Murdz vs tim dim
 

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Murdz has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-25-05 05:33 AM.

tim dim has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-26-05 04:00 AM.

This herbz going to get burns when he steps to the hot plate
Murdz got RV confused cause his not a crook and he's not straight
I was neva your friend I just played you like your bitch did
Your wack admit it dipshit, I'll have you ripped quick


Fuck this foolish white kid that says the N word to fit into a website
This dude may have a fat ass but his not Jlo and he won't get right
Rap isn’t a test if I’ve got fuck wit you to fuck with the best
I’ll leave ya broken hearted like pun after his cardiac arrest
Beat me? Must be joking right, stick to ballin and open mics
If you refer to me as herb you must mean the type you toke in pipes
Your beat like a drum LL’s full of wack mc’s you fit in just right son
Your not nice chum your so lyrically small you’re text in battles is size 1

good luck murdz...................................

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This was feedback posted for Murdz
 

I'll be quick to kick-ya-ass without havin' to battle-ya-behind
if I knew I'd be up against a pussy, I'da battled-a-feline

Ok opener

remember me after I dismember your rhymes an' snap-ya-words
cuz after I'm finished you'll be left wit halfa-verse

Pretty weak but ok

if gats-were-words- you'd be left holier than the Bible
I freeze rivals then dance in circles round 'em like a ballet recital

Simple+played concept

this man'll be left capped like he just put a hat-on
layin' in the street soakin' up his blood like a tampon

Lol nice

this bitch gunna get jumped on like a worn out matress
his delivery missed me like Fed-Ex had the wrong address

Again needs re-wording to hit

Tim Dim has no wordplay cuz I benched-his-words
his rhymes used to be hot until I drenched-his-verse

Solid closer

NEXT

This herbz going to get burns when he steps to the hot plate
Murdz got RV confused cause his not a crook and he's not straight

Ok

I was neva your friend I just played you like your bitch did
Your wack admit it dipshit, I'll have you ripped quick

Filler of a punch , str8 build up though

Fuck this foolish white kid that says the N word to fit into a website
This dude may have a fat ass but his not Jlo and he won't get right

Weak

Rap isn’t a test if I’ve got fuck wit you to fuck with the best
I’ll leave ya broken hearted like pun after his cardiac arrest

Another simple simile, too indirect

Beat me? Must be joking right, stick to ballin and open mics
If you refer to me as herb you must mean the type you toke in pipes

No man

Your beat like a drum LL’s full of wack mc’s you fit in just right son
Your not nice chum your so lyrically small you’re text in battles is size 1

Decent

voted for murdz please return honest feed on mine

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Voted For: Murdz

Murdz
1. Nice wordplay in the first line.... sedond like was aight.. good wp... 8/10
2. haha good line... nice wp.. and setup.. 8/10
3. kinda played first line.... nice second line though.. really brought up the first line... 7/10
4. haha not bad first line... and second line was good too.. both nice wp.. and metas... 8/10
5. haha nice line.. one of the better ones.... 8/10
6. ehhh not feelin it as the rest of ur verse.. i get it.. its just not somethin i would go OOOO at... 6/10

Timmayy
1. not bad line.. not amazing.. first line.. hot plate was kinda wack.. 6/10
2. aint a bad line.. nice personal... 7/10
3. errr not feelin it.. worded funny.. work on that 6/10
4. not bad line.... good wp.. ish.... 8/10
5. not feelin it.. considering i know you meant it to be a punch.. but the herb line was kinda weak.. 6/10
6. ooo good shot at the end.. only the last line though.. the first line.. GARBAGE...sorry but beat like a drum had nothing to do with the bar.... wack...6/10

Overall Murdz got this.. he came harder his wordplay was a lot better... and his overall verse was more consistant than tims...... tims i suggest u work on your wordplay and complexity.. and try not to force rhymes... like the first one with hot plate.. that was wack... sorry.... anyways good luck to both of you..

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Voted For: Murdz

This herbz going to get burns when he steps to the hot plate
Murdz got RV confused cause his not a crook and he's not straight
4...weak, too basic and even though you aint directly said it you on that played homo shit still.
I was neva your friend I just played you like your bitch did
Your wack admit it dipshit, I'll have you ripped quick
3...worse, weak setup and punch, rhymin is basic as hell.
Fuck this foolish white kid that says the N word to fit into a website
This dude may have a fat ass but his not Jlo and he won't get right
3...WTF!!! he aint JLo....yea, and has he said he was J-Lo, this punch was pointless and weak.
Rap isn’t a test if I’ve got fuck wit you to fuck with the best
I’ll leave ya broken hearted like pun after his cardiac arrest
5...WOW!!! an actual average punch, ok with the cardiac arrest shit.
Beat me? Must be joking right, stick to ballin and open mics
If you refer to me as herb you must mean the type you toke in pipes
4...played concept, and basic as hell to.
Your beat like a drum LL’s full of wack mc’s you fit in just right son
Your not nice chum your so lyrically small you’re text in battles is size 1
4...the text size concept was weak as hell, a little multi but you are all too basic.

OVERALL: 23/60


I'll be quick to kick-ya-ass without havin' to battle-ya-behind
if I knew I'd be up against a pussy, I'da battled-a-feline
5...average line, the cat/pussy concept was clever but not used to that much of a good affect.
remember me after I dismember your rhymes an' snap-ya-words
cuz after I'm finished you'll be left wit halfa-verse
4...not feelin this, especially the 2nd line, it was kinda pointless to me.
if gats-were-words- you'd be left holier than the Bible
I freeze rivals then dance in circles round 'em like a ballet recital
5...ok concept, you not using them to full affect though, try re-wording shit better.
this man'll be left capped like he just put a hat-on
layin' in the street soakin' up his blood like a tampon
4...weak, sorry but tampon lines are one of the real played concepts on RV.
this bitch gunna get jumped on like a worn out matress
his delivery missed me like Fed-Ex had the wrong address
5...ok rhymin, concept wasn't all that original, but ok.
Tim Dim has no wordplay cuz I benched-his-words
his rhymes used to be hot until I drenched-his-verse
5...again, not all that original with the concept, but then the little multi in the rhyme was nice.

OVERALL: 28/60


not the best battle.....
tim dim came way to basic, no wordplay really, punches weren't there....no real personals, that shit with the quote cud've been nice but ya fucked it up....nuthin really creative, ya need to elevate on every aspect.
murdz....i seen better from ya....nuthin overly creative, ya had sum nice concepts but didnt use them right, also some played concepts, basic in places, just work on better wordplay and wording ya shit better for more harder hitting punches.

V/ - Murdz...

RTF!!! on the R-Rated battle....links in my sig. :thumbup:

Voted For: Murdz

Dis was a nice battle.....Murdz came with harder punches N Tim had some alright personals. If i could vote on dis it would go to Murdz........Keep it homeboi

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Voted For: Murdz

meh, murdz took this, luckily the other dude had no REAL punches, both ya'll had no personals....murdz, you coulda taken this easy, if you keep up with lines like this:

if gats-were-words- you'd be left holier than the Bible
I freeze rivals then dance in circles round 'em like a ballet recital
this bitch gunna get jumped on like a worn out matress
his delivery missed me like Fed-Ex had the wrong address

^second one made me laugh, and first line of the first one was good too......thats what you gotta do, think of creative wordplay, then make a punch outta it....dont settle for cheesy stuff, like the tampon line, i've seen what you can do, just keep working man, word

other dude, wow.....your verse had no good punches, that verse coulda been used against anyone....which is pathetic....except your closer, because it was true.....but it still wasn't that great of a personal, i suggest...work on wordplay and vocab first, then develop creative/complex punches, then you should be good, no hate, elevate

v/murdz....rtf

This was feedback posted for Murdz
 

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Voted For: Murdz

murdz took this one easily with wordplay and harder punches. this one here was no contest. murdz merked dude. murdz was more consistent. he came out with a dope opener, stayed consistent, and ended with a dope closer. tim dim just had rhymin words, and his barz were mad irrelevant. murdz gets my vote....

-peace