KhAoZ ThEoRy vs Young Dollar
 

Battle Rules: Battle Rap

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

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KhAoZ ThEoRy has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-28-05 10:24 AM.

U Gonna Stay A Free Agent, I Advize DonT Get Ya Hopez Up
''Hot Bills''? Only Tyme U Been ''On Ice'' Is Playin Witta ''Hockey Puck''
PM'd Me, Sayin ''Dont Duck?'' But Why The Fuck Wuld I?
U Aint ''Alignin'' Yo Texts Rite, Lyke U Only Got 1 ''Good Eye''
I Wuld Cry, Not Frum Da Challenge, But Frum Da Laughz
U Culd Get On My Front Lawn, An U Still Unsure Bout ''Crossin My Path''
''Vote Or Die Niggaz''? Datz A Thin Line, But I Think They Choose Da Latter
U'd Think My Rhymez Wuzza ''Nine'' Cuz Diz Kid ''Runs & Scatters''
Yo Verses Are Juz Fillers, Dat Makez Ya' Beef Authentic Az ''I-Hop''
Dick Play? U Aint Been ''Touched'' Lyke A Jewish Kid Scared Ov Da Chop
Ur ''Gased Up'' On ''Root BEER''...So Now U CanT Think Straight!?
Ask Pac ''If Heaven Got A Ghetto''
U AINT NICE! Tho, I Got A Mil Dat God Wuldnt Even Let U Past Da Front GATE
GangstATLANTA? I'll ''Bang-Head-Bounce-ya'' An Do Dat A-Town Stomp
Lyke Yo Cyphers, U Aint ''Servin'' No Punz 4 Uz Niggaz 2 CHOMP
Enter A Special ED Comp. An Even Da Dyslexics ''Get U Right''
Dey Said....''Wear Gary Colemanz Attire, Then U'll Be TIGHT!''



All Da Wordz In Bold Frum Da Quote U Will Find In Da Verse

Young Dollar has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-28-05 02:16 PM.

I know on da real dis nigga wont come *guns sparkin*
So i'll bust a nut in dudes mouths, so nigga can *cum talkin*

Where did u get ya *game from*...........
yo skillz is like Whitney Houston's weight,you need ta *gain some*
So dont fuck wit me,Ill *dish chrome*dat'll leave ya *shit blown*
cause dis dudes got 'less hooks' than a no *fish zone*/

Ya verses u do should be called *drastic flops*
and if you so sick,why u still on da street like *traffic cops*

U will never be a Boy in Da Hood,ridin in a *wax layer body Jag*
Unless u just in da hood white chalk,in a *tax payer body bag*

N I checked ya old post,i got rhymes to make ya brain *rupture*
Da only thing dat was khaoctic about dude,was just his *structure*

Homies rap cuz His John told em, He cant *See this*
Cuz shawty just a fat white boy who cant see his *penis*

Merk niggas wit guns N *Rhymes*,
to merk ya body N lyrical *Mind*

To Me Your just another sorry *Heaven Filler*
Cuz If your a Livin Legend Then Im a *Legend Killer*


True story...You dont know wat *thug bout*, niggas ~act~, *guns out*, blow his ~back~ to his *buns out*,squeese da ~mac~,till it *runs out*,

Put a crome glock to ya *brain N Temple*, *Plain N simple*,
Guns start singin as if it was Shirly *Temple*

N ya fam knows da scenario of you bein *lost...scary*
Now thats wat da fuck u call a *Khaos Theory*


No Disrespect to neither Livin Legends got mad love N respect for dem folks. Nor to KT. Keep doin yall thang

VOTE OR DIE BITCHES!!!!!!!!!!!!!

nice battle folk i think i need to slow down on my punches cuz i think im givin to many

Cccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccccc Vote Vote Vote !!!!!!"""

Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy

lol very one sided... khaoz u have elevated alot since u joined props to you it took me like 1 year to elevate and u nearly as good as me but i was wacker than u so it evens out lol... n e wyz i felt u owned the shit out of him u had some good lines in there some were played somer wenrt but u did enough....

young... u nned help homie... sort out your structure

make your lines like this:

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instead of this:

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get me if u do that it will help on your structure get that right first and then get your punches in there... your punches wernt rlly hittin u had played concepts and u basically just need to think of better concepts and how to word them...

thats it


v/ khaoz

for having harder punches better structure and all over better verse...

keep droppin em you'll get better man trust me pzzzzzzzz

n no hate :thumbup:

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still uppin for more votes............................................. .

Thru Da Wire, 2 Da Wall, All Mah Rhymez Iz Raw, All Deez Beats Beats Beats, All Ov Em Culd Of Been Lost!--=--Kanye West (Thru The Wire Alternative Lyrics)

Still uppin for more votes
tippin for more votes
pimpin for more votes
shit i made a rap for more votes

Still trippin for more votes
kickin for more votes
bitchin for more votes
i even made a song for more votes

more votes....im tippin
Feedback im grippin
I be doin da name rippin to da rain trippin
gimme votes or ya dane missin
Me on haze i aint trippin
stay finger flippin on da curb pimpin
Cuz back den didnt vote me
Now im hot all on me
back den didnt vote me
now im hot all on me
I said!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
back den didnt vote me
now im hot all on me
Cuz i Who
Dollar Doll
Who?
Dollar Doll
Who?
Dollar Doll


lol jus messin but im thinkin bout postin it just to see some feedback

Voted For: Young Dollar

YD:

Hot shit...wasnt expecting this

Multies were nice, punches hit hard and got him where it hurts

Personals were there, but they couldve been harder.

Your structure was fine, so really no problem with your flow.

KT:

Ok man, honestly not the best that I have seen from you.

Punches lacked creativity, and you were not as consistent as you have been in past battles.

Personals were ok, but everything else you kinda fell off on.

However, structure was fine, and so was the flow, but flow is not what wins a battle, punchlines are.

Based on that, I am giving my vote to Young Dollar for his consistency with his punches

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Ha Ha Ok, Letz Get Sum Proper Ass Voes In Diz Battle Plz

uppin for more votes ay niggas got they own opinions...niggas see shit differently./but either way no hate cuz i think dis was a nice battle

Yea Im Feelin Dat, But U Had Alot Ov Gunplay, Where Az I Had Puns & Mettas, So Datz Why I Thought I Won, But Definately No Hate Nuthin But Proppz Homeboy

Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy


Aii Im Not Gonna say Much But Ima Say This

Young
Man You Need to work on how you word your verse a whole lot better than what you did ......You didnt Have any hard hitting punchez and you def didnt use any good use of personals if you ask me ......so basically I feel that you couldve done a whole lot better than what you did

Khaoz
Aii Man Basically You Take This battle I mean You Started off with some nice personals and then you ended with some hard hitting punchez which made your verse that much better than your oppenent if you ask me LOL

So my Vote

Khaoz
Ps RTf In any Battle link in my sig

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Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy

U Gonna Stay A Free Agent, I Advize DonT Get Ya Hopez Up
''Hot Bills''? Only Tyme U Been ''On Ice'' Is Playin Witta ''Hockey Puck''

Decent

PM'd Me, Sayin ''Dont Duck?'' But Why The Fuck Wuld I?
U Aint ''Alignin'' Yo Texts Rite, Lyke U Only Got 1 ''Good Eye''

Ok

I Wuld Cry, Not Frum Da Challenge, But Frum Da Laughz
U Culd Get On My Front Lawn, An U Still Unsure Bout ''Crossin My Path''

lol nice

''Vote Or Die Niggaz''? Datz A Thin Line, But I Think They Choose Da Latter
U'd Think My Rhymez Wuzza ''Nine'' Cuz Diz Kid ''Runs & Scatters''

Nope

Yo Verses Are Juz Fillers, Dat Makez Ya' Beef Authentic Az ''I-Hop''
Dick Play? U Aint Been ''Touched'' Lyke A Jewish Kid Scared Ov Da Chop

Decent

Ur ''Gased Up'' On ''Root BEER''...So Now U CanT Think Straight!?
Ask Pac ''If Heaven Got A Ghetto''
U AINT NICE! Tho, I Got A Mil Dat God Wuldnt Even Let U Past Da Front GATE

ight

GangstATLANTA? I'll ''Bang-Head-Bounce-ya'' An Do Dat A-Town Stomp
Lyke Yo Cyphers, U Aint ''Servin'' No Punz 4 Uz Niggaz 2 CHOMP

Lol

Enter A Special ED Comp. An Even Da Dyslexics ''Get U Right''
Dey Said....''Wear Gary Colemanz Attire, Then U'll Be TIGHT!''

Lol nice

VS

IP:


I know on da real dis nigga wont come *guns sparkin*
So i'll bust a nut in dudes mouths, so nigga can *cum talkin*

Immature+played

Where did u get ya *game from*...........
yo skillz is like Whitney Houston's weight,you need ta *gain some*

lol ok

So dont fuck wit me,Ill *dish chrome*dat'll leave ya *shit blown*
cause dis dudes got 'less hooks' than a no *fish zone*/

Played

Ya verses u do should be called *drastic flops*
and if you so sick,why u still on da street like *traffic cops*

Ok too indirect though

U will never be a Boy in Da Hood,ridin in a *wax layer body Jag*
Unless u just in da hood white chalk,in a *tax payer body bag*


Str8

N I checked ya old post,i got rhymes to make ya brain *rupture*
Da only thing dat was khaoctic about dude,was just his *structure*


lol ight

Homies rap cuz His John told em, He cant *See this*
Cuz shawty just a fat white boy who cant see his *penis*

Immmatue again

Merk niggas wit guns N *Rhymes*,
to merk ya body N lyrical *Mind*

Filler

To Me Your just another sorry *Heaven Filler*
Cuz If your a Livin Legend Then Im a *Legend Killer*

Needed re-wording could of been done soooo nicely with the concept

True story...You dont know wat *thug bout*, niggas ~act~, *guns out*, blow his ~back~ to his *buns out*,squeese da ~mac~,till it *runs out*,

filler

Put a crome glock to ya *brain N Temple*, *Plain N simple*,
Guns start singin as if it was Shirly *Temple*

lol

N ya fam knows da scenario of you bein *lost...scary*
Now thats wat da fuck u call a *Khaos Theory*

Poor rhyme scheme ok punch


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even though this right here looks like a crew vote i aint gonna bitch about it..........uppin

Dont Take Your vote outta =My Battle Bcuz I Already RTF LOL

Thanx

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Voted For: Young Dollar

young took it......came a lil hard with metas and punches..............it was close just overall young took it

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This was feedback posted for KhAoZ ThEoRy
 

i aint votin for noone on dis one yall both did ya thing
on dese verses so if i voted for 1 then it wouldnt be fair cause it was pretty much a tie in my eyes

This was feedback posted for Young Dollar
 

yeo imma haveta go with young dollar. even tho i cant vote, if i couls it wood go to him. khaoz theory, i dont like your structure. your ryhmes feel to forsed to me.

young dollar, i like your structure, and ur ryhmes made me laugh. maybe cus im drunk but still pretty good. young dollar i would say hit me up for a battle but u outta my league. shit least im honest.well stay up niggas.

Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy

first things 1st, young dollar:

I know on da real dis nigga wont come *guns sparkin*
So i'll bust a nut in dudes mouths, so nigga can *cum talkin*
//gun flow, a no-no on this site generally, and then, hmm.. its not a rhyme i would drop but its original, 3/10
Where did u get ya *game from*...........
yo skillz is like Whitney Houston's weight,you need ta *gain some*
//original, personal, clickin the right boxes 8.5/10
So dont fuck wit me,Ill *dish chrome*dat'll leave ya *shit blown*
cause dis dudes got 'less hooks' than a no *fish zone*/
//nice bars here im backin this part, original again, with nice wordplay 8/10
Ya verses u do should be called *drastic flops*
and if you so sick,why u still on da street like *traffic cops*
//a bit basic, but a punch, nontheless 4/10
U will never be a Boy in Da Hood,ridin in a *wax layer body Jag*
Unless u just in da hood white chalk,in a *tax payer body bag*
//hmm OK, but it doesnt hit hard enough 3/10
N I checked ya old post,i got rhymes to make ya brain *rupture*
Da only thing dat was khaoctic about dude,was just his *structure*
//like that one, personal :thumbup: 8/10
Homies rap cuz His John told em, He cant *See this*
Cuz shawty just a fat white boy who cant see his *penis*
// again very average, but not bad so 5/10
Merk niggas wit guns N *Rhymes*,
to merk ya body N lyrical *Mind*
//:( 2/10
To Me Your just another sorry *Heaven Filler*
Cuz If your a Livin Legend Then Im a *Legend Killer*
//ambitious, 8/10
True story...You dont know wat *thug bout*, niggas ~act~, *guns out*, blow his ~back~ to his *buns out*,squeese da ~mac~,till it *runs out*,
//gun-flow again and not a great one 2/10
Put a crome glock to ya *brain N Temple*, *Plain N simple*,
Guns start singin as if it was Shirly *Temple*
:( not even a shirley temple mention is gonna save that one 1/10
N ya fam knows da scenario of you bein *lost...scary*
Now thats wat da fuck u call a *Khaos Theory*
//weak end :( try something either more personal, or just plain offensive! 3/10
overall you need to put in a bit more work, not a lot your not bad dollar but its a no vote from me, and by the way i dont think kaos is a livin legend anymore, but this is NOT a crew vote. i just feel his verse is better and heres why:

kaos:

U Gonna Stay A Free Agent, I Advize DonT Get Ya Hopez Up
''Hot Bills''? Only Tyme U Been ''On Ice'' Is Playin Witta ''Hockey Puck''
//nice opener, not as harsh as i heard from u b4 tho still 6/10
PM'd Me, Sayin ''Dont Duck?'' But Why The Fuck Wuld I?
U Aint ''Alignin'' Yo Texts Rite, Lyke U Only Got 1 ''Good Eye''
//harder, nice personal, :thumbup: 8/10
I Wuld Cry, Not Frum Da Challenge, But Frum Da Laughz
U Culd Get On My Front Lawn, An U Still Unsure Bout ''Crossin My Path''
ok, but maybe a lil lesss boosting a lil more roasting 6/10
''Vote Or Die Niggaz''? Datz A Thin Line, But I Think They Choose Da Latter
U'd Think My Rhymez Wuzza ''Nine'' Cuz Diz Kid ''Runs & Scatters''
//a breif gat mention, but i like the intro 6/10
Yo Verses Are Juz Fillers, Dat Makez Ya' Beef Authentic Az ''I-Hop''
Dick Play? U Aint Been ''Touched'' Lyke A Jewish Kid Scared Ov Da Chop
//personal and original but not as good as other shit you've sed so, 6/10
Ur ''Gased Up'' On ''Root BEER''...So Now U CanT Think Straight!?
Ask Pac ''If Heaven Got A Ghetto''
U AINT NICE! Tho, I Got A Mil Dat God Wuldnt Even Let U Past Da Front GATE
//structure probs... but OK 5/10
GangstATLANTA? I'll ''Bang-Head-Bounce-ya'' An Do Dat A-Town Stomp
Lyke Yo Cyphers, U Aint ''Servin'' No Punz 4 Uz Niggaz 2 CHOMP
//nicer punch im backin it 8/10
Enter A Special ED Comp. An Even Da Dyslexics ''Get U Right''
Dey Said....''Wear Gary Colemanz Attire, Then U'll Be TIGHT!''
//a better finish, not the best, but better than your opponents

kaos you could do with lookin @ the thread about structure in help, or suttin but you got talent, and i like your flow.

dolar, prolly best havin a peak @ the punches thread to be real wit u i had the same probs when iii was new to rV, so its not the end of the world, you gots talent, just need to focus it.

thats my honest opinion, RTF, when im next in a battle both of y'all motherfuckers!

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Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy

this battle was real one sided...

khaoz theory, your verse was good. had some good wordplay and good personals. they was hittin real well.
the flow was ite...set off right, and ended better.

young dollar, ya verse started off with gangsta lyrics, and had some self glorification, but for the most parts thw rhymes were decent, just they didnt hit like they should have.

good battle yall...

vote: Khaoz thepry

Alright i aint gonna try N fight like rocky dis battle is over Ay KT if the battle aint over by the end of the weak N u still got the same amount of votes N im not commin back on votes with atleast 2 PM strobe N tell him to close the battle N give you the win

Iight I Respect Dat Hommie, Good Lookin Out 4 Da Future n Shit, We'll Collaberate Or Sumthan, Upping 4 More Votess Pplz

Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy

i will go with khaoz on this one, very obvious.

his punches were harder, and focused more on dissin' his opponent, didn't really have any played concepts, which really separated the two of you. young dollar was too basic, and his opener was just garbage, it was not even a real diss. too much self-glore, which are not disses.....and your structure and flow were horrible.

overall, this was a blow-out for khaoz, and it shows true with my vote.

v/khaoz theory.

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Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy

KhAoZ ThEoRy - iight spit, you had some good punches in there and it flowed well.

Best Line - PM'd Me, Sayin ''Dont Duck?'' But Why The Fuck Wuld I?
U Aint ''Alignin'' Yo Texts Rite, Lyke U Only Got 1 ''Good Eye''

Worst Line - U Gonna Stay A Free Agent, I Advize DonT Get Ya Hopez Up
''Hot Bills''? Only Tyme U Been ''On Ice'' Is Playin Witta ''Hockey Puck''

Young Dollar - iight spit also, flow was a lil off in some places, punches were iight.

Best Line - I know on da real dis nigga wont come *guns sparkin*
So i'll bust a nut in dudes mouths, so nigga can *cum talkin*

Worst Line - Ya verses u do should be called *drastic flops*
and if you so sick,why u still on da street like *traffic cops*

OVERALL - iight battle here, both had some good punches and bad punches. My vote goes to Kha cuz he had the better flow, and some decent punches. Dolla work on your flow.

Vote - KhAoZ ThEoRy

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