Murdz vs Yvonne
 

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Yvonne has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-16-05 09:51 AM.

Murdz has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-16-05 09:51 AM.

some fast shit...

I neva had intensions of eatin but i just hadda come 2 dinner
ima tear u apart like chicken and check me pick u wit a finger
i once knocked off ur knukkle and i c u back in deciet
you fuckin in the wrong battle BITCH,too bad u cant s'it
its sad u think to be a hero when u just a genuine bitch
cos babies break thru ur ego and make u re-arrange ur shit
his punches r like jelly that y i got him plastered like nelly
if u really hate licking candy tell me wdf u doin on ur dogs belly

dorck....lol....as usual u came hella tight...o well...im herre to elevate so peeps holla at this...

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Voted For: Murdz

Murdz

yvonne, aka shemale, she, he... what gender are you,really, does anyone know?
How do you go from a general in the army to some childish femcee-wannabe ho?~*
^hehe, nice opener

you resemble a flower- you're under the same classification as "herbs"
yvonne's like a table menu- she goes to fold and disappear when she gets served~
^ohhh, nice wordplay formed into punch

bitch you fake... you play with more pussies then animal adoption shelters
I'll make you dissolve in my spit like you consist of Alka Seltzer~
^good good, no real punch though

You can be Alicia Silverstone- I'll make you leave this set totally "Clueless"
the truth is You couldn't come hard even if you ejaculated frozen vaginal fluids~
^they say "come hard" lines are played but this one is mad funny

First of all, wussup with the boo shit man? Rofl, nah I'm just kidding. Overall this was a nice keystyle you brought on table right here, stayed good consistent with nice wordplay and hard punches. Only fell off once in the third bar which wasn't a punch, flow was good, great balance in your vocab, structure was aight.


Yvonne

I neva had intensions of eatin but i just hadda come 2 dinner
ima tear u apart like chicken and check me pick u wit a finger
^no punch, bit self-glorification

i once knocked off ur knukkle and i c u back in deciet
you fuckin in the wrong battle BITCH,too bad u cant s'it
^coo coo

its sad u think to be a hero when u just a genuine bitch
cos babies break thru ur ego and make u re-arrange ur shit
^hehe funny bar

his punches r like jelly that y i got him plastered like nelly
if u really hate licking candy tell me wdf u doin on ur dogs belly
^nice closer

You definitely picked up the pace towards the ending because I wasn't really feeling your first two bars. First one was only self-glorifying, no real punch and second one was sorta basic. The last 2 bars were hardhitting and funny though, flow was good overall. Vocab was aight as well as structure, few attempted personals. Too bad you weren't as consistent as Murdz with the punches cuz this verse showed lot of potential...no hate...

This was feedback posted for Murdz
 

checkin polls. of course murdz took this. All votes on this will be returned by me also.

thanks DQ and Eazy.. good work yvonne... upppinnnnnnnnnnn

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This was feedback posted for Murdz
 

you take this battle...wasnt really feelin either...but, if i could votre youd win.

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Voted For: Murdz


yvonne:
I neva had intensions of eatin but i just hadda come 2 dinner
ima tear u apart like chicken and check me pick u wit a finger
^^^VERY WEAK OPENER
i once knocked off ur knukkle and i c u back in deciet
you fuckin in the wrong battle BITCH,too bad u cant s'it
^^^WHUT??????
its sad u think to be a hero when u just a genuine bitch
cos babies break thru ur ego and make u re-arrange ur shit
^^^^WHUT DA FUKK DO U MEAN IN DA SECOND LINE
his punches r like jelly that y i got him plastered like nelly
if u really hate licking candy tell me wdf u doin on ur dogs belly
^^^^LOL.....SUPER WACK....YA VERSE WAS HORRIBLE MAH...NO HATE I MEAN REAL TALK

murdz:
yvonne, aka shemale, she, he... what gender are you,really, does anyone know?
How do you go from a general in the army to some childish femcee-wannabe ho?~*
^^^^UHH OKAY PERSONAL
you resemble a flower- you're under the same classification as "herbs"
yvonne's like a table menu- she goes to fold and disappear when she gets served~
^^^NICE...PUNCHLINE
bitch you fake... you play with more pussies then animal adoption shelters
I'll make you dissolve in my spit like you consist of Alka Seltzer~
^^^^DECENT BAR
You can be Alicia Silverstone- I'll make you leave this set totally "Clueless"
the truth is You couldn't come hard even if you ejaculated frozen vaginal fluids~
^^^IM TIRED OF DA CUM HARD LINES..4REAL DA FLOW WAS GOOD HERE THO

V/MURDZ.........

