stanza vs Adrenaline
 

Battle Rules:

10- UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
no bitching
etc...etc....

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 05-20-05 at 04:50 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Adrenaline has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-17-05 04:53 PM.

Stanza has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-17-05 05:37 PM.

Ayo

Ima Speed up This Dude Heart Rate Like Old Ppl Having Sex
He Wishin Viagra could Help Now But all he got is Spandex
Yo Your Not On My Level Son ...Lets compare The Records
I'll Tear Your verse Apart & Take The S Outta Ya Sketchers
So You Not Throwin Punchez at me Son You Jus A Ketcher
I Felt Like Hitler When I Toke Down This German Shepard
You Might Wanna Duck Jus Look What My Rymes is Holdin
U Aint Been on Da Grind Since T.Hawks Pro Skateboarding [b]
See [b]I Make You & Break You So I Live Up to Yo Avy
Last Time U Found Dirt, Was When U Was Pickin Daisies
See Now that Ive Done Ten Lines Its Only Fair To Stop Here
Bcuz When I Spit This Dude Head will Feel Lopsided
................ As If He were Hearing Out Of One ear

im "rippin text","tearin out ya words" when my punches is hittin ya head
"dismember your rhyme scheme" and "killin ya stanza" when im fillin da lead
da only way u could "step all over my rhymes",is if I "spit on da sidewalk"
I bring da "vengeance to ya livin room",that means u gonna "die hard"
look kid ur "bars is improperly written" so u need ta "change ya name"(stanza)
Im stayin wit "flames",only way to stop my bars was if u came wit "reign"
I "drive thru" dis fag like fast food,he couldn't stop me if he was a "red light"
I bet he "shines" in battle like a "deer crossin da road" in da "head lights"(lol)
please u must be "kiddin",cuz u "scared of me" like I was "michael jackson"
only chance of you winnin dis is if u flipped ur win percentage to "likable fractions"
kid im the main feature,u just da "sideline attraction" like a "cheerleader"
I bet his parents kicked him out as worthless,and RV...doesnt like him here neither

uppin...I took this battle...you ownin me son?...naaaaaww lol

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This was feedback posted for Adrenaline
 

you had a beter personal, he had better structure,
.............. jus checkin the polls.........................

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Voted For: Stanza

im "rippin text","tearin out ya words" when my punches is hittin ya head
"dismember your rhyme scheme" and "killin ya stanza" when im fillin da lead
5...not really hittin, more talkin shit!!
da only way u could "step all over my rhymes",is if I "spit on da sidewalk"
I bring da "vengeance to ya livin room",that means u gonna "die hard"
5...worded wrong, rhymin wasn't perfect either!!
look kid ur "bars is improperly written" so u need ta "change ya name"(stanza)
Im stayin wit "flames",only way to stop my bars was if u came wit "reign"
4...weak. first line was bleh!!
I "drive thru" dis fag like fast food,he couldn't stop me if he was a "red light"
I bet he "shines" in battle like a "deer crossin da road" in da "head lights"(lol)
5...aight meta, but callin sumone gay is played!!
please u must be "kiddin",cuz u "scared of me" like I was "michael jackson"
only chance of you winnin dis is if u flipped ur win percentage to "likable fractions"
4...weak first line, MJ shit is played!!
kid im the main feature,u just da "sideline attraction" like a "cheerleader"
I bet his parents kicked him out as worthless,and RV...doesnt like him here neither
4...weak again, and played slef-glorifyin shit!!

OVERALL: 27/60


Ima Speed up This Dude Heart Rate Like Old Ppl Having Sex
He Wishin Viagra could Help Now But all he got is Spandex
5...first line was nice, wasn't feelin the 2nd!!
Yo Your Not On My Level Son ...Lets compare The Records
I'll Tear Your verse Apart & Take The S Outta Ya Sketchers
5...nice, but the first line was borderline self-G!!
So You Not Throwin Punchez at me Son You Jus A Ketcher
I Felt Like Hitler When I Toke Down This German Shepard
5...consistensy is good, but i've seen better from ya!!
You Might Wanna Duck Jus Look What My Rymes is Holdin
U Aint Been on Da Grind Since T.Hawks Pro Skateboarding
6...2nd line :thumbup: original concept!!
See I Make You & Break You So I Live Up to Yo Avy
Last Time U Found Dirt, Was When U Was Pickin Daisies
4...weak, not a real hard punch!!
See Now that Ive Done Ten Lines Its Only Fair To Stop Here
Bcuz When I Spit This Dude Head will Feel Lopsided
................ As If He were Hearing Out Of One ear
6...funny, decent closer!!

OVERALL: 31/60

not the best battle
.......i have seen both do better.......
adrenaline had some played concepts.......
.....no real creative punches....vocab was pretty basic
stanza had a couple of real funny punches.....
.....his vocab wasnt all too creative......
came with some played concepts to............
......but overall was more consistent.....

V/ - stanza

RTF on this battle!!!!
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Thanx Mayne Ill Hit That Battle Up Rii Now ............

Voted For: Adrenaline

adrenline:
im "rippin text","tearin out ya words" when my punches is hittin ya head
"dismember your rhyme scheme" and "killin ya stanza" when im fillin da lead
^^^^1ST LINE WAS ALRITE...BUT I REALLY DIDN'T LIKE DA SECOND
da only way u could "step all over my rhymes",is if I "spit on da sidewalk"
I bring da "vengeance to ya livin room",that means u gonna "die hard"
^^^^SIDEWALK & DIE HARD DONT RYHME...U FORCE DAT
look kid ur "bars is improperly written" so u need ta "change ya name"(stanza)
Im stayin wit "flames",only way to stop my bars was if u came wit "reign"
^^^^WHOLE BUNCH OF PLAYED SHIT IN DIS BAR..DA MULTI WAS ALRITE THO
I "drive thru" dis fag like fast food,he couldn't stop me if he was a "red light"
I bet he "shines" in battle like a "deer crossin da road" in da "head lights"(lol)
^^^NO
please u must be "kiddin",cuz u "scared of me" like I was "michael jackson"
only chance of you winnin dis is if u flipped ur win percentage to "likable fractions"
^^^^LOL U TRYIN 2 HARD FAM
kid im the main feature,u just da "sideline attraction" like a "cheerleader"
I bet his parents kicked him out as worthless,and RV...doesnt like him here neither
^^^GOOD FLOW...BUT DA PUNCH WASN'T REALLY DAT GOOD

stanza:
Ima Speed up This Dude Heart Rate Like Old Ppl Having Sex
He Wishin Viagra could Help Now But all he got is Spandex
^^^GOOD RYHME SCHEME...BUT DA PUNCH WAS WACK
Yo Your Not On My Level Son ...Lets compare The Records
I'll Tear Your verse Apart & Take The S Outta Ya Sketchers
^^^LOL WACK
So You Not Throwin Punchez at me Son You Jus A Ketcher
I Felt Like Hitler When I Toke Down This German Shepard
^^^NO
You Might Wanna Duck Jus Look What My Rymes is Holdin
U Aint Been on Da Grind Since T.Hawks Pro Skateboarding [b]
^^^HOLDING & SKATEBOARDING DONT RYHME..FORCED
See [b]I Make You & Break You So I Live Up to Yo Avy
Last Time U Found Dirt, Was When U Was Pickin Daisies
^^^LOL..NO
See Now that Ive Done Ten Lines Its Only Fair To Stop Here
Bcuz When I Spit This Dude Head will Feel Lopsided
................ As If He were Hearing Out Of One ear
^^^VERY WEAK...CLOSER

V/ADRENALINE...HE CAME MORE CREATIVE....STANZA NO HATE OR NOTHIN REAL TALK STEP YA RAP GAME UP DOGG

Thanx ................................................

uppin...I actually looked at dis... .

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Voted For: Stanza

im "rippin text","tearin out ya words" when my punches is hittin ya head
"dismember your rhyme scheme" and "killin ya stanza" when im fillin da lead
da only way u could "step all over my rhymes",is if I "spit on da sidewalk"
I bring da "vengeance to ya livin room",that means u gonna "die hard"
look kid ur "bars is improperly written" so u need ta "change ya name"(stanza)
Im stayin wit "flames",only way to stop my bars was if u came wit "reign"
I "drive thru" dis fag like fast food,he couldn't stop me if he was a "red light"
I bet he "shines" in battle like a "deer crossin da road" in da "head lights"(lol)
please u must be "kiddin",cuz u "scared of me" like I was "michael jackson"
only chance of you winnin dis is if u flipped ur win percentage to "likable fractions"
kid im the main feature,u just da "sideline attraction" like a "cheerleader"
I bet his parents kicked him out as worthless,and RV...doesnt like him here neither

Yo Da Verse Wuz Iight, Culd Ov Came Harder Wit Sum Concepts Ov Yo Punchez, Wordplay Wuz Off In Alot Ov Ypo Rhymez 2, Personalz Wuz There, But U Culd Ov Hit Harder Wid Da Wordplay & Ur Vocab Could Use A Lil Touchin Up 2....Not Bad Yo, But U Need 2 Be Mo Creative...Therez Npo Limit 2 Wordplay Dawg, Let Yo Mind Take Over, U Feel?


Ima Speed up This Dude Heart Rate Like Old Ppl Having Sex
He Wishin Viagra could Help Now But all he got is Spandex
Yo Your Not On My Level Son ...Lets compare The Records
I'll Tear Your verse Apart & Take The S Outta Ya Sketchers
So You Not Throwin Punchez at me Son You Jus A Ketcher
I Felt Like Hitler When I Toke Down This German Shepard
You Might Wanna Duck Jus Look What My Rymes is Holdin
U Aint Been on Da Grind Since T.Hawks Pro Skateboarding [b]
See [b]I Make You & Break You So I Live Up to Yo Avy
Last Time U Found Dirt, Was When U Was Pickin Daisies
See Now that Ive Done Ten Lines Its Only Fair To Stop Here
Bcuz When I Spit This Dude Head will Feel Lopsided
................ As If He were Hearing Out Of One ear

Dope Rhymez, Punz Wuz Creative & Witty, U Maybe Culd Word Yo Verses Better So Da Flow Az U Read Iz Ez'er 2 Follow, But Still Decent, Not Az Played Az Adrenaline, More Creative & Harder Hittin Wod Da Punz, Wordplay Iz Da Key, Sum Linez U Had It, Sum Didnt, Work On Being Mo Consistant

Vote=Stanza+He Had Better Wordplay, Punz & Adrenaline Wuz A Lil Played Wit A Few Linez & Self Gloried A Lil 2

Return Da Vote In Mah Signature Plz

Aii Man Ill RTF ASAP ........................................bump

Now Wuld Be A Good Tyme Dawg, Wuldnt Want Mah Vote In Here Removed Wuld'cha?

Juz Messin Wit'chu Dawgy, But Holler@DaSignaturePlz, Linxxxxxxxx In Thurr 4ya

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This was feedback posted for Adrenaline
 

i like the way adrenaline comes at him. both verses werent bad though.

Voted For: Stanza

V/stanza...this was an ight battle....because stanza came wit the punchs that were used creatively wit good wordplay....an structure...adren....u came wit an ight verse nuthin to special....u had stretched lines an some ur punchs played mike jackson lines are a no....played work on those things....No Hate.....RETURN THE FAVOR...
(Or U'll Never recieve an honest vote from me agian an i'll get this removed)
Opener=S
CLoser=S
Structure=S
Punchs=S
Personals=s
Wordplay=S
Multi's=None really
Vocab=S
Overall=Stanza

Thanx Young Blaze

Ill RTF If you give me some links .................

Voted For: Adrenaline

because sick rhymes on the right lines at the right times

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=193594
Link........Honest vote homie.....

Gotcha Homez

,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,Still Uppin I Beleave

Voted For: Stanza

i will go with stanza here.

adrenaline: meh, nothing special, elevate everything. too basic, and thats what really hurt you. all your concepts have been done before, and the stuff that was not, was just straight whack. nothing else to really say, elevate in punches.

stanza: well, you came harder and had a couple that connected/effective. your closer however, was super whack and should never have a set-up like that, plus it was self-glore, so avoid that in the future; also, your stuff was kind of on the weak side as well, but you did stay consistent, and had a couple punches that hit, so you get my vote

v/stanza. rtf on the link in my sig, or this gets taken away :).

Yo Stanza I Already Voted On Diz Battle Dawg So Watz Up

well Then Jus hit Up any Other battle link in my sig Then

Voted For: Adrenaline

ok close battle both had personals and punches tight battle here was kinda hard to decide but my vote has to go to the adrenaline he had a good closer it made me laugh his punches were hittin harder also but good battle it was close to decide
v/adrenaline

Your a Bitch You Know Goddamn Where His Shit Was wack ....You dont Know how to vote Man LOL

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Voted For: Stanza

LoL WHOAH Nice Battle Stanza N Adrenaline!but my vote goez to
STANZA:
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Ima Speed up This Dude Heart Rate Like Old Ppl Having Sex
He Wishin Viagra could Help Now But all he got is Spandex
^LoL 8/10
Yo Your Not On My Level Son ...Lets compare The Records
I'll Tear Your verse Apart & Take The S Outta Ya Sketchers
^Played 6/10
So You Not Throwin Punchez at me Son You Jus A Ketcher
I Felt Like Hitler When I Toke Down This German Shepard
^Alright 7/10
You Might Wanna Duck Jus Look What My Rymes is Holdin
U Aint Been on Da Grind Since T.Hawks Pro Skateboarding
^Alright 7/10
See [b]I Make You & Break You So I Live Up to Yo Avy
Last Time U Found Dirt, Was When U Was Pickin Daisies
[B]??^6/10
See Now that Ive Done Ten Lines Its Only Fair To Stop Here
Bcuz When I Spit This Dude Head will Feel Lopsided
................ As If He were Hearing Out Of One ear
^Alright 7/10
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aDrEnAlInE!
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im "rippin text","tearin out ya words" when my punches is hittin ya head
"dismember your rhyme scheme" and "killin ya stanza" when im fillin da lead
^Alright 7/10
da only way u could "step all over my rhymes",is if I "spit on da sidewalk"
I bring da "vengeance to ya livin room",that means u gonna "die hard"
^6/10
look kid ur "bars is improperly written" so u need ta "change ya name"(stanza)
Im stayin wit "flames",only way to stop my bars was if u came wit "reign"
^kewl 7/10
I "drive thru" dis fag like fast food,he couldn't stop me if he was a "red light"
I bet he "shines" in battle like a "deer crossin da road" in da "head lights"(lol)
Kewl^7/10
please u must be "kiddin",cuz u "scared of me" like I was "michael jackson"
only chance of you winnin dis is if u flipped ur win percentage to "likable fractions"
^Alright 6/10
kid im the main feature,u just da "sideline attraction" like a "cheerleader"
I bet his parents kicked him out as worthless,and RV...doesnt like him here neither
^Kewl 7/10
______________________________________________So My Vote Goes TO STANZA_
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Return Da Favor ASAP or ELSE
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