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Don't Stop remix
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2177562
Me, i'm rotten savage......a crooked ass nigga i can't deny my habbit pullin trick's but i aint no rabbit on a cereal box haha.......god damnit a nigga so sly, stayin so fly kinda like soul plane cuz i make soul's fly wit da 4-5, F dot a grimey mothafucka pop a nigga when he stroll by but that's how it is, that's tha way shit goes....... and if it's called for i'll jack ya hoe; attack a hole but neva smack a hoe, that's uncalled for please.....don't be appalled boy; cuz i'm a pimp that only smack's thighs i be a true nigga wit shoes bigga than shaq's size;bitch don't ask why I- keep pieces on me like a jigsaw, niggas hate on me cuz tha kid's raw dem fuck niggas is cartoon's like wut u see on kid's drawls- and dats real {hook} Ma! I think it's safe to say You ain't seen a playa lay this way Or playa game this way Wit a attitude, like - and ya don't stop Aficionado, so fashionable Wit a confident swagger, international Game so tight the girls had to go And you don't stop! the flow's addictive when i chop it up; nah it's cocaine *get it?* cuz i chop it up i keep a mac like tha rocket's club;my lyrics to hands is viagra how i got 'em up truth's evident; my flow's heaven sent; caught a case or two but that's irrelavent i'm a lyricist in it's rawest element i spit so fresh and clean you can smell a scent you think i'm kiddin? i'll end ya state of being jack .................you niggas is odd like hearin european's rap; claclickity clack click the sound of guns evens all odds still breathin... you want me come get me; sayin you hard but in battle tired to shit me but still i stay spiffy, writin lyrics cuz in spirit....LL's equivalent to a buncha femcees and it's safe to say that i'm back now; rambunctious and menacin niggas like Bart Simpson or rather killin 'em like OJ wit tha gloves missin cuz i'm tha best (yes)........it's such a good feelin {hook} Ma! I think it's safe to say You ain't seen a playa lay this way Or playa game this way Wit a attitude, like - and ya don't stop Aficionado, so fashionable Wit a confident swagger, international Game so tight the girls had to go And you don't stop! |
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done, can i get feedback from u?
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up'd........................
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lol dat shit was nice was feelin da flow.........Had some nice rhymes and a good feel do it.only thing i saw wrong wit it was it need a better structure but other than dat da shit was fye......8/10 keep doing ya thang shawty
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uppin 4 mo feed, structure will be addressed. i just had 2 drop somethin cuz i aint been on rv in a minute
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uppin.....................
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^'n to tha top.....
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RETURN THE FAVOR
this was pretty good, i give it a 7/10 u had a nice flow and some ok bars in there that li liked. personally im tired of people talkin about structure n shit, nah mean? u can't have all your bars matched up perfectly thats crazy lol so dont even worry about it. keep doin ya thing and return the favor wit an honest vote in my battle against Lyricle disciple.......links in the sig |
aight dawg...thanx 4 feed. uppin dis shit. oh yeah, EF lives on
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Thiss was reall good. I give this 9/10. Thats because the flow is sick, i like the imagery. This would be a sick audio. Im feelin this one fate maybe me and u can collabo sumtime holla at me.
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yea i give dis a 8/10; nice flow only a few bars were cool w/ me; uhm i just feel u coula came harder than dat but it was an okay piece; ya structure was on point too me(it really dont matta); keep up da work...1
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uppin........................
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can i get a up?
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upped again..........
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this drop here was some nice work. looks like you through it together a lil quik, so I give you credit if it was a quik drop. Some nice multis and rhymes in there that i wuz feelin too, so i give this peice two thumbs. Straight shit man, stay up and keep droppin fire. -one-
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u.p.p.i.n.g. nigga
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tight spit....
u got perfect structure, so the flow..... nice creativity...... nice multi's n vocab.... 9/10 |
Blah, Everyone Is Judging VEEEEEERY Nicely...
This Piece Really Wasnt Anything Special... It Was Just A Regular "Rep Myself" Track That Didnt Rep That Great... It Lacked Strong Enough Punches To Be As Dope As Everyone Is Saying... You Did Have A Decent Flow Though, So Good Job With That... Uuuuum Ya Thats About It... Stay Up And Keep Writing... If You Get Some More Creative Concepts Maybe It'll Be Tite... Cuz You Have That Nice Flow... So Ya, Ill Be Looking For A Deeper Topic Outa You... .One. |
good look.........damn i aint know i was still gettin feed on dis tho
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