RETURN DA FUKKIN FAVOR MURDZ N STOP BEIN A LAZY FUCKER...

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Voted For: Murdz

I neva had intensions of eatin but i just hadda come 2 dinner
ima tear u apart like chicken and check me pick u wit a finger
NAH
i once knocked off ur knukkle and i c u back in deciet
you fuckin in the wrong battle BITCH,too bad u cant s'it
SO-SO
its sad u think to be a hero when u just a genuine bitch
cos babies break thru ur ego and make u re-arrange ur shit
GOOD
his punches r like jelly that y i got him plastered like nelly
if u really hate licking candy tell me wdf u doin on ur dogs belly
LOL
=5/10 SORRI BUT THERE WAS NO REAL PUNCHES IN DAT VERSE.........

VS

yvonne, aka shemale, she, he... what gender are you,really, does anyone know?
How do you go from a general in the army to some childish femcee-wannabe ho?~*
GOOD
you resemble a flower- you're under the same classification as "herbs"
yvonne's like a table menu- she goes to fold and disappear when she gets served~
NICE
bitch you fake... you play with more pussies then animal adoption shelters
I'll make you dissolve in my spit like you consist of Alka Seltzer~
OK
You can be Alicia Silverstone- I'll make you leave this set totally "Clueless"
the truth is You couldn't come hard even if you ejaculated frozen vaginal fluids~
LOL
=8/10 A REAL NICE VERSE WI SOME REALI TITE PUNCHES!!!!!!

v/MURDZ FOR COMIN A LOT LOT HARDER!!!!!!

Voted For: Murdz

Yvonne...
I neva had intensions of eatin but i just hadda come 2 dinner
ima tear u apart like chicken and check me pick u wit a finger
Nah...4/10
i once knocked off ur knukkle and i c u back in deciet
you fuckin in the wrong battle BITCH,too bad u cant s'it
Forced....3/10
its sad u think to be a hero when u just a genuine bitch
cos babies break thru ur ego and make u re-arrange ur shit
Nope...4/10
his punches r like jelly that y i got him plastered like nelly
if u really hate licking candy tell me wdf u doin on ur dogs belly
No...2/10

Overall: 13/40


Murdz...
yvonne, aka shemale, she, he... what gender are you,really, does anyone know?
How do you go from a general in the army to some childish femcee-wannabe ho?~*
Haha...5/10
you resemble a flower- you're under the same classification as "herbs"
yvonne's like a table menu- she goes to fold and disappear when she gets served~
Nice...6/10
bitch you fake... you play with more pussies then animal adoption shelters
I'll make you dissolve in my spit like you consist of Alka Seltzer~
Word...6/10
You can be Alicia Silverstone- I'll make you leave this set totally "Clueless"
the truth is You couldn't come hard even if you ejaculated frozen vaginal fluids~
Hahaha...7/10

Overall: 24/40

Vote: Murdz

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This was feedback posted for Murdz
 

Hey I Cant Vote Bcuz Of Da Post Count But Murdz Yo Flow Wuz Tite

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Voted For: Murdz

This was an okay battle but ima give this one to Murdz


Ehh...this was an okay verse... it could have been alot better... try to use better consitant punchlines,...maybe couple of meta's and try to do name plays.. overall keep it up..if you came harder you would have won this battle


Pretty nice drop...some nice punchlines they were consistant some hit hard , some were alittle bit of a filller...structure was okay , alittle off...felt you could have used personals it would have helped alot

But overall vote -Murdz keep it up both