MUCH BETTA
FAV LINE:"You're clumsy with weaponry, so don't talk about automatics..
Because I'll shoot up your crib like baby heroin addicts..."
7.5/10

NO HATE JUS VOTIN
LIKE I SAID B4 GOOD ASS BATTLE B/W BOF YALL BUT MAH VOTE GON HAVE 2 GO 2
.........................AUTOMATIK

STAY UP YALL N KEEP ELEVATIN
..............1

lol at them dick riding...lol......i'm not worried...i won...lol...

Voted For: AutoMatik

aight auto took dis

auto had betta punches

openor-auto had a betta punch verb shit aint make sence
punches-auto had betta punches verb shit was basic
personals-none
wordplay-auto had more wordplay den verb
mutlies-none
vocab-none
structure-verb auto shit was stretched
closer-verb he had a betta punch n auto shit was stretched

overall auto took dis he had a betta verse n he came harder wit punches so he gets mah vote

vote-automatik

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Hey, be proud of that prewrite, Auto. ^And the d/r vote..

lol...ok........uppin............................. ...

Voted For: Verbal

ok automatik some of your shit aint rhyme and verbal had way better punches as well as structure that alone got him my vote but auto your shit was wack punches aint connect neither did personals wack wack wack verb your not too great yourself but decent and that got you this

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^lol..D/R...................uppppppiiiiiiinnnnnnn.........

uppppppppiiiiiiiinnnnnn to finish this off...........

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Voted For: AutoMatik

Im Smashin This Ass, Torchin Your Names Bashin You Fast......
Nd I'll Take Your 'Shots' With 'Vodka' As If I Was 'Brakin The Glass......
6...gud opener, decent wordplay!!
Aint Stop When I Blast, Ready To Die Soldier Theif This Win Like Someone Stole Her.....
Nd He Wouldnt Be Able To 'Katch Up' Even If I Put You On My Burger.....
5...weak, rhymin was slightly off but nice multi!!
Step In The Ring IM Like Werd Herb, Then Destroy Your Spinal Cowrd.....
Nd Leave Your Chest With A Wider Hole, Then I'll 'Pop Shells, Like Sick Kids With 'Tylonal......
6...aight decent bar here, but stretched!!
You Aint 'Standin A Chance' To Win Geek, Like 'I Cut Of Your Legs......
Nd Your Rhymes Weak, Beat Me? Nah, Cus Hes Bragin Over A '3 Battle Win Streak?......
0...didn't rhyme, plain n simple!!

OVERALL: 17/40 (42.5%)


I feel like I'm roughing up a retard, sparring with you...
Kid, you couldn't spit heat at a Mongolian barbeque...
2...played concept and wack!!
Trust me, your frees are ugly and your rhymes can't bust me..
Cuz the verses you spit are full of shit, like Huggies..
5...funny but not done right!!
I doubt you own a gun, but I'm sure that you've 'packed shit'
So I'll cut out this fag's tongue and give him a new accent..
4...not feelin it!!
You're clumsy with weaponry, so don't talk about automatics..
Because I'll shoot up your crib like baby heroin addicts...
6...decent meta!!
I'll stay silent and still merk you...and let the weapons talk for me...
Stick an 'L' in your bloody corpse and leave you with a sense of 'gLory'*
2...weak, a wack attempt at wordplay!!

OVERALL: 19/50 (38%)

a weak battle....automatik dropped sum ok clever lines but the closer was BS cuz it didnt rhyme.....verbal just dropped sum tired played shit that was wack, i think ya had one decent line!!!

V/ - AutoMatik

Voted For: AutoMatik

I feel like I'm roughing up a retard, sparring with you...
Kid, you couldn't spit heat at a Mongolian barbeque...
4/10...wtf, wack attempted werdplay, sry
Trust me, your frees are ugly and your rhymes can't bust me..
Cuz the verses you spit are full of shit, like Huggies..
7/10...nice punch here but you had a filler
I doubt you own a gun, but I'm sure that you've 'packed shit'
So I'll cut out this fag's tongue and give him a new accent..
6/10...also nice play off of the earlier punch
You're clumsy with weaponry, so don't talk about automatics..
Because I'll shoot up your crib like baby heroin addicts...
6/10...nice punch/werdplay here
I'll stay silent and still merk you...and let the weapons talk for me...
Stick an 'L' in your bloody corpse and leave you with a sense of 'gLory'*
7/10...nice
60%

nice verse here, good punches and werdplay, okay structure good flow coodve used more multies and upped the vocab...never read your shit b4 but nice drop

Im Smashin This Ass, Torchin Your Names Bashin You Fast......
Nd I'll Take Your 'Shots' With 'Vodka' As If I Was 'Brakin The Glass......
8/10...nice opener
Aint Stop When I Blast, Ready To Die Soldier Theif This Win Like Someone Stole Her.....
Nd He Wouldnt Be Able To 'Katch Up' Even If I Put You On My Burger.....
6/10...also good
Step In The Ring IM Like Werd Herb, Then Destroy Your Spinal Cowrd.....
Nd Leave Your Chest With A Wider Hole, Then I'll 'Pop Shells, Like Sick Kids With 'Tylonal......
5/10...okay punch
You Aint 'Standin A Chance' To Win Geek, Like 'I Cut Of Your Legs......
Nd Your Rhymes Weak, Beat Me? Nah, Cus Hes Bragin Over A '3 Battle Win Streak?......
6/10
63%

nice verse here, good puncehs, and werdplay, good multies, once agains fix your structure though

wut got automatiks this win wuz his personals, he had good ones, while verbal didnt even have any...heres a wuick breakdown

opener:a
closer:v
punches:tie
werdplay:tie
personals:a
structure:v
multies:a

v/automatik