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CeleriTy vs (Jimmy Pocketz)
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6 - UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 05-18-05 at 10:47 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. Closed - Expired / old battle win |
CeleriTy has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-15-05 11:25 PM.
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i used to... Love Life, the bugged type who`d mention things... ..that would bless a session, with the best of sentences. express my sentiments....i hoped to test the reach... So i fought til i got to a state of Arrested Peace... After a journey to the verge of where people purge evil, and live in prisms of wisdom, without The Word`s steeple Submerged in a version of peaceful mindstates... a plurality of purity that takes righteousness and combines hate. i say you should migrate, the time`s great... a place where the crime rate`s aligned with a declining pace Get a taste of sime`s stank, in a squeaky clean mansion.. Where a crooked line`s straight and "Let it Be" is the anthem A place where camps come cause indecency`s vanquished.. After you take a lava bath you can speak with the ancients. since pain is love i simply assume death is exstacy... And purity equals a life of sin that`ll never be catchin me. it`s exceptionally ill, a place where professionals build... Ex-ceptionally chill for real, without messin with pills it`s my won zone...never look for ways to come home i`m undone, and finally over my tainted love joneS Good Luck Jimmy |
i used to... Love Life, the bugged type who`d mention things... ..that would bless a session, with the best of sentences. express my sentiments....i hoped to test the reach... So i fought til i got to a state of Arrested Peace... After a journey to the verge of where people purge evil, and live in prisms of wisdom, without The Word`s steeple Submerged in a version of peaceful mindstates... a plurality of purity that takes righteousness and combines hate. i say you should migrate, the time`s great... a place where the crime rate`s aligned with a declining pace Get a taste of sime`s stank, in a squeaky clean mansion.. Where a crooked line`s straight and "Let it Be" is the anthem A place where camps come cause indecency`s vanquished.. After you take a lava bath you can speak with the ancients. since pain is love i simply assume death is exstacy... And purity equals a life of sin that`ll never be catchin me. it`s exceptionally ill, a place where professionals build... Ex-ceptionally chill for real, without messin with pills it`s my won zone...never look for ways to come home i`m undone, and finally over my tainted love joneS Good Luck Jimmy |
Topic:Arrested Peace
Rules:20-30 Lines Sorry I made Battle Rules Wrong..... |
(Jimmy Pocketz) has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-16-05 07:40 PM.
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My Visions became Blurred and my words became more slurred With Profine InterTwined Rhymes Makeing my Situations Worsts ..Onto the Point of No Return from Froze to the Worst of Burns of Embracement in my Placement where yet im still able 2 Lurns The Lessons of Preference of The Deceased among the Street And The Storys of Shackled Freedom which is Arrested Peace ....Among De-Caged Criminals fullfilled with a Heart of Sorrow For there Mistakes. made.but yet they still live 4 Tommorow With the Realization of the Many Faces they Turned Tragic From Masses of Automatic Actions.Concealing Hats and Magic From a Diverse Universe with the Bad Erases even the Worst The Dimised Dont Try and the Last Edge out even the First From there Respective Differences between Free and Not in Association with Peace on Earth but No Story and Plot Can Translate the Fate of the Ones who Claim to have Faith With there 1st Almighty..But yet Shankelz inwhich they Praise The Metallic Objects Enriched Upon there Wrist..Cant Forget To Maintain there Think Waves in a Game they Cant Forfeit Or Even Suggest the Options to Quit. To want true Peace Among Living Behind Prison Installments.But the True Reece Without the Pieces......of Proper Reality Analogy is Thankfulls For Absolutely Nothing..How can i Live Peace behind Shankulls? |
good luck man.. nice verse.. should be a very close battle...
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This was feedback posted for (Jimmy Pocketz)
this is poetry not rap battle............................................ .
lol |
This was feedback posted for CeleriTy
i think you forgot to include the topic?
or else this is a fucked up text battle, lmlo |
this is massive newb^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
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Voted For: CeleriTy
Word, i liked both verses....really feeling it....but i think celerity had more imagery...both flowed good, vocabulary usage was also good, some forced in jimmys, but none the less both were good verses.... i just feel that i connected better with celeritys.... nice though guys'... vote- celerity R.t.f--- http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=190479 |
not really an explained vote but sure....................
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lol sorry, ive never really voted on something like this, so if you wanna ask a mod to take the vote back go ahead...or if theres a better way of explaning a vote for something like this, please let me know...
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Voted For: CeleriTy
nice battle y'all.......... wat da hell is the topic tho? Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
This was feedback posted for CeleriTy
Confused... is this a topical or poetry or somethin?
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Oh aight, i see the topic now. But people cant see that unless they vote or leave feedback. I'll vote now
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This was feedback posted for CeleriTy
Wtf?????......whut Happen Ya'll Didnt Evem Tell Ppl Whut Da Topic Is Lmaoo......
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Voted For: CeleriTy
Celerity - Good drop man...Nice flow through-out the whole verse. Had some dope multies in there as well. The imagery was just wicked, some nice shit here for sure..I really enjoyed this verse...Some good vocabulary, none of that bullshit one word rhyming. Good emotion everything..Nice drop...8/10 (Jimmy Pocketz) - Aight, an allright drop here too. Your verse was kinda streched out though, the flow was a bit off, but other than that you had dope verse. A few forced rhymes, but you still came across with a good topical here...Was feeling the imagery an the emotion in it...I liked it...7/10 I think Celerity took this topical though, nice drop with good imagery, emotion and everything... Vote: Celerity |
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Voted For: CeleriTy
Wat Iz Da Topic? I Suppose It Izza Topical Rite? Well Celetiry Had Mo Creative Linez, Both Wuz Emotional, Da Scheme Ov Celerities Peice Certianly oVERLOOKED, Jimmy U Had Sum Iight Vocab 2, Juz Dat Celerityz Creativity An Scheme Ov Da Topic An Da Way He Expressed Da Emotions Took Da Battle By Storm Vote/ Celerity Plz Return Da Vote In Mah Signature |
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