MarvJay1009 vs OneStepBeyond
 

Battle Rules:

6 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 05-18-05 at 11:59 PM

Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in.

whut da fukk is 6 lines??????....lol datz all u got

who cares... just battle.... you just rap gangsta anyway

i rap gangsta lol... u gotta be white

MaRVJay1009 has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-18-05 12:21 AM.

And so? what if i am? You gotta be black in that case...

OneStepBeyond has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-18-05 12:37 AM.

^What a fag.



Marvs gay, let me be less mean, you a nightmare? then ima wet dream,
The next best thing to faking your background info. is changin your desk theme,*
You rap about guns, but how come you've never even sprayed your axe,
What a crazy bitch! Marv couldn't make it 'big' even if he wrote Jay in CAPS,
Complaining about mother jokes being played, in which case, alright Marv,
Your damn moms so fat her mother fuckin cerial bowl has a lifegaurd...**



*Closest thing to makin up/changin his real background information about him is switchin desk themes... as in the background of your computer...
**He said Mom jokes weren't played...

Ain't even try...

onestepbeyond u super wack..i hope u dont spit 4 da wealth.
dis kid know's he a bitch shit even he made a thread dissin him self.
ya record 6-5 u lucky should be 0-11 cuzz ya verses r so weak.
you ONE STEP BEyOND who? not even a 'person with no feet'.
i aint a thug im just think not fam & u wanna harm me hey.
O.G. dont mean optimistically genius it means Onestepbeyond is Gay.


1st bar-click da link its a thread of him dissin himself

lastbar-O.G is his crew...u'll get it

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This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

not even worth voting....marv...you got owned...talked it and couldn't walk it....i'd vote on this but i'm sure OSB will get more tha enough voyes....this shyt is a wrap

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

MarvJay1009: K, you had a decent verse, you didn't have any played lines which is good. Punches were hard hitting and landed home. Nice metaphors and dope set ups for the following line.
Fav bar:
ya record 6-5 u lucky should be 0-11 cuzz ya verses r so weak.
you ONE STEP BEyOND who? not even a 'person with no feet'.
Overall, 65%.

OneStepBeyond: K, you had a alright verse, you said you didn't try...& it showed sadly :(. Your punches were witty, but not as hard as Marv's. Plus, momma jokes are played and yes, i did see what you tryed to do...But you puleld it off horribly. So that put you at a disadvantage.
Fav bar:
You rap about guns, but how come you've never even sprayed your axe,
What a crazy bitch! Marv couldn't make it 'big' even if he wrote Jay in CAPS,
Overall, 50%.
So v/Marv.
He just dropped harder than OneStepBeyond. No hate.
Please rtf on one of the battles in my sig Marv.

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

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This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

Pollllllssssssssssss!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

well this battle was sorta weak, I guess I'd have ta say MarvJay took this one cauz his flow was betta, personals came a lil harder, Marv we had our battle, you seem like you went down hill, don't drop elevate...

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Rtf, you bitch about people not returning the favour, and you don't even do it yourself.

uppin............................................. ........

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

This was a pretty good battle but ima have to give this one to MarvJay

MarvJay
onestepbeyond u super wack..i hope u dont spit 4 da wealth.
dis kid know's he a bitch shit even he made a thread dissin him self.
Lol...nice opener..good personal
ya record 6-5 u lucky should be 0-11 cuzz ya verses r so weak.
you ONE STEP BEyOND who? not even a 'person with no feet'.
Nice..play off his name , decent punchline
i aint a thug im just think not fam & u wanna harm me hey.
O.G. dont mean optimistically genius it means Onestepbeyond is Gay.
Lol...nice playoff his crew name..good closer

Onestepbeyond
Marvs gay, let me be less mean, you a nightmare? then ima wet dream,
The next best thing to faking your background info. is changin your desk theme,*
Decent opener, first line was hot, then it fell off
You rap about guns, but how come you've never even sprayed your axe,
What a crazy bitch! Marv couldn't make it 'big' even if he wrote Jay in CAPS,
Decent, could have been worded alot better
Complaining about mother jokes being played, in which case, alright Marv,
Your damn moms so fat her mother fuckin cerial bowl has a lifegaurd...**
Dont rhyme very good , but it was decent

Overall Vote:Marv
to me he came alittle harder, onstep did that mama joke which are played and were not in kindergarden no more..
overall keep it up both , nice drop

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

MarvJay1009 - this is probally the worst freestyle I have seen you wrote but this was still better than OneStepBeyond.. you had better punchlines and way better structure. and you flow was killin him. 7/10

OneStepBeyond - your flow was pathetic you did not even ryhme..you structure was bad and your freestyle was bad too. keep working hard tho.. 5/10

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Can we say dickride.... why yes... yes we can.....

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

your gettin a win for this, but i didnt really like either verse too much.....you had a nice finisher though.

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This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

Pizzy Izzy Polls Yo!..............................

This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

word OSB took this..and Marv I hope yur not gettin at OG cuz then we gon have problems...uppin and checkin at the same damn time lol

This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

checkin the pollz ..........................................

yo onestepbeyond yr da worst fam lmmmmmmmmaaaaaoooooo

im the worst huh?.................................

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

One step--- haha ur shit was funny, specially that last line, good punches, flow was good, structure was too

Marv--- your verse was decent, but one step just came harder with punches, flowed good, personals were ok, and structure was ight

Punches-- One Step
Flow-- Tie
Personals-- One Step
Structure-- Tie
Wordplay-- Marv
Multis-- Neither

FInal VOte--- One step....

Rtf-
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...64&page=2&pp=15

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Marvs gay, let me be less mean, you a nightmare? then ima wet dream,
The next best thing to faking your background info. is changin your desk theme,*
—3 nope.. wack punch
You rap about guns, but how come you've never even sprayed your axe,
What a crazy bitch! Marv couldn't make it 'big' even if he wrote Jay in CAPS,
—5 decent punch
Complaining about mother jokes being played, in which case, alright Marv,
Your damn moms so fat her mother fuckin cerial bowl has a lifegaurd...**
—4 good persona, but weak punch

overall – 12/30

onestepbeyond u super wack..i hope u dont spit 4 da wealth.
dis kid know's he a bitch shit even he made a thread dissin him self.
—6.. good persona, punch was decent
ya record 6-5 u lucky should be 0-11 cuzz ya verses r so weak.
you ONE STEP BEyOND who? not even a 'person with no feet'.
—3.. played here, been used..
i aint a thug im just think not fam & u wanna harm me hey.
O.G. dont mean optimistically genius it means Onestepbeyond is Gay.
—5.. decent

overall – 14/30

winner – even though this battle was pretty weak here, MaRVJay
took this one.. his punches just were way harder.. the flow his was
nice & he had some good personas up in there.. but no hate here

..1

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

OSB:

Your punches were not the best, but by far, not the worst. They hit decently and you had some nice personals in there.
Structure was kinda gay, but that doesnt really matter to me...I am basing this vote on your punches and personals

Marvjay1009

You fell off ALOT in this verse. I feel that you underestimated your opponent, and it caught up to you. Punches were weak, and mama jokes are played, I dont give a fuck what you say, they are!! Personals were ok, but not the best.

Therefore, I am giving this vote to OSB for being consistent with punches and personals that overall hit harder than yours anyways

v/ OSB

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

aiiightttttttttt....
MARV -
onestepbeyond u super wack..i hope u dont spit 4 da wealth.
dis kid know's he a bitch shit even he made a thread dissin him self.
^^^^ nice personal...
ya record 6-5 u lucky should be 0-11 cuzz ya verses r so weak.
you ONE STEP BEyOND who? not even a 'person with no feet'.
^^^ nice punch, had me laughin..
i aint a thug im just think not fam & u wanna harm me hey.
O.G. dont mean optimistically genius it means Onestepbeyond is Gay.
^^ nice closer ...
8/10

OSB -
Marvs gay, let me be less mean, you a nightmare? then ima wet dream,
The next best thing to faking your background info. is changin your desk theme,*
^^ pretty weak opener.. stretched...
You rap about guns, but how come you've never even sprayed your axe,
What a crazy bitch! Marv couldn't make it 'big' even if he wrote Jay in CAPS,
^^ Aiight nothin special...
Complaining about mother jokes being played, in which case, alright Marv,
Your damn moms so fat her mother fuckin cerial bowl has a lifegaurd...**
^^ weak as fuck...
5.5/10

vote MARV

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

onestepbeyond u super wack..i hope u dont spit 4 da wealth.
dis kid know's he a bitch shit even he made a thread dissin him self.
o.k, Im not even gonna follow, the link, I see what you sayin, and I'll assume he owned himself, decent personal.
ya record 6-5 u lucky should be 0-11 cuzz ya verses r so weak.
you ONE STEP BEyOND who? not even a 'person with no feet'.
This was played out, setup was fillerish, you could have packed it with something that would have increased the punches effectiveness, average bar.
i aint a thug im just think not fam & u wanna harm me hey.
O.G. dont mean optimistically genius it means Onestepbeyond is Gay.
first line... check your grammar, cuz im just think not fam, is missing some words, Im not gonna play fill in the blanks, punch was pretty good, nothing spectacular but effective.

6.5/10

Marvs gay, let me be less mean, you a nightmare? then ima wet dream,
The next best thing to faking your background info. is changin your desk theme,*
lol, this was a clever punch, I liked the wordplay- flowed well, im not sure bout the setup line though.
You rap about guns, but how come you've never even sprayed your axe,
What a crazy bitch! Marv couldn't make it 'big' even if he wrote Jay in CAPS,
lol this was pretty good, setup is o.k, the punch was decent- so far rhyme scheme as well.
Complaining about mother jokes being played, in which case, alright Marv,
Your damn moms so fat her mother fuckin cerial bowl has a lifegaurd...**
ROFLMAO- lol, that did it. great closer.

8/10

I just think that OneStepBeyond was more consistent, he had a great closer, where I liked Marv's closer but it was the only bar I really liked in his verse, and OneStepBeyond was more consistent. Vote OneStepBeyond.

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Ain't even try...

^^^^^^^ reason u lost this battle

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Nice battle here...

Marvs gay, let me be less mean, you a nightmare? then ima wet dream,
The next best thing to faking your background info. is changin your desk theme,*

ORIGINAL CONCEPT, NICE OPENER

You rap about guns, but how come you've never even sprayed your axe,
What a crazy bitch! Marv couldn't make it 'big' even if he wrote Jay in CAPS,

PRETTY NICE PUNCH

Complaining about mother jokes being played, in which case, alright Marv,
Your damn moms so fat her mother fuckin cerial bowl has a lifegaurd...**

I KNOW YOU USED A PLAYED CONCEPT ON PURPOUSE...BUT SEEMS TO BACKFIRE AS IT WAS A WASTED BAR REALLY.
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Nice battle here...

Marvs gay, let me be less mean, you a nightmare? then ima wet dream,
The next best thing to faking your background info. is changin your desk theme,*

ORIGINAL CONCEPT, NICE OPENER

You rap about guns, but how come you've never even sprayed your axe,
What a crazy bitch! Marv couldn't make it 'big' even if he wrote Jay in CAPS,

PRETTY NICE PUNCH

Complaining about mother jokes being played, in which case, alright Marv,
Your damn moms so fat her mother fuckin cerial bowl has a lifegaurd...**

I KNOW YOU USED A PLAYED CONCEPT ON PURPOUSE...BUT SEEMS TO BACKFIRE AS IT WAS A WASTED BAR REALLY.
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onestepbeyond u super wack..i hope u dont spit 4 da wealth.
dis kid know's he a bitch shit even he made a thread dissin him self.

NICE OPENER N PERSONAL.

ya record 6-5 u lucky should be 0-11 cuzz ya verses r so weak.
you ONE STEP BEyOND who? not even a 'person with no feet'.

NICE NAMEPLAY AND PUNCH HERE...

i aint a thug im just think not fam & u wanna harm me hey.
O.G. dont mean optimistically genius it means Onestepbeyond is Gay.

DONT GET THE 1ST LINE BUT AGAIN GOOD PUNCH
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MARV GETS THIS DUE TO THE FACT HIS PUNCHES N' PERSONALS WERE MORE CONSISTANT AND HIT HARDER.

OSB YOUR WAS GOOD BUT WASNT FEELIN THE CONCEPT FOR YOUR LAST BAR..

NO HATE.

RTF IN SIG